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despite it blatantly grapewell, it's beautiful. Love it! Hope it'll get posted here as well!
Thank you for advertising this, Sinder. :D
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It's okay. It has the ability to become great, but for now it's okay to pretty good. That's my two cents anyway.
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I like the first-person angle, most fanfics aren't written like that.
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As long as it has elements of Grapenut, I'm okay with it. X3
Heh. Look at that... I started an actual Housepets! fan-fic.
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Someone has a strong grasp on writing skill. The composition of that was amazing.
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I lie it ad all, but t i rittled withslight gramtital errors, but goo wrk noe the lees
I was going to make a joke but then I did.
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hey cool, twiggy's helping out with it
I was going to make a joke but then I did.
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Still totally A-W-E-S-O-M-E!
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This just got good.
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New chapter is up. :mrgreen:

...and now, read this
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Oooohhh! Good one! I was surprised to see me cameo in this one, though.

They said copper instead of copter!

Grape is one tough cookie.
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The Author wrote:I sprung to my feet and paint shot through my leg.
Despite what it's supposed to mean, this made my day. ^^
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Nice. What is up with king, though? That was just weird.
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Revenge on love? I'm failing to see the revenge. Good entry though
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Latest Chapter from OrphiusOlyandra's Fanfic is up! X3
Language warning...not PG.
Chapter 6: http://my.deviantart.com/messages/#/d35nlwe
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Awesome update! I can't wait to see where King isgoing with this. There is just one thing that is bugging me, though: What is the writer talking about when he has King saying that Peanut is Tarot's avatar? I thought that Tarot was the avatar for the Spirit Dragon. And since when is Tarot Peanut's ex-girlfriend!?
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[quote="lightwolf21"]Latest Chapter from OrphiusOlyandra's Fanfic is up! X3

Chapter 7: http://my.deviantart.com/messages/#/d35zl67
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lightwolf21 wrote:Latest Chapter from OrphiusOlyandra's Fanfic is up! X3
Chapter 7.5: http://my.deviantart.com/messages/#/d366lmm
Heh. Look at that... I started an actual Housepets! fan-fic.
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What is with all the fat comments about Peanut?

Holy bageeze, this is grapenutty! :lol:
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copper wrote:Holy bageeze, this is grapenutty! :lol:
[Teal'c] Indeed... [/Teal'c]

But don't you just love it? ;)
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The Broken Fox wrote:
copper wrote:Holy bageeze, this is grapenutty! :lol:
[Teal'c] Indeed... [/Teal'c]

But don't you just love it? ;)
:lol:
Nice Stargate SG-1 refurence! *fist-bump*
But it being Grapenutty TO DA MAX is what's going to make me read it again. :D
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Tha Housedog wrote:*fist-bump*
*asplode*

:P
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The Broken Fox wrote:
Tha Housedog wrote:*fist-bump*
*asplode*

:P
NO! BAD DOGGIES! I ship king of hearts, but grapenut is always fun to read.
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copper wrote:
The Broken Fox wrote:
Tha Housedog wrote:*fist-bump*
*asplode*

:P
NO! BAD DOGGIES! I ship king of hearts, but grapenut is always fun to read.
Wait, what did we do?! :shock:

Also King of Hearts and Grapenut can happily coexist, can't they?
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since it appears I'm the only one noticing update, here it goes
Chapter 8 - http://orphiusolyandra.deviantart.com/#/d36o8fb
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Well. Peanut sure did run the gambit of possible emotional reactions, didn't he?
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"I watch ponies now! Ponies are cool!"

Darien Shephard - SP - S-4 P-9 E-3 C-8 I-10 A-2 L-6
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My only problem is that he said the picture was of Sabrina and Bino, instead of Sabrina and Fido. I doubt Bino would enjoy being fingered as a cat lover! :lol:
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Heh. Look at that... I started an actual Housepets! fan-fic.
https://www.housepetscomic.com/forums/v ... 70#p131370
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My main problem with this chapter is that it looks like a dream sequence of sort.
1) this timeskip is useless. There could've been enough drama in a week's absence and give the other characters the time to interact in a most proper way
2) it's poorly managed: all of a sudden, everyone's reacting like 'oh, found a trace on Peanut we've been missing from one year? Yes dear Grape, since I don't have anyone else to loose, please get lost soon in NY with a PETA guy'
3) I'm still not getting King.
4) It's not conveying any emotions, while the previous chapters made for stronger empathic reactions. This chapte is...like lukewarm water.

So, it's meh!
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Yeah, I must agree with Valerio, it's like a completely different story now. And I almost didn't get that there was a skip at first.
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Heh. Look at that... I started an actual Housepets! fan-fic.
https://www.housepetscomic.com/forums/v ... 70#p131370
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A girl's night? That sounds like fun.

I really missed a few updates. This fic is pretty good.
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Hmm, need to take pointers from this guy.
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I've actually really enjoyed this fic! Girl's night sounds like fun, and I hope King doesn't get in too much trouble... he's too awesome!
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copper wrote:I really missed a few updates. This fic is pretty good.
Well it certainly was in the beginning, but ever since chapter 10 I've been having mixed feelings. It was such a big turn in mood and style that I still didn't recover. Since then events seem a little bit rushed too. And the author has also completely 'borrowed' the whole Res scene and even hung a lampshade on it. I dunno. I'll see where it's going, but I'm no longer so enthusiastic.
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