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Anthroguy101
Joined: Thu Dec 24, 2009 1:43 pm
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 A Furry Love Story This is something old having not updated in weeks, nor is it finished, but is also one of my first fictional pieces involving furry charcters. Please let me know what you think: https://docs.google.com/document/edit?i ... y=CJSb5NUL
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Dr. Prower
Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 10:29 pm
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Re: A Furry Love Story Not bad, my friend. I like it. But wouldn't this topic be better suited for the Roleplaying/Fanfiction forum?
*brick'd for backseat modding*
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Anthroguy101
Joined: Thu Dec 24, 2009 1:43 pm
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Re: A Furry Love Story If it were fan fiction it would be related to Housepets, which it is not.
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Dr. Prower
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Re: A Furry Love Story ...um...
*bricks self*
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Adzo
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Re: A Furry Love Story very nice start to what I'm sure will be a very nice story. Good work.
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Dusty
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Re: A Furry Love Story We need a writing forum. We already have one for art, kinda xD
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Buckdida
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Joined: Wed Mar 04, 2009 1:59 am
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Re: A Furry Love Story ... *Goes to pester Rick about changing the description of the "Media Median" forum* EDIT: Would you look at that! *Starts moving threads*
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zeekgenateer
Joined: Wed Jun 30, 2010 6:39 pm
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Re: A Furry Love Story I think the intro could use a firming up. The sentences all seem short and that makes it seem a little choppy. Maybe lengthen some or combine some together. Also with using the first person viewpoint I think you should strengthen your character's feelings and thought processes for the reader.
I am drawn by the premise in the exposition of the first chapter, though. I don't know how to watch google docs for updates, but if you post here when you add more I'll definitely check it out. Good luck!
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