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So yeah, jumping on the bandwagon, huh?

Maybe I can get somebody interested in my Sci-Fi(sorta)/Horror(kinda) piece.

Here's Part I. (WARNING: Definitely not PG, contains strong language, you have been warned.)

Thoughts?

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Thu Jul 08, 2010 9:29 pm
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Is it really that bad? ;_;

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Fri Jul 09, 2010 9:16 pm
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Liam wrote:
Is it really that bad? ;_;


The only comment I've gotten on mine is yours. So don't feel bad.


EDIT: Intresting, the whole thing about plebs, is that just slang for a peasant or a poor person?


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The story is a bit confusing, plus there isn't much in the way of a character introduction for the professor. It's an interesting premise, though the gladiatorial thing at the start was... well it was very vague and without a lot of description it sounded a lot like pokemon or something. Not to say that's a bad thing, but it's not something I'm a big fan of.

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Dusty wrote:
Intresting, the whole thing about plebs, is that just slang for a peasant or a poor person?

The common, non-privileged people, yes.

zeekgenateer wrote:
It's an interesting premise, though the gladiatorial thing at the start was... well it was very vague and without a lot of description it sounded a lot like pokemon or something.

Yeah, in hindsight I should have fleshed that part a little bit more out, since it's, err, basically the story's pivot. :oops:

And yes, the allusions are intentional. :3

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