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Hlaoroo
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Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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 Corrupt a Verse
Here's a fun little game which will put your wits and writing skills to the test. The user before you will choose a verse and post it here. Your job is then to corrupt it - to make it funny, silly or just plain random. Please don't just copy precorrupted nursery rhymes though - it's much more fun to make your own. Plus that would be plagiarism. When choosing a verse to post, you can use anything you like, from nursery rhymes to Shakespeare to broadway musicals to Justin Beiber lyrics as long as it's clean. Please keep it to a maximum of 8 lines though, and remember to post where it's from if it's not obvious from the text. Once you've corrupted a verse, you get to choose the verse for the next user. For example, if the verse was the nursery rhyme Michael Finnigan: There once was a man named Michael Finnigan He grew whiskers on his chinnigin He grew them out but the wind blew them in again Poor old Michael Finnigan, begin again!It could be changed to: There once was a man named Michael Finnigan He grew whiskers on his chinnigin The barber shaved them off so he tried to stick them in again Silly old Michael's got a bare chin again.Here's the first verse for corruption. It's from Shakespeare's "MacBeth": Double, double toil and trouble; Fire burn, and caldron bubble. Fillet of a fenny snake, In the caldron boil and bake; Eye of newt, and toe of frog, Wool of bat, and tongue of dogShow me what you can do! 
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Wed May 22, 2013 9:03 am |
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VEB152
Joined: Mon Feb 18, 2013 4:37 pm Posts: 249 Location: Land of vowels with dashes and consonants with commas
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
Okay, I just want to ask a question before attempting - can the re-make of a verse just keep the rhyming words at their places, and change everything else, or we have to keep most of the lines untouched/changed just slightly as well?
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Fri May 24, 2013 12:04 pm |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
You can change as much or as little as you like, as long as it is still possible to recognise the source material in some way, shape or form.
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Fri May 24, 2013 9:15 pm |
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GeckoZY
Joined: Wed Mar 06, 2013 11:39 am Posts: 517 Location: 16 Dimensions, 13th Hyperplane No. 47.54,3674.06,6378.13; Randomly travelling in between Hyperplanes
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An attempt? XD
Rumble, rumble toilet trouble; Bum is burnin', shouldn't gamble. Fillet of a spicy steak, In the caldron boil then bake; I made a few, served with nog, Spoiled by months, same as the hog.
Spaceman by The Killers
It started with a low light Next thing I knew they ripped me from my bed And then they took my blood type It left a strange impression in my head You know that I was hoping That I could leave this star-crossed world behind But when they cut me open I guess that changed my mind
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Sat May 25, 2013 1:18 am |
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Nyaliva
Joined: Sat Feb 11, 2012 1:18 am Posts: 437 Location: Australia
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
I'll throw my literary hat into the ring...
It started with a low hum Next thing I knew they pulled up next to me And then they took my spiced rum It left a bad smell on my breath you see You know that I was hoping That I could go to sleep and no more yelp But when they saw me moping I guess they had to help
The first verse of Edgar Allan Poe’s “The Conqueror Worm”
LO! ‘t is a gala night Within the lonesome latter years! An angel throng, bewinged, bedight In veils, and drowned in tears, Sit in a theatre, to see A play of hopes and fears, While the orchestra breathes fitfully The music of the spheres.
PS: This was an awesome idea! :3
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Sun May 26, 2013 5:46 am |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
Lo! 'T is a great big fight The gathered crowd claps, gasps and cheers An angel strong steps in the light And waves up to his peers Then turns towards the judges To allay all their fears "Don't worry, I'll let the other guy live If he'll do that for me!"
I know, I know, those last two lines are pretty terrible
La Belle Dame Sans Merci by John Keats.
O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, Alone and palely loitering? The sedge has withered from the lake, And no birds sing.
O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, So haggard and so woe-begone? The squirrel’s granary is full, And the harvest’s done.
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Sun May 26, 2013 7:22 am |
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Argent
Joined: Wed Jan 06, 2010 7:34 pm Posts: 5066 Location: Noonkkot <32,64,51>
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La Belle Game Sans Cable by Argent Stonecutter.
O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, Upon the couch a-loitering? The net has failed, the TV blank, And no track streams.
O what can ail thee, knight-at-arms, So lonely and so bored? The shelves of videos are full, Of flicks already viewed.
Perhaps this is obscure, but it's one I can recall off the top of my head... probably too old for most people here to remember what it felt like when this was new:
Hope Eyrie by Leslie FIsh
Worlds grow cold, and stars grow old And death we never can doubt Times cold wind blowing down the past Reminds us that all flesh is grass And history's lamps blow out...
But the Eagle has landed Tell your children when Time won't blow us down to dust again!
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Sun May 26, 2013 11:20 am |
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Welsh Halfwit
Joined: Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:09 am Posts: 9121 Location: Wales, a luverrly land with noisy neighbours.
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Did this in University one week. The challenge was to write a complete new poem that was the same style as Seamus Heaney's ' Graubelle ManThis is what I came up with, using an old mouse soldier from my own stories as 'inspiration' THE SOLDIER Sky tall and ramrod straight in tired uniform; he stands on the blood of his enemies and seems there to wait for action to answer his call. A flex of a heavy neck, burnt white in withering sun, rotates his tired head. He puts one foot forward And tenses as if to run. The waiting it seems is over. The race for life has begun. The silent sirens sound noisy within his head, his face a mask of pain as leaden foot strikes hard ground that belonged once to lost family. Their cans and the chutneys broken open with their stale contents free under his black laced boots. Should the cries of ‘halt’ be by his sharp ears ignored? Should the lies of ‘surrender’ be by his dark eyes endured? The stark mass of matted and reddened hair is taken at odds with his bearing as those led follow. The images on the video bear scant match for the man himself. A breath-driven warrior drawn from hell itself; red-lit in green spattered armour, standing aloft over victory’s foul price. The rotten and mouldy; those who paid the ferryman’s cost. He wonders if the truth shall be told to dead men’s family. The victims hidden by long miles wounded by their loves’ bravery. Those who died and lived shall remember the craft with their killer and victim sorely lost, gone and passed from his realm. Now he racks a sigh and judders softly, and falls in the breeze.
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Sun May 26, 2013 12:02 pm |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
Not bad, Welsh, not bad at all.
@Argent: Food grows old and bread grows mould And still we don't throw it out Though its use-by date is long past This penicillin is world class It will work without a doubt.
But our mother has landed Sees our fridge and then She is now cleaning our fridge again
The next verse is from Westlife's "The Rose"
It's the heart, afraid of breaking That never learns to dance It's the dream, afraid of waking That never takes the chance
It's the one who won't be taken Who cannot seem to give And the soul, afraid of dying That never learns to live
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Wed May 29, 2013 9:58 am |
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Welsh Halfwit
Joined: Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:09 am Posts: 9121 Location: Wales, a luverrly land with noisy neighbours.
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
I had a silly poem five minutes. I hope Karishad doesn't mind...
I only look cool, I always look rad I gotta play the fool 'cause I'm Karishad!
Can't find no tux; gotta get one fast but I'm outta lux, the last one is past
Gotta think quick, take it to the pad. Gonna be slick, 'cause I'm Karishad!
Got a tin of paint and daub it on I'm gonna look quaint It's brain over brawn!
My brain is fast my humor is no fad, my way is gonna last 'CAUSE I'M KARISHAD!
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Wed May 29, 2013 10:32 am |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
Teehee I love that poem! To reiterate my last post and get things back on track:
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Fri May 31, 2013 10:18 am |
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Nyaliva
Joined: Sat Feb 11, 2012 1:18 am Posts: 437 Location: Australia
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 Re: Corrupt a Verse
It's the bird, afraid of jumping That never learns to fly It's the hair, afraid of clumping That always must be dry
It's the thing I need to borrow That no-one here does keep And the tears, brought forth by sorrow That never make a peep...I honestly don't know the tone I was trying to set with that... Anyways, another Poe for you to try. Don't worry, mine won't all be from him!  The last verse of Edgar Allan Poe's "The Haunted Palace" And travellers, now, within that valley, Through the red-litten windows see Vast forms, that move fantastically To a discordant melody, While, like a ghastly rapid river, Through the pale door A hideous throng rush out forever And laugh-but smile no more.
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Sat Jun 01, 2013 10:38 am |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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And diners now, with in that diner Under dim, flickering lights see Greasy waiters move sluggishly While munching on pate of liver, While 'cross the floor A hideous song plays on forever. "Stop, please! Enough! No more!"
"Skyfall" sung by Adele for the theme of the James Bond movie of the same name.
Let the sky fall When it crumbles We will stand tall Face it all together
Let the sky fall When it crumbles We will stand tall Face it all together at Skyfall
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Tue Jun 11, 2013 8:10 am |
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Nyaliva
Joined: Sat Feb 11, 2012 1:18 am Posts: 437 Location: Australia
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I love that song! Probably my favourite Bond opening.
From the sky fall Apple crumbles A dessert squall What the hall is this now?!
People lay sprawled As the kids bawl Hard like baseballs People fall from the apple crumbles.
The second verse of "Shimmer" by the band Fuel:
She dreams a champagne dream Strawberry surprise, pink linen on white paper Lavender and cream Fields of butterflies, reality escapes her She says that love is for fools who fall behind And I'm somewhere between I never really know a killer from a saviour 'Til I break at the bend.
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Sun Jun 16, 2013 2:34 am |
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Hlaoroo
FROSTWOOD FOREVER!
Joined: Wed Mar 27, 2013 5:09 am Posts: 12504 Location: Down under Down Under
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She dreams a chomping dream Strawberry surprise and pink cupcakes with sweet icing Hot chocolate and cream Streams of butterscotch, food surrounds her And in this fantastic world within her mind She eats everything she's seen And in dreaming of all this very strange behaviour She's eaten her bookend.
This one's pretty obvious.
Should old acquaintance be forgot, And never brought to mind ? Should old acquaintance be forgot, And old lang syne ?
For auld lang syne, my dear, For auld lang syne, We'll take a cup of kindness yet, For auld lang syne.
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