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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Early attempts at a spin-off comic (which so far is unnamed)
Notice: The project is on the back-burner due to me having little time in between me trying to find a new job, amongst other things. I'll do what I can when I can, though.What started with a simple sketch evolved into something I couldn't have imagined when I first started. Things have been a little less than smooth in my life, but I'm trying my best to keep at this project! As usual, be prepared to claw your eyes out, because I don't claim to be a great artist. I'm only just learning, which is why I will always be ready to take any comments or criticism you have to offer. Please be constructive with your criticism, but make it good, hard criticism. If you don't point out my mistakes and flaws, how will I ever get better? Feel free to start contributing character / plot ideas. Due to the overwhelming amount of shenanigans going on in my life at the moment, including but not limited to searching for a new job and moving into a new house, I have little attention to spread around these days (I haven't played a video game in a while @_@). Any ideas you'd like to throw at me for this project, I'll gladly look into, and will most likely incorporate into the project somehow!
Right now, Buddy needs to meet some new friends! If anyone has any character ideas, read this then HAVE AT IT! =)------ Introduction: Linking the CannonArc 1: Man's Best FriendPage 1Page 2Page 3Page 4Page 5Page 6Page 7Page 8Arc 2: The Journey of a Thousand Miles... Page 1: Planned Page 2:
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:21 pm |
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KizerZin
Joined: Mon Nov 08, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 466
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 Re: A first sketch
very close... closer then most...
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:27 pm |
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Penwrite
Joined: Tue Apr 27, 2010 11:03 am Posts: 3407 Location: Canterlot
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 Re: A first sketch
Hehe, cold. I really like this, and would totally read it if Rick gave ya permission to make it. It's a bit hard to come up with much in the way of helpful criticism, since I can't see how well you'd do the colors. For the most part, all I can suggest is work on making your lines less jagged.
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:44 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Thanks for the tip! I'll be sure to smooth them out if I end up lining it, and I'll get to the colors right after that. 
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:47 pm |
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copper
Puppy Wrangler
Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 6362 Location: Florida
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 Re: A first sketch
It looks really good if you ask me! Then again, I'm no artist, so my opinion doesn't amount to much in this case.
My only suggestion would be to work on the cats. Grape looks kinda doggy to me. Try to find the differences in how the cats and dogs are drawn, maybe? I don't know....
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:49 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
No, I totally agree with you, Copper. I drew Peanut in like 2 minutes, but then struggled with Grape for 15, eventually giving up and making her as catlike as I could before moving on.
I've drawn various dog drawings before, but like 2 cats. ^^;
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:53 pm |
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Penwrite
Joined: Tue Apr 27, 2010 11:03 am Posts: 3407 Location: Canterlot
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 Re: A first sketch
Well, Stephen King always says that if you want to be a great writer, you have to write a lot. So in other words, practice makes perfect! Hang in there, Kirby ma boy! Also, if you ever need any ideas for stories or jokes, I'm always willing to lend a hand. 
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:56 pm |
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copper
Puppy Wrangler
Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 6362 Location: Florida
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 Re: A first sketch
OOH!OOH! Add me to the list. I have a drunken fairy who screams ideas into my ear all the time! I would love to get her off my back for a while.
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:58 pm |
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Tha Housefox
Ms. Sunshine
Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 5:48 pm Posts: 5857 Location: The nth plane
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 Re: A first sketch
And I'll always be here to give some helpful criticism! 
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 11:11 pm |
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valerio
Game Master
Joined: Mon May 25, 2009 6:53 am Posts: 18896 Location: Italy
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 Re: A first sketch
I concur with the above statements, Kirby! I too, being not an artist, can't have a real 'technical' opinion, but this is AWESOME. If you finish it, I promise I'll translate it and put it into my thread Finish it, pleeeeeeease? *puppy eyes*
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 11:16 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Thanks guys, I'll keep that in mind if I get this whole thing going. =)
I have a few ideas myself, but I'm bound to run out at some point. I usually have a really good one for here and a good one for there, but then nothing in between or after XD
Edit: I'll see what I can do, Valerio =)
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 11:20 pm |
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Penwrite
Joined: Tue Apr 27, 2010 11:03 am Posts: 3407 Location: Canterlot
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 Re: A first sketch
Indeed, for you can possibly defy the puppy eyes of Valerio!
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 11:26 pm |
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Kyderra
Joined: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:31 am Posts: 2724 Images: 6 Location: The Netherlands
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 Re: A first sketch
I like it , i don't really have that much feedback at this time 
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 12:39 am |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Thank you, Kyderra. =) Valerio, I'm sorry. I tried, I really did, but it is now rounding 3am and I only got half of the line art done. I can't stay up any later or else I will be dead at work tomorrow, but I promise I'll finish it later. =) I've edited the first post to link to what I've done so far for the line art. I'll also link to it here. Also, Copper - I took your advice into consideration and went through some of Rick's work to study Grape a bit more, and I ended up making a few modifications (mostly to the ears). Let me know what you think now. ^^ Peace out for now, Housepets fans. =) ... *faceplants pillow and is out*
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 6:07 am |
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valerio
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Joined: Mon May 25, 2009 6:53 am Posts: 18896 Location: Italy
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Kirby Wrote:
Thank you, Kyderra. =) Valerio, I'm sorry. I tried, I really did, but it is now rounding 3am and I only got half of the line art done. I can't stay up any later or else I will be dead at work tomorrow, but I promise I'll finish it later. =) I've edited the first post to link to what I've done so far for the line art. I'll also link to it here. Also, Copper - I took your advice into consideration and went through some of Rick's work to study Grape a bit more, and I ended up making a few modifications (mostly to the ears). Let me know what you think now. ^^ Peace out for now, Housepets fans. =) ... *faceplants pillow and is out*
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Heh, Rome wasn't built in one day. Have a good night's sleep, take your time. I'm enjoying it so far, so where's the prob? 
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 7:52 am |
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Tha Housefox
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Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 5:48 pm Posts: 5857 Location: The nth plane
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 Re: A first sketch
Grape...kind of looks like a Chihuahua... DONT KILL ME!
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 8:55 am |
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Rendak
Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 8:42 pm Posts: 1486
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 Re: A first sketch
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 9:05 am |
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Barkeron
Joined: Tue Jan 05, 2010 12:01 pm Posts: 870
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 Re: A first sketch
Well Kirby, doesn't look that bad to me. Even though Grape's ears are a bit longer..
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 9:27 am |
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Rendak
Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 8:42 pm Posts: 1486
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 Re: A first sketch
>< FFFF I feel very stupid right now....Disregard whatever I said.....I shouldn't have tried posting critique when I was tired and 4:00 in th' morning.... *smacks self  *
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 9:39 am |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
I tried to evade the profanity filter. It was funny. XD Yeah, that's the same thing I keep thinking too - "Grape looks like Fox, darnit". Ears too long, huh? Let's see if I can't fix that. Better than trying to draw at 3 ._. ==== Okay, I have made further changes to Grape, namely shortening her earns and 'snout'. Let me know if this helps cut back on the Fox/Chihuahua factor XD
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 2:24 pm |
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copper
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Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 6362 Location: Florida
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 Re: A first sketch
It looks a lot better, but something is still off about Grape. I just can't seem to put my finger on it, though. She looks really good! I think whatever is still off about her will iron itself out as you draw cats more.
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 4:10 pm |
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Tha Housefox
Ms. Sunshine
Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 5:48 pm Posts: 5857 Location: The nth plane
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 Re: A first sketch
I definitely see an improvement...Grape now looks like Grape. Good job! 
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 4:12 pm |
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Penwrite
Joined: Tue Apr 27, 2010 11:03 am Posts: 3407 Location: Canterlot
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 Re: A first sketch
Don't worry gang, we still haven't seen them in color yet! I have full faith in this. *nods*
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 5:13 pm |
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copper
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Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 6362 Location: Florida
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 Re: A first sketch
You should try a guest strip! Your art is certainly good enough to be seriously considered.
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 5:16 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Yeah, I'll get it eventually. After all, the whole purpose of this little project is for me to learn to draw this kind of style, so I'll have to work towards it! ^^ Thanks! =D I'll be home in a couple of hours, and then I'll get to finishing up and coloring! =) That's quite the compliment! Means a lot to me, thanks ^^
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 6:58 pm |
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Karl
Joined: Sun Sep 12, 2010 7:27 pm Posts: 1664 Location: Singing Fortepiano
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 Re: A first sketch
Hmm... I think their tags are too small. You should draw them bigger. Wait, in Canada are iglos? 
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 7:29 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Nice catch, Karlos. I'll be sure to make the tags a bit bigger. And no, there aren't igloos or dogsleds in Canada, nor do we say "aboot" or "eh". Not for the last seventy years, at least... but many Americans still think we do! XD === I'm home now, an hour late and feeling the beginnings of a flu creeping up on me, so I'm going to try and get this done before I'm bed-ridden. ><
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 10:15 pm |
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Joined: Fri Oct 31, 2008 5:42 pm Posts: 8624 Images: 0
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 10:42 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
And don't get me started about "them durn 'coons" either, eh! XD Updated tag sizes, fixed Grape in the second panel, and added snow to panel 3. =)
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Wed Dec 15, 2010 11:20 pm |
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Teh Brawler
Joined: Fri Aug 14, 2009 1:26 pm Posts: 5133 Images: 2 Location: Someplace with Internet access
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 Re: A first sketch
You know, you could submit the finished product as a guest strip. 
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 12:00 am |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
You never know, maybe I will. =) Also: I'm finished the main drawing. On to coloring...! Edit: Okay, it went a lot quicker than planned. The finished result is ready for your critique, everyone. =)
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 3:54 am |
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Kyderra
Joined: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:31 am Posts: 2724 Images: 6 Location: The Netherlands
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 Re: A first sketch
*Points at Peanut's ears* brown ears 
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 7:03 am |
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valerio
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Joined: Mon May 25, 2009 6:53 am Posts: 18896 Location: Italy
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loved it! Also, bam! Translated in 'Italian translations' thread. 
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 8:26 am |
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Tha Housefox
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Joined: Wed Sep 29, 2010 5:48 pm Posts: 5857 Location: The nth plane
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 Re: A first sketch
Guest strip! 
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 9:38 am |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Re: A first sketch
Urk! I knew I had made a mistake somewhere, but I was like "It's 3 o'clock in the morning photoshop, you win ><". I DUN GOOF'D. Incidentally, fixed in 7 seconds. =) Cool ^^ I updated it to fix his off-colored ears, if you want to apply that update ^^; Thanks, by the way =D Okay, okay! XD
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 12:54 pm |
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copper
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Joined: Tue Sep 28, 2010 8:18 pm Posts: 6362 Location: Florida
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 Re: A first sketch
Your finished product exceeds all expectations. You are to send in a guest strip upon completion of said comic. If not, we will be forced to apply the worst punishment possible. PMs
Just kidding. I really think this is a great drawing/ comic. You are very close to Housepets style. What more can I say?
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Thu Dec 16, 2010 9:16 pm |
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Kirby
Joined: Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:13 am Posts: 58 Location: Canada, eh?
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 Another sketch!
Okay, this one was a bit harder to do, because a) I have never really put an honest attempt into a background before (so it sucks) and b) I really didn't have anything to reference for this character. Definitely doesn't look as good as the first sketch I did, but maybe you all can help me improve with some advice/critique. Comic SketchAlso C) I have never tried drawing ANYTHING from behind before. Woe is me. Also also, I know the hands/arms are terrible, I started rushing as I have to sprint for the bus to work now. Later!
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Fri Dec 17, 2010 4:47 pm |
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Penwrite
Joined: Tue Apr 27, 2010 11:03 am Posts: 3407 Location: Canterlot
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 Re: A first sketch
Kinda looks like Bino to me. However, I don't think you give yourself enough credit. The panel structure is great, drawing the viewer in and getting them to wonder what's up and what the character is waiting for, all without a single line of dialog. I like.
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Fri Dec 17, 2010 5:46 pm |
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Teh Brawler
Joined: Fri Aug 14, 2009 1:26 pm Posts: 5133 Images: 2 Location: Someplace with Internet access
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AUGH MY BLEEDING RETINAS
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Fri Dec 17, 2010 5:50 pm |
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It's so hard to discern facetiousness on the Internet. That's not nice.
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