So here's how this is going to play out. This is mainly different stories about the residents of Babylon Gardens, but the two things they all have in common is that they take place on the same night during as the title suggested a thunder storm and some even have a similar pattern. With that, let's begin.
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The Hartford Residence
*BOOM*
Mark awoke from the loud thunder. He looked around for awhile and notice he was still in his bedroom.
"Whew! It's just some stupid thunder" He said to himself in relief.
But before Mark could go back to sleep, he heard a screeching sound his door was making. He looked at the door as it started to open, revealing his dog Sasha.
"Daddy?" said Sasha.
"What is it Sasha" said Mark.
"C-can I sleep with you until the storm passes" said Sasha as she started to shake.
Mark groaned "Sasha it's two in the morning and you know you're not allowed to sleep in my bed."
*BOOM*
Another thunder hit, startling the two. Mark started to hear a whimper from Sasha, making him feel a little guilty.
Mark sighed "But I guess just for tonight, you can..."
Before Mark could finish, Sasha was already in his bed.
"Thank you daddy." said Sasha as she snuggled up next to him. "Good night."
Mark couldn't help but chuckle. It still amazes him that even though he treats Sasha badly sometimes, she still loves him. And even though he doesn't say it, she knew he felt the same as well.
"Good night, Sasha." said Mark as he wrapped an arm around her and drifted off to sleep.
Thunder Storm
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Re: Thunder Storm
Oooh... a point of view kind of story? I love these stuff. 
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Re: Thunder Storm
Seems good though the title makes me think of the power rangers ninja storm/Dino thunder team up.
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Adorable scene! : P
Back in elementary school, I made a joke about calling a spoof series as "Power Ranger Dino Ninja of the Wild Time."Legotron123 wrote:Seems good though the title makes me think of the power rangers ninja storm/Dino thunder team up.
20th century fox? Given that this is the year 2020, that fox must be dead by now. Sadface! : (
I'm telling you, hyenas ARE canines too!
I'm telling you, hyenas ARE canines too!
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A nice little scene indeed! A very sweet take on the relationship between Sasha and her owner.
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It's kinda funny how it's only been a month and there's only one of this... but it was certainly a well-done scene and idea. I can really feel the sentimental appeals driven between Sasha and her owner; it actually felt like I was right there when it happened despite it being such a short scene. You've done a great job with this, Saturn. =3
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The Sandwich Residence
*BOOM*
Grape tossed back and forth in annoyance. Every attempt of going back to sleep would fail because of the thunder and lighting.
“Come on, why can’t it stop?!” shouted Grape.
*BOOM*
Grape sighed as she got up and left her room. She thought a drink would make things better. As she headed towards the kitchen, she noticed the TV in the living room was on. Curious, she entered the living room and saw her friend Peanut on the couch.
“Peanut?” said Grape.
Peanut turned his head around and saw Grape.
“Oh hey Grape.” said Peanut.
“Why are you watching TV at one A.M?” said Grape.
“I couldn't sleep.” said Peanut.
“How come?” said Grape.
“I've been thinking about something.” said Peanut.
“Well I’m going to the kitchen to get a drink. You wanna talk about it there?” said Grape.
“Sure.” said Peanut as he got up, turned off the TV, and followed Grape.
Peanut got out two cups while Grape got out a carton of milk.
“So what happened?” said Grape as she poured milk into the two cups.
“Bino said something to me today.” said Peanut.
“What did he say?” said Grape as she took a sip of her milk.
“He said you and Tarot don’t care about me...” said Peanut as he lowered his head.
They sat there in silence for a full minute until Grape started to talk.
“Peanut, what makes you think that stuff is even true?” said Grape.
"Well, Tarot and I haven't been hanging out for a few weeks." said Peanut.
"So? That doesn't mean anything." said Grape.
“But…” said Peanut before he got interrupted by Grape.
“Tell me this Peanut. How long have you been dating Tarot?” said Grape.
“Five years.” said Peanut.
“And has she forgiven you every time you mess up?” said Grape.
“Yes.” said Peanut.
“So with all those factors in, I don’t think Tarot will ever stop caring.” said Grape.
“But what about you?” said Peanut.
“Peanut, you’re my best friend. You'd think I will ever stop caring about you? Heck no. Not even words can describe how much you mean to me.” said Grape.
“Really?” said Peanut.
“Of course.” said Grape.
Peanut smiled as his tail began to wag.
“Well it’s getting pretty late. I think we should go back to bed” said Grape as she drank up the rest of her milk.
Peanut nodded as he did the same. The two putted their cups in the sink as they headed back to their rooms.
“Hey Grape?” said Peanut.
“Yes Peanut?” said Grape.
As she turned around, Peanut wrapped his arms around the cat’s neck, hugging her tight.
“Thank you.” said Peanut.
“Hehe, you’re welcome.” said Grape as she gratefully returned the hug.
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Man, six months without an update. Sorry it took so long guys.
*BOOM*
Grape tossed back and forth in annoyance. Every attempt of going back to sleep would fail because of the thunder and lighting.
“Come on, why can’t it stop?!” shouted Grape.
*BOOM*
Grape sighed as she got up and left her room. She thought a drink would make things better. As she headed towards the kitchen, she noticed the TV in the living room was on. Curious, she entered the living room and saw her friend Peanut on the couch.
“Peanut?” said Grape.
Peanut turned his head around and saw Grape.
“Oh hey Grape.” said Peanut.
“Why are you watching TV at one A.M?” said Grape.
“I couldn't sleep.” said Peanut.
“How come?” said Grape.
“I've been thinking about something.” said Peanut.
“Well I’m going to the kitchen to get a drink. You wanna talk about it there?” said Grape.
“Sure.” said Peanut as he got up, turned off the TV, and followed Grape.
Peanut got out two cups while Grape got out a carton of milk.
“So what happened?” said Grape as she poured milk into the two cups.
“Bino said something to me today.” said Peanut.
“What did he say?” said Grape as she took a sip of her milk.
“He said you and Tarot don’t care about me...” said Peanut as he lowered his head.
They sat there in silence for a full minute until Grape started to talk.
“Peanut, what makes you think that stuff is even true?” said Grape.
"Well, Tarot and I haven't been hanging out for a few weeks." said Peanut.
"So? That doesn't mean anything." said Grape.
“But…” said Peanut before he got interrupted by Grape.
“Tell me this Peanut. How long have you been dating Tarot?” said Grape.
“Five years.” said Peanut.
“And has she forgiven you every time you mess up?” said Grape.
“Yes.” said Peanut.
“So with all those factors in, I don’t think Tarot will ever stop caring.” said Grape.
“But what about you?” said Peanut.
“Peanut, you’re my best friend. You'd think I will ever stop caring about you? Heck no. Not even words can describe how much you mean to me.” said Grape.
“Really?” said Peanut.
“Of course.” said Grape.
Peanut smiled as his tail began to wag.
“Well it’s getting pretty late. I think we should go back to bed” said Grape as she drank up the rest of her milk.
Peanut nodded as he did the same. The two putted their cups in the sink as they headed back to their rooms.
“Hey Grape?” said Peanut.
“Yes Peanut?” said Grape.
As she turned around, Peanut wrapped his arms around the cat’s neck, hugging her tight.
“Thank you.” said Peanut.
“Hehe, you’re welcome.” said Grape as she gratefully returned the hug.
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Man, six months without an update. Sorry it took so long guys.
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Re: Thunder Storm
Ooh! This is back!
I like little scenes like this. They give me the warm fuzzies
Hope to see more!
I like little scenes like this. They give me the warm fuzzies
Hope to see more!
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This is bad...
APRIL FOOLS!
I LOVE EM! VERY nice job Saturn! I can see very well in my mind's eye what is happening, which means you've written them well!
APRIL FOOLS!
I LOVE EM! VERY nice job Saturn! I can see very well in my mind's eye what is happening, which means you've written them well!
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These are really good. I wish I could write well.
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Same here, everytinm I try and write, i get different points of view, unfinished parts, bad message delivery, etc. uggghhypernovatic wrote:These are really good. I wish I could write well.
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Ah, so now we see The sandwich household! Cute scene there. Glad Peanut has someone who can help alleviate him of his doubts.
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The D'Angelo Residence
*BOOM*
“Great night huh Tarot? said Sabrina as she looked through her window?
“Sure.” said Tarot from behind.
Sabrina turned around and saw a sad Tarot sitting on the floor looking at some cards.
“What’s wrong Tarot?” said Sabrina.
“Nothing.” said Tarot.
“Don’t lie to me Tarot. Rarely do I see you like this.” said Sabrina.
“Just thinking.” said Tarot.
“About what?” said Sabrina.
“Peanut.” said Tarot.
Sabrina rolled her eyes.
“You’re thinking about it again Tarot? What makes you believe Peanut will ever dump you?” said Sabrina.
“We haven’t been dating for a while.” said Tarot.
“How does that prove anything? I mean he chose you over Dragon for crying out loud!” said Sabrina.
“Just like the others…” said Tarot as she started to tear up.
Sabrina was caught off guard from what Tarot said. She was told before that Peanut wasn’t the first boyfriend Tarot had. Sabrina realized that Tarot’s doubts and worries were still there.
Sabrina walked towards Tarot as she put her hands on Tarot’s shoulders.
“Tarot, there’s nothing to worry about. Maybe if you talk to Peanut about it, things will be alright.” said Sabrina.
“How do you know it’ll be alright?” said Tarot.
“I don’t. But knowing Peanut, I’m sure you two can work it out.” said Sabrina.
“I guess you’re right. I’ll talk to Peanut about it tomorrow. Thanks Sabrina.” said Tarot.
“Don’t mention it.” said Sabrina.
Tarot wiped her tears away as she got up.
“Tell you what, how about we go make some cookies.” said Sabrina.
“Okay.” said Tarot as she followed Sabrina to the kitchen.
“By the way, how’s Fido and Marie doing?” said Tarot.
“Doing good actually. Today we…” said Sabrina.
She stopped talking when she saw a fox picking at some flowers that where on a table.
“Karishad, what are you doing?” said Sabrina.
Karishad look up and saw the two. His frustrated expression turned into a happy one.
“Finding some two lips my ladies.” said Karishad as he continued his picking.
Sabrina and Tarot looked at each other as they started to giggle.
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Hmm, I wonder who Marie could be?
*BOOM*
“Great night huh Tarot? said Sabrina as she looked through her window?
“Sure.” said Tarot from behind.
Sabrina turned around and saw a sad Tarot sitting on the floor looking at some cards.
“What’s wrong Tarot?” said Sabrina.
“Nothing.” said Tarot.
“Don’t lie to me Tarot. Rarely do I see you like this.” said Sabrina.
“Just thinking.” said Tarot.
“About what?” said Sabrina.
“Peanut.” said Tarot.
Sabrina rolled her eyes.
“You’re thinking about it again Tarot? What makes you believe Peanut will ever dump you?” said Sabrina.
“We haven’t been dating for a while.” said Tarot.
“How does that prove anything? I mean he chose you over Dragon for crying out loud!” said Sabrina.
“Just like the others…” said Tarot as she started to tear up.
Sabrina was caught off guard from what Tarot said. She was told before that Peanut wasn’t the first boyfriend Tarot had. Sabrina realized that Tarot’s doubts and worries were still there.
Sabrina walked towards Tarot as she put her hands on Tarot’s shoulders.
“Tarot, there’s nothing to worry about. Maybe if you talk to Peanut about it, things will be alright.” said Sabrina.
“How do you know it’ll be alright?” said Tarot.
“I don’t. But knowing Peanut, I’m sure you two can work it out.” said Sabrina.
“I guess you’re right. I’ll talk to Peanut about it tomorrow. Thanks Sabrina.” said Tarot.
“Don’t mention it.” said Sabrina.
Tarot wiped her tears away as she got up.
“Tell you what, how about we go make some cookies.” said Sabrina.
“Okay.” said Tarot as she followed Sabrina to the kitchen.
“By the way, how’s Fido and Marie doing?” said Tarot.
“Doing good actually. Today we…” said Sabrina.
She stopped talking when she saw a fox picking at some flowers that where on a table.
“Karishad, what are you doing?” said Sabrina.
Karishad look up and saw the two. His frustrated expression turned into a happy one.
“Finding some two lips my ladies.” said Karishad as he continued his picking.
Sabrina and Tarot looked at each other as they started to giggle.
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Hmm, I wonder who Marie could be?
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'Nother good read, but... Marie? My gawsh, when did Fido and Sabrina break up!? I Must KNOWW!!!
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The Byron Residence
*BOOM*
Fido woke up in shock. He just realized he was in his room. He sighed in relief.
“You okay?” said Spo who was at the foot of Fido’s bed.
“Yeah, just a nightmare.” said Fido. He could feel his throat all dried up.
“I think I’m going to get drink of water. You need anything?” said Fido.
“Nah, I’m fine.” said Spo.
“Alright, good night Spo.” said Fido.
“Good night.” said Spo as he went back to sleep.
Fido quietly stepped out of his room. As he headed to the kitchen, he saw his dad Ryan sitting at the table having a drink.
“Hey dad.” said Fido.
“Oh hey Fido. Couldn’t sleep? ” Said Ryan.
“Nah, I had a nightmare. What about you?” said Fido.
“Nope.” said Ryan.
Fido got a cup and filled it with water.
“Fido, there’s something I wanted to talk to you about.” said Ryan.
“What is it?” said Fido.
“Have you ever thought about quitting the K9U?” said Ryan.
“No, why would I do that?” said Fido.
“I’m just worried about you. Weird things have been going on recently and who knows what will happen now that everyone now knows about you and Sabrina.” said Ryan.
“Dad, I’ll be okay. I’ve dealt with some weird things in the past, and Sabrina has taken me to places that are hard to describe. If I can handle all of those things, I can handle what will happen in the future.” said Fido.
“Alright, I’ll trust you.” said Ryan.
“Papa…” said a small voice.
Fido and Ryan turned around and saw a Chartreux kitten on the verge of tears. Fido walk towards the kitten and gave her a hug.
“Did you had a bad dream too sweetheart?” said Fido.
“Mmhm.” said the kitten.
“There there, it’s okay.” said Fido.
Fido let go of the kitten and saw her calming down.
“Why don’t you sleep with me tonight. Would that be okay?” said Fido.
The kitten nodded as Fido picked her up.
“Say good night to grandpa Marie.” said Fido.
"Bon nuit grand-père." said Marie.
“Good night Marie.” said Ryan.
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I got a fascination with kitchens don't I?
*BOOM*
Fido woke up in shock. He just realized he was in his room. He sighed in relief.
“You okay?” said Spo who was at the foot of Fido’s bed.
“Yeah, just a nightmare.” said Fido. He could feel his throat all dried up.
“I think I’m going to get drink of water. You need anything?” said Fido.
“Nah, I’m fine.” said Spo.
“Alright, good night Spo.” said Fido.
“Good night.” said Spo as he went back to sleep.
Fido quietly stepped out of his room. As he headed to the kitchen, he saw his dad Ryan sitting at the table having a drink.
“Hey dad.” said Fido.
“Oh hey Fido. Couldn’t sleep? ” Said Ryan.
“Nah, I had a nightmare. What about you?” said Fido.
“Nope.” said Ryan.
Fido got a cup and filled it with water.
“Fido, there’s something I wanted to talk to you about.” said Ryan.
“What is it?” said Fido.
“Have you ever thought about quitting the K9U?” said Ryan.
“No, why would I do that?” said Fido.
“I’m just worried about you. Weird things have been going on recently and who knows what will happen now that everyone now knows about you and Sabrina.” said Ryan.
“Dad, I’ll be okay. I’ve dealt with some weird things in the past, and Sabrina has taken me to places that are hard to describe. If I can handle all of those things, I can handle what will happen in the future.” said Fido.
“Alright, I’ll trust you.” said Ryan.
“Papa…” said a small voice.
Fido and Ryan turned around and saw a Chartreux kitten on the verge of tears. Fido walk towards the kitten and gave her a hug.
“Did you had a bad dream too sweetheart?” said Fido.
“Mmhm.” said the kitten.
“There there, it’s okay.” said Fido.
Fido let go of the kitten and saw her calming down.
“Why don’t you sleep with me tonight. Would that be okay?” said Fido.
The kitten nodded as Fido picked her up.
“Say good night to grandpa Marie.” said Fido.
"Bon nuit grand-père." said Marie.
“Good night Marie.” said Ryan.
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I got a fascination with kitchens don't I?
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Who... Is Marie'? The world may never know! Actually we will find out some point in the future won't we.
Have Fido and Sabrina adopted a French immigrant? Don't ask me, of course wouldn't know.
Have Fido and Sabrina adopted a French immigrant? Don't ask me, of course wouldn't know.
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The Costner Residence
*BOOM*
Maxwell sighed as he looked at the ceiling in his room.
“Could you stop sighing? I’m trying to sleep.” said Bino who was lying in a different bed in the other side of the room.
“Sorry, I was just thinking.” said Max.
“About what?” said Bino.
“Grape…” said Max.
“Oh will you shut up about her? Every time you talk about her, you whine about how you’re not good enough. Even when she told you it doesn't matter what you do, you still whine.” said Bino.
“I’m sorry it’s just I’m scared. Grape is awesome and every girlfriend I had would leave me because I always screw up. Sometimes fear she would leave like the rest did.” said Max.
“Look why don’t you just talk to her about this. Tell her how you feel. I’m sure you two can find a way to work it out.” said Bino.
“Alright, I’ll talk to her tomorrow. Thanks Bino.” said Max.
“Don’t mention it.” said Bino.
“Oh hey I almost forgot, how come you’ve decided to bring Fido back to the Good Ol’ Dogs Club?” said Max.
“I don’t want to talk about it.” said Bino.
“Come on.” said Max as he gave his usual cheshire like grin.
“No.” said Bino.
“I won’t tell anyone.” said Max.
“Goodnight Max.” said Bino.
“Was it because of Marie?” said Max.
“GOODNIGHT MAX!” said Bino.
Maxwell rolled his eyes, knowing he wasn’t going to get an answer.
“Goodnight Bino.” said Max as laid down on his bed and drifted off to sleep.
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Credit goes to Valerio for the last name Costner.
*BOOM*
Maxwell sighed as he looked at the ceiling in his room.
“Could you stop sighing? I’m trying to sleep.” said Bino who was lying in a different bed in the other side of the room.
“Sorry, I was just thinking.” said Max.
“About what?” said Bino.
“Grape…” said Max.
“Oh will you shut up about her? Every time you talk about her, you whine about how you’re not good enough. Even when she told you it doesn't matter what you do, you still whine.” said Bino.
“I’m sorry it’s just I’m scared. Grape is awesome and every girlfriend I had would leave me because I always screw up. Sometimes fear she would leave like the rest did.” said Max.
“Look why don’t you just talk to her about this. Tell her how you feel. I’m sure you two can find a way to work it out.” said Bino.
“Alright, I’ll talk to her tomorrow. Thanks Bino.” said Max.
“Don’t mention it.” said Bino.
“Oh hey I almost forgot, how come you’ve decided to bring Fido back to the Good Ol’ Dogs Club?” said Max.
“I don’t want to talk about it.” said Bino.
“Come on.” said Max as he gave his usual cheshire like grin.
“No.” said Bino.
“I won’t tell anyone.” said Max.
“Goodnight Max.” said Bino.
“Was it because of Marie?” said Max.
“GOODNIGHT MAX!” said Bino.
Maxwell rolled his eyes, knowing he wasn’t going to get an answer.
“Goodnight Bino.” said Max as laid down on his bed and drifted off to sleep.
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Credit goes to Valerio for the last name Costner.
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They're all weaving together
This is a fun and daw-able series here. And now I gotta know what Marie's part in all this is
This is a fun and daw-able series here. And now I gotta know what Marie's part in all this is
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The Milton Residence
*BOOM*
Keene groaned at the sound of thunder. Storms weren’t usually his thing. Keene closed his eyes, hoping he would fall asleep until he heard a familiar voice from behind.
“Keene?” said the voice from behind.
Keene turned around and saw his brother Duke.
“What do you want Duke?” said Keene.
“Will you read a bedtime story?” said Duke.
“It’s 1:30 in the morning.” said Keene.
“But bedtime stories always help me out for storms like this.” said Duke.
“Then go ask Jeeves.” said Keene.
“But he’s asleep.” said Duke.
“So was I.” said Keene.
“Please Keene?” said Duke.
“Alright, alright just stop whining! Pick out a book and I’ll be there.” said Keene.
Duke nodded as he headed back to his room. Keene jumped out of bed as he followed his brother. As he entered, he saw Duke in bed with a book that had the title “And to Think That I Saw It on Mulberry Street” in his hands. Keene grabbed a chair beside the bed and sat as Duke handed him the book.
“Ready?” said Keene.
“Ready.” said Duke.
Keene opened the book and started to read.
“When I leave home to walk to school, Dad always says to me, Marco, keep your eyelids up and see what you can see.” said Keene.
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Keene's a good brother isn't he?
*BOOM*
Keene groaned at the sound of thunder. Storms weren’t usually his thing. Keene closed his eyes, hoping he would fall asleep until he heard a familiar voice from behind.
“Keene?” said the voice from behind.
Keene turned around and saw his brother Duke.
“What do you want Duke?” said Keene.
“Will you read a bedtime story?” said Duke.
“It’s 1:30 in the morning.” said Keene.
“But bedtime stories always help me out for storms like this.” said Duke.
“Then go ask Jeeves.” said Keene.
“But he’s asleep.” said Duke.
“So was I.” said Keene.
“Please Keene?” said Duke.
“Alright, alright just stop whining! Pick out a book and I’ll be there.” said Keene.
Duke nodded as he headed back to his room. Keene jumped out of bed as he followed his brother. As he entered, he saw Duke in bed with a book that had the title “And to Think That I Saw It on Mulberry Street” in his hands. Keene grabbed a chair beside the bed and sat as Duke handed him the book.
“Ready?” said Keene.
“Ready.” said Duke.
Keene opened the book and started to read.
“When I leave home to walk to school, Dad always says to me, Marco, keep your eyelids up and see what you can see.” said Keene.
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Keene's a good brother isn't he?
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The Arbelt Residence
*BOOM*
Marvin looked out the kitchen window as he took a sip from a cup of water. He had a hard sleeping and thought a drink would do the trick. He heard some footsteps as saw his two housemates Tiger and Zach.
“You two couldn't sleep either?” said Marvin.
“Nope.” said Tiger as he took a cup from the cupboard.
“Storms aren't my cup a tea.” said Zach as he did the same.
The two went to the faucet and poured water in their cups. As they took a sip, they heard a knock at the door. Zach opened up the door and saw a bunch of raccoons and a possum.
“Good evening Mr. Opener of ways. The kids would like to know if we can stay here and spend the night?” said one of the raccoons named Custom Ink.
“I don’t know. I’m not sure dad would like that.” said Zach.
“Please?” said of the baby raccoons named Tum in a whimpering voice.
“Alright, but just for tonight.” said Zach.
“Oh thank you so much.” said Custom Ink.
Custom Ink. and her children were followed by two other raccoons named Falstaff and truck and the possum named Jessica.
“We’ll promise to not steal anything.” said Falstaff.
“I thought you said…” said Truck before he got interrupted by Falstaff.
“Shut up!” said Falstaff.
“Don’t mind me, I just got roped in.” said Jessica.
As they were about to settle in, they heard another knock form the door. Marvin opened the door and saw a group of squirrels.
“Can we stay here for tonight too?” said one of the squirrels.
“Uh, sure.” said Marvin.
“Thank you.” said one of the squirrels as the group ran into the house.
Moments later they heard another knock. Tiger opened it up saw a little bird.
“Can I join in?” said the bird.
“I guess you can.” said Tiger.
“Thanks.” said the bird as he immediately flew in and nestled himself on a counter.
A few moments later, another knock came. Marvin opened up the door and saw a whole bunch of animals.
“What about me?” said a Hare.
“And me?” said a deer.
“And me too?” said a bear.
“Don’t forget about us!” said a bunch of foxes.
The next sound everyone heard was Zach banging his head on a wall.
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Being The Opener of Ways isn't easy.
*BOOM*
Marvin looked out the kitchen window as he took a sip from a cup of water. He had a hard sleeping and thought a drink would do the trick. He heard some footsteps as saw his two housemates Tiger and Zach.
“You two couldn't sleep either?” said Marvin.
“Nope.” said Tiger as he took a cup from the cupboard.
“Storms aren't my cup a tea.” said Zach as he did the same.
The two went to the faucet and poured water in their cups. As they took a sip, they heard a knock at the door. Zach opened up the door and saw a bunch of raccoons and a possum.
“Good evening Mr. Opener of ways. The kids would like to know if we can stay here and spend the night?” said one of the raccoons named Custom Ink.
“I don’t know. I’m not sure dad would like that.” said Zach.
“Please?” said of the baby raccoons named Tum in a whimpering voice.
“Alright, but just for tonight.” said Zach.
“Oh thank you so much.” said Custom Ink.
Custom Ink. and her children were followed by two other raccoons named Falstaff and truck and the possum named Jessica.
“We’ll promise to not steal anything.” said Falstaff.
“I thought you said…” said Truck before he got interrupted by Falstaff.
“Shut up!” said Falstaff.
“Don’t mind me, I just got roped in.” said Jessica.
As they were about to settle in, they heard another knock form the door. Marvin opened the door and saw a group of squirrels.
“Can we stay here for tonight too?” said one of the squirrels.
“Uh, sure.” said Marvin.
“Thank you.” said one of the squirrels as the group ran into the house.
Moments later they heard another knock. Tiger opened it up saw a little bird.
“Can I join in?” said the bird.
“I guess you can.” said Tiger.
“Thanks.” said the bird as he immediately flew in and nestled himself on a counter.
A few moments later, another knock came. Marvin opened up the door and saw a whole bunch of animals.
“What about me?” said a Hare.
“And me?” said a deer.
“And me too?” said a bear.
“Don’t forget about us!” said a bunch of foxes.
The next sound everyone heard was Zach banging his head on a wall.
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Being The Opener of Ways isn't easy.
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The Lindberg Residence
*BOOM*
Usually Fox could sleep through storms like this, but this time it was different. Something he was thinking about was preventing him to fall asleep. The husky sighed, got up and left his room hoping a drink of water would make him feel better. As he headed towards the kitchen, he saw that the TV was on. He got closer as he saw a corgi named King sitting on the couch.
“King?” said Fox.
“Oh hey Fox.” said King.
“How come you’re up this late?” said Fox as he sat next to King.
“There’s something I've been thinking about.” said King.
“What is it?” said Fox.
“Well… Bailey’s been thinking about starting a family and I don’t think I’m ready. I don’t even know how to raise a child.” said King.
“But don’t you spend most of your time with the wolf cubs. Wouldn't that count?” said Fox.
“If you’d consider being buried alive as a way of raising kids then I guess that would count. By the way, how come you’re up? You've been thinking about something too?” said King.
“Yup.” said Fox.
“About what?” said King.
“A girl…” said Fox.
“Really, I was wondering when you were going to meet someone.” said King.
“Believe me King, it’s not that great.” said Fox.
“Well what’s the girl’s name?” said King.
“Allegra.” said Fox.
“And what’s wrong with her?” said King.
“Nothing’s wrong with her.” said Fox.
“Then what’s the problem?” said King.
“She’s a cat…” said Fox.
“So?” said King.
“King, all my life I've told that being a cat lover is wrong. Then I find out that Fido is one, and now I’m becoming one myself? I don’t know what to do. I mean what would people think?” said Fox.
“You wanna know what I think?” said a familiar voice.
Fox and King turned around and saw a female husky named Bailey.
“How long have you been there?” said Fox.
“For a while.” said Bailey as he sat between Fox and King.
“Fox, I think you’re just overreacting to this whole situation. If you really love this girl, then it shouldn't matter what people think or say.” said Bailey.
“Really?” said Fox.
“Of course, and between you and me, I think it’s cute you have feelings for a cat.” said Bailey.
Fox blushed as Bailey turned to her husband.
“And King, I think you’re worrying too much. You’d be a great father.” said Bailey.
“You think so?” said King.
“I know so.” said Bailey as he gave King a kiss on the cheek, making him blush as well.
“Well, I think we should head for bed. Dad might kill us if we stay up late.” said Fox.
King and Bailey nodded as the three got up, turned off the TV, and headed towards their respected bedrooms.
“Night guys.” said Fox as went into his room.
“Night Fox.” said both King and Bailey as they did the same.
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You guys knew these three would come sooner or later.
*BOOM*
Usually Fox could sleep through storms like this, but this time it was different. Something he was thinking about was preventing him to fall asleep. The husky sighed, got up and left his room hoping a drink of water would make him feel better. As he headed towards the kitchen, he saw that the TV was on. He got closer as he saw a corgi named King sitting on the couch.
“King?” said Fox.
“Oh hey Fox.” said King.
“How come you’re up this late?” said Fox as he sat next to King.
“There’s something I've been thinking about.” said King.
“What is it?” said Fox.
“Well… Bailey’s been thinking about starting a family and I don’t think I’m ready. I don’t even know how to raise a child.” said King.
“But don’t you spend most of your time with the wolf cubs. Wouldn't that count?” said Fox.
“If you’d consider being buried alive as a way of raising kids then I guess that would count. By the way, how come you’re up? You've been thinking about something too?” said King.
“Yup.” said Fox.
“About what?” said King.
“A girl…” said Fox.
“Really, I was wondering when you were going to meet someone.” said King.
“Believe me King, it’s not that great.” said Fox.
“Well what’s the girl’s name?” said King.
“Allegra.” said Fox.
“And what’s wrong with her?” said King.
“Nothing’s wrong with her.” said Fox.
“Then what’s the problem?” said King.
“She’s a cat…” said Fox.
“So?” said King.
“King, all my life I've told that being a cat lover is wrong. Then I find out that Fido is one, and now I’m becoming one myself? I don’t know what to do. I mean what would people think?” said Fox.
“You wanna know what I think?” said a familiar voice.
Fox and King turned around and saw a female husky named Bailey.
“How long have you been there?” said Fox.
“For a while.” said Bailey as he sat between Fox and King.
“Fox, I think you’re just overreacting to this whole situation. If you really love this girl, then it shouldn't matter what people think or say.” said Bailey.
“Really?” said Fox.
“Of course, and between you and me, I think it’s cute you have feelings for a cat.” said Bailey.
Fox blushed as Bailey turned to her husband.
“And King, I think you’re worrying too much. You’d be a great father.” said Bailey.
“You think so?” said King.
“I know so.” said Bailey as he gave King a kiss on the cheek, making him blush as well.
“Well, I think we should head for bed. Dad might kill us if we stay up late.” said Fox.
King and Bailey nodded as the three got up, turned off the TV, and headed towards their respected bedrooms.
“Night guys.” said Fox as went into his room.
“Night Fox.” said both King and Bailey as they did the same.
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You guys knew these three would come sooner or later.
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Re: Thunder Storm
Okay, an okay update. I don't know, it's missing something the other updates carried. I think it's cause it's starting to divert in fanfiction. Now that's not a problem really, it's just that the previous ones where really good, and didn't rely on fanfic characters and the like. Still okay.
Re: Thunder Storm
Don't worry SuperStar. Marie, Follegra, Tarot's other boyfriends, and Peanut and Tarot not dating for awhile are the only fanfic like things that are going to be in this story. (unless I do an Alex story of courseSuperStar wrote:I think it's cause it's starting to divert in fanfiction.
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Re: Thunder Storm
Yeah kay. Again, it's not a problem, it just has a different feel.
Re: Thunder Storm
The Parker Residence
*BOOM*
Joey got up in shocked at the sound of the thunder. He looked around his dog house and saw his mouse girlfriend Squeak on their desk shaking.
“Squeak, are you okay?” said Joey.
“I’m fine Joey, just a cold chill.” said Squeak.
“Do you want me to get you anything?” said Joey.
“No I’m fine.” said Squeak.
“You want some extra blankets?” said Joey.
“Nah.” said Squeak.
“You want something to eat?” said Joey.
“Joey, you don’t need to do anything. It’s just a cold chill.” said Joey.
“You sure” said Joey.
“Of course.” said Squeak.
“If you say so.” said Joey as he went over to the desk and gave Squeak a kiss.
“Love you Squeak.” said Joey.
“Love you too Joey. Goodnight” said Squeak.
“Goodnight.” said Joey.
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Joey's a good boy isn't he?
*BOOM*
Joey got up in shocked at the sound of the thunder. He looked around his dog house and saw his mouse girlfriend Squeak on their desk shaking.
“Squeak, are you okay?” said Joey.
“I’m fine Joey, just a cold chill.” said Squeak.
“Do you want me to get you anything?” said Joey.
“No I’m fine.” said Squeak.
“You want some extra blankets?” said Joey.
“Nah.” said Squeak.
“You want something to eat?” said Joey.
“Joey, you don’t need to do anything. It’s just a cold chill.” said Joey.
“You sure” said Joey.
“Of course.” said Squeak.
“If you say so.” said Joey as he went over to the desk and gave Squeak a kiss.
“Love you Squeak.” said Joey.
“Love you too Joey. Goodnight” said Squeak.
“Goodnight.” said Joey.
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Joey's a good boy isn't he?
Re: Thunder Storm
The Bennett Residence
*BOOM*
“WOAH!!!” said Fiddler.
Fiddler looked around her room back and forth until she saw her housemate Keys getting up. Fiddler’s screams probably woke him up.
“Fiddler, what’s wrong?” said Keys.
“Oh nothing Keys, just got scared from the lighting.” said Fiddler.
“Are you sure?” said Keys.
“I’m sure.” said Fiddler.
“Well I’m going back to bed. If there’s anything I can do for you, just wake me up.” said Keys.
“Actually Keys, there is something you can do. Could you sing a song for me? It'll help me sleep better?” said Fiddler.
“Alright, but after that it’s off to bed.” said Keys as he got up and headed towards his piano.
“Which song would like to hear?” said Keys.
“Um, how about Walking in Memphis?” said Fiddler.
“Sounds good.” said Keys as he started playing.
“Put on my blue suede shoes and I boarded the plane, Touched down in the land of the Delta Blues in the middle of the pouring rain.” said Keys.
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It's been awhile since we've seen these two hasn't it?
*BOOM*
“WOAH!!!” said Fiddler.
Fiddler looked around her room back and forth until she saw her housemate Keys getting up. Fiddler’s screams probably woke him up.
“Fiddler, what’s wrong?” said Keys.
“Oh nothing Keys, just got scared from the lighting.” said Fiddler.
“Are you sure?” said Keys.
“I’m sure.” said Fiddler.
“Well I’m going back to bed. If there’s anything I can do for you, just wake me up.” said Keys.
“Actually Keys, there is something you can do. Could you sing a song for me? It'll help me sleep better?” said Fiddler.
“Alright, but after that it’s off to bed.” said Keys as he got up and headed towards his piano.
“Which song would like to hear?” said Keys.
“Um, how about Walking in Memphis?” said Fiddler.
“Sounds good.” said Keys as he started playing.
“Put on my blue suede shoes and I boarded the plane, Touched down in the land of the Delta Blues in the middle of the pouring rain.” said Keys.
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It's been awhile since we've seen these two hasn't it?
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Re: Thunder Storm
Saturn,although yo are running out of the main characters it seems that i personally as a reader are not getting to see some of the other perspectives like joey's
Thunderstorm is a really good comic so far congrats and keep it up!!!
Thunderstorm is a really good comic so far congrats and keep it up!!!
Hello, the names Drake
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Re: Thunder Storm
Great story so far. I can only hope that with a co-writer I can write something that is halfway decent.
Re: Thunder Storm
The Holloway Residence
*BOOM*
“Whoa! What was that?” said a bulldog named Rex.
He looked out the window and saw a flash of light as well as sounds of thunder.
“Oh, it’s just some stupid storm.” said Rex.
Rex laid down hoping to get some shut eye, only to hear breathing beside him. Rex turned to his side and saw a familiar black lab on his bed.
“Hi, I’m Daisy!” said the lab.
“AAAAAH” said Rex.
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The Riley Residence
“AAAAAH!” said a female siamese cat named Mr. Bigglesworth.
She looked around and saw she was still in room. She sighed in relief when she saw her siblings who have the same name as she does still asleep. That is until she notices a male Mr. Bigglesworth rubbing his eyes, implying that her screaming must’ve woke him up.
“Sis, what’s wrong?” said the male Bigglesworth as he put his glasses on.
“I… I heard a loud noise!” said the female Bigglesworth as she began to shake.
The male Bigglesworth rolled his eyes as she got out of his bed and walked towards his sister’s bed.
“Sis, it’s just a storm. As long as we’re inside, it can’t hurt you.” said the male Bigglesworth.
“You promise?” said the female Bigglesworth.
“Promise.” said the male Bigglesworth.
The two gave each other a hug.
“Good night sis.” said the male Bigglesworth.
“Good night bro.” said the female Bigglesworth.
The male Bigglesworth went back to his bed and took of his glasses as he and his sister drifted back to sleep.
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There's no escaping from Daisy isn't there.
Also, two stories in one update!
*BOOM*
“Whoa! What was that?” said a bulldog named Rex.
He looked out the window and saw a flash of light as well as sounds of thunder.
“Oh, it’s just some stupid storm.” said Rex.
Rex laid down hoping to get some shut eye, only to hear breathing beside him. Rex turned to his side and saw a familiar black lab on his bed.
“Hi, I’m Daisy!” said the lab.
“AAAAAH” said Rex.
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The Riley Residence
“AAAAAH!” said a female siamese cat named Mr. Bigglesworth.
She looked around and saw she was still in room. She sighed in relief when she saw her siblings who have the same name as she does still asleep. That is until she notices a male Mr. Bigglesworth rubbing his eyes, implying that her screaming must’ve woke him up.
“Sis, what’s wrong?” said the male Bigglesworth as he put his glasses on.
“I… I heard a loud noise!” said the female Bigglesworth as she began to shake.
The male Bigglesworth rolled his eyes as she got out of his bed and walked towards his sister’s bed.
“Sis, it’s just a storm. As long as we’re inside, it can’t hurt you.” said the male Bigglesworth.
“You promise?” said the female Bigglesworth.
“Promise.” said the male Bigglesworth.
The two gave each other a hug.
“Good night sis.” said the male Bigglesworth.
“Good night bro.” said the female Bigglesworth.
The male Bigglesworth went back to his bed and took of his glasses as he and his sister drifted back to sleep.
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There's no escaping from Daisy isn't there.
Also, two stories in one update!
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Re: Thunder Storm
I have to wonder if something happened to Daisy that made her only able to say her own name over and over again.
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Re: Thunder Storm
Excellent job! It's one of those kinds of stories... Whatever happened to Rex?... Maybe this experience forced him to seek therapy.
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Re: Thunder Storm
I must say the Rex one made me laugh.
There is always a mystical adventure awaiting you. You just have to find it and take the first step into epicness.
Re: Thunder Storm
The Hall Residence
*BOOM*
A blue cat named Jasper jumped out of his bed and looked around his room in a panic. He calmed down and sighed in relief when he saw everything was fine. Before he went back to sleep, he heard little footstep noises behind his door. He got out of bed, opened the door, and saw a mouse named Jinx holding a full trey of food. The mouse smashed Jasper’s face with the food and ran as fast as he could. Jasper wiped the food off his face and followed suit as he made his way to the living room. He saw the outside door was open and thought that was where the mouse had gone. As soon as he got out of the house, the door slammed shut. As Jasper got soaking wet, he looked through one of the windows and saw Jinx blowing a raspberry at him. Jasper banged on the door, hoping his parents would hear him and let him in.
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Thought I'd give these two a shot.
*BOOM*
A blue cat named Jasper jumped out of his bed and looked around his room in a panic. He calmed down and sighed in relief when he saw everything was fine. Before he went back to sleep, he heard little footstep noises behind his door. He got out of bed, opened the door, and saw a mouse named Jinx holding a full trey of food. The mouse smashed Jasper’s face with the food and ran as fast as he could. Jasper wiped the food off his face and followed suit as he made his way to the living room. He saw the outside door was open and thought that was where the mouse had gone. As soon as he got out of the house, the door slammed shut. As Jasper got soaking wet, he looked through one of the windows and saw Jinx blowing a raspberry at him. Jasper banged on the door, hoping his parents would hear him and let him in.
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Thought I'd give these two a shot.
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Re: Thunder Storm
You know whom you should really do though? Kevin. I would like to see how he would react.
Re: Thunder Storm
The Beauregard Residence
*BOOM*
Kevin took a deep breath and sighed. Storms like this weren’t usually his thing. He looked around his room, hoping to do something to pass the time till he saw his cellphone.
“I wonder what Ralph’s doing?” thought Kevin.
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The Jameson Residence
Ralph was sound asleep not worrying about the thunder from outside till he heard a loud ring in his room. He looked around and saw it was his cellphone on the table. He got out of his bed, grabbed his phone from the table, and answered.
“Hey Ralph.” said Kevin.
“….Hey.” said Ralph knowing who it was.
“How are you?” said Kevin.
“….Fine.” said Ralph.
“That's good. What are you up to?” said Kevin.
“….Sleeping.” said Ralph.
“That’s cool. So have seen the new…” said Kevin before he was interrupted by Ralph.
“Kevin, is the reason you’re talking to me because you want something to distract you from the storm?” said Ralph.
“Of course not, I just want to have a normal conversation with you!” said Kevin.
“At two thirty in the morning?” said Ralph.
“Well what’s wrong with that?” said Kevin.
Ralph stood there for three minutes until went to the nearest window in his room, open it up, and threw his cellphone out the window. He went back got to his bed, and fell back asleep.
“Ralph……Ralph…..Ralph…..” said Kevin hoping to get an answer.
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Hope you like this, Amazee Dayzee.
*BOOM*
Kevin took a deep breath and sighed. Storms like this weren’t usually his thing. He looked around his room, hoping to do something to pass the time till he saw his cellphone.
“I wonder what Ralph’s doing?” thought Kevin.
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The Jameson Residence
Ralph was sound asleep not worrying about the thunder from outside till he heard a loud ring in his room. He looked around and saw it was his cellphone on the table. He got out of his bed, grabbed his phone from the table, and answered.
“Hey Ralph.” said Kevin.
“….Hey.” said Ralph knowing who it was.
“How are you?” said Kevin.
“….Fine.” said Ralph.
“That's good. What are you up to?” said Kevin.
“….Sleeping.” said Ralph.
“That’s cool. So have seen the new…” said Kevin before he was interrupted by Ralph.
“Kevin, is the reason you’re talking to me because you want something to distract you from the storm?” said Ralph.
“Of course not, I just want to have a normal conversation with you!” said Kevin.
“At two thirty in the morning?” said Ralph.
“Well what’s wrong with that?” said Kevin.
Ralph stood there for three minutes until went to the nearest window in his room, open it up, and threw his cellphone out the window. He went back got to his bed, and fell back asleep.
“Ralph……Ralph…..Ralph…..” said Kevin hoping to get an answer.
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Hope you like this, Amazee Dayzee.
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Re: Thunder Storm
Yeah I can totally see that being Kevin and Ralph doing that! xD