This is something old having not updated in weeks, nor is it finished, but is also one of my first fictional pieces involving furry charcters. Please let me know what you think:
https://docs.google.com/document/edit?i ... y=CJSb5NUL
A Furry Love Story
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Re: A Furry Love Story
Not bad, my friend. I like it. But wouldn't this topic be better suited for the Roleplaying/Fanfiction forum?
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Re: A Furry Love Story
If it were fan fiction it would be related to Housepets, which it is not.Dr. Prower wrote:Not bad, my friend. I like it. But wouldn't this topic be better suited for the Roleplaying/Fanfiction forum?
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Re: A Furry Love Story
very nice start to what I'm sure will be a very nice story. Good work.
Re: A Furry Love Story
We need a writing forum. We already have one for art, kinda xD
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...Dusty wrote:We need a writing forum. We already have one for art, kinda xD
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Richardson Valley: Venison and Ochen
Brookshire Meadows: Trinket
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Richardson Valley: Venison and Ochen
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Re: A Furry Love Story
I think the intro could use a firming up. The sentences all seem short and that makes it seem a little choppy. Maybe lengthen some or combine some together. Also with using the first person viewpoint I think you should strengthen your character's feelings and thought processes for the reader.
I am drawn by the premise in the exposition of the first chapter, though. I don't know how to watch google docs for updates, but if you post here when you add more I'll definitely check it out. Good luck!
I am drawn by the premise in the exposition of the first chapter, though. I don't know how to watch google docs for updates, but if you post here when you add more I'll definitely check it out. Good luck!
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