The only comment I've gotten on mine is yours. So don't feel bad.
EDIT: Intresting, the whole thing about plebs, is that just slang for a peasant or a poor person?
Fri Jul 09, 2010 10:42 pm
zeekgenateer
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Re: Yet another Original Fiction attempt
The story is a bit confusing, plus there isn't much in the way of a character introduction for the professor. It's an interesting premise, though the gladiatorial thing at the start was... well it was very vague and without a lot of description it sounded a lot like pokemon or something. Not to say that's a bad thing, but it's not something I'm a big fan of.
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Intresting, the whole thing about plebs, is that just slang for a peasant or a poor person?
The common, non-privileged people, yes.
zeekgenateer wrote:
It's an interesting premise, though the gladiatorial thing at the start was... well it was very vague and without a lot of description it sounded a lot like pokemon or something.
Yeah, in hindsight I should have fleshed that part a little bit more out, since it's, err, basically the story's pivot.
And yes, the allusions are intentional. :3
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