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Author:  Andrea [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 10:28 am ]
Post subject:  Re: [Fancomic PG-13] Housepets! 1X

Translation:
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Author:  nickotte [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 10:51 am ]
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I'd used "except" instead of "apart".. But maybe is more correct as is now, I don't speak English SOO good.. :oops:
Gotta learn!! :mrgreen:

Author:  Tha Housefox [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 11:32 am ]
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I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*

Author:  Andrea [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 11:52 am ]
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Tha Housedog Wrote:
I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*


If you actually read the comic on my DA page, you would have noticed I've asked for feedback. :P

Also, fix'd.

Author:  copper [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 12:34 pm ]
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Very nice update. I really enjoyed the facial expressions.

That does seem incredibly frustrating, though.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 2:00 pm ]
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Good work as always. Maybe only my beloved trasparence... gone forever.

Image Just kiddin'. Is very good the way it is.

Tha Housedog Wrote:
I agree with nickotte about the "apart/except" thing, but I also have a couple more.
1.)"Apart from" or "except for."
2.)"I've gone three days," not "I've been three days."

Sorry to be such a Grammar Nazi! *Hides in the corner*


Corrections are always welcome. We're poor italians, after all.

Author:  The Broken Fox [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 2:15 pm ]
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Ack! Careful with the 4th wall there, you're banging on it really hard! :lol:

Nice update! He's not so good at small talk, eh? :?

Author:  _Stu_ [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 3:31 am ]
Post subject:  03-04-2011- Goodbye

Image

Aaaw, is too sad to even think about write a stupid comment.

Author:  Coatl_Ruu [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 6:39 am ]
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Ooh, sepia! Backstory/flashback time!

Too bad I don't speak Italian... :? I eagerly await the translation!

Author:  Andrea [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 10:01 am ]
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Coatl_Ruu Wrote:
I eagerly await the translation!


Deliveran.

Image

Author:  Tha Housefox [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 10:35 am ]
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:cry: :cry: :cry:

Author:  valerio [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 11:27 am ]
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NUUUUUU!! Sick, sick, SICK HUMMINS! They abandoned Johnny!

Author:  nickotte [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 11:34 am ]
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:cry: Sniff..

Author:  The Broken Fox [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 1:01 pm ]
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:shock: Wow, talk about mood whiplash... :cry: I so did not expect this!

Author:  _Stu_ [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 1:36 pm ]
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I warned you Image The whole story isn't like normal Housepets.
Yeah, humor is allowed, but i need some serious moments to create a tricky plot. "Like a broken mirror" is something i've create very quickly and disconnected from the normal story... you'll see when the right time comes.

Author:  The Broken Fox [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 1:42 pm ]
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_Stu_ Wrote:
I warned you Image The whole story isn't like normal Housepets.
Yeah, humor is allowed, but i need some serious moments to create a tricky plot. "Like a broken mirror" is something i've create very quickly and disconnected from the normal story... you'll see when the right time comes.


Well a serious/sad story is just fine with me! However, try to avoid jumping from humor to drama, or make sure the transition is well planned and won't leave us just going "WTF just happened, how did we get here?". I think that in this case, TvTropes says what I want to say here perfectly:
Quote:
Fiction often has far extremes. They cover the gamut of emotion, from tragedy to comedy. Sometimes these two will be so close together that they make the viewer's head spin! Done well, the contrast in moods can make each emotion all the more poignant and effective. Done poorly, the contrast can jar the reader/viewer right out of the story.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 1:58 pm ]
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I know Image I'll try.
This is my first try as a wannabe writer, after all. I've to practice, hope to get better from time to time.

Don't worry though, sadness isn't a constant Image is something that will happen sometimes.

Author:  copper [ Fri Mar 04, 2011 9:46 pm ]
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Very nice twist! I wasn't expecting such sadness. I can't wait for the little doggy's reaction to this story.

And his parents should be ashamed. They could just as easily have pawned the dog off on some sympathetic individual!


Let me state for the record that I have always been the sympathetic individual, and never the bad guy...

Author:  _Stu_ [ Sat Mar 05, 2011 12:28 pm ]
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Ok, I've to reassure you: H1X is similar to a manga, but there aren't extremes like our famous and well known "School Days" Image I'm not a perv monster, after all.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Mon Mar 07, 2011 3:18 am ]
Post subject:  03-07-2011- Spike

Image

AT: Penso ce lo chiedessimo un po' tutti in effetti.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Mon Mar 07, 2011 3:20 am ]
Post subject:  03-07-2011- Spike

Updated english version. Sorry for the huge delay.

Image

AT: I guess everyone's wondering the same.

Author:  Hopper200456 [ Mon Mar 07, 2011 3:25 am ]
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xD I was wondering the same thing. :lol:
Nice update, Stu!

Author:  copper [ Mon Mar 07, 2011 3:30 am ]
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Pretty good translation. There were a few mistakes but nothing major.

1st panel- It should be met, not meet. It is past tense.

3rd panel- So it seems, but I think that it is better than him suffering would flow better the suffer anymore was a bit awkward.

7th panel- If you drop the until now, the sentence would make a little more sense in English.

Last panel- I knew I should have stopped that question. Again, just a tense mistake. Easy to make.

None of these matter much. Your translation is perfectly fine the way it is. Really. It is pretty good.

I think I just made a fool of myself. *facepalms*

The comic itself was awesome! I love your facial expressions! They are just so great! And yes, that question popped up in my head.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Mon Mar 07, 2011 4:47 am ]
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copper Wrote:
Pretty good translation. There were a few mistakes but nothing major.

1st panel- It should be me, not meet. It is past tense.

3rd panel- So it seems, but I think that it is better than him suffering would flow better the suffer anymore was a bit awkward.

7th panel- If you drop the until now, the sentence would make a little more sense in English.

Last panel- I knew I should have stopped that question. Again, just a tense mistake. Easy to make.

None of these matter much. Your translation is perfectly fine the way it is. Really. It is pretty good.

I think I just made a fool of myself. *facepalms*

The comic itself was awesome! I love your facial expressions! They are just so great! And yes, that question popped up in my head.


Thanks for the hints ;) i'll try to fix it as soon as I can.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Tue Mar 08, 2011 4:05 am ]
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English version updated xD

Author:  Foxstar [ Tue Mar 08, 2011 6:03 pm ]
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Be mindful of the rating PG-13 is the edge here.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 5:04 am ]
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Foxstar Wrote:
Be mindful of the rating PG-13 is the edge here.

Know that... i'll try to.

BTW:
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AT: Chi glielo dice che quello รจ Bacardi Breezer al limone? Succo di frutta, in pratica.

Author:  _Stu_ [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 5:09 am ]
Post subject:  Re: [Fancomic PG-13] Housepets! 1X

Ok, this time, I REALLY need your help Image I know this one is full of errors, so please, tell me and I'll fix them.
Also, I've used sumopaint to do this quickly, so i promise i'll make it better with the right programs :? Here we go:

Image

AT: Who tells him that it actually is Bacardi Breezer Lime? Fruit juice, pratically.

Author:  nickotte [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 10:33 am ]
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Uhm, I can't find so many errors, except for "two weeks" that is supposed to be "one week" and the "one.. maybe two bottles" that doesn't mean "un paio di bottiglie".. But maybe there are more errors and I can't see :mrgreen:

Author:  Obbl [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 1:11 pm ]
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OK, errors ahoy! :D

We never say "What has happened?" for something that just occurred. It's simply "What happened?"
"I have broke" is incorrect. It must be either "I have broken" or "I broke". Though as with the above error, we use "I broke" for recent occurrences.
It's spelled "vodka" not "wodka"
If you expect someone to be doing something currently you ask "Aren't you supposed to be doing XYZ", so it's "to be placing" (though Google translates "mettere a posto" as "straightening").
We say "boxes of diapers", but then we say "diaper boxes". This is because we don't make our adjectives agree with our nouns.
"Too bad for this good stuff to be wasted" has no subject or verb. "It's too bad..." is grammatically correct, although, this sentence is still not how we would say it.
If you're going to say "I got it" (his plan in this case), it is only as an exclamation "I got it!". For the non-exclamatory version we say "I get it"
In the sentence "That dumb.", since dumb is not a noun it sounds like there is a "..." at the end. If this is your intention that's fine, but actually having the ellipsis is handy to let us know ("That dumb...")
If "ich" is him hiccuping, we use "hic"
It should be "people dying", as they are currently doing so. (If you want it to fit better, shrink the last sentence to "What a waste!" which actually sounds better. Otherwise we would say "Look at the waste here!" which still is... meh)

WALL OF TEXT :lol:
But I hope it's constructive and helpful

Author:  copper [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 2:11 pm ]
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I think Obbl pretty much covered everything, but I don't know. The edited version will tell.

Great update Stu! I can't wait for the next update. But yeah, it took a while for that last balloon to register. This is a good comic.

Author:  The Broken Fox [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 2:41 pm ]
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'S good! My only comment is that Spike thinks its vodka, yet he's so eager to lap it up... :?

Author:  _Stu_ [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 2:58 pm ]
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Thanks for the help, i really appreciate it :D I hope this one's better.
Here it is, better in graphics and translation:
Image

ps: I don't even noticed that i wrote "wodka" Image

Author:  copper [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 3:11 pm ]
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That'll do it Stu. Just one little thing, though. It is nothing big, but it sounds a lot better in english to say two weeks later, not two weeks after. It is a little thing, and it doesn't really matter at all.

But again, great update.

Author:  The Broken Fox [ Wed Mar 09, 2011 3:15 pm ]
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_Stu_ Wrote:
ps: I don't even noticed that i wrote "wodka"


In Soviet Russia, word spells you!!! :lol:

Author:  _Stu_ [ Thu Mar 10, 2011 6:43 am ]
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copper Wrote:
That'll do it Stu. Just one little thing, though. It is nothing big, but it sounds a lot better in english to say two weeks later, not two weeks after. It is a little thing, and it doesn't really matter at all.

But again, great update.


Ugh, you don't mind if i'll pass this time, right? Image I really have a looooong day in front of me. And tomorrow strip, too Image

The Broken Fox Wrote:
_Stu_ Wrote:
ps: I don't even noticed that i wrote "wodka"


In Soviet Russia, word spells you!!! :lol:


mmh, you're right, after all Image

Author:  _Stu_ [ Fri Mar 11, 2011 3:17 am ]
Post subject:  03-11-2011- Play nice _ITA_

Image

AT: LUI... ehm, lui sta leggendo Pridelands?

Author:  _Stu_ [ Fri Mar 11, 2011 3:19 am ]
Post subject:  03-11-2011- Play nice _ENG_

Hopefully, this one's better than last. Now I had more time to translate...

Image

AT: HE.... ehm, he's reading Pridelands?

Author:  Hopper200456 [ Fri Mar 11, 2011 3:40 am ]
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Hrrmmm...
Shall I say:...
~Awkward~

Author:  valerio [ Fri Mar 11, 2011 5:36 am ]
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This shop's supposed to lay in the middle of a DESERT. Would anyone care if it's serious or not?? :lol:

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