those mornings
Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2011 8:45 pm
this is a short story revolving around two of the six main characters from the comic im doing. I'll be posting it as soon as i finish editing it =3
Ok this is a two sided story it shows how the two characters (Lance and Alex) get their morning started. (it's from first person POV) Please tell me if there are problems with it (-。-; *sigh* here goes!
Lance's wake up call!
5:00 am.
"Eyes open, legs stretching, and my head's hurting! God I hate waking up" I start searching for the clothes I'm gonna wear for school. When I find it, a black jacket with a grey T-Shirt, and denim shorts, I go to the bathroom to find my brother has got there first."open the door and get out!" "why should I! I got here first, and I have to get ready for work!"
"And I have to get ready for school, and I want to at least have some hot water while I shower." "then how about you get a job and you pay the rent, oh, and while your at it how about you pay for all the food you eat too!" at this point I'm getting annoyed."How about you get enough money for us to live in a nice house instead of this crappy apartment!" At this point he's getting really mad. He pops his head out and say" Okay Lance, how about I just send you back to live with mom and dad in that dingy shack in the middle of nowhere, so you can fend for yourself.You
have no idea what I have to do for you to live here!so don't you start that mess with me!" That felt like a knife through my heart. " How- Could you say that." I start to feel tears roll down my face. I turn away and start to walk of when I felt one of his paws grab my shoulder and pull me into a hug. "Lance, I'm sorry I said that, I had no right to say something that evil, even as a threat. Can you forgive me?" I think about it for a second, and hug him tighter as I say " Of course I can! You are my big brother who protects, and cares for me. I'm sorry for insulting you. Can you for give me?"he almost instantly says "of course! your my lil bro, who I gotta take care about and love, this will never change, no matter how annoying you get." he gives me a warm smile so I smile back. But the warm moment broke when I realized he didn't have a towel on. I blushed and yelled " OH MY GOD PUT SOME CLOTHES ON!" he said with a chuckle"oh come on you act like we never used to have baths together." " NOWS DIFFERENT!" " Fine, fine I'll go."He goes to his room and closed the door. Man he's hopeless!(I wonder what alex's doin right now.)
Alex's Morning routine
Around the same time Lance Woke up
we see a girl coming into Alex's house. She sneaks up the stairs to his bedroom door decorated with a giant poster from the movie Bleach Fade To Black. She slowly opens the door, tiptoes to the bed and draws her muzzle close to his ears and yell "GOOD MORNING AL-KUN!" "AUUGH!" Alex then falls out of the bed. "WHAT THE HECK STACI, how did you even get in here!?" "heh, I used the front door silly" "but it was locked." " Oh Alex, you silly pup! Did you already forget im a master lock picker." Alex got up and then said "Is there any particular reason your here?" Staci then twirled around and said "I wanted to borrow your IPod!" "... That's it. You broke into my home, and almost gave me a heart attack for my iPod." " that about sums it up." he then sighed and said" just take it and leave." when Staci left he got up and started getting ready for school.
5:16AM.
Alex is just getting out of the shower and has his clothes set out. A green and orange turtle neck with a Dragon design in the center, with a pair of blue jeans with a green belt, and a black collar with a golden musical note charm. (This'll do for today, I guess it does pay to look nice) after getting ready he looks for his breakfast. When he can't find anything he likes he decides to just skip breakfast. "wonder what that idiots doing right now? Oh well I have some time. Let's go check on my status on Rumble Fighters." he then dashes to his room.
Back to Lance's POV
6:15AM.
After getting out of the shower. "hmm wonder what I'll wear. Oh! How about a Red T-Shirst with black shorts, and a black collar with a magenta heart charm on it! That sounds nice"(Alex'll be so jealous of my style, while he dresses in such bland clothing! He would never understand my style of dressing!) Maurice yells up to me"Lance! I made eggs,waffles,toast, And orange juice." "Ok I'm coming!" I get dressed and run down the stairs and start eating, after I finish I yell " thanks for the meal! I'm gone! Love you." "Love you too lil brother. See ya when you get back." he gives a sweet smile and and goes back to making his own breakfast.
At the bus stop.
6:50AM.
I run out the door and walk down the stairs to the lobby and out the door.I go to my bus stop down the street,and wait for Alex. When I spot him walking down the street with Staci it takes all I have not to say anything. Staci was dressed in a Japanese school uniform with a long skirt, and a pink collar. She looked very cute. I started to blush at this thought, and shook my head. "Hey Lanney-Kun!" "Stop calling me that! It's stupid!" "Well its my mouth and I'll say what I want!" Alex stepped in and covered her mouth"Staci, calm down!" after she calmed down we all sat down on the bench and Alex said" So Lance...how was your morning?" "Meh, just the usual. How was yours?" "Ehh About very
Un-Epic. How about you Staci?" she giggles at this "Oh silly Al-Chan. that's none of your business." That make Alex smirk in annoyance. There is a period of silence. But suddenly Alex says "I really appreciate you guys, ya know" Me and Staci just stare at him. Then I say " we appreciate you too. Where did that come from though?" Alex sighs and says " it's just that I've been so lonely since my parents left me." I winced at this. "Without you guys I would still be lonely... So thank you" Stacy whines and says " Oh Al-Chan I'll stay by your side always" and she hugs him tight. I chuckle an say "Aww why don't you two just Date already!" and they start yelling "We are not dating" in unison.
Suddenly the bus pulls up an we rush to get on. We all find seats near the middle of the bus and speed off towards the bright new day.
F.I.N.
So tell me what you guys think(^人^)
Ok this is a two sided story it shows how the two characters (Lance and Alex) get their morning started. (it's from first person POV) Please tell me if there are problems with it (-。-; *sigh* here goes!
Lance's wake up call!
5:00 am.
"Eyes open, legs stretching, and my head's hurting! God I hate waking up" I start searching for the clothes I'm gonna wear for school. When I find it, a black jacket with a grey T-Shirt, and denim shorts, I go to the bathroom to find my brother has got there first."open the door and get out!" "why should I! I got here first, and I have to get ready for work!"
"And I have to get ready for school, and I want to at least have some hot water while I shower." "then how about you get a job and you pay the rent, oh, and while your at it how about you pay for all the food you eat too!" at this point I'm getting annoyed."How about you get enough money for us to live in a nice house instead of this crappy apartment!" At this point he's getting really mad. He pops his head out and say" Okay Lance, how about I just send you back to live with mom and dad in that dingy shack in the middle of nowhere, so you can fend for yourself.You
have no idea what I have to do for you to live here!so don't you start that mess with me!" That felt like a knife through my heart. " How- Could you say that." I start to feel tears roll down my face. I turn away and start to walk of when I felt one of his paws grab my shoulder and pull me into a hug. "Lance, I'm sorry I said that, I had no right to say something that evil, even as a threat. Can you forgive me?" I think about it for a second, and hug him tighter as I say " Of course I can! You are my big brother who protects, and cares for me. I'm sorry for insulting you. Can you for give me?"he almost instantly says "of course! your my lil bro, who I gotta take care about and love, this will never change, no matter how annoying you get." he gives me a warm smile so I smile back. But the warm moment broke when I realized he didn't have a towel on. I blushed and yelled " OH MY GOD PUT SOME CLOTHES ON!" he said with a chuckle"oh come on you act like we never used to have baths together." " NOWS DIFFERENT!" " Fine, fine I'll go."He goes to his room and closed the door. Man he's hopeless!(I wonder what alex's doin right now.)
Alex's Morning routine
Around the same time Lance Woke up
we see a girl coming into Alex's house. She sneaks up the stairs to his bedroom door decorated with a giant poster from the movie Bleach Fade To Black. She slowly opens the door, tiptoes to the bed and draws her muzzle close to his ears and yell "GOOD MORNING AL-KUN!" "AUUGH!" Alex then falls out of the bed. "WHAT THE HECK STACI, how did you even get in here!?" "heh, I used the front door silly" "but it was locked." " Oh Alex, you silly pup! Did you already forget im a master lock picker." Alex got up and then said "Is there any particular reason your here?" Staci then twirled around and said "I wanted to borrow your IPod!" "... That's it. You broke into my home, and almost gave me a heart attack for my iPod." " that about sums it up." he then sighed and said" just take it and leave." when Staci left he got up and started getting ready for school.
5:16AM.
Alex is just getting out of the shower and has his clothes set out. A green and orange turtle neck with a Dragon design in the center, with a pair of blue jeans with a green belt, and a black collar with a golden musical note charm. (This'll do for today, I guess it does pay to look nice) after getting ready he looks for his breakfast. When he can't find anything he likes he decides to just skip breakfast. "wonder what that idiots doing right now? Oh well I have some time. Let's go check on my status on Rumble Fighters." he then dashes to his room.
Back to Lance's POV
6:15AM.
After getting out of the shower. "hmm wonder what I'll wear. Oh! How about a Red T-Shirst with black shorts, and a black collar with a magenta heart charm on it! That sounds nice"(Alex'll be so jealous of my style, while he dresses in such bland clothing! He would never understand my style of dressing!) Maurice yells up to me"Lance! I made eggs,waffles,toast, And orange juice." "Ok I'm coming!" I get dressed and run down the stairs and start eating, after I finish I yell " thanks for the meal! I'm gone! Love you." "Love you too lil brother. See ya when you get back." he gives a sweet smile and and goes back to making his own breakfast.
At the bus stop.
6:50AM.
I run out the door and walk down the stairs to the lobby and out the door.I go to my bus stop down the street,and wait for Alex. When I spot him walking down the street with Staci it takes all I have not to say anything. Staci was dressed in a Japanese school uniform with a long skirt, and a pink collar. She looked very cute. I started to blush at this thought, and shook my head. "Hey Lanney-Kun!" "Stop calling me that! It's stupid!" "Well its my mouth and I'll say what I want!" Alex stepped in and covered her mouth"Staci, calm down!" after she calmed down we all sat down on the bench and Alex said" So Lance...how was your morning?" "Meh, just the usual. How was yours?" "Ehh About very
Un-Epic. How about you Staci?" she giggles at this "Oh silly Al-Chan. that's none of your business." That make Alex smirk in annoyance. There is a period of silence. But suddenly Alex says "I really appreciate you guys, ya know" Me and Staci just stare at him. Then I say " we appreciate you too. Where did that come from though?" Alex sighs and says " it's just that I've been so lonely since my parents left me." I winced at this. "Without you guys I would still be lonely... So thank you" Stacy whines and says " Oh Al-Chan I'll stay by your side always" and she hugs him tight. I chuckle an say "Aww why don't you two just Date already!" and they start yelling "We are not dating" in unison.
Suddenly the bus pulls up an we rush to get on. We all find seats near the middle of the bus and speed off towards the bright new day.
F.I.N.
So tell me what you guys think(^人^)