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I'd used "except" instead of "apart".. But maybe is more correct as is now, I don't speak English SOO good.. :oops:
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I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*

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Tha Housedog wrote:
I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*


If you actually read the comic on my DA page, you would have noticed I've asked for feedback. :P

Also, fix'd.

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Very nice update. I really enjoyed the facial expressions.

That does seem incredibly frustrating, though.

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Good work as always. Maybe only my beloved trasparence... gone forever.

Image Just kiddin'. Is very good the way it is.

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I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*


Corrections are always welcome. We're poor italians, after all.

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Ack! Careful with the 4th wall there, you're banging on it really hard! :lol:

Nice update! He's not so good at small talk, eh? :?

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Ooh, sepia! Backstory/flashback time!

Too bad I don't speak Italian... :? I eagerly await the translation!

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NUUUUUU!! Sick, sick, SICK HUMMINS! They abandoned Johnny!

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:shock: Wow, talk about mood whiplash... :cry: I so did not expect this!

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I warned you Image The whole story isn't like normal Housepets.
Yeah, humor is allowed, but i need some serious moments to create a tricky plot. "Like a broken mirror" is something i've create very quickly and disconnected from the normal story... you'll see when the right time comes.

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I warned you Image The whole story isn't like normal Housepets.
Yeah, humor is allowed, but i need some serious moments to create a tricky plot. "Like a broken mirror" is something i've create very quickly and disconnected from the normal story... you'll see when the right time comes.


Well a serious/sad story is just fine with me! However, try to avoid jumping from humor to drama, or make sure the transition is well planned and won't leave us just going "WTF just happened, how did we get here?". I think that in this case, TvTropes says what I want to say here perfectly:
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I know Image I'll try.
This is my first try as a wannabe writer, after all. I've to practice, hope to get better from time to time.

Don't worry though, sadness isn't a constant Image is something that will happen sometimes.

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Very nice twist! I wasn't expecting such sadness. I can't wait for the little doggy's reaction to this story.

And his parents should be ashamed. They could just as easily have pawned the dog off on some sympathetic individual!


Let me state for the record that I have always been the sympathetic individual, and never the bad guy...

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Ok, I've to reassure you: H1X is similar to a manga, but there aren't extremes like our famous and well known "School Days" Image I'm not a perv monster, after all.

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Updated english version. Sorry for the huge delay.

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xD I was wondering the same thing. :lol:
Nice update, Stu!

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Pretty good translation. There were a few mistakes but nothing major.

1st panel- It should be met, not meet. It is past tense.

3rd panel- So it seems, but I think that it is better than him suffering would flow better the suffer anymore was a bit awkward.

7th panel- If you drop the until now, the sentence would make a little more sense in English.

Last panel- I knew I should have stopped that question. Again, just a tense mistake. Easy to make.

None of these matter much. Your translation is perfectly fine the way it is. Really. It is pretty good.

I think I just made a fool of myself. *facepalms*

The comic itself was awesome! I love your facial expressions! They are just so great! And yes, that question popped up in my head.

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copper wrote:
Pretty good translation. There were a few mistakes but nothing major.

1st panel- It should be me, not meet. It is past tense.

3rd panel- So it seems, but I think that it is better than him suffering would flow better the suffer anymore was a bit awkward.

7th panel- If you drop the until now, the sentence would make a little more sense in English.

Last panel- I knew I should have stopped that question. Again, just a tense mistake. Easy to make.

None of these matter much. Your translation is perfectly fine the way it is. Really. It is pretty good.

I think I just made a fool of myself. *facepalms*

The comic itself was awesome! I love your facial expressions! They are just so great! And yes, that question popped up in my head.


Thanks for the hints ;) i'll try to fix it as soon as I can.

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English version updated xD

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Be mindful of the rating PG-13 is the edge here.


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Be mindful of the rating PG-13 is the edge here.

Know that... i'll try to.

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Ok, this time, I REALLY need your help Image I know this one is full of errors, so please, tell me and I'll fix them.
Also, I've used sumopaint to do this quickly, so i promise i'll make it better with the right programs :? Here we go:

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Uhm, I can't find so many errors, except for "two weeks" that is supposed to be "one week" and the "one.. maybe two bottles" that doesn't mean "un paio di bottiglie".. But maybe there are more errors and I can't see :mrgreen:

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OK, errors ahoy! :D

We never say "What has happened?" for something that just occurred. It's simply "What happened?"
"I have broke" is incorrect. It must be either "I have broken" or "I broke". Though as with the above error, we use "I broke" for recent occurrences.
It's spelled "vodka" not "wodka"
If you expect someone to be doing something currently you ask "Aren't you supposed to be doing XYZ", so it's "to be placing" (though Google translates "mettere a posto" as "straightening").
We say "boxes of diapers", but then we say "diaper boxes". This is because we don't make our adjectives agree with our nouns.
"Too bad for this good stuff to be wasted" has no subject or verb. "It's too bad..." is grammatically correct, although, this sentence is still not how we would say it.
If you're going to say "I got it" (his plan in this case), it is only as an exclamation "I got it!". For the non-exclamatory version we say "I get it"
In the sentence "That dumb.", since dumb is not a noun it sounds like there is a "..." at the end. If this is your intention that's fine, but actually having the ellipsis is handy to let us know ("That dumb...")
If "ich" is him hiccuping, we use "hic"
It should be "people dying", as they are currently doing so. (If you want it to fit better, shrink the last sentence to "What a waste!" which actually sounds better. Otherwise we would say "Look at the waste here!" which still is... meh)

WALL OF TEXT :lol:
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I think Obbl pretty much covered everything, but I don't know. The edited version will tell.

Great update Stu! I can't wait for the next update. But yeah, it took a while for that last balloon to register. This is a good comic.

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'S good! My only comment is that Spike thinks its vodka, yet he's so eager to lap it up... :?

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Thanks for the help, i really appreciate it :D I hope this one's better.
Here it is, better in graphics and translation:
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That'll do it Stu. Just one little thing, though. It is nothing big, but it sounds a lot better in english to say two weeks later, not two weeks after. It is a little thing, and it doesn't really matter at all.

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ps: I don't even noticed that i wrote "wodka"


In Soviet Russia, word spells you!!! :lol:

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That'll do it Stu. Just one little thing, though. It is nothing big, but it sounds a lot better in english to say two weeks later, not two weeks after. It is a little thing, and it doesn't really matter at all.

But again, great update.


Ugh, you don't mind if i'll pass this time, right? Image I really have a looooong day in front of me. And tomorrow strip, too Image

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ps: I don't even noticed that i wrote "wodka"


In Soviet Russia, word spells you!!! :lol:


mmh, you're right, after all Image

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Hopefully, this one's better than last. Now I had more time to translate...

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Hrrmmm...
Shall I say:...
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This shop's supposed to lay in the middle of a DESERT. Would anyone care if it's serious or not?? :lol:

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