Housepets: Silver the cat
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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat
good update. but to be honest, I've forgotten a lot about your story in the gap between your updates.
Re: Housepets: Silver the cat
awww, dentist
Though, i couldn't trust any dentist with such a staff! I may be scared to death by them butchers, but I want them to be sharp and kind.
Also, Silver keeps on being magnet to cuteness
Though, i couldn't trust any dentist with such a staff! I may be scared to death by them butchers, but I want them to be sharp and kind.
Also, Silver keeps on being magnet to cuteness
Re: Housepets: Silver the cat
Silver was lucky. When I went to dentist, all I remember was that nasty dentical drill that felt like it was piercing my brain xD
I was wondering where on earth have you been, TMH. But I'm glad you still remembered about your fic =) By the way, how were your exams?
I must tell you that I like Steve's dialogues. There are moments where his words determine his originality.
Only one thing:
There are also some typos, but I'm sure you'll find them out
Hope to see next update soon.
I was wondering where on earth have you been, TMH. But I'm glad you still remembered about your fic =) By the way, how were your exams?
I must tell you that I like Steve's dialogues. There are moments where his words determine his originality.
Only one thing:
It's better to not use the same word from the beginning of the previous paragraph when you start a new one, because stylistically it doesn't look good. Since you already started Steve's action, it will be better to use in next paragraph word "he" since we will know it's still the same guy we focus on.Steve tapped with fingers...
Steve noticed a bit dusty old fashion bell...
There are also some typos, but I'm sure you'll find them out
Hope to see next update soon.
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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat
That was intentional, Karlos. Lamp-shading on the failed tries, so to say.
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Housepets: Silver the Cat! fanfic
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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat
Ah. Ok thenThe Moon Howler wrote:That was intentional, Karlos. Lamp-shading on the failed tries, so to say.
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Aww, SIlver! I had no idea Cat's could look like Puppies!
One little thing. Vets and vet techs do the dental stuff. No need for the word dentist at all. The More You Know.... *Shooting Rainbow Star Flies By*
One little thing. Vets and vet techs do the dental stuff. No need for the word dentist at all. The More You Know.... *Shooting Rainbow Star Flies By*