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A Furry Love Story
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Author:  Anthroguy101 [ Wed Jul 07, 2010 5:04 pm ]
Post subject:  A Furry Love Story

This is something old having not updated in weeks, nor is it finished, but is also one of my first fictional pieces involving furry charcters. Please let me know what you think:
https://docs.google.com/document/edit?i ... y=CJSb5NUL

Author:  Dr. Prower [ Thu Jul 08, 2010 10:37 am ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

Not bad, my friend. I like it. But wouldn't this topic be better suited for the Roleplaying/Fanfiction forum?

*brick'd for backseat modding*

Author:  Anthroguy101 [ Thu Jul 08, 2010 5:27 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

Dr. Prower Wrote:
Not bad, my friend. I like it. But wouldn't this topic be better suited for the Roleplaying/Fanfiction forum?

*brick'd for backseat modding*

If it were fan fiction it would be related to Housepets, which it is not.

Author:  Dr. Prower [ Fri Jul 09, 2010 11:04 am ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

...um...

*bricks self*

Author:  Adzo [ Fri Jul 09, 2010 3:05 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

very nice start to what I'm sure will be a very nice story. Good work.

Author:  Dusty [ Fri Jul 09, 2010 5:01 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

We need a writing forum. We already have one for art, kinda xD

Author:  Buckdida [ Fri Jul 09, 2010 6:31 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

Dusty Wrote:
We need a writing forum. We already have one for art, kinda xD

...

*Goes to pester Rick about changing the description of the "Media Median" forum*

EDIT: Would you look at that! *Starts moving threads*

Author:  zeekgenateer [ Sat Jul 10, 2010 7:09 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: A Furry Love Story

I think the intro could use a firming up. The sentences all seem short and that makes it seem a little choppy. Maybe lengthen some or combine some together. Also with using the first person viewpoint I think you should strengthen your character's feelings and thought processes for the reader.

I am drawn by the premise in the exposition of the first chapter, though. I don't know how to watch google docs for updates, but if you post here when you add more I'll definitely check it out. Good luck!

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