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Okey dokey, here we go:

Due to boredom and other reasons, I have decided I want to start writing something. In the past I have written short stories while writing longer ones (mostly for school) so I have something to do to keep the ideas flowing while I take a break from the big projects. So I guess I'll start a story relating to the Housepets universe... whoodathunkit.

Now you'll have to bear with me. I haven't written a decent sized story in a long time, and the last one was dystopian so you may have to bear through a few pessimistic chapters before I transition to other things. I think it can only benefit me to have people see my stuff while I'm writing it so I can get some feedback.

Two things: I definitely appreciate feedback and encouragement, since that would give me motivation to keep writing. Second, I update whenever the heck I feel like it, since this is a distraction so I can keep the creative juices flowing while I take breaks from projects ;) .

wakka wakka, here come the words:

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Another Lonely Face
Ch.1: Enter the Theif

Babylon Gardens was preparing itself for a new season. The early air was crisp and refreshing, the first sign of fall was upon them. Children worried themselves with school-ly business and pets busied theselves with pet-ly business. Summer days were long gone, it was time to return to the rhythm of the rest of the year.

The neigborhood was quite alive despite the early hour. Both pets and owners made their way through the streets, completing their morning rounds to begin the day. Dogs and cats formed into groups, greeting and socialising while their parents collected the newspapers, discussing thier plans for the day. Puppies stood under trees and jumped at the branches, a bit too eager to begin their leaf piles that never quite got as big as they expected.

"Hey! Get back here!' A voice yelled from the woods.

A grey cat ran through the forest, a large black bag held in it's arms. A pair of racoons followed close in pursuit.

"Get back here with our trash!"

The feline frantically dashed through the trees, not running toward a destination in particular. The forest opened into a fair sized clearing. Frightened eyes darted the landscape for a means of escape. Angry voices came from within the trees. They would catch him if he didn't find a place to hide. He noticed a samll structure in the middle of the clearing. Could someone be living out here? What would hapen if someone was there right now? No time to think, he had to hide. The frantic cat made it's way to the structure and stuffed his bag through the opening, rushing himself in close behind.

The racoons burst from the forest.

"Did you see where he went?" on of the racoons asked, he pointed to the red and white building, "Could he be in there?"
"That's where that cheery girl lives," the other replied, "but she's far to annoying to bother."

"You're kidding me, He could be in there... He's got our food." the first racoon responded.

"If you'd have met her you'd understand." the second one replies, wrinkling his nose "Let's just let him go, he seemd pretty desperate. We can always find another house with more, preferably one without brooms."

With this the two racoons receded back into the woods. One looked over his shoulder back at the small house. he was sure their hard 'earned' bounty was in there, he just didn't understand why they should let it go so easily. Mabye the cat's situation got them... sympathetic.

The cat slowly let out a breath as he heard the voices return to the woods. he was about to poke his head out to observe his situation when-

"Hey cat,"

The cat's head turned to see a dog, sitting cross-legged with a pillow on her lap, staring at him inquisitively, using her palms as a pedestal for her curious head.

"Whatcha got there?"


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Good stuff. A few spelling mistakes, but it's a good start. I liek. :3
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If i had the effort, i'd properly make a fanfic, but i dont.
Anyway, seems nice so far.
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nice start!
want to see where it goes! :D
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My, I am quite impressed. Although it seems that there a few grammatical errors here and there, everything else seems great. Nicely developed chapters, no annoying problems such as having characters speak in typewrite form (example:
Peanut: Hi what's your name?
Grape: My name's Grape
Dohoho, I am apparently also a fan of Housepets),
And anything else that I missed is also impressive than what I could ever do. I hope you continue this writing, if anything for the design.
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Thanks for the nice words guys. This makes me want to continue right now just because I have the time. I have the entire plot noted down, and I think everyone will enjoy it. It nay be a tad unconventional, but I'm an unconventional guy so I guess that works perfectly. Next chapter may be today O_O keep your eyes peeled.

One weakness I have (out of many): I am an obsessive comma user :/

And if there are any speeling mistaks I'm trying my best. I'm using my Wii at the moment (I have a keyboard) but it's hard to overview my writing to look for typos.
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Ch. 2: An Unexpected Guest

"Whatcha got there?" She repeated, tilting her head slightly.

"Oh, um... that?" The cat stood nervously, "That's nothing." The large bag was behind his back, blocking his only means of escape. He was nervously trying to nudge the bag out of the opening behind his back.

"I gotta go..." he said, finally kicking the bag out of the door.

"Oh," The dog's ears drooped, "it's just that I don't get visitors that often." She sat up straighter. "Do you at least have a name? I'm Sasha!"

A sudden realization struck the cat. he had never thought about his name, he didn't even want to think back to the time when he had one either. Sasha was waiting though, he had to think quick.

"My name? Uhm... my name's... Jeremy?" he finally stuttered.

"Hmm... Jeremy. Jeremy" She let the name process in her mind, "I like it."

"Well it's nice to meet you Jeremy." Sasha said, sticking out her paw.

Jeremy paused, looking at her outstretched arm. He was too late to intercept with his own paw, and Sasha was left with hers empty in midair. Jeremy slowly brought his arm foward and held Sahsha's paw in his.

"Nice to meet you... Sasha." he said quietly. His eyes left hers and made their wasy to her paw. Her brown fur was soft against his, which made him look at his own paw. Dirty... fantastic...

Jeremy quickly broke free from her friendly gesture and hid his paws behind his back

"I should go..." He said "I don't want to be a bother."

"Well okay then. If you want to talk or... talk, or...anything, you're welcome to come back." Sasha offered. Her eyes showed the telltale signs of lonliness, but her voice did a good job of hiding it.

Jeremy forced a smile, nodded, and turned for the opening behind him.

"One more thing," Sasha called.

Jeremy was crouched over in the door. He turned back and faced the dog.

'Where's your... hm, uh..." Her finger sweeped the front of her neck, her fingers then grabbed the heart shaped tag dangling from a thin chain connected to the loose band around her neck, jingling the tag back and forth. Jeremy's paw felt his own neck... Nothing. Nothing but stiff and matted fur.

There was a long pause. Jeremy's mind searched for words but none came to the rescue. He finally let out an akward shrug, mouthing out the words "I don't know."

He needed to get out of here. Jeremy slowly turned and exited through the samll opening, letting his paw drag on the side of the door. Sasha watched as he held his black bag, lazlily letting it drag behind him as he entered the woods. Sasha's head plopped back into her palms before letting out a frustrated exhale.

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A little bit more about the kitty.

Oh, and Jeremy is just admiring how clean Sasha is compared to himself, so quit while you're ahead ;)
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Awesome :3
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aww, poor Sasha!
Jeremy, turn back and talk with her! Now!
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valerio wrote:aww, poor Sasha!
Jeremy, turn back and talk with her! Now!
In due time my friend ;)


To avoid stalling the story to describe jeremy in full, say hello to Jeremy:

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Minus the collar of course, thoght it may not be long :)

I'll be stuck at my dad's apartment for the rest of the day with nothing but the TV, computer, and yoyos so You can sure as heck epect more. I'm actually liking how this is coming out and it actually gets pretty good.
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Great job with this fic there yoyodude. Some errors but its getting good.
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Barkeron wrote:Some errors but its getting good.
ThunderNova wrote:Although it seems that there a few grammatical errors here and there.
What're the issues? I wanna catch them early so the don't show up throughout the story :roll:
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Well, all I can see are a few missing letters here and there, and a few misplacing of letters (usually due to typing too fast)

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You also spelt a few words wrong, such as pursuit, but these can easily be fixed by using...uh...that program that finds grammar mistakes...I can't remember it's name.
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ThunderNova wrote:You also spelt a few words wrong, such as pursuit, but these can easily be fixed by using...uh...that program that finds grammar mistakes...I can't remember it's name.
I'm typing on a Wii so you'll have to bear with me if a few typos fall through ;) . I'm trying though.
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Ch. 3: Reflections of a Stray Kitty

"Jeremy... Jeremy... Jeremy?" the cat thoguht to himself "What a STUPID name..."

Jeremy arrived to another small clearing. A weak stream made it's way through the grassy patch. The cat and his bounty in tow walked to a small pile of branches tucked by the edge of the woods. Pushing some branches aside revealed various peices of old clothes, marbles, jewlery, broken guitar strings, and tools.

"I guess it's not half bad."

he began sifting through his newest load of garbage, setting aside whatever sparked his interest. Broken CDs, glass bottles, half used glue sticks and such were thoguhtfully tossed from the bag to the stash. He stumbled upon a sandwich bag of catnip.

"Hm. That's odd" he said out loud, dumping the contents into the stream without so much as a thought. "I could use the bag..."

He lightly tossed the smelly bag into the rest of his chosen junk and began to search the bag again.

Near the bottom of the bag, Jeremy came across something larger than he expected. To his suprise, he pulled a long, black leather belt out of the otherwise garbage-filled bag. Inspecting it in his paws, the belt had no blemishes, the dye wasn't faded, and the buckle was in better-than-great condition. It was... beautiful.

Jeremy thought back to Sasha's collar. It appeared to be of the same leather as the belt, only it was pink and sported studs around it's length.

"Hmph... Pets." Jeremy muttered, twisting the band in his paws. "Their lives are so boring, spoiled..."

He paused,

"...comfortable...safe...loved."

He tossed the belt into the dirt.

"I'd bet Sasha has a loving family!" He figured. "Constant attention, food, a warm home."

Jeremy slowly crouched to the ground, resting his head on his paws, before letting out a long sigh.

HIs eyes drifted back towards the belt. A ray of sunlight bounched off the pristine buckle, shining precisely into his eye. He let his paw grip the belt, bringing it closer to his face.

"...mabye I do miss it after all..."

Without letting his eyes leave the belt, Jeremy reached back into his "keeper" pile and gripped a small switchblade. The knife was beautiful in design, complete with a wooden handle and minimal brass detailing on either end. Jeremy gave the body of the knife a quick glance before effortlessly flicking it open. In one smooth motion the band was two, cleanly slicing it to half the length.

The altered design was given a long examination. He pursed his lips and nodded in approval. Gripping both ends he brought it around his neck, funbling with the buckle before finally getting the pin to find its hole. The newly dressed feline inspected himself using a shard of mirror. He tugged at every point, not being able to let it rest comfortably around his neck. It wasn't much, but it made him feel... secure. He felt as if he actually belonged.

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I was in the hospital getting 5 stitches on the bridge of my nose so this was all I could get done recently.
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4.5/5 stars so far. Spelling/grammar lowers the score, but WHOCARES.
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Private Elliot wrote:4.5/5 stars so far. Spelling/grammar lowers the score, but WHOCARES.
I went back at fixed it literally RIGHT when you posted ;)
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Awesome update

and I hope you're okay D:
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Tobee wrote:Awesome update

and I hope you're okay D:
Tobee you care about EVERYONE dont you.
If anyone does care... i broke my left leg a few days ago, just didnt say anything 'cause i figured no one gives a grape's skin.
GET IT? GRAPE's SKIN! As in the fruit, but the character as well? HAHAHA
My jokes suck.
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WAAT

WHY YOU NOT TELL ME

*hugs Pvt. Elliot*

D:::
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Aw, Jeremy is SOOOO CUTE! *hugs Jeremy* don't give up your hopes, boy!
As for you, Dude, take care of yourself!
Well, Private, I care and I send you my best wishes for a pronto healing!
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Tobee wrote:WAAT

WHY YOU NOT TELL ME

*hugs Pvt. Elliot*

D:::
HUGS MAKE THE WORLD GO ROUND
I think. Thats what my mom told me.
valerio wrote: Aw, Jeremy is SOOOO CUTE! *hugs Jeremy* don't give up your hopes, boy!
As for you, Dude, take care of yourself!
Moar hugs
If i only i had a tablet, i could prob make a colored picture. BUT I don't.
Buut, i do have a scanner at my dad's house... hmmmm.
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Private Elliot wrote: HUGS MAKE THE WORLD GO ROUND
valerio wrote: *hugs Jeremy*
Moar hugs
"Group hug!" Jeremy exclaimed, finally feeling the warm embrace of friendship.

*hugs ensue*
Private Hugs wrote:If i only i had a tablet, i could prob make a colored picture. BUT I don't.
Buut, i do have a scanner at my dad's house... hmmmm.
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Oh hey, an upda-

*stares at group hug*

.....I'm gonna get back on SFM now. Good stuff Yoyodude.

*takes off running*
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Teh Brawler wrote:Oh hey, an upda-

*stares at group hug*

.....I'm gonna get back on SFM now. Good stuff Yoyodude.

*takes off running*
"But wait brawler! Come back..." Yelled Elliot, his voice trailing off after Brawler ran off.
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No, i would just trace it pretty much, but color it. If you tell me what/where he is colored.
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grey/light grey, and the inside of his ears are white. That's pretty much all there is to it. Oh and that collar was just a random design, he has a black belt with a gold buckle right now. That drawing was before I decided to make him an actual character ;)

I am enjoying that people are actually liking this, I dont think of myself as a good writer. But just you wait, this is why I chose to make a fic. It just gives me the much-needed practice.
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yoyodude wrote:grey/light grey, and the inside of his ears are white. That's pretty much all there is to it. Oh and that collar was just a random design, he has a black belt with a gold buckle right now. That drawing was before I decided to make him an actual character ;)

I am enjoying that people are actually liking this, I dont think of myself as a good writer. But just you wait, this is why I chose to make a fic. It just gives me the much-needed practice.
Keep this up, and err.
Keep "yoyoing"
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Private Elliot wrote: Keep this up, and err.
Keep "yoyoing"
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HURR HURR

It actually was a yoyo, truefax... the metal ones can be a bit tempermental ;)
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Alright. Heres my crappy picture i made by hand. Its crap, and i rushed it.
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Holy cow, look at those claws! Don't mess with Jeremy, won't think he don't cut you :P
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Teensy weensy chapter just to get the story moving:

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Ch. 4: "Chance" Encounter

Jeremy was not alone. His whiskers probed the air, and his ears searched every angle. he felt a tingle on the back of his neck. The fur there would be standing up if it wasn't for his makeshift collar.

He turned his head, the rest of his body soon followed. A dog was stepping out of the treeline, cautiously raising a leg over a particularly large root. It was Sasha. it was the one dog he chose to shyly avoid.

"Oh hi Jeremy!" Sasha exclaimed, obviously quite excited to see the cat again.

Jeremy akwardly turned and shoved the branches over his belongings beofre snapping back towards Sasha.

Forcing a smile, he said "Hey there, what are you doing here?"

"Oh I was just heading back into town." Sasha lied. Jeremy's hideout was actually set farther into the woods than her own. "Would you want to come with me? It'll be fun!"

Town... Jeremy hadn't set foot anywhere near Babylon Gardens in years. He didn't quite want to go, but Sasha did. The last they met they were both alone, and now she was offering for him to accompany her to town. He certainly aqquired the correct attire...

"You know what," Jeremy replied "I'd love to."

"Great! Thank you Jeremy!" she said, hugging him cheerfully.

Jeremy didn't know what to do. He kept his hands beside himself, too afraid to touch her.

"It'll be so much fun!" her voice was muffled. Jeremy peered down to see her face buried in his chest fur. "I'll introduce you to everybody... I don't think anyone has seen you around."

Jeremy rolled his eyes. "That's just what I need..." he thought to himself, mouthing out the words. It was too late to back out though, he had already agreed to it.

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Find out what happens... next time on Tails of Interest (CWUTIDIDDER?)
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YAY! More Sasha sweetness!! :D :D
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NO IDID NOT CEE D:

Also, awesome update :>
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I'll edit my FAIL picture once i get back. at least you didnt say how i drew the legs to small, and everything is messed up and crap.
i forgot to have tinypic resize the picture
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Yeah, it'd be nicer if the pictue was a bit smaller so people won't have to scroll sideways while reading.

Thanks for understanding ;)

EDIT: you'll notice I'm trying to adhere to a daily or almost daily schedule. I know I can't stand waiting too long for ANYTHING to update, so I figured you guys would enjoy something that updated a bit more frequently. It's also much easier for me to think of small segments rather than large chunks at a time. I already have the entire plot thought out (One would hope :P) , but actually writing out my thoughts is somethimes troublesome. I may have to cut down my update frequency once school starts full swing. But I may even have the stroy finished by the time that happens. I planned this fic to be a bit short, sorry D:
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Another small (read: SMALL) update before I go to school:

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Ch. 5: Bullets

Jeremy felt nervous about going back to Babylon Gardens, and small talk with Sasha didn't help his nerves. Suddenly she switched to a more hefty topic.

"So why are you living in the woods?"

'How does she know that? I have the collar and everything now.' Jeremy thought '...actually I guess it was quite obvious.'

He avoided the question. "More importantly, why are YOU living in the woods missy?" He said, crossing his arms and tilting his head. Jeremy had assumed a goofy, inquizitive pose, which amused Sasha.

"Well... sometimes I just needed to get out of the house,"

Sasha paused

"my daddy isn't exactly the nicest person."

Up to this point Jeremy had assumed Sasha was part of the "loving family" image he played through his mind earlier. He was trailing off into his own thoughts, unaware that Sasha was still talking.

"...so then King made me a doghouse in the middle of the woods."

The mention of someone else snapped Jeremy back into the conversation. Up to now the only name he knew was hers.

"King huh?"

"He's a bit funky," Sasha replied "but his heart is in the right place."

Sasha turned to face the cat.

"Just like you."

Jeremy was suprised. How could she tell that? She had only known him for a few hours, and even then she didn't really KNOW him. He was too scared to respond, but it wasnt long before she distracted herself.

"Oh and he's super cute!"

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Jus' dodgin' some conversational bullets.
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Cute update :D
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That's Sasha for you, Jeremy dear :D
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After looking at some other fics I realized that my updates are rediculously short. The only thing is I find it easier to write shorter segments and it lets me update more frequently. So would you rather see longer updates at a slower rate or little ones updated probably daily? Keep in mind I consider the last two to be short even by my standards, normal sized parts would be comparable to the first couple.

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