Housepets!

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8/10. I like Avenged Sevenfold's music after their metalcore days (Though their latest album really doesn't click for me), and I used to listen to that song all the time back in my angsty 7th grade days.

Don't care much for the music video, though.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MKk1u5RMTn4

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Yeah, there are definitely improvements over the second chapter. Any problems that I see at the moment are comparatively minor ones, and easily fixable - along with some nitpicks I have that are based more on opinion than technicality. It would perhaps flow better to bump 'The nightmare never change...

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Worse: A tape of the pilot episode still floats around on the internet.

"Cthulhu, have you been using your terrifying eldritch powers to drive people permanently insane again?"

"Cthul-huh?" (Canned laughter)

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Worse: Cthulu dreams of hitting it big, and forces GK against his will to star in the new hit sitcom, Cthul(h)u and Friends.

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“Why is my head shaped like an equilateral triangle?”

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Good: Through a series of wacky misadventures, the president and his (recently adopted, racially diverse) pet dog endear themselves to the public.

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“It’s almost as if… my right eye pops out of my face somehow!”

(We can mildly diss the avatars, right?)

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“Yes, Mr. FowlJ, soon you will not be able to escape! With my exquisite beard-powered weapon of mass destruction, not even you can survive! I can see you covering your eyes already!”

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I'm enjoying everything so far. Keep it up! While you write well, especially when regarding fanfiction stories in general, there are a few things to point out: She hadn't slept since the day Peanut collapsed, she was there, dragging him home through the snow, in the back seat of the car with Earl sp...

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Very rough, software translation: "IT IS entitled, "Retrieved", or "recovered", the exposure to Saul Gallery in New York, which shows the dogs that have been part of the emergency unit used in the hours after the terrorist attack of September 11, 2001 for the research of the...

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Pretty good so far. All there are are two incredibly minor spelling and punctuation problems: Peanut walked up next to her bed, she looked so peaceful, yet so aggravated. That first comma is superfluous, and would be fixed with a period, em dash (-) or semicolon (;) - whichever one feels better to u...

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This was quite possibly the most depressing piece I have read on this forum - but at the same time among the absolute best written, save for some little things. I feel it could have been longer and explored the emotional side a little more, but that would have toyed with the rating a little, as it'...

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Sorry for the delay - I was busy writing another story all night. This is the longest chapter I've made so far, at least. Chapter 4: Grand Bahaman Blues “…Oh, wake up, you…” Maxwell’s eyes shot open, fast as a fired bullet. Peanut started backwards, tripping over a duly colored seashell and landing ...

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(NOTE: This was originally posted on October 19, 2011, well before the 'Houspets Babies!' story arc. Think of my story as a ridiculously depressing alternate universe. This is also an edited (As of 6/25/12) version of the original piece. Adverbs have been done away with, and a few awkward lines rem...

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What if I have a fanfiction currently in progress, but also have finished a one-post story unrelated to my fanfiction's plot and theme? Would it be acceptable for me to make another thread about that short story, or should I incorporate it into my original fanfiction thread?

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I wonder when Grape appears, if ever... I'm certainly rattling some thoughts around, so don't worry - she'll more likely than not be showing up sooner or later. Very interesting. You don't see terribly many Alternate Universe stories that have the potential to actually be good - I'm quite pleasantl...

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RandomGeekNamedBrent wrote:So is this like a past life or something, or are the name and appearance a coincidence?

I like to think of it as an 'alternate universe' of sorts, personally. I like the idea of past life/wacky reincarnation too, though. Whatever floats your boat, really.

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Favorite show: Hmm... A toss up between Frasier and Whose Line is it Anyway? Probably Whose Line , if I had to choose. My favorite show currently running would be Leverage . Favorite movies: The Shawshank Redemption, The Seventh Seal (Swedish film in 1957 by Ingmar Bergman - classic stuff, everyone ...

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Hey, you're back! And the writing is high quality, as always. Good work. Thanks! :D I love compliments from fellow writers. This one seems to be off to an interesting start. Housepets set in the Age of Sail ... I can say with some certainty that that's a new one. I like it. Also, explosions. =P I e...

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Interesting start as always, Roll. I hope this one gets finished! :lol: I hope so, too. All of your stories are well done. I hope to see more of this one. Thanks, as always! interesting. I suppose this was before Anne's Revenge became a Queen. and was owned by Blackbeard. Uh... yes, that's exactly ...

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During a three-month, ongoing hiatus from my previous story, Creeping Realization, I realized three things: One, that story was heading nowhere fast; Two, it was beginning to feel quite boring to write AND read; and Three, I'm really not good with keeping a schedule. So, I decided to come up with so...

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It was a nice little scene. It was a good one to show James' mindset right now. Character development is always a good thing in my book! Besides, having Max uncomfortable is always a treat. I enjoyed it. Nice writing, young dude. Keep it up! :lol: Thanks! It's nice to know I can still write somethi...

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He is not the best at sticking around, is he? It's kind of like a coping mechanism - if he can't run from his problems in a figurative sense, he can at least run from them physically. ...That, and I think it's dramatic. :lol: I probably should tone it down just a bit, in retrospect. Interlude #5: F...

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Joy: I'm gonna be getting a Coby Soundbar for my room tomorrow! All the reviews say it's awesome, so it can't be the worst purchase I've ever made.

Sorrow: Listening to 'You Raise Me Up' by Celtic Woman made me cry, it was so emotional.

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James is really handling all this well considering he has never dealt with the supernatural. Well... Creeping Realizations, Chapter 10: Then, he stopped, struck with a disturbingly revelatory thought. Working the idea out in his head, James’ blood felt as if deathly chilled. “Wait,” he whispered. “...

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I actually do that on purpose when I feel the conjunction is strong enough, or when I want to end the previous sentence with a full stop but the conjunction is necessary. Also I mostly have used it during parts of narrative that are more a direct relation of Mark's thoughts, though I suppose the la...

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Here's a key note - a singular doesn't jive with a plural
You better start runnin,' cause I've carved your coffin's mural

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You ain't so great, if that's what you mean If you're a rocket ship, you're Apollo 13. Hey, at least I got in space You're like the Challenger, a severely failed case You all think your so bad, but you better run 'cause my raps are like bullets fired out of a gun A pop-gun, more like! Let's edit th...

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Pff, you just don't understand
I'm a special little rocket ship, and your jokes just won't land

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That joke has been done to death
Kinda like your humor, a drab MacBeth

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Well, EXCUUUUSE me, princess
I'm too perfect to screw up any less

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'scuse me ladies, don't mean to cause an interjection but when i go at it, you're gonna need some SERIOUS protection That statement is slightly unsettling Let's hope the moderators don't start meddling I see there is only 3 people in this thread so far So i think ill just join and raise the bar Tha...

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A pun AND a rhyme, you've got it on
Too bad you'd still do a better job mowing your lawn

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I'm more partial to Copernicum
It always gets me out of looking glum

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I thought it was only two lines a post
Psykeout, man, you're supposed to be the host

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Unfortunately for you, I've a trick in my sock
I'm playing 'Rock Paper Scissors Lizard Spock'

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Take to the waves, my fly brotha
Speaking of which, how's YOUR MOTHA

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It seems that ship has already sailed
Let's hope this thread doesn't suck too much and get jailed

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Unfortunately, 'fur' and 'world' don't rhyme
Perhaps you need to take just a bit more time

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I have to say, Dissention, there's something strangely fitting about your avatar.

It's... foreboding.

I kid, I kid

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