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Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13) 
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Post Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Chapter one: Interdimensional Floating Island Dilemma (if you know what I mean)
41 days after the final battle.
"We have been on this island for over a month now, Grape, we need to escape, are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." Collin, Peanut, and Grape were stuck on a floating island in 'space', they were stuck there, with nothing to eat but crushed grains. Peanut always tried to look at the bright side of things, though. Collin was sitting at the edge of the island when Peanut exclaimed, "I see a shooting star!" Collin replied with "There can't be shooting stars, we're… I don't know where!" Collin looked over, and, to his surprise, there was a comet-like object (as in it was leaving a glowing trail) falling towards them. The three ran to the far side of the island. There was a booming sound as the object crashed, Collin slowly walked over, there were three shapes in what almost looked like a star wars land speeder with wings.
END OF PART ONE SO I CAN GET THIS OUT AND OVER WITH.

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Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

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This seems like it will be good! I can't wait for more!

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SeanWolf Wrote:
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

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Hawkfang42 Wrote:
SeanWolf Wrote:
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

Actually I was referring to this part in particular - "...are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." - Maybe after the word 'missed' you could've added a ? and had the 'we just' be a separate sentence. Just an idea :)

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Intriguing opening, I can't wait to see what comes next :)

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SeanWolf Wrote:
Hawkfang42 Wrote:
SeanWolf Wrote:
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

Actually I was referring to this part in particular - "...are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." - Maybe after the word 'missed' you could've added a ? and had the 'we just' be a separate sentence. Just an idea :)

Okay, thank you. (I better remember my grammar lessons)

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Hey its OK. I'm pretty sure a good 30% of the time I forget my grammar also. XD

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Okay, any guesses, (Hint: not star wars, and related to the SNES)

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