Housepets: Silver the cat

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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat

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good update. but to be honest, I've forgotten a lot about your story in the gap between your updates.
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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat

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awww, dentist :( :(
Though, i couldn't trust any dentist with such a staff! I may be scared to death by them butchers, but I want them to be sharp and kind.
Also, Silver keeps on being magnet to cuteness :D :D
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Silver was lucky. When I went to dentist, all I remember was that nasty dentical drill that felt like it was piercing my brain xD

I was wondering where on earth have you been, TMH. But I'm glad you still remembered about your fic =) By the way, how were your exams?

I must tell you that I like Steve's dialogues. There are moments where his words determine his originality.

Only one thing:
Steve tapped with fingers...

Steve noticed a bit dusty old fashion bell...
It's better to not use the same word from the beginning of the previous paragraph when you start a new one, because stylistically it doesn't look good. Since you already started Steve's action, it will be better to use in next paragraph word "he" since we will know it's still the same guy we focus on.

There are also some typos, but I'm sure you'll find them out :)
Hope to see next update soon.
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That was intentional, Karlos. Lamp-shading on the failed tries, so to say.
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The Moon Howler wrote:That was intentional, Karlos. Lamp-shading on the failed tries, so to say.
Ah. Ok then :)
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Re: Housepets: Silver the cat

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Aww, SIlver! I had no idea Cat's could look like Puppies! :lol:

One little thing. Vets and vet techs do the dental stuff. No need for the word dentist at all. The More You Know.... *Shooting Rainbow Star Flies By*
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