Through the Lapses of Time.

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Through the Lapses of Time.

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Neko wrote:Italicized words are a characters thoughts
Bold Words Are used when a character is yelling or a loud sound is heard.
***** a Line of stars will indicate a change in the story, be it a different scene or character
(A/N -text here-) This is an Author's Note, used to explain something to the reader.
“Grape!... Grape! Wake up!” Peanut pushed Grape back and forth as she laid down in her bed.

“What!? What! What do you want?”

“Dont tell me you forgot! How could you forget? Were going to the Colorado. Remember?”

Peanut shook Grapes Bed on the word “Colorado” to Provide emphasis.

“Oh yeah... Hold on let me get out of bed.” Grape moved around on her soft pillow before letting out a large stretch, followed by crawling out of bed.

Once she was out, Peanut started talking franticly.

“Ive been up for like, 2 hours getting ready for the long road trip, I packed my DS, my books, my paper to draw the spot comics, the b-” Peanut was cut off by Grape; reaching out and clamping his snout shut with her hand.


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In the kitchen, Grape was rummaging through the fridge, looking for something to snack on on the way there. She turned to the right to see Peanut struggling
with a giant book-bag full of his stuff. She snickered to herself when he barely fit the giant bag though the door, after getting out some turkey slices and a little bread, she made a sandwich and put it in a Ziploc bag for later, she grabbed her diary, and a pen along with a few other trinkets and headed out to the van.
Mrs. Sandwich greeted Grape with a friendly “Is that all your going to bring?” Grape looked down at her diary and nodded toward her mother.


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About 30 minutes later Peanut was asleep, it was innevitable. They had been driving for 10 minutes and Peanut had finished half of a panel before conking out.

Grape took the time that peanut was asleep to write an entry in her journal.


Dear diary,

Today is the day that were driving to Colorado for a short vacation. They said there were a lot of mountains there, and that most of them had snow on them. So we might be able to play in the snow, or go skiing. Peanut's snoring is as Annoying as ever, I don't think I can handle it anymore. I'm just happy hes asleep so I can get some peace from his constant yammering.

She closed her Diary and looked out the window at the countryside, taking in all the beauty.

Despite sleeping for 12 hours last night, she fell asleep for most of the trip.


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She was abruptly awoken by the sound of the car door opening.

She woke up, and looked over at Peanut, who was still asleep. She smiled and looked out the door at the new hotel That they were going to stay at, it had a grand fountain near the front entrance, marble floors inside and rad-carpeted interior.

She turned to her mom, who had just opened the door to start getting some of the luggage out.

“Is this where were going to stay?”Grape asked.

Mrs. Sandwich looked at Grape with a serious face. “No, this is where were going to stay. Your sleeping outside.”

Grape looked up at Mrs. Sandwich. “B-But i-”

“just kidding, your going to be in there with us.” Mrs. Sandwich Smiled to Grape, who's facial expression showed she didnt like the joke.

“Now wake up Peanut and tell him to help us bring in the luggage.”


Im planning on updating this very soon to get to the first "Arc" I hope you like so far though :/
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I like how everyone has adopted to using my Rubic :P

Nice start, can't wait :)
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@Neko, Hey, if something works, use it!

@Zander, can't wait to see what happens next.
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kutey!!
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Sounds very promising! Gief more :>
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The whole family had finally arrived at the front desk, after some complaining from peanut and some “persuading” from Grape

“What do you mean the pets have to sleep in a different room?” Mr. sandwich argued with the front desk manager

“Im sorry sir, but unless you want to pay $500 dollars for extra pet service in your room then I suggest just renting a pet room.“

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Peanut and Grape took a look around the Hotel, Grape took a liking to the fish in the koi pond in the front of the lobby while peanut went around running into open Elevators, pressing every button, and running out before the doors shut.

Mr. and Mrs. Sandwich finally agreed to rent a separate pet room for Grape and Peanut

They motioned the two to walk over and get there luggage to bring it to there new room

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The four stopped in front of room number 423P, the “P” representing it was a pet room. There parents were in the next room over, 423.

Grape and Peanut walked into there new hotel room, while the Sandwiches walked into there new room.

Grape walked into the room first and took a look around.

“Uhh, peanut. Is there something seriously wrong with this room?”

Peanut left his luggage over by the door and joined Grape staring toward the center of the room.

“Yeah! Where are those little mints they leave on beds?” Peanut started throwing pillows and sheets around looking for the elusive mint.

“No. I mean... there's only one bed.” Grape looked around to see if there was a fold-out bed or something.

“Cool! That means we have to share a bed!” Peanut started wagging his tail when he thought about it.

Grape turned on the small 20in tv, just in time for Mrs. Sandwich to walk in and announce “At 5:00 were going to go to the Hard Rock Café, get ready." She closed the door as she left.

Grape looked at the clock, it read “4:37 Pm”

She turned to Peanut “What do you want to do for 30 minutes?”

lets see if they have a arcade!” Peanut screamed, right in Grapes ear “Ill beat you down there” Peanut said, before running toward the door
“Not if I can help it!” Grape ran right behind Peanut and out the door.

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As they were running down the hall Peanut looked back, running at full speed toward the elvator, when he wasnt looking a maid came out of a recently cleaned room, Peanut didnt see her and smacked strait into her, making her trip, and tipping over the cleaning bucket.
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Ooo, this is becoming all the more interesting.... You teaser, Zander, you! :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen:
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Ok now I'm interested. I wonder does the Title have any significance?
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IceKitsune wrote:Ok now I'm interested. I wonder does the Title have any significance?
NEKO DONT TELL THEM. ITS SUPPOSED TO BE A SECRET D:
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Ok so it does have significance I wonder what it could mean? Now i'm even more interested then before.
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It looks... Awosmomwmwmreme (awesome x awesome)
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Nice start, can't wait :)
I started it!!!! I think...
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IceKitsune wrote:Ok now I'm interested. I wonder does the Title have any significance?
NEKO DONT TELL THEM. ITS SUPPOSED TO BE A SECRET D:
Is everyone using Neko as a reference to write their stories?
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DarkHeartsAndSuch wrote:
Zander wrote:
IceKitsune wrote:Ok now I'm interested. I wonder does the Title have any significance?
NEKO DONT TELL THEM. ITS SUPPOSED TO BE A SECRET D:
Is everyone using Neko as a reference to write their stories?
No, but he helped me think of a name. so i had to tell him what the story is about. (new update soon)
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*walks in*

...what? I don't know what the story is about! <_<

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Peanut knew he was in trouble, he ran as fast as he could toward the elevator, pressing the button to open the door, the door opened just as the maid got back to her feet.

He rushed in and pressed “1” for the first floor.

The doors closed. Grape followed right behind peanut, but wasn't fast enough to reach the elevator Peanut was in before the doors closed.

“Peanut you idiot!” Grape yelled at the closed doors. She looked back and saw the maid staring at her with an angry face.

“Oh no.” She ran down the stairs that were right next to the elevator.

When she got to the bottom she saw Peanut wandering around the Lobby.

“Why arent you at the arcade?” Grape asked, running up to peanut.

“I asked, they don't have one.”

“Aww, thats too bad.”

Just then There parents walked out of a different elevator.

“Oh good, your already down here. C'mon lets go.” Mrs. Sandwich said with a happy tone.

As they were about to walk out to head to the Restaurant, A guy ran up to them and grabbed Grape By the collar.

“Hah! I got you now, you little furball!”

Grape choked as he pulled her back by her collar.

Mr. And Mrs. Sandwich turned around in shock and pulled the mans hand away from grape.

“What is wrong with you?” Mr. Sandwich yelled at the guy.

“Your pets tore through my room, causing all sorts of havoc!”

“Im sorry sir, but I think you have the wrong pets! We havnt been in anyone elses room except our own.” Grape said, politely, even though he had been so rude.

No! I know it was you two, it was you-” He pointed to Peanut “-And you” He pointed to Grape.

“And your friends, those white cats”

“No, I'm certain you have the wrong pets.” Mr. Sandwich re-assured him, certain that Grape and Peanut wouldn't do anything of the sort.

“alright, but I'll be watching you two.” He looked at both of them before walking off the way he came.

“Well that was weird.” Peanut added to the weird happening.


“Well lets head the the restaurant” Mrs. Sandwich said cheerfully to get off the awkward moment that just happened.
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OOOOH I know whats going to happen, well i understand what the guy is talking about. I love stories like this <3 (Lol, no one else with understand what I'm talking about)
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yes yes yes like it like like it more more more!
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Neko wrote:OOOOH I know whats going to happen, well i understand what the guy is talking about. I love stories like this <3 (Lol, no one else with understand what I'm talking about)
(i dont think so :o)

I do too! :D
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you were right, it would be soon...

it's short compared to other stories up here, but they update every few days... not multiple times in one day like you, so...
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Neko wrote:OOOOH I know whats going to happen, well i understand what the guy is talking about. I love stories like this <3 (Lol, no one else with understand what I'm talking about)
(i dont think so :o)

I do too! :D
I somewhat know what will happen, I'm very smart, for an architecht
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I think I have some idea of whats going on here. Not 100% sure but I'm pretty sure I know whats going on.
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The next day.



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“Yeah, these skis seem to fit me well.” Said peanut, looking down at the 2 thin sticks attached to his feet

Grape watched from the corner of the gear rental store, giggling at Peanuts silliness.

“Ok, lets go to the lift” Said Peanut, trying to walk with his skis on.

“you don't walk with them on, silly.” Grape stuck her tongue out at peanut.


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“Whoa! Were getting so high off the ground!” Peanut looked over the edge of the ski lift, about 50 feet down.

“If it scares you then don't look down!” Grape couldnt help but look over the edge too, gripping the metal bars tighter as she did.

They eventually reached the top, in which Peanut jumped off first, followed by Grape.

“Hey lets start on the bunny slope first!” Peanut pointed over to the kiddie section and proceeded to walk over there, skis in hand.

Grape didn't rent skis, she wouldn't have skied anyway, too much snow could get in her fur.

After a few steps following Peanut Grapes vision started to fade out, and back in, then out again, each step.

“Whooaa whats happening?”

She shook her head to try to regain vision.

After taking one more step forward and her vision returned to normal, but she stubbed her toe on something.

She looked down to see what she could have possible stepped on, but when she did, she only saw a watch.

The watch was digital, all black, even the strap, except for the outer ring, which was red.

“Hey peanut! Look what I found!” Grape motioned for Peanut to walk over to her.

“Great! This is exactly what I need!” He proceeded to put on his skis.

“Time me!” Peanut looked down the slope, which seemed very easy.

“Well, I don't know how you do stopwatch on this thing.”

She fiddled around with the watch, until she hit one button that cause weird marking to come up to the screen.

I guess this is it. Grape thought to herself

“Are you ready?” Grape looked back down at the watch

“As ready as I'll ever be!” Peanut took his starting position.

“3....2....1...” Grape counted down. “Go!” She pressed the button a second time at the same time as she said “go”

She looked up at Peanut.

“Peanut? Are you going to go?”
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Oh goody Time Shenanigans! I was right.
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LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!
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IT'S JUST A JUMP TO YOUR LEFT,
AND THEN YOU STEP TO THE RI-I-I-I-I-IGHT!
PUT YOUR HANDS ON YOUR HIPS,
AND BRING YOUR KNEES IN TI-I-IGHT!
BUT IT'S THE PELVIC THRUST,
THAT REALLY DRIVES YOU INSA-A-A-A-A-ANE!
LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!

No really, I like this fanfic! I knew there would be time related stuff!
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ctcmjh wrote:LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!
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IT'S JUST A JUMP TO YOUR LEFT,
AND THEN YOU STEP TO THE RI-I-I-I-I-IGHT!
PUT YOUR HANDS ON YOUR HIPS,
AND BRING YOUR KNEES IN TI-I-IGHT!
BUT IT'S THE PELVIC THRUST,
THAT REALLY DRIVES YOU INSA-A-A-A-A-ANE!
LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!

No really, I like this fanfic! I knew there would be time related stuff!
Oh My God I Love That Movie!!!!
"It's Astounding
Time is Fleeting
Madness, takes it's toll
But listen closely
Not for very much longer
I've got to, keep control
I remember, doing the Time Warp
Drinking, those moments when
The blackness would hit me
And the Void would be calling
LET'S DO THE TIME WARP AGAIN!!!"
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DarkHeartsAndSuch wrote:
ctcmjh wrote:LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!
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IT'S JUST A JUMP TO YOUR LEFT,
AND THEN YOU STEP TO THE RI-I-I-I-I-IGHT!
PUT YOUR HANDS ON YOUR HIPS,
AND BRING YOUR KNEES IN TI-I-IGHT!
BUT IT'S THE PELVIC THRUST,
THAT REALLY DRIVES YOU INSA-A-A-A-A-ANE!
LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!

No really, I like this fanfic! I knew there would be time related stuff!
Oh My God I Love That Movie!!!!
"It's Astounding
Time is Fleeting
Madness, takes it's toll
But listen closely
Not for very much longer
I've got to, keep control
I remember, doing the Time Warp
Drinking, those moments when
The blackness would hit me
And the Void would be calling
LET'S DO THE TIME WARP AGAIN!!!"
What's that from? It seems familiar...
I ship Grape&Peanut and support King&Bailey
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Dr. Prower wrote: What's that from? It seems familiar...
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*claps loudly*

I love it! And you update all day!! I love that too!
DarkHeartsAndSuch wrote:
ctcmjh wrote:LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!
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IT'S JUST A JUMP TO YOUR LEFT,
AND THEN YOU STEP TO THE RI-I-I-I-I-IGHT!
PUT YOUR HANDS ON YOUR HIPS,
AND BRING YOUR KNEES IN TI-I-IGHT!
BUT IT'S THE PELVIC THRUST,
THAT REALLY DRIVES YOU INSA-A-A-A-A-ANE!
LET'S DO THE TIMEWARP AGAIN!

No really, I like this fanfic! I knew there would be time related stuff!
Oh My God I Love That Movie!!!!
"It's Astounding
Time is Fleeting
Madness, takes it's toll
But listen closely
Not for very much longer
I've got to, keep control
I remember, doing the Time Warp
Drinking, those moments when
The blackness would hit me
And the Void would be calling
LET'S DO THE TIME WARP AGAIN!!!"
also on my list of things to love
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I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
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ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
Lol :P Should I not say that I've never seen that movie?
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Neko wrote:
ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
Lol :P Should I not say that I've never seen that movie?
Really? It's a great show to watch with your whole family, including grandparents. You should bring over all of your friends to watch it too.
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ctcmjh wrote:
Neko wrote:
ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
Lol :P Should I not say that I've never seen that movie?
Really? It's a great show to watch with your whole family, including grandparents. You should bring over all of your friends to watch it too.
I've seen it. Personally I didn't think it was all that great, I mean it was ok but maybe it was the hype from everybody else saying it was such a good movie I might have been expecting to much.
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ctcmjh wrote:
Neko wrote:
ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
Lol :P Should I not say that I've never seen that movie?
Really? It's a great show to watch with your whole family, including grandparents. You should bring over all of your friends to watch it too.
Just a warning though... It is rated Arrrg. So maybe no grandparents. Or the entire nieghborhood, or anyone who cares about your reputation.
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ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
your doing it again xD
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DarkHeartsAndSuch wrote: Just a warning though... It is rated Arrrg. So maybe no grandparents. Or the entire nieghborhood, or anyone who cares about your reputation.
He means:
Just a warning though... It is rated Arrrg. So maybe all your grandparents. And the entire nieghborhood, especially anyone who cares about your reputation.

Also, I showed the entire Time Warp and Sweet Transvestite scene to my AP Literature class and got an A+. A guy tripped, threw his papers in the air and said something I cannot repeat in an PG-13 forum as soon as Dr. Frank N. Furter took off his robe.
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ctcmjh wrote:I have successfully changed the topic of this thread from this really good fanfiction, to an appreciatin thread for the Rocky Horror Picture Show.
your doing it again xD
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ctcmjh wrote:
Also, I showed the entire Time Warp and Sweet Transvestite scene to my AP Literature class and got an A+. A guy tripped, threw his papers in the air and said something I cannot repeat in an PG-13 forum as soon as Dr. Frank N. Furter took off his robe.

I saw that and I'm still laughing. What about the "Wise up, Janet Wies" scene. That one wouldn't be school eligible, would it?
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“Peanut? You ok?”

She took a look around. No snow was falling, people were not moving, birds were captured in mid-air.

“Wh- whats going on?” She instantly looked down at the watch. Which was flashing red.

“Oh God what did I do?!” She started franticly pressing buttons, until she hit the right one

Peanut was off. He had a fast start, but didnt get far now that Grape was standing right in front of him.

Oof!” They both yelled as they fell head over heels down the gradual hill. They soon came to a stop.

“What was that for?!” Peanut looked over at Grape, who was laying in the snow aswell.

“Why did you jump in front of me like that?!” Grape didnt know what to say.

“I didnt jump in front of you. You ran right into me!” Grape argued.

“Because you jumped in front of me!” Peanut didnt see how Grape moved so fast, but it didn't really matter right then.

“Peanut listen, You know this watch I found?” Grape showed Peanut the watch again.

“Well, when I press this button,” She pointed to the button “Everything freezes, its like time is paused.”

Peanut thought of the implications of pausing time for a moment...

“That's awesome! Give me that!”

He made a jump for the watch, which Grape was holding in her hand. She pulled out of peanuts grasp.

“Peanut! This is not a toy!” She said sternly. “We need to turn this into the police or so-”

She was cut-off by a deep rumbling sound, coming from underground.

“Gr-ape what did you do?” Peanut looked around, at what seemed to be an earthquake.

“Don't look at me, I didn't touch it!.”

3 white figures rose out of the snow, red eyes gleaming, peering into there souls.

“G-Grape.. i- I dont like this.” Peanut scooted closer to Grape, who was equally terrified.

“Give to us what is of the watch.” all three white figures said in unison, there voices making the earth shake beneath them.

“Wh- Why?” Grape Questioned them.

“Give to us what is of the watch.” all three white figures said in unison again, louder and more stern this time.

“no... NO!” Grape shouted at them. Grabbing hold of Peanuts arm firmly and pressing a button on the watch.

All they could hear was a whirling sound, the sound you would expect to hear as the very fabric of space flew past you at speeds faster then possible, light rays from every direction and time combined to form bright streams of white light, twirling around the two as they tumbled into the abyss of life.

“Grape! Grape! Wake up! I don't know where we are, and I'm scared!.” Grape opened her eyes to see it was dark outside.

Her back was soaked with water as she layed on the concrete floor, she looked around, and saw that they were in a dark ally way.

“It looks like we teleported to the city.” Grape looked at Peanut, whose eyes were glazed over with fear.
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hmnm...deeper into fantasy.
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valerio wrote:hmnm...deeper into fantasy.
Tricky!
Let's see what else you got in store, Z!
A story that will stress your comprehension powers.
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Oooh mysterious, me like! also, creepy guys coming from below! AAAH run for cover :<
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/warning!\ will blow your mind about what happens next /warning!\


“I don't know where we are.... Wait right here while I go out and ask somebody where we are.”
Grape motioned for Peanut to stay put.

She ran out of the allyway onto the sidewalk, it appeared as though it had just rained.

She walked a little bit down the street, taking in the sights and sounds of the bakeries and stores she passed by.

After walking about 4 minutes she looked up ahead of her and saw Peanut, emerging from a side allyway.

He must have followed me in the back path. She thought

She ran up to him, and started “Hey, peanut. I thought I told you to stay back there.” She pointed her thumb over her shoulder, In the way he came.

Peanut just looked at her with a confused look. “What are you talking about? My names not Peanut.”

Grape was taken aback, she looked at his throat, he didn't have a collar.

“W- well then who are you?” She looked curiously at the look-alike of Peanut.

“My names Bud, its nice to meet you.” He reached his hand out to Grape, who proceeded to shake it.

she let go. “My names Grape, do you know where we are?” She quizzed Bud.

“yeah, were in Schaumburg , IL.”

“Is this anywhere near Babylon Gardens? The neighborhood?” Grape looked at Bud, who apparently was thinking.

“Yeah, I think thats in the next town over.” He pointed down the street. “Just keep heading that way and you should end up in the next town, then ask somebody there if they know the directions from then on.”

“Thank you.” Grape told bud,

she then started to walk back the direction she came, but she had to cross the street first.

She looked one way before starting to walk.

LOOK OUT!” Bud shouted to Grape, but it was too late, a car was barreling straight toward her.

Bud ran out into the street and tackled Grape out of the way of the car. They both ended up in a heap on the ground on the opposite side of the Road.


“Oh my! Thank you!” Grape said to Bud, before wrapping her arms around him, they both were laying on the ground.

“Bud, honey buns, I'm back! I found some bread i-” She looked up from her food to see Bud laying with Grape on the ground, Grapes arms wrapped around Bud

“What is this?” She stopped in her tracks staring down at the two.

No! Charlotte its not what you think! i-” He was cut off

Shut up! I don't want to hear any excuses! Its bad enough your cheating on me, but with a cat?!”

She turned around and started walking the opposite way.

“No! noo—oh-oh..” Bud started crying next to Grape.

“I- I'm so sorry i- I didnt know-”

“Its not your fault, Grape.” Bud re-assured her.

He layed down, thinking about what she said earlier.

“And peanut would have been a good name too.”

Grapes eyes widened.
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Awww, poor Bud. He tries to be a hero and loses his girl...
I ship Grape&Peanut and support King&Bailey
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