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// Hi there this is my first fanfic and my first try to write something.. I knew housepets! Since 2009 an this is the first time I try to think with my imagination.. this supposed to be pg-13 but I will try to keep it low.. have fun~~~

“….” = this means that the person is talking
‘…..’ = this means that person is thingking

Chapter 0
‘ How did this happened…?,’ he keep repeating that question many times now…
‘ i didn’t even knew that this could happened, it supposed to be a nomal day, no sadness, no tears, no regret.. nothing … just normal. ‘
There’s stood a male brown dog silently looking down trough his window, a female purple cat with fish tag that keep crying for forgiveness, a female black cat with Ankh tag that keep reassuring the other cat, a female small dog with horus eye’s tag looking the scene with confused expression.

He didn’t know what to do, he didn’t know how to handle this situation, he supposed to be the happiest dog in the Babylon neighborhood, but now he didn’t feel anything, with dead eye’s looking from his window the purple cat still crying for forgiveness, once again he supposed to run from his room and be there for his friend, best friend, more than friend his family….. yet now…. He still stand there, not a single movement, he’s comfused, why didn’t he do something…

Oh yeah…….. he feels nothing..

it started when he finnaly face the reality.. such a cruel reality…. He didn’t even want to know… he just wanted to be ignorance.. to be carefree… to be….. loved…

well…. It sucks…. This is the reality…

that time…. The temple….. the break up…. The misunderstanding…. And now this….

Can it get worse from this ?…. He clearly remembered that it was fine… it was fine… it’s not her fault she didn’t know…. She just happened to be there at the wrong time

‘ it just a big misunderstanding.. it’s okay.. it’s fine… so please just stop.. it’s okay.. it’s not your fault… ’

But in his heart… IT WAS NOT FINE

‘ Oh god….. someone just please make it stop…. Just stop…. JUST…… MAKE…… HER…… STOP…!!!!!!!!!! ‘

/// hey…. How was it… is it bad?? Please give me some advice.. if this is too dark I’m going to stop right here… thank you..

Wed Apr 04, 2018 11:45 am
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Post Re: is it too dark??
As were not really given much of a clue towards context (most I can think of is Max breaking up with Grape), I'm going to have to withhold any judgement. Though you at least got my curiosity piqued, so I'm hoping the next update will bring answers.

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The opening is intense and abrupt and needs context. Maybe in the next iteration, you could have the narrator reflect on some back story. That would slow things down a bit and lay the ground for further development.

Also, you might think about using italic font for thinking....
Moe said nothing. "I'm not sure how I feel about that" went through his brain.

It's certainly not a cheery start but it grabs attention. Some fanfics do have pretty grim strands so that needn't stop you.


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The pacing is much much too fast for my liking, we have no context for anything, and the grammar is all over the place.

Dark isn't an issue when I don't even know what's going on.

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Wed Apr 04, 2018 4:41 pm

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thank you so much for the reply... i will try my best to correct some and not to put much of the spacing.. thank you again.... :D

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Hey guys thank you so much for the suggestion you all giving me.. so this is what i did
For someone thinking i’m using italic.. thank you NHWestoN
when pacing i tried not to fast this time.. ( i hope ) thank you Buster
and i’m very sorry about my grammar because english is not my native language i’m form indonesian so “ satu kata dari english menjadi 3 arti dalam bahasa kami “ so very sorry you guys..

Chapter 1
It was just an ordinary day, the sound of canines chasing around with another, the bird are singing, the sound of grape sleeping on the couch after last night date with max, but someone can’t sleep, not only last night but many night before, it make him feel anxious, it make him feel vulnerable, because every night it’s always that dreams, a nightmares to be precise. Peanut a brown male dog feel a little bit cranky because of that, a nightmares that always repeat everytime he asleep, a despair, a hollow, an emptiness. he died, Falling down from a pit trap from the adventure to the temple with max,grape,and res. Not only that.. oh.. it get worse he saw something that making him woke up with scream every night... all of his friends lifeless body.. at first in that dream he yelled for help asking someone or anyone to help them, but he’s replied was emptyness he walk slowly trough his friends lifeless body until he met a certain cat. A purple cat.... grape.... just sprawled againts the dirt.. his body tremble for what his saw.. then when he look at her face, he met an empty eyes... her yellow eyes that usually give him safety, a warm place, the eyes that he loved now empty.... and that when he reached his limit.... he screams.... until he woke up in the middle of the night... that was the third nighmare... grape could hear his scream from her room so like what friend... beast friend... more than friend can do, be there for him.. she asked what happend but his replied was nothing.. just nothing... this is the first and the last time grape heard his scream because everynight max always take her out for a date.. at first she declined beacuse her friend needed her, but from there something that peanut never do... one thing that he can never do to grape....lied .... he heard she declined the date because of him so he just tell her that he was fine... it was only a bad dream it only happend one time.... oh.. what a sweet lie... he didn’t tell the first and the second dream he had... but because of his first lied.. grape noticed it with a bad feeling she agreed with the date.... of course that was one week ago... the dreams keep repeating it self... his dead... lifeless body... and then last night the monster.....
“dear god is it going to stop ?” he asked himself...
but because of that he realize something.. something that can change around him.... but... he doesn’t want to change... he just want to be happy... just live a normal life like an ordinary dog... but this time he can’t think any of that... suddenly he heard a knock on his door.
“ peanut... are you awake ? ” his mom (owner) asked
“ eh... Oh yeah i’m awake mom be there in a sec “ he stands up from his bed and look at the mirror, his had dark spot under his eyes. “ ughh... i can’t let them see this, well i just need to come up with an excuse like playing games until late night or something like that “ then he came down to the dining room, in there he meet his mom, jill sandwich.
“ peanut what happend ? why there’s a dark spot under your eyes ? “ she asked him
“ oh.. no mom i just played a game until late night and didn’t see the time.. “ he lied to her
Suddenly there’s a reply beside the dining table, “ well if that’s what keeping you awake i can confiscated them and i bet that will make you sleep.” There a man reading a newspaper with a coffe beside him, his dad, earl sandwich.
“ ehm... i think there’s no need for that.. i can just put them somewhere but not in my room dad “ peanut nervous replied, if his game confiscated he can’t keep making excuse for what really happend.
“ well please keep in mind that you need to sleep so that you can play for the rest of this beautifull day.. now.. please go and wake up grape the breakfast will be here in 5 minutes “ his mom replied
“ okay mom.... beautifull day ? i wish i could enjoy that “ with that he go to the living room and started to wake up the beast...
“ hey grape.. wake up... breakfast is going to be ready.. “ with his hand touching her shoulder she woke up
“ oh... morning peanut... are you okay ? “ grape looked at him with a question look
“ morning grape... what do you mean grape ? “ he asked
“ you have a dark spot under your eyes.. usually you wake me up with a scream.. and now you only wake me up with your hand touching my shoulder and with normal voice.. something definitely wrong.. so tell what’s wrong ? “ she asked him with worried eyes, he knows that he can’t keep lying to her.. it will definitely can’t get pass trough her.
“ i may or may not have another bad dream “ he sheepishly replied
“ again ? how many times have you got a bad dreams ? “ she worriedly asked him
“ it’s my second dream grape.. honest.. it’s okay it was about a game full of zombie that i played yesterday... the walking dead always gives me a creep “ he sweetly lie trough her, well not completly a lie.
“ then don’t play that game, just play a classic mario or something “ she answered him
“ okay grape i promise.. oh yeah after this i need to go to tarot house “ he remembered something from this morning
“ oh for what ? asking her for another pararel universe date ? “ she grinned at him
“ uhm... something like that “ he replied
“ well, be careful i don’t want you to end up like last time “ she clearly remembered the event when she and max go to double date with peanut and tarot, that didn’t go to well
“ okay grape i’ll be carefull “, oh peanut is going to tarot house but not for a date but something is going to change whether he likes it or not
Ehm.. yeah this is what i got.. so any opinion with this case? I’ll try to improvise more and more so that i can make you all understand what is happening in this story.. thank you have a nice day...

Sat Apr 07, 2018 3:14 am
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If you can't do the editing yourself because of a language barrier, you could always ask for help.

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Is it okay for me to do that?? I don't want to burden someone because of my selfishness

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Selfish? Even among fanfic communities there are as many writers with editors as without, and if you need one you need one.

No harm in asking for help. Just be polite about it and if they say no, drop it don't push.

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Sat Apr 07, 2018 1:43 pm

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hey guys so…. In this past days I got help from my teacher to help me with the grammar but could you guys kindly fix witch sentence or part that needed to be fix ? thank you

Chapter 2
D'Angelo house ---
“ Sabrina.? ” a Pomeranian dog called her apprentice as she emerged from her room.
“ What is it, Tarot ? “ the black cat answered while she was focusing on her meditation
“ Could you open the door for Peanut later? I need to go to other interdimensional mirror, the spirit told me that they sensed a disturbing channel around there. “ as Tarot was getting ready for her travel, she noticed her apprentice expression. “ What is it Sabrina, is something on your mind? “.
Sabrina hesitated to ask this question but it really bothered her, “ Tarot, this may seem a weird question, but, what is Peanut to you ? ”.
The question surprised Tarot. “ Wha... of course he’s my boyfriend what else? “
Sabrina began to doubt that. “ Are you sure? “
Tarot was looking at her with a questioning look. “ What are you talking about? “
Sabrina explained “ Tarot, this may seem weird but when was the last time you went to another dimension with Peanut or at least talk about it? “
Tarot began to think. “When you put it that way... “
Sabrina continued “ Tarot... when we went to that temple stopping Keene from getting the mana, we left Peanut without a second thought, it bothered him so greatly that he didn’t listen to your warning, after you said sorry you left him again, and I remembered you said some excuses to him but he said that you always said the same excuse, so I will ask you again Tarot do you really have feeling for him ? “
Tarot just looked at her with bewildered expression “ I... I don’t... I really don't know when me and dragon became his girlfriend the one that has a crush is mostly dragon, i though when i’m going to start dating him i will feel something like dragon, i do but is not strong enough, i really want this to work between me and Peanut but how can you focus on that feeling when the world is at stake ? i don’t want to choose between saving the world or him. “
Sabrina only looked at her then she asked “ Tarot what happens if you must make that choice? What will you do? “
Tarot only kept silent until she opened a portal “ I don’t want to think about that but I hope nothing will change between me and Peanut “ and then she jumped trough the portal
Sabrina started to get up from her position and startes making preparations for the upcoming guest “ I hope too Tarot... I really do “

Celestial Plains—
He felt something, something was very wrong. Kitsune, a nine tail Celestials fox, felt something was definitely wrong. It bothered him so much that it changed his playful and sly faces to a serious dead-looking one. If Pete and Dragon saw this they would have cold sweats. One thing that you could notice from Kitsune that every time the situation got worse, he always brushed it off with his playfulness. But now something was coming, something big, maybe. He looked at the table, the board game, the board that could control a living being whenever the three of them wanted to play. Now that Dragon and Pete had been reincarnated, the board now seemed useless. It was not that he didn’t enjoy playing this game, but he always thought a way to end the game. Now with the help from former human ‘Joel’ who turned into a dog ‘king’, the games finally reached its ends. Sometimes he missed Dragon and Pete with their wits against each other but a game always needed to put into an end. Suddenly a soft female voice could be heard across the table.
“ non tam Salve iterum Kitsune sit noscere “ a beautiful female white wolf came to the other side of Kitsune, this clearly surprised Kitsune.

“ Well, it is nice to meet you too Luna or should I say Goddes of the moon “ the white wolf only smiled at that, with her clear blue eyes like ocean looked straight into Kitsune eyes. It made Kitsune slightly tremble.

Kitsune started to ask “ May I ask why the goddess of wolves came to see this humble fox ? “ the wolf started to speak but was interrupted again by Kitsune “ May the goddess speak in this language so that I can cooperate fully? “

Luna started to giggle “ Oh my, I’m so sorry Kitsune. It’s been a while since the last time I spoke in this language “ then she walked to Kitsune and started to explain “ I’m so sorry for my unannounced arrival but I have an urgent news for you and the other demigods but where are the others ? Usually, you and the two of them, the dragon and the gryphon, play together “ she looked the other side of table but didn’t sense the presence of those two.

Kitsune responded “ I’m sorry Luna but the other two have been reincarnated for losing to this game, but what urgent news may I ask? “

Luna looked kinda surprised “ Oh my.. So the game is already ended? Thank god for that. Oh Yeah... Kitsune this may seem odd but please be careful I have a feeling that my ex-mate is starting to move but I can’t seem to figured out what he is planning to do “

With that, Kitsune face started to become pale “ What do you mean Luna ? Do you mean that he wants to do something ? What does he want ? What does that monster want? “

Luna glared at him and he started to trembled “ JUST BECAUSE HE’S THE SON OF LOKI THAT DOESN’T MEAN YOU HAVE THE RIGHT TO CALL HIM THAT.. DON’T BE SUCH A HYPOCRITE. DO YOU EVEN SEE WHAT HAPPENED TO YOUR SO- CALLED THE BOARD GAMES ?“ the sound of Luna’s anger made Kitsune knees become limp. “ REMEMBER THIS DEMI GOD JUST BECAUSE YOU HAVE A POWER THAT DOESN’T MEAN YOU HAVE MORE POWER OVER ALL THE IMMORTAL BEING, SO HEED MY WARNING AND SPREAD THE WORD THAT THE GOD OF DESTRUCTION IS ON THE MOVE “ with that the white wolf disappeared, and the only things on Kitsune’s mind was that he had to speak with Bahamut.

Babylon garden ---
Peanut just arrived in front of D’angelo house. Before he could knock the front door, Sabrina opened the door for him. “ Hey Peanut, if you need to see Tarot, you just missed her. So, if you want, you can come inside and wait for her “ Peanut only nodded his head and went inside the house. After he went inside, Sabrina ask him “ Do you want some tea while you are waiting for her, Peanut? “
Peanut only shook his head and answered “ No, thank you Sabrina. I just want to ask something from her. I just wait until she returns “, Sabrina led him to living room. When she and Peanut sat on the sofa she curiously asked “ What question do you want to ask, Peanut? “
Peanut only grimaced at that question, he started to rub his head “ I’m sorry Sabrina but this is kinda private, but don’t worry it’s not important “ he just grinned at that. Sabrina looked kinda worried about that. She just shrugged that feeling and just started chatting with him.
“ So, Peanut can I ask you something ? “ Peanut just nodded his head. “ How do you feel after we went through the temple? “ The only thing Peanut can think about that event was “ it’s horrible, thinking about that makes me sick like I want to puke every time I remember that place “, with a straight face Peanut only answered “ Actually, I kinda forget what really happened back there “ Sabrina face became alarmed when he said that. “ Are you okay Peanut ? Is there any head injury ? or maybe internal bleeding ? should we go see a doctor ? “ Sabrina started to panic, “Whoa.. whoa… whoa it’s okay Sabrina. I’m fine. I feel normal but I remembered that I came out from that place with no harm. I only forgot what happened inside the temple, really. So, take it easy “ with that, her body become relaxed “ So you forgot completely what happened inside the temple ? “ Peanut just shake his head “ Not at all. I only remembered just a piece, like we can change into something when we used a hat, I remembered rufus.. only like that “, With a worried sound Sabrina asked a question “ Do you remember what happened after we had saved you from the pit trap ? “.
That question made him remember, made him feel something that he didn’t like. Something that he usually never showed; anger. Suddenly, the air started to feel heavy, Sabrina started to sweat from her forehead as she saw something from Peanut. Something she didn’t think he even had, a dark aura started to emit around Peanut. His round blue eyes started to change. They shaped almost look like he was feral, with a sound almost like growling “ Yeah, I remember, I remember how you ditched us “ Sabrina started to tremble “ Peanut.. “ he continued “ Oh, I remember how you just left us with nothing but a piece of note.. “ Sabrina tried to say something “ Peanut, calm down. I know we should just tell you what happened but we were in a hurry and the world was at stake Peanut “ It only made Peanut furious “ Yeah the world was at stake and when you cannot share anything with us ,you can share it with fox. Someone who didn’t even understand what happened ” Sabrina tried to call his name but he ignored her “ Why? Why would you even involve some pet who didn’t even know what happened ? Were we just a tool for you guys to use huh? Maybe you guys never see us as a friend, but only a tool only to use and to dispose later “ Sabrina wanted to say something “ SO TELL ME WHAT ARE WE…. WHAT ARE WE TO YOU… ANSWER ME!!!!“ sabrina yelled “ PEANUT!!!!” suddenly the heavy air vanished. Only the sound of a heavy breathing that can be heard.
After a while, Sabrina asked him “ Peanut… are you okay now? “,
“I don’t know anymore” Peanut answered “ Yeah… yeah I’m okay. Sorry about that “ suddenly she realized something “ Peanut are you going to ask Tarot.. “ suddenly she was interrupted by someone “ Hey Peanut, sorry I’m late “ Tarot came from another room “ I foresee that you need me? “ Peanut stared at her “ Yeah I need to ask some questions, Sabrina, can Tarot and I have a private chat ?” with that, Sabrina left the room and hoped that everything was going to be fine.

yeahhh... that's all ehm... any more advice??

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That's a major thing for Sabrina to just walk away from, especially when coming from Peanut. If I had to hazard a guess, Fenrir is taking over Peanut.

Regardless, there are still sentence structure issues, though markedly improved from previous entries, so good job on that. Have you been able to find a proofreader or editor yet?

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uhm.... i'm sorry but what do you mean?? well, actually i use an apps called grammarly? i think that's what it called but i don't think it's a very good apps..
thank you i hope in the next update i can improvise more...

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chapter 3
“ what do you want to ask hon ? “ as soon as Sabrina get out of the room tarot sit beside peanut and ask him, peanut face looked very paled after a chat with Sabrina, “ are you okay hon? what happened just now ? ” tarot asks worriedly. The thing is peanut wanted to ask about his dream, then what happened just now between him and Sabrina but now, it seems that those question is not very important for him right now, there’s one question that has been bugging him since the accident on the temple.
“ who am I to you ? “ that question shock tarot more than anything, “wha.. of course your my boyfriend what else peanut ? “ she looks straight into his eyes ‘ something is definitely wrong ‘, she really wanted to know what happened to him, before she can ask peanut interrupted “ tarot, could you be more honest with me ? “, now she looks very confused “ what are you talking about peanut? “, he only look at her, suddenly she relies on something. “ wait a sec.. are you still mad back at the.. “ peanut only replied is disturbed face. “ hon i already apologise why are you still angry with me ? “ peanut only glared at her.
“ tarot, yeah maybe i’m angry but what I feel now is disappointment..” tarot whine at that but peanut continued “ tarot why did you take fox with you? I mean why not king who has experience with this ? “ tarot begin to explained “ peanut did you forgot that you, king and fox went to heaven ?” peanut only shake his head. “ peanut, did you know rufus is dead?” peanut ears begin to drop “ yeah I know that tarot, the floating ring on his head kinda dead give away “ tarot begin to move slowly where peanut sit “ peanut, he’s your guardian angel for you and grape, he help you so that you survive inside the temple just like fox have two guardian angel, I know you didn’t like it when we bring fox and mungo but we didn’t have a choice, the time is very short for us to make decision”, suddenly peanut realize something “ tarot I know this next answer is unfair to you but please I beg you to answer this with the bottom of your heart “ tarot keep silent for a few second and noded “ tarot if you choose beetwen saving the world or me who will you choose? “. He’s right that question is unfair to tarot, she begins to think very deeply but there’s only one answer for that question “ I’m sorry peanut but I’m going to say saving the world “.
Peanut only look at her then he smiled with his goofy grin “ thank you tarot for your honest answer “ he began to stand and walk to the door, tarot stands up very quickly and grab his hand “ peanut, where are you going? I’m sorry that I choose that answer but you said that I need to answer with the bottom of my heart” peanut only smiled at her and pat her head and softly spoke “ it’s okay tarot but I think we need to take a break don’t you think? “ tarot look at him with wide eyes “ tarot, maybe it’s going to change with our relationship but you are still my friend and I know that it’s very selfish of me to always make you choose between me and your mission and I’m very sorry for that, so now you can focus on your mission, I’m very happy the time we spend together, don’t forget that and thank you for showing me every amazing place that you have taken me, so goodbye tarot and I hope you keep yourself safe “ with that peanut went outside and tarot only look at him with sad face.
On the way home peanut looked at the sky, he knew his heart is breaking again, this is his second time he feels like this but he knew that this is for the best, he began to think what happened when he got angry. He rarely feels that emotion, but this is most extreme emotion that he had, he remember that he got angry with grape when he plays pretends but it never took that far, when he started to deep thinking about it he didn’t realize that a van is trailing behind him, then someone get out of the van and took out a handkerchief and put it on peanut mouth to prevent him from screaming. Peanut tried to fight but got dizzy after taking a breath with the handkerchief on his muzzle, when his body started to limp the stranger dragged him to the van.
Heaven gate
‘Another job well done’ Cerberus came to the gate of heaven after she sent the lost kitten soul to another life, ‘ poor kit, i wonder what would happened if the van didn’t hit her ? ’. ceberus just got a task to bring a soul to another life from an accident, on a late night a kitten went on a hunt for a mice suddenly went she wanted to cross the road a white van came out of nowhere and ram the poor kitten, ‘ her owner cry every night after the accident, i hope they knew that her soul went to a better life’, when ceberus almost reach to open the gate something ram her from the back but she didn’t flinch. She looked behind her and saw kitsune sprawl on the ground.
“kitsune, why are you on a rush?” ceberus lend her hand to help kitsune up, after kitsune regain his balance he looked at her “ CEBY WHERE’S BAHAMUT I NEED TO TALK TO HIM!” ceberus suprised at his outburst “ calm down what happend “ kitsune began rambling “ just tell me where bahamut is, i need to tell him something, he’s coming please we need to..” ceberus became worried because she knew eventhough something is very important kitsune never act so serioius ‘what happend to him?’ ceberus look at him and place both hand on his shoulder “ kitsune please i don’t understand what your saying tell me what happend maybe i could help but please you need to take a breath!” with that kitsune took a deep breath and started to explained “ just now i met luna “ ceberus eyes became widden but kitsune continued “ she told me that he’s coming..” he started to shaken, ceberus looked at him with a scarred face the with a trembling voice she asked “ wh... who... who’s coming?’. Kitusne looked at her eyes and said a forbidden name “FENRIR”.
Back to the earth --
Peanut started to wake up, he slowly opened his eyes. After a few minute he regains consciousness he looked at his surrounding and he realised that he’s in a car, ’a van i think, but what happens?' he tried to move but he felt something restraining his body. He realised that a rope tied to his body, luckily his leg is free so he sat up, he realised that the van isn’t moving ‘ am i being kidnapped ? was it PETA again?’ he heard a sound, someone is talking, he looked at the driver seat and saw two people, a bald fat man and a thin man, peanut couldn;t see their face but he could hear what were they talking about. “tell me again why we kidnapped this dumb mutt?” the thin man asked “you stupid mold i told you we could trade this mutt with money, don't you see people in here love their pet almost like a family” the fat man talk almost like shout at the thin man “ well then why did you ran over the cat when you said that we can trade them with money?” the fat man replied “ HAH... that’s only for fun that’s her own fault she didn’t even see the van so BAM i hit her, what’s the matter you feeling sorry? they’re just animal a dumb one they meant nothing to me hahahahaha” the fat man and the thin man laughed at what they’ve done, peanut only looked at them with disbelief ‘how could they done such horrible thing And laugh at that? Unforgivable!’ peanut start to feel something like before, anger. ‘ human such a horrible creature is it not?’ peanut started to fist hist paw ’they are not to be trusted they only destroyed, every beautiful thing they step on it like a dirt’ the sound started to echoed in peanut head ‘ we do not need them they just waste of space’. Peanut begun to tramble from the anger his holding, his eyes started to change from a round to sharp feral eyes ‘we need to rid all of them’ peanut open him paws and retract his claws , ‘ yes we need to eliminate all of them’ peanut slowly got up and he started to growl “ yes human is a waste of space “ the two human startled and look behind them only to find peanut glaring at them ‘yes we need to do something’ “we must not trust them” ‘we need no human’ with the last sound before peanut lunged at them “we neED TO DEVOUR THEM” suddenly there’s a voice outside the van “THIS IS THE POLICE PUT YOUR HAND UP WHERE WE CAN SEE YOU” peanut stop his movement and suddenly the driver door is forced opened, the door suddenly broke only to find a black great dane? Lift the door “oh no i’m sorry i didn’t know the door is very fragile” someone shouted beside him “ officer’s keep your apologies for later we need to lock this I love you now!” officer bill came and forced them out and put them on the ground. Then the back door of the van is opened by someone a husky came and shouted “is someone injured?” peanut only look at him “peanut is that you? Are you okay?“ ‘don’t trust them’ peanut growled at him, “peanut it’s me, fox” suddenly someone came beside him “fox, what happened” fido suddenly came beside him “ fido, it’s peanut, something wrong with him” fido looked at peanut only to find peanut growling at both of them “peanut, it’s me fido are you okay? please calm down everything is fine” fido slowly aproach him and when his paw wanted to touch him peanut bite him, with a loud sound of snap fido almost didn;t dodge the bite “GAH... peanut why do you do that?” fido take good looked at him, what he saw almost scared him his eyes is split like a feral, his claws looked almost like a very sharp knife, his teeth bared like an animal tried to tear out his enemy, then someone came along “officers what take you so long?” officer ralph started to walk to both at them, “sir is one of our friend he started growling and almost bite officer fido paw” ralph look at peanut, when he saw him he didn’t see a beast but an animal terrified of his sarrounding, with a calm look he get inside the van “sir be carefull he’s not..” ralph silenced them and walk through when he neared peanut he opened his arm, before peanut lunged at him ralph hugged him, peanut tried to escaped, he strugle to be free, ralph whispered at him “it’s okay verything is fine” ‘don’t let him touch you’ peanut continued to struggle “ it’s okay nobody is hurting you” 'DON’T TRUST HIM’ “it’s okay to be scared but please trust me your safe, i promise you nobody will harm you, i’ll keep you safe, please, trust me” after a few minutes become rigid ‘please be carefull pup...’ the sound started to fade away, peanut body started to relaxed, ralph started to untied him and the soothed him, peanut started to smelled him ‘ he smells like a grass and dirt but it feels nice, he feels nice’ peanut started to growl but not in anger but pleasure ‘he’s warm he’s very kind’ peanut started to rub his muzzle around ralph neck 'i don’t know him but why did he make me fells so...... safe’ with that ralph started to lift him bridal style and get out of the van.
Sandwich’s house –
“soooo….. borrrrreeeeedddd” after peanut left grape still sleep on the sofa after a while she got bored, she tried playing games but it’s not fun when peanut is not around, she tried to called max but he’s busy. ‘please make it interesting today’, “grape? I thought you were going out with peanut “ jill sandwich came from the laundry room, “no mom, he said that he’s going to ask tarot for another date that’s why I don’t want to disturb them” jill came sit next to grape and started to pet her “ well why don’t you go play outside ? “ grape started to purr but with lazy sound she said “ it’s too hoooot today….” Suddenly the phone rang, jill got up and started to walk to the phone “ hello? “, grape tried to listen, “ what?!.. When?!.. How?!... Is he okay?!... I’ll be there in a sec!!” grape look at her mom and what she saw is the woman face started to pale and her eyes glimmering holding back her tears “ EARL WE NEED TO GO !” grape become scared “ mom what happened? ” earl ran from lawn “ what happened honey? “ jill take the car key and yelled “ IT’S PEANUT WE NEED TO GO NOW!! ”, grape face started to pale, she wished for an interesting day but this is beyond the measure, she didn’t want anything happened to peanut “ please God I beg you let him be okay “ with that the sandwich went to the car and drive to where peanut have been kidnapped.
“ does anyone disagree using this new section of the rule that says ‘ anyone who used the mortal being without their consent will be strip from immortal being to be reincarnated as mortal being‘? “, bahamut looked around the courtroom as other celestial being shakes their head as they agree to this new section of the rule. This rule has been made after pete and dragon lost the board game, they knew if this continued the peace on the heaven will be ruined that’s why the ‘guardian angel’ has been sent to help the mortal if something went wrong in their world. “if anyone didn’t have any argument then this section shall be.. “ suddenly the door had been open with such full force ” BAHAMUT! ” bahamut look at the one who opened the door “ KITSUNE YOU BETTER HAVE A GOOD REASON FOR INTERUPTED THIS TRIAL OR GOD HELP ME I WILL... “ kitsune interupted “ HE”S COMING “ bahamut looked worried, kitsune never bother to interupted any trial “ who’s coming?” kitusne looked around the court “ THE GOD OF DESTRUCTION ‘FENRIR’ “ everybody looked shocked suddenly one of the celestial stand up “ THIS IS OUTRAGES THERE’S NO WAY THAT CREATURE CAME BACK FROM THE ‘DEEPEST OF THE ABYSS” WE TRAPPED HIM THERE, WHERE DO YOU EVEN HEARD THIS INFORMATION KITSUNE?” the one who shouted is an anubis the one who brings the lost soul to be judge, kitsune looked at him “ if you want more information his ex-mate will gladly answer your call” anubis looked shaken “th.. the... the luna? How? Why now?” all of the celestial begun to argue one another after hearing this information suddenly bahamut shouted “ENOUGH!!” the room went silent “ why are you scared of this creature ? we already defeated him once then we can defeated him again this creature is not unbeatable “ everybody became relief after he said that “kitsune after this i need you to gather all the celestial being spread them we need more information regarding this situation “ kitsuine only looked at him “ what are you planning bahamut?” bahamut only replied “easy, we sealed him once, we sealed him again”. Kitsune only nodded his head then he flew away to gather the other celestial being

dear lord, i didn't know that making a story will be this hard URRRHGGGHHHHH..... well i at least i hope you guys enjot that...
ps.. i know some of the grammar is still missplaced and the structure is a mess... i'm still trying to learn how to make good writer so at least you guys could enjoy that T_T.... UGGGHHHH.... now to the EXAM WE GOOOOO..

Fri May 11, 2018 9:52 pm

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Post Re: is it too dark??
hmm.... after the end of the final arc temple crashers i'm really confused on how should i do next.. should i use my present plot or making another plot.. welp... at least i tried...

Chapter 4
“ WHOA...down boy “ one of the paramedics almost got bitten by peanut, the paramedic tried to give a tranquillizer shot after they saw what happened to him, before peanut can bite the one who gives the shot ralph hold him and put him on his lap trying to calm him down, “ peanut, is fine they only want to give you some medicine is okay nobody going to hurt you “, peanut only growl at them. Most of the k9 force look at them with disbelieve look, not because what happened to peanut but the way their leader tried to calm him down, fido tried to start the conversation “ i can’t believe what i’m seeing here “, mungo looked at the pair “ poor guy.. I hope he’s going to be fine “, fox looked at mungo “he’s not talking about what happened to peanut”. Mungo looked at fox with questioning look, everyone only thinking one thing ‘you’re too innocent mungo’. “GRRRRR…..” everybody began to looked at peanut again, nobody has ever seen some pet like this because most of the kidnapped one always have a trauma or an anger management issue but this is very new for them. They looked at peanut the way he act, almost like feral he didn’t knew his surrounding, he didn’t knew his friends, and most of the time he’s only growled, ralph looked at the other k9 “has anyone contact his family?” terrance answered “yes sir his family is on the way here”, ralph only nodded his head, he begun to stroke peanut head and his answer was peanut tail begun wagging and tried to snuggle closer but his eyes still aware of the surrounding, “aww… they’re so cute” officer bill looked at them, fido and fox only looked at them with mouth agape “officer fido, officer fox you said that this is your friend, so why he didn’t recognize you two?” ralph question the two of them, “we didn’t know sir, peanut is the nicest dog in the neighborhood he never bite anyone, heck I never saw him angry at someone too” fido answered “peanut never get angry sir, there’s one time he draw a picture of a dog with cat tail and show it to me and bino..” ralph interrupted “ who’s bino?” fido answered “he’s my brother sir” fox continued “we bully him and kick him out of the GODC but I never saw any anger in his eyes only later when fido invited him again at the club he even gives bino a present” ralph looked scowling at him “you bullied him?” fox face became shamefull his tail beetwen his leg “yes sir but not psychically” ralph looked at him in the eyes “have you said sorry to this pup?” fox looked at him with wide eyes “of course sir peanut is too ignorance and innocent, he even never bite a mailman” ralph only answered “good” he begun stroking peanut head again.
Suddenly there’s a roar sound of an engine everyone looked at the source, the sandwich’s just came to the crime scene once the car stopped they got out and ran to peanut, “MY BOY WHAT HAPPENED TO HIM?” jill tried to run through the crime scene only to be blocked by bill, “jill, calm down everything is fine your boy is safe” jill begun to calmed down “please, tell me what happened?” while bill tried to explained what happened, grape walked pass by and search for peanut “GRAPE WAIT DON”T GO NEAR THE CRIME SCENE” fox tried to reached her “ARE YOU KIDDING ME, ARE YOU SERIOUSLY TRIED TO PREVENT ME SEEING MY BEST FRIEND WHO MAYBE GOT A TRAUMA ?” fox tried to explained “grape, I know you want to see him but please wait a moment he’s..” grape interrupted “but what fox?”. “GRRR….. BARK,BARK” the sound of peanut barking caught by grape and his parents, “PEANUT?!” grape run to him and her parents follow him, what they saw terrified them, peanut growled at like a savage animal biting everyone if they at his ranged, what keeping him is the leader of k9 officers. “peanut…” grape make a small sound almost like wailing, then with a shock looked peanut looked at the source sound, when she saw each other she looked shocked because his eyes are now sharp shape. Earl came to him “hey buddy it’s me you know me it’s your old man..” peanut looked at him, his face intrigued him, earl continued “it’s okay I won’t let anyone hurt you” earl reached him gently when peanut tried to sniff his hand he stopped and let him smelled ‘this man smells like a coffe, should I know who’s this man is?’ then jill came beside earl “hey dear it’s okay momy here it’s safe now” now peanut curiosity it’s at peek like he wants to know who these human are, why they so gentle, why they so nice, why they make him trust them so fast so he slowly get out of ralph lap and walk on four slowly to them, then grape came she gently stroke his head “hey dumb dumb it’s me grape your best friend you know me right?” suddenly something trigger his memory, the sound of her yelling at him ‘PEANUT, we are not ‘just friend” we were never ‘just friend’ you are my BEST FRIEND in the whole wide world..’ then he gently grab her hand and put it on his cheek, he tried to smelled her ‘I know this smell, I know this softly lavender smell, I know her it’s her’ then he only said one word “mine” everybody looked at him with shocking face, grape face become crimson red after he said that word, grape tried to speak “p..pea..peanut what are you…” but peanut interrupted again “this belongs to me, all of it” everybody went silent “this is mine to protect,mine to love..” grape body begun to tremble “mine to cherish.. my home, my safe… my family” he took his time to feel her warm hand, it feels so nice for him, grape looked at him with the happiest face it clears that he still remembered her and that’s makes her smiled at him ‘silly dog’, his eyes slowly closed but one of the paramedic awaken from his shocked state and told them “he need to take this shot so that he won’t harm his own body” jill came to the paramedic and take the shot “I will give it to him” jill walk behind peanut “dear, I will give you something it’s okay it will only make you sleepy but everyone will stay by your side” peanut looked at her then he continued to feel grape paws on his cheek, it almost like he given her permission so jill put the shot on his arm, his body started to feel limp before he could fall ralph rush to him and catch him, grape looked questioned at him, ralph only answered “I’ll explained later” that’s only make her confused. Ralph picked peanut bridal style again and put him on ambulance. One of the paramedic question the sandwich “which one of you will accompany him?” grape started to asked “mom,dad can I accompany peanut?” jill only stroke her head “go ahead dear we will follow you guys with the car” grape get in and sit beside the bed that peanut take, with the sound of ambulance called they drive to the nearest hospital.

Selûne ---

This is a place where the almost forgotten god or goddess is resting, a realm where once the subject or their children once forgotten their god or goddess, once if this god or goddess completely forgotten their existence will be deceased. not many god or goddess stay in this place because many have already gone, only some of them still remains in this place, this place is almost like a fallen kingdom. A portal have been open in this realm, a white wolf came from the portal, “recipiet Luna, quae tibi data est novi? (welcome back luna, have you given the news?)” from behind the fallen pillar a tentacle move slowly from the shadow showing the creature who welcome the wolf, a kraken “Gratias tibi ago, domine maris, i, quod iam mittit verba,(thank you, lord of the sea, why yes i already sent the news)” the white wolf smiled at the kraken, “quid est quod vulpes bene esse? (how is that fox well being?)”, another shadow came from the shadow, a monkey “Si amicum tuum quare non visere cura teipsum hanuman? (if you care for your old friend why don't go and see for yourself, hanuman?)“ the wolf answered sharply, the monkey only laughed “hahahahaha.... vulpes, et futura tempora oblivione sit senex est (hahahaha...that fox may already forgotten this old man)” the wolf make a pout face at that “Non enim tua natus hanuman (your not that old hanuman)”. The monkey only laughed harder, the kraken tired to calm them down “satis hanuman, luna modo venerunt ad reliquam partem non dimiserunt eam vobis? (enough hanuman, luna just came back let her rest for a bit won't you?)”. the wolf stomp her feet and grumble, the she enetered the ruins followed by the two gods. Inside the ruin there are another four gods awaited them… white tiger, blue dragon, green turtle, and the last phoenix.. once the rest of the gods taken a sit the white tiger asked something “Itaque Luna unde venis?(so,where have you been Luna?)”, the white wolf answered “sed amici illati byakko(only meeting with an old friend baykko)” the green turtle interrupted “nunc ergo ut negotio fratrem nostrum, non quaesivit quia quod est lunae sicut scitis (now,now brother is not our business to asked something like that to luna you know) “ the white tiger looked at the white wolf “i paenitet luna necesse est interrogare (I’m sorry luna for unnecessary question)” the white wolf only giggled “denique quod suus 'a magnus paciscor suus' non byakko (it’s fine byakko it’s not a big deal for me)” the blue dragon asked out of curiosity “ita ut non sit senex hanuman venistis amici? (so does that mean you visited hanuman old friend?)” the monkey only snickered “hehehehe…. Sic fecit (hehehe… yes she did)” the phoenix laughed “hahahahah…. Scio quia petistis vobis parvulo vellet facere (hahahaha… you only asked that because you wanted to know your little one is doing)” the blue dragon become annoyed “ohe! ego semper rogavit primus, qui propter hoc facite quotienscumque non probaverunt (hey! I asked that because that brat always do whenever she liked)” the phoenix begun teasing “ yeah… non desunt vestrae erunt d.d (deedee) (yeah… your little d.d (deedee) must bee missing you )” everyone laughed at that. Suddenly a sound can be heard “ you guys knew many language yet you guys still use that old language” a figured came from the entrance of the ruin, all the gods looked at the figured, the phoenix only answered with a bored face “oh… it’s you”

Babylon Hospital ---

At one of the room lay a dog unconscious, after the ambulance arrived at the hospital they rushed him inside the lab to check what exactly happened to him, now it’s waiting game until he regains conscious. Peanut started to have a similar nightmare, but this time he walked past his fallen friend until he met a familiar purple cat. ‘this dream again’ his body trembled as he kneeled in front of the cat and started to cried ‘I don’t want to see this again’ he sobbed as he pleaded ‘please I beg you…. Stop this…’ suddenly a footstep can be heard ”really? Are you going to cry over this nightmare?” the sound of footstep become closer and closer until a canine shadowy figure standing in front of peanut. Peanut heard the sound but he didn’t pay any attention his only mind is in front of his eyes the purple cat. “hmm…. She really is important to you”, peanut still didn’t pay any attention “brat… look at me” peanut looked at the figured “pathetic.. look at you crying over something that isn’t there” the figured saw his face, the tears that stream on his face, the ears that fell on top of his head, the eyes that only seen as a sorrowful. “who are you?” peanut asked, the figure didn’t answered him, the figure walked in front of the fallen cat. Suddenly it raised his foot and step at the cat until it blew and smoke cover peanut and the figure, peanut eyes become wide as he screamed in terror “ WHAT HAVE YOU DONE??!! “ the figure only looked at him , peanut tried to stand now his body tremble with anger “Y..Yo...YOU MONSTER!!!!”, peanut tried to lunge at the figure but it snap it’s fingered and all around them fanished leaving the two of them and the darkness. “brat.... don’t test my patience”, peanut looked shocked at what happened until he heard a cracking noise, the figure is reashaping, the figured now crouched down on four it’s legs had a claws sharper than a knife, it’s fur is jet black, his long muzzle showed it teeth that could tear someone neck, it’s eyes shown the colour of a crimson blood. Now the figures looked like a wolf but bigger with it’s lean body it moves toward where peanut stand, peanut body stood like a stone because how shock he is, “now brat.... you're looking at something that can end your world”.

D’Angelo house ---

“tarot... have you eaten something?” after peanut left the house tarot is skulking inside her room, sabrina tried to enter her room to comfort her but the door won’t budge, she tried asking, she tried making a distraction but none of it make tarot feels good, ‘dear lord please let this work’ so now sabrina bring a bowl of kibbles to ease tarot heart “tarot.. i know your hungry please come out for a sec.. i have kibbles!!” she waited for e few minutes but the answered she got is silenced.’muffins and cookies it... now what do i do?’ suddenly she heard a click sound, the door now is opened revealing a sad face of pomeranian dog. “thank you sabrina, i am a little hungry” tarot tried to take the bowl but sabrina lift her hand, “tarot, would you mind i come into your room?”, tarot begun to sighed then she move to the side and open the door more wider, “come in sabrina” sabrina enter tarot room, inside the room it’s almost like a library the shelves contains many books that put on order from down to up, in the middle of the room there’s a star insignia, a mirror is hanging in front of the insignia while her bed is on the corner of the room. Sabrina and tarot move to the bed, after sitting down tarot begun to eat the kibbles while sabrina only looked at her, the room filled with the sound of tarot eating, after a while she put the bowl down and turn to sabrina. “well... are you going to ask something?” tarot asked her teh only answered she got “do i?” tarot looked questioning at her “don’t you wish to know what happend?” sabrina only shake her head “do you want to talk about it?” tarot became silenced “tarot, i don't want to push you if you don’t want to talk about it what i only want is to comfort you now” sabrina give her a sad smile, tarot begin to smile too “thank you sabrina i’m really happy to have met you” sabrina begun to tease her “what?! You only happy after you met me?” she’s grinning while showing her full teeth, tarot looked annoyed “OH!? You know what i mean” she looked at the other side and make a huff sound, a few minutes silenced the both of the girl begun to giggle and then they laughed with a happy face. After a while tarot stop laughing “sabrina i will said it again, thank you and i’ really happy to have met you” sabrina only smiled at that “your welcome tarot” suddenly they heard a crash sound, they looked at the source and found th mirror now is in pieces. Sabrina looked confused when she looked at tarot she became shocked, tarot face became paled “tarot, what happened?” tarot looked at her “i don't know, but i think someone is in trouble” sabrina ask her again “who?” tarot “peanut...”.

now this is the power of google translate..... i don't know many language... :lol: :lol: :lol:

Wed Jun 06, 2018 8:09 am

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Post Re: is it too dark??
Chapter 5
“ so.. let me get this straight....” in the middle of the room stood one of the god trusted angels, Michael, surrounded by many demi god, because many of the demi god form are a beast, Michael turn his form into a canine form, golden retriever, with his golden fur and his pure white wings he stood straight in the middle of the courtroom “ you guys summon me to wish that, father, can grand you a blessing to imprison one.... let me say that again ONE demi god, that were have been prison many centuries ago, now tell me why should i do that? “ one of the demi god yelled “ PLEASE I BEG OF YOU SONS OF THE GOD YOU NOW HOW TERRIBLE HIS POWER ARE... WE NEED HIS BLESSING SO WE COULD AT LEAST IMPRISON HIM AGAIN “ Michael looked around the court room then with a sigh “ all of you said that he already escaped, but when is that? “ all of them became silent then paled looked from all of their face confirm that they did not know when. “ from the look at all your face, you guys didn;t know at all, then let this question process your mind, when he already escaped why didn’t he let just say destroy or maybe attack all of you? “ with that Bahamut stood and questioned the angel “ what are you implying sons of God? “ Michael looked around him “ the day Fenrir got imprison is the day my brother cast away from heaven “ all of the demi gods inside the court looked shocked at hearing that statement, Bahamut stutter “w...wha...what are you... “ before he could finish Michael interrupted him “ don’t judge him... that’s what i can tell you, he has a reason for rampaging, let your mind process why did he rampaging, what could he get from destroying the place and for who? that’s all i could say “ with that he turns around and starts walking out, before he could exit the place kitsune yelled “ WAIT... WHAT DO YOU MEAN FOR WHO? “ Michael glanced behind him “ let just say he has a reason.. that reason only father and his other sons know it if you want to know more asks father “ with that he flew out the room leaving a confused state of many demi god.
Babylon Hospital ---
“ so can you explain to me why my best friend seems so attached to you? “ grape asked ralph, after they arrived the paramedics put peanut on a bed and pushed it into the lab room, while grape wanted to follow him the paramedics told her to stay in the waiting room. She wanted to protest but a paw went to her shoulder she looked behind her and saw ralph shake his head, he told her that it will be best if they stay out of the way and let the paramedics treat peanut, she silently grumble and stomp her way to the waiting room, their parent talked to one of the doctors and the doctor reassured them that peanut will be alright so with that they follow grape to the waiting room after that ralph join in. Grape thought it was a good time to ask what happened back there. “ aren’t you going to ask what happened to your brother first? “ ralph looked away in hope she changed the topic, but grape have none of that “ i’m going to ask that after you tell me why you that rarely see peanut or at least talk to him could make him so attached to you? “, for a few second ralph didn’t make a move then jill begin to talk “ officer... i know that it’s making you uncomfortable but we need to know what really happend please “ ralph finally looked at sandwich’s family, still doubting then earl speak up “ look i know it’s weird when a male suddenly attach to you and .... “ ralph interupted “ wait wait wait.. sir it’s not like that “ grape then join in “ i know it’s not very comfortable but.. “ ralph suddenly yelled “ PLEASE IT’S NOT LIKE THAT! “ then a nurse came in and begin scolded the familly and the officer “ please remain to be quiet... this is hospital not a mall “ jill begun apologizing “ i’m verry sorry we’ll be quiet “ then the nurse walk out leaving all of them in akward situation, then earl speak up again “ then what is it? “ ralph sigh and begin to talk well tried to “ my instinct is overprotective of him “ grape didn’t hear that “ wait could you repeat that “ ralph mumble again then grape become annoyed “ dear lord just speak already “ ralph then talk a little louder “ My Instict Is OverProtective of him “ suddenly one of the nurse shush them leaving grape jaw slacked open jill and earl eyes become wide. After for a few second earl cough and jill regain her composure but grape still shocked hearing ralph statement, jill decided to break the tension “ ehm.. could you explain that ? “ ralph face become reddened “ it’s not like that... when i see him my first thought is not an uncontrollable dog but a scared pup fighting for its life my only first instinct is to calm him and protect him... just cradle him until regain his sense “ grape regain her mind and shocked her head “ uhm... so... did it bother you when he become attached to you like nuzzling you or.. “ Ralph quickly interject “ no...no no no actually it’s kinda comforting “ they almost missed what he was saying and they become shocked again leaving the german shepard flustered, grape face become red and without proper explanation she thought something different from what ralph is saying. Then they heard someone running towards them and the nurse yelled “ DON’T RUN “ a pomeranian dog and a black cat, grape looked towards them “ tarot ? sabrina ? what are you doing here ? “ tarot and sabrina catch a breath, after they could breath normal “ i... i.. ‘huff... huff’ ... is peanut alright? “ grape looked shocked and the she realised “ oh yeah your psychic.. yeah he’s okay for now.. but.. “ tarot looked alarmed “ but what ?!” grape tried to explained “ well i don’t know the full story but when i got there he’s not himself.. “ tarot looked confused “ what do you mean? “ grape looked uncomfortable “ he growled at everyone he just bark he didn’t yelled it almost like he went.. “ sabrina interupted “ like he’s a feral.. “ grape and tarot looked at sabrina at the same time “ yeah, but how did you know.. “ sabrina interupted again “ tell me grape does he eyes turn sharp? ” grape eyes become wide “ yes..how did you know? “ sabrina hand rubs her other arm she looked disturbed “ well, peanut came to our house looking for tarot but she had to do something, i tried casually talk to him but it led him answering something he didn’t want to shared, he become furious it makes me tremble for thinking about that “ after hearing that statement they become silent, tarot then break the silenced “ how long did the doctor put him there ? can we see him ? can we.... ‘sniff..sniff’ “ tarot smelled something familiar it came from ralph “ grape.. why officer ralph stay here? “ grape the noticed “ oh yeah... he’s the one that help peanut stay safe “ tarot glared at ralph “ so could you explain why peanut scent is all over your body? “ ralph take a sharp breath, sabrina gasp at tarot accusation, then sabrina tried to calm tarot “ wait! tarot maybe your nose smell something different “ tarot become angry “ NO! I know this scent.. i always knew this cinnamon smell, it belongs to peanut “ there was silent for a minute then ralph take a large breath then “ who are you to him? “ tarot become shocked “ i....i..i’m.. “ ralph interupted “ don’t accused someone like they did something bad... if you really wanted to know why i have that scent it’s because when peanut on feral mode he didn’t trust anyone.. he would attack anyone that approach him... i’m the only one that he trust... for the scent he hide and nuzzled me for comfort.. for everyone he looked like a beast that wanted to rip off their limb.... for me.... it looks like a pup that scared at everything... in my eyes he eyes full of fears and hatred... he just got himself kidnapped, the kidnappers maybe have done something to him. “ after tarot heared ralph expalination she whimpered “ miss... i don,t know what you relationship with him but just so you know my instict is on everprotective mode... believe me i just wanted to bite the face of his kidnappers just to satisfied my instict... but i don’t want to leave him... i just wanted to see him if he is fine then i will be on my way “ with that ralph walk out from the waiting room, before he exit the room something grab his hand “ officer i’m sorry.... for my beahaviour it just that he is important to me but now... “ grape got curious “ tarot.. what happend when peanut went to your house? “ tarot face become sad “ he... “ before she could finish they heard anguish scream, the scream is making their face paled as white as sheet,ralph suddenly run at the source sound until the other realised the scream belongs to one dog “PEANUT!!!”.
Selûne ---
“ so what are you doing here oh so called “ God Of Destruction “ “ inside the ruin stood 7 forgotten god, phoenix born from the ashes of sun, byakko the powefull white tiger, genbu an armor living turtle, seiryu the dragon king of east sea, Hanuman a mischief white monkey, kraken the king of high sea, luna the mother of all wolves, and then before them stood a black wolf, bigger than the powerful white tiger, his blue eyes intimidated all the god inside the ruin, his strong body that can tear anyone apart, none other than the creature that befits the title of the god of destruction 'Fenrir'. “ oh come on~ can an old friend visit all of you ? “ phoenix annoyed at that, Luna huff at that statement “ ‘old friend’ ? i didn’t know that when i live with you for centuries ago we only see as friend “ fenrir just grin “ oh~~ come on.. you know what i mean “ genbu begun to speak “ hmm.... this bring back old memories... before you go rampaging all the heaven realm “ fenrir smiled at that “ welp that’s what happened if you messed with my life “ luna then question the black wolf “ so have you found your mate my ‘ex-mate’ ? ” then fenrir went silent “ luna...” luna interrupted “ fenrir don’t pity me.. i'm the one who wanted the rejection so please i’m not jealous it’s just a joke... i really like your new mate so that’s why i asked if you already found him ? “ fenrir giver her a sad smile “ i know... i’m sorry luna but to answer your question no i haven’t “ seiryu then asked him “ so... do you want to asked for helping you search your mate? “ fenrir shake his head “ no... actually i need a favour “ hanuman then join the conversation “ oh~~ the mighty pup asking a favour hehehehe “ fenrir glared at him “ shut up old man “ the monkey only laughed, seiryu interupted “ so.. what favour? “ fenrir face now looked serious “ i need you guys to find my ‘sister’ “ all of the forgotten god face looked shocked, before anyone can raise their voice fenrir making a stop sign “ all of you guys even the god and his sons now what really happened those centuries ago “ of course they know, the one that the demi god judge to imprison is the false one and the one that needed to imprison is still out there. Fenrir then continued “ i need to find her before the other demi god found me “ the other went silent until the luna face came to realization “ fenrir maybe i know where she is “ fenrir looked at her “ where ? “ luna answered “ this is just a speculation but i need to investigate first “ kraken then interrupted “ i’m going with you luna you need another being that have experienced fighting with another god, not that i have against you going alone but we need to be careful around her “ fenrir then nod his head “ thank you both of you then until then i will keep going to search my mate “ with that fenrir make a dimension hole and leap into it, byakko then raised his voice “ luna, kraken, you are going to find someone that can even manipulate him, you guys are going to search someone that even stronger than the god of destruction itself “ luna and kraken nod their head and start walking out of the ruin.

Mon Jul 02, 2018 7:40 am

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Post Re: is it too dark??
Chapter 6
Peanut dream--

The figure’s that almost looked like a wolf stood highly in front of peanut, with the different height of normal wolves it can be considered much bigger. “now brat.... your looking at something that can end your world”.
Peanut face become white paled, he wanted to scream but he can’t it’s like something is stuck inside his throat, he trembled at the sight of the monster who looked like ready to devour him leaving nothing without bones. “oh? Where’s your so called bravery when i stepped on your stupid feline?”,
something snapped inside peanut, the face that scared of this monster change into hatefull glared. “stupid rouge”
the face that the monster show is suprised “what did you say?”
peanut slowly repeat his word “you.... STUPID ROUGE!!” peanut scream, he’s angry because the monster mocked his best friend, his family.
Then he felt a little earthquake, the beast... that thing is laughing, it laughter booming so loudly that almost hurt his ears, he quickly covers his ear and struggling for the pain, when everything stops the beast still giggling like mad, “hehehe... i like your guts brat “.
peanut regain his composure, he looked at the beast now he can see that thing is a female “ who or what are you? ”
she smiled and walk closer to him “ i is what all the wolves and demi god feared as you can see from my title called “ THE GOD OF DESTRUCTION “ “.
she grinned widely, but peanut looked at her with confused face “ are you lying? “
her eyes become wide but she still grinned at him “oh? And what makes you say that?”
peanut only answered, “shouldn't you be called goddess of destruction?”
she laughs again “oh not only you can put a brave face you also a smart brat“ peanut only looked at her with a disapproving face. Then she suddenly change her size into a normal wolves “now i much prefer this body” as her body change into more lean and beautiful in the eyes of every wolf, then she moves closer to peanut her paw move to touch his face “now tell me who told you the words “rouge”?“
many canines will fall into her charm with this touch but peanut is unaffected, he slaps her hand away “my neighbour wolf, their alpha his name is miles”
she steps back a little and checking his figures to top and bottom " do you know what's that word mean? "
" a wolf who lost his or her mind and destroy everything in their path " peanut glared at her
she smiled at him "and do you know what the cause of that?"
peanut started to think " aren't they already lost their mind?"
she grinned "not exactly~~~", peanut looked confused, then she continued "they are born when someone lost their loved ones"
peanut looked shocked at the information "just think about it... when the one who lost someone they loved their mind started to break that all of their hopes died along the one they love and the only thing they can see is despair"
after hearing that he become saddened "now i feel bad calling you rouge" she looked confused, then peanut face become hard "you are much worse than them"
she looked shocked “you are so much like him”
peanut looked questioningly “who?”
she answered “my brother”
peanut asked again “is he the one with the title?”
she smiled again “you are very sharp and to answer your question is yes he is the one and the only creature that almost killed another god”
peanut interrupted “the one who rampage on the heavenly realm?”
she grinned “ you are well informed “
peanut shocked his head “ i just like reading, and... what do you mean i’m very much like him?”
she smiled but this smiled is very sweet peanut looked shocked when he saw this “before he got that title he is a free spirit who like going on one realm to another realm, he always grinned like a dofus and chase around some creature, but if you messed with his family, friend or even his love one... make sure you checked your head if it still intact”
peanut make a gulp sound and unconsciously grab his neck “so.. i got angry when you mock my friend but that doesn’t mean i am the same as him”
she then move and held his cheek with both of her paws “your eyes... the same blue sky... it almost like you are his reincarnation... i sensed darkness in your soul almost much like him... but that’s impossible.. he still alive and... there is something else inside your soul” peanut face looked perplexed “so bright and warm, so pure.. so innocent that i need to take a look” suddenly peanut felt that his body has been restrained he tried to struggle but it’s no use “ now... little brat let see what kind of soul you have “. Her two index fingers slowly touch his head, then the fingers slowly enter his head like a finger touch the surface of the water. Then he slowly feels immense pain.
Babylon Hospital--
“ what happened !? “ one of the doctors ran when he heard the commotion,
one of the nurses that hold peanut answered “ i don’t know, after he was stable we let him sleep then suddenly he started screaming “, peanut struggle for the immense pain, his body wanted nothing but to curl up and screaming for the pain to stop but the nurses hold his body so that it won’t harm himself.
“nonononononono it hurts! It hurts! It hurts! Please, i beg you stop! Stop! Stop!” peanut pleaded and begged for the pain to stop while he holds the pain, it almost like his body repeatedly stabs by one hundred needles, his body struggles to be moved that one of the nurses almost lost his grip on him.
“dear lord how strong is this pup !?” the nurse keeps holding him down.
The doctor reacted quickly “ give some pain injection !!” the other nurse run and grab some needle and start refil the injection.
“ keep him steady !” the one who brought the injection came closer
“ i can’t!! What kind of food his owner give him !!? “ the one who hold peanut strugle to keep him steady. Then suddenly peanut pushed everyone who holds him,
“oh god, oh god, it hurts, it hurts please ‘sob’ stop ‘sob’” he pleaded but the pain it’s too intense that he tried to claw himself so that he thinks it could make him better.
“ what are you doing keep holding him !?” the doctor yelled on of ther nurse grab him again but he bit his hand, it makes the nurse pull his hand
“ agh! muffins and cookies it “ his hand is bleeding but he’s not going to stop, he tried again and with the help of the other nurse they tried to hold peanut. Suddenly ralph came into the room
“ what are you doing this is an emergency no outsider allowed “ the doctor tried to prevent him to enter. As the nurses still tried to hold him
“let me help i can calm him !” ralph tried to get near peanut
“ don’t he’s to uncontrolled !“ the doctor holding ralph to prevent him to near peanut.
“ trust me i'm the only one that can calm him... please!” ralph pleaded
The doctor looked at him for a second then he release ralph “ suit yourself, but don’t blame me when he bites you “ ralph just nodded and ran to peanut
Peanut dream--
Peanut scream in agony while the one who inflicted the pain searching something that she wanted to know “just a little more and we will find out what kind of soul you have..” then she felt it peanut soul that lies within him. “there we go! Now let’s see..” she touched his soul.
She can feel his soul it almost matched like her brother the one who always played with her when they still a cub, the darkness, betrayal, hatefull, but.. the soul that wanted to protect the one that it’s cherised, then she felt it, the other part of peanut soul the bright soul that warm when it’s touch so innocent, so pure then she relised something “wait... this soul belongs to..” before she could finish her sentence something tried to push her hand out of peanut body. “what the!?”
Babylon Hospital--
Grape and the other huriedly tried to enter the room “ Oh GOD PEANUT !?” grape treid to push trough but she had been held by the doctor
“ you will not go there unless he became stable !” the doctor tried to hold her but she strugle, while her family and friend stop in front of the door
“ LET ME GO !! HE NEEDS ME.. PEANUT!!!” the doctor still prevent her from entering
“ doctor please what’s my baby condition, “ jill asked while her tears slowly ran trough her cheek, while the doctor finally able to hold grape
“ i’m not going to lie but i really don;t know what is happening, at first his condition is normal then suddenly he started screaming and thrasing around but at least someone able to hold him “ the doctor looked behind him and the other looked at his direction, there on the bed ralph is hugging peanut while holding him so that he won’t harm himself
“it’s okay calm down..” he soothes him but peanut still struggling, but it looked like ralph is much stronger. “calm down it’s okay nobody going to hurt you... we’re here to help you” he continued.
The pains came again that it makes peanut suddenly went to struggle again until he can't hold it he opened his jaw and bit ralph shoulder. Ralph hold the pain while keeping peanut steady everyone in the room looked horrified at the scene,
“don't worry it's okay.. bite me if it makes you better don't hold back let me help you peanut” ralph still hold him and peanut still hold his jaw on ralph shoulder, but now one of the nurses quickly inject the drug on peanut neck

Peanut dream--
“oh... so that’s why you can push me out from your soul...” she then stepped back, after that the pain peanut feels it’s gone and he felt relieved that his body went limp on the floor after he holds the pain. “you are one interesting brat” she tried to reach him again until she felt something
“SACRED ARROW!” she dodges the incoming arrow that almost hit her neck, she jumps back and prepares for another incoming attack
A white wolf apear beside peanut, while peanut is unconscious the white wolf grab him and put him on a great distance between the black wolf. “isn’t this a litlle childish of you to pick on a little pup hel ?”
The black wolf on laughed “well,well what do we have here... my ex-sister in law came to visit me”. Her shadow slightly turns into some tentacle-like shape that surrounds her body keeping her from any harm.
Luna then sneered at her “ i knew something is wrong when i looked into the kitsune board game, one of his characters make an unpleasant aura”
Hel then grinned “oh that chunning brat how is he? Still alive i presume? Hehehee” she then tried to take a step but luna preapred to shoot her
“take another step and i will shoot you!” she aims hel chest and prepared to release the arrow
“oh come you don't stand a chance against me if in the past i agree your power match me but now with you alone?... i don't think so~~~” hel grinned wickedly then she takes another step
“Starstorm!” she shoots her arrow in the air than many star shape arrows fallen from the sky like a Starfall, hel able to dodge this but “ i know i can’t match you right now but who said i’m alone?”.
Hel looked at her feet there's a trail mark she leaves behind while she dodges luna arrow then she looked where the first spot he dodge luna arrow, she spotted a big X mark “darn it”
Suddenly she blinks into the X mark unwillingly “WATER TORRENT!” beneath her feet some waster started gathering bellow her then the water rise and blow her away.
“DARK PACT” the tentacle shape surround her and explode, she escaped from the impact, she takes a huge step back and makes a crouch stand, she looked around and found the one who summons the water “ looks like you bring the king with you “
A human shape came beside luna an old man with black beard with his admiral suit he stands tall. “you still can run away after that hit you witch!”
Hel look at the two of them “looks like i'm at disadvantage.. but i got what i needed” she then slowly sink into her shadow
“ i won't let you get away “ luna tried to take an aim but she felt something holding her, she looked at her shadow and found a tentacle shape is holding her hand and neck
“if you still have the string of a mates you can beat me with the king but with your condition now it’s unlikely posible to defeat me.. so with that good bye ex-sister in law” hel laughed and dissapear into her shadow
“darn it she got away” luna become frustated, then she felt a hand on her shoulder
“don't let her provoke you it is best that she is retreating i don't know what will happen if she continued to fight us” kraken then move aside and looked at peanut body that unconsciously on the ground. “what does she want with this pup?”.
Luna only shooked her head “ i don't know but i felt better knowing this child is safe”
Kraken laugh “ you always have a soft spot on children”
Luna smiled at that “ i still can't get used with this form of yours “
Kraken shook his head “believe me if we started a fight i have a better chance at this form than my giant one”
Luna nodded “for now let’s leave him, he started to regain concious”
Kraken “right behind you lass”
Babylon hospital--
He felt something, a metalic taste rolled on his tounge and his teeth is biting something, when his mind resurfaced he smelled something, the same smelled that relaxed him but there’s something else,it’s so strong, he felt something on his neck but he only focused on the smelled, until he realised he bit someone, his body started to tremble he quickly tried to retract his jaw but he felt a paw behind his head, “it’s okay... calm down... your safe”. Ralph still hold him and reasured him at the same time.
He looked in front of him, 'grape,mom,dad' he can see tarot and sabrina too but on the other hand 'then who is this?'. He slowly opens his jaw.he harm this person, and it pains him that he wanted to cry, tears slowly gathered on his eyes as he looked at the one he bites.
“are you okay now?” ralph asked him, peanut looked surprised the one that he bites is non-other the leader of k9 force. tears slowly flow beside his cheek.. ralph face frowned and he becomes more worried “ why are you crying? Are you hurt!?” his hand wipe the tears on peanut face
“ lay him down, let him rest” the doctor ordered him, ralph slowly put his body on the bed. The doctor walks near them and check peanut condition. While the nurse check ralph shoulder, grape quickly gets beside the bed.
“you dum dum.. you make us worried you know” grape cried in relived after peanut calms down, jill cried silently on earl shoulder, tarot and sabrina looked worried at him.
“he’s going to be okay looks like his body didn’t get any injured when he struggles” the doctor done checking him. “ now let’s treat that shoulder shall we?” the doctor looked disapprovingly at ralph, while the dog only smiled sheepishly.
“hey ralph” grape called him, ralph looked at her. “thank you” she smiled greatfully at him.
“your welcome” he smiled back, getting down from the bed.
Before getting down peanut quickly grab his paw, ralph looked quetionly at him. peanut tried to talk but he looked strugle to say a word “ i....i...i a...m ..” ralph smiled at him and rub his head
“it’s okay pup it’s just a scratch” ralph smiled at him, but it only make peanut cry harder, he tried to speak again but only in whispered “i’m sorry, i’m sorry” he repeatedly say those word while the tears keep flowing out in his eyes.
Ralph grinned “ i’ll check on you again later pup” he walks out from the room but before he could get out peanut whispered again and it makes ralph smiled happily “ thank you...”
Heaven courtroom
Once the gathering is done stood one demigod that still hadn’t left the room, “ what’s does he mean “ the same day his brother cast away “ “
after the angel left bahamut still thinking what the angel is saying . Then kitsune enter the throne room “ Bahamut.. i finished with the task “
bahamut looked at him “ thank you kitsune, sorry for giving it so suddenly “
kitsune just shook his head “ it’s alright one of my scouts told me that he’s in the place when he first when berserk “
bahamut nodded “ and the other task ? ”.
kitsune then step aside from the door “ as you can see they already accepted the request “
then the two figured of a wolf shaped enter the room, one has a muscular body and the other has lean figured. a male and a female wolf, “ well... if that is the request i have no reason to decline “ the female said,
“ but i didn’t know that this request need this ice queen, “ the male said,
“ shut up you meathead if the request only needs me you can just go home and work out that over tight muscle “ the female mocked.
“ that’s really a cold word dear sister, “ the male said.
“ i still need to bring my title my dear brother “
then bahamut step in “ enough!, i know this has been a long time for you guys to see each other, but can i have your cooperation? “,
the wolves looked at him “ of course, but i hope you still hold the end of the deal won;t you? “ the male said
“ of course if the deal is broken then you know what will happen right ? “ the female said, then the two of them leaked a dark aura that almost make kitsune and bahamut trembled.
“ i will keep the deal if you keep our deal, “ said bahamut .
They nodded “ well with that, let’s meet him, shall we? “
the male said “ to our father favourite place “ the female continued. Then the both of them turn around exiting the room and the other two followed them, “ TO THE GARDEN OF EDEN “.

Thu Aug 23, 2018 7:31 am

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Post Re: is it too dark??
Chapter 7
Babylon hospital
After the commotion peanut finally went back to slumber after the drugs take effect, while peanut asleep jill and earl went outside to find some food for grape and the others. The room felt quite, too quiet the only sound that can be heard is peanut whining and whimper, ‘cute.. still sleeping like a pup’ is what grape thinking right now until she finally asked “ are you and peanut broke up?”
tarot looked shocked at the question “wha.. ye..s ...i mean.. n..o i mean maybe... i....” tarot become panic her body tremble as she tries to find the right answer
“ tarot calm down! I’m only asking don’t panic” grape said, sabrina grab tarot paw to calm her down
Tarot takes a deep breath and finally, she tried to answer “ i.. i really don’t know... but i.. i mean he thinks we already broke up but..” tarot went silent but grape tried to urge her to continued “ but? “ tarot looked at her “ i don’t want that “ tarot whimpered, sabrina looked at her mentor and felt pity
Sabrina finally said something “ grape, i think we need to change the subject, tarot has a lot of minds right now “ grape only nodded “ so... what happened to peanut?” sabrina asked
Grape looked confused “ i thought you guys know what happened to him?” sabrina and tarot looked confused at her, “ did you even see what is happening him? his abnormal strength when the nurse holding him? his in pain while none of his body seems to be injured?”
Tarot finally took the hint “ are you saying ‘The spirits’ did this? ” sabrina face looked shocked “ but ‘the spirits’ cannot harm us it’s in the rule” tarot explained
Grape looked annoyed “ well the big stupid bird and your dragon seems to have a different mind “
Tarot shooked her head “ they are the demigod and no they can not interfere with mortal fate “
“what’s that supposed to mean? “ grape asked
Tarot tried to explain “ ‘the spirits’ are our guides.. they can’t harm us.. not directly but they won’t.. there are rules for those who harm the living being.. but for the demigod, they are called trials”
Grape becomes more confused “ wha... what do you mean by trials? “
Sabrina interfered “ it’s the same like when we went to the temple... after so many traps.. hardship.. etc... there is a price for those who succeed the trial ”
Grape looked serious “ and the price is..??”
Tarot explained again “ it depends... sometimes a bless, a miracle or a fortune but sometimes those trial can lead to something more devious ways... the temple that we visited belongs to Pete the big stupid bird you were just said while demigod can’t touch us mortal directly but they can manipulate them... sometimes to test the worth of a mortal or they own amusent.. for pete... well you can guess when we back at the temple”
Grape began to-shivered “ yeah... we almost called a satan in that temple “ grape shocked her body “ but the remaining mystery is what happened to peanut.. are you telling me he’s hiding something after we went to the temple?”
Tarot looked uncomfortable “ not ‘hiding’ but maybe he didn't know what really happened”
Grape shooked her head and she takes a seat near peanut bed “ well... we won’t know unless he tells us directly “
Sabrine looked at her and find herself a place to sit while tarot looked at grape with questioning looked “ grape... i.. want to ask something “
Grape looked at her “ what is it? ”
Tarot eyes become hard “ tell me the truth.. what is the relationship between officer ralph and peanut? “
Grape looked at her ‘is she jealous?’ “ nothing.. that’s what i can tell you, you have to ask that to himself.. peanut never hang around with the k9 unit except for sabrina boyfriend “Sabrina face become flustered “ but now i think officer ralph is kinda like peanut saviour? Maybe.. i think?”
Tarot looked annoyed “ that doesn’t mean you can nuzzle him just because you save him “ sabrina and grape looked at her and thinking ‘ she definitely jealous ‘
Sabrina corrected her “ ralph is not the one who nuzzle peanut it the other way around “
Tarot become more annoyed “ I KNOW BUT THAT’S MAKES ME MORE ANNOYED!! “
One of the nurses came inside “ if you guys still talk loudly i will gladly kick all of you out “
They apologized at the nurse, after the nurse left they went back to the topic. Sabrina began to talk “ tarot.. maybe we should talk to peanut first before we make another accusation right?”
Tarot just sighed and nodded her head, so they wait until peanut wakes up.
The ??? Realm
No one knows what’s this realm even the most powerful demigod can’t enter or search this realm, some said that the one that ever been in this realm or can enter is the first human, the god sons, and the devil himself. Michael enters the realm while all of his brothers waiting for his return his appearance change again into a beautiful human that have white wings on his back, even his brother is beautiful that no one can describe the beauty of the angel. “ welcome back brother “ one of his brother called Azrael welcoming him.
“ i’m back brothers.. and ‘father’ “ Michael said as he walked closer to where his brothers stand. Then he proceeds to bow before his father.
“ hello my child welcome back “ his ‘father’ welcome him, his appearance only a light of entity. He feels that something is bothering Michael and so he ask “ my child it seems something is bothering you, would you kindly tell me what is it that bothers you? “
Michael body become stiffen he didn’t even know where to start “ i’m sorry father.. i didn’t know where to start but forgive me for assuming you but i think you already know everything that bothering me from the start “
His father only answer “ yes.. i know everything i know what’s bothering you but i wanted you to tell me... i wanted you to tell me directly so that the weight you carry can be lighter “
Michael smiled “ thank you, father... it’s about lucifer” when he said that name all of his brothers become tense “ our brother always in my mind... the day you banish him is the day i question myself “ Michael stood and looked at his father “ why did he do it? Why he chose him? why did he agree? Why.... “ Michael body begun to tremble “ why didn't i do anything? “
His brothers feel sadness on him, father only said “ you feel guilty “ as he looked at his children “ the question is why do you feel guilty? “ he question Michael
“ he’s the most innocence angel if i said so myself.. he always follows your order without question... he believes us.. and yet... “ Michael eyes become hard “ when he found him... “ all of them know what’s he talking about as he becomes furious. “ WHY did he just HAVE to..... have.. to “ his body started to relax as the tears stream on his face “ why did he have to fall in love“.
Silenced, his brothers wanted to comfort him but they didn’t dare sympathy is all they can give to him, his father started to talk “ i never forbade you to love someone “
Michael started to cried “ that’s the thing! I should have explained or helped him when he feels this emotion, because of it he chooses him and get himself in trouble, after you give him your punishment i only stood there and watch as he slowly falls from heaven...” his tears drop below him “ i should stand by his side and help him explained himself and yet... “ all of his brothers started to cry on by one as he feels his emotion
Father started to talk again “ are you angry at me for banishing your brother ?”
Michael shooked himself “NO... of course not father.. it’s just i wish you give him a chance to redeem himself rather than banish him... i only wish that we can start from beginning again when all of us even lucifer served you”
Father answered him “ i never said that he could not come back “
Michael and his brothers become shocked “ wait.. wha..!?”
Father calmly to ask his children “my children since when did i said that lucifer can not go back to heaven? “
One of his brother Gabriel started to answered “ i’m sorry father but when you said banished we thought he could not came back “
Father started to question again “ and all of you just assumed ?”
All of his children nodded, Michael then started to ask “ but if he can come back why did you make us assume that he could not come back?”
Their father warmly laugh “ha ha ha.. my child i give you all freedom to chose i never interfered of what you choosen.. but only i can judge and give punishment “
Michael then looked at his father with determination eyes “ father may i request something? “
His father calmly answered “ my children i told you that you have freedom choose you do not need my permission “
Michael explained “ at least it will calm my heart when i have your permission “
Father only laughed “ ha ha ha.. alright than.. what is your request?”
Michael calmly said “ to looked for our brother “ all of his brothers become surprised when he said that. Then Gabriel suddenly yelled “ father! Please let me help brother Michael to find our brother too “ Michael looked shocked as he never thought that his brothers would want to help him.
Father calmly answered “ alright i give you two my permission.. but you will come when i give you a duty “
Both Michael and Gabriel answered “ yes father “ they started to walk away until they heard their brothers yelled “ Michael, Gabriel please bring our brother back “
Michael and Gabriel smiled and they looked each other and nodded, their wings spread out and they started to fly away from the realm. In the middle of their journey, Gabriel started to asked “ brother Michael where do we find our brother? “
Michael started to think “ we need someone with a strong bond to help us search him, and the only one who can find him is..”
Then Gabriel interrupted him “ the one he falls in love “
Michael nodded “ we need to find that wolf
Peanut dream
Darkness.. it’s all peanut can see.. he feels his body floating, his body felt lighter.. he didn’t care anymore.. no one here.. no one can harm him anymore.. but... he felt lonely, then he felt a warm air surrounding him, a light started to shine brightly.. then he can hear a voice.. multiple voices..
" when my father created me he told me that i could do anything but he said that my job is a protector “ the sound come from the light orb that approaches peanut, then another voice can be heard
” the one that created me told me that my whole life is only to be a weapon “ the sound comes from the dark orb as it approaches peanut. The two orbs started circling peanut.
“ when father order me to protect our family i’m happily served him with all my brothers “ the light orb continued “ my creator wanted me to kill along with my brother and sister “ it looked like the two orbs telling him something.
“ father told me he always proud all the creation that he made “
“ even though i served my creator.. he betrayed me “
“ i feel warm, happiness, trust “
“ i feel anger, sadness, betrayal “
“ i never question my father decision “
“ i will never trust my creator “
“ one day my father ordered me to protect a place “
“ after i run from the cage that locked me “
the two orbs then said the same thing “ I met him.. “
“ a dark lonely and sad creature“
“ a bright warm and happiness “
“ at first he tried to attack me “
“ i tried to attack him “
“ my job is to protect the place, he didn’t try to ruin this place so i never fight back “
“ i tried to as he dodged every attack, he never fights back it makes me curious “
“ as he stopped i tried to talk “
“ he talk to me... as we talk i let my guard down “
“ we talk.. we didn’t care how long we talk “
“ i felt happy.. “
“ alas i need to return home “
“ he wanted to go.. i become panic “
“ i promised him that i will come back “
“ he promises me... and he comes back”
“ i went back doing my duty and talk with him “
“ i felt warm.. feeling that long forgotten “
“every time i talked to him my heart starts beating fast “
“ i don’t want to look at anyone else except him “
“ i felt longing every time i need to go back “
“ i felt lonely every time he went back “
“ until i learned what’s my feeling called “
“ i never thought that me the living weapon will have this feeling “
the two orbs slowly change shape.. “LOVE”
“ please, help me !”
“ i wanted to search him! “
“ my home to return to “
“ my happiness and warm place “
“ the only one that can complete me “
“ the only one that understands me "
Then two different paw grab peanut cheeks “ MY SOULMATE”

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Chapter 8
Babylon Hospital~~
After all the ruckus ralph lie down on the bed while the doctor tried to patch his shoulder,“ there… all patch up “ said the doctor, “ i hope your not doing anything like that again !” the doctor eyes become stern, ralph only smile sheepishly as he nods his head
“ don’t worry doctor is not going to happen next time” ralph said as he tried to stand up, the doctor glared at him “ next time?! “
ralph become panicked as he stumbled his word “ well... i.. mean... i ... well... it’s... “ the doctor raised his hand in front of ralph face to stop him from speaking “ just... just don’t pull a stunt like that again “
ralph only shooked his head “ i can’t promise that “ the doctor help him to stand as they walked out together, the walk beside each other, until one of them raised a question “ i’m sorry but you never mention your name doctor.. ? “ as ralph asked the question
the doctor become surprised “ oh do i? Sorry about that my names erick “ ralph looked curiously at this doctor, his short black hair, his black eyes, his average height and how he interacts with ralph, he could tell that this doctor is still young and have a lot of experience with patience.
“ nice too meet you doctor erick, my names ralph “ ralph keep walking beside erick, he wanted to ask something but it might be rude
“ you wanted to asked if i'm new here correct? “ erick glanced at him, ralph looked at him and he nodded his head “ you are correct only been here about a month? I forgot”
“ when did you move here ?” ralph keep his pace with erick, erick looked at ralph body language and he can predict that ralph is anxious
“ are you really asking that out of curiosity or you just wanted to change subject ? “ erick asked, ralph looked at another direction “ both... i think “. Erick only grinned at that
“ the pup is fine there are no injuries that could harm him “ erick stopped at the front desk, ralph sighed in relief “ his name is peanut “, erick is talking with a female nurse as he tried to ask something.
Then he looked at ralph “ oh i knew that.. “ the nurse give him an envelope he takes it and walked away, ralph followed him “ how do you know what i’m going to asked? “ erick open the envelope and see what inside of it
“ after that scene... is hard not to noticed how your behaviour towards him “ ralph blushed a little “ and you already now that i’m going to his room that’s why you are following me “ ralph looked anywhere besides erick
Erick closed the envelope as he went inside the lift, ralph followed him too “ what’s in that envelope? “ ralph went beside him, erick looked at him “ it supposed to be doctor-patient confidential but i’ll make some exception for you “ ercik grinned again, ralph looked curious
“ this is the pup health record “ he raised the enveloped as he tried to explain “ i wanted to know his record before going in his room again “
Ralph become confused “ why? “ erick glared at him “ do i need to check your head too? Have you seen his strength? My THREE nurse can’t even hold him, but you.... “ he pointed his finger at ralph “ you could easily hold him even with the cost of your shoulder “ the doctor suddenly pushed the emergency stop button, the lift light become dim and the lift suddenly stop “ so would you like to explain what is happening ? even in his record there is no behaviour like that “
Ralph only looked as erick breath become heavy, ralph is in deep thinking, of course, he knew that something is wrong with peanut but his instinct just denied the difference, ‘what’s exactly is happening?’ until ralph realised something “ you.... you have seen something like this didn;t you?”
Erick took a deep breath “ the last time i see something like that was after the riot in russian “ ralph listened carefully as he absorbed this information “ i only just begin my job as a surgeon, most of the time the people that came is missing part of their body, some pets too, until i saw two bulldogs came in, the female carried the wounded male “ the doctor slide down as he takes a sit ralph joining him “ i rushed with other nurses to carried the wounded inside the surgery room, the female yelled something we ignored that until it’s too late “ both of erick hand went to cover his face “ the male is rampaging costing one of the nurses lived “
Ralph asked “ what happened?” erick glanced at him “ the male knock her, making her flew across the room, until she got impaled in one of the glass windows “ erick stop for a minute ralph patiently wait him “ i tried to save her but.... she already bleeding out.. the male still in rampage and many of the guard couldn’t stop him.. until the female came rushing in.. i yelled her to stop but as she went in front of him he stops... he just looked at her and stop “
Ralph looked at the doctor, “ your not angry at him, your angry of something else” the doctor looked at him “ after three days i asked one of the translators come to aid me for some questioning with the female... than i found out something horrible “ erick gripped his hand “ that dog is one of the lab test to make a living weapon.. accepting order without question.. “erick face become red “THEY MAKE A LIVING BEING TO BECOME A WEAPON” erick then calm down “ but... there’s something else they need something or someone that can make them sane.. a suppressor...”
Ralph thought for a second “ what do they call? “ erick face become grim “ NOVICHOK “ ralph body shuddered after hearing that name “ are you saying peanut might be one of them? “ erick glanced at ralph “ i thought you knew? “ ralph only shooked his head
Erick sighed then pushed the button once more the lift light back on and the lift start again “ this becomes more complex than just random kidnapping “ ralph scratch his head, erick just nod “ we need to investigate the answer “
Ralph glared at him “ you mean the police will investigate the answer “ erick glared back “ it’s my duty to help the patient “ ralph than argued “ and it’s the policed duty to arrest and secure “ both of them glared each other, until erick back down “ fine... at least you guys need me “ the lift make a sound, the door open and erick went out followed by ralph
“ temporarily..” ralph corrected, erick looked at ralph body language again, Ralph body tremble and erick heard his growl “ don’t make a scene in here” ralph keeping his pace “ i can't help it “ erick stop in front of the room “ if it's not him you might not be that furious “ ralph looked beside him “ what do you mean ?” erick knocked the door “ you are a k9 you are not supposed to be this dense” then both of them enter the room
Selûne ---
“ it seems your hunch is correct isn’t luna? “ Phoenix said as he welcomes luna and Kraken, “it seems that the two of you have something to say” luna and Kraken stepped in the middle of the ruin as the other forgotten god circled them.
“ that witch resides on a mortal “ kraken said as he body transform back into a big tentacle one “ i never have gotten used of that body, “ Kraken said.

“ what do you mean? “ Seiryu asked as he surprised at what he hearing
“ she is inside on a mortal but we already push her out before the host lost his mind “ luna mood seems to worsen, hanuman noticed this
“ now, now... what’s really happened? Hanuman asked as Luna glared at him, the monkey is sweating as his eyes lock with her, “erm... luna ... why are you getting angry at me?” hanuman become restless as he tried to step back.
“ she’s mad because the host is still a pup in her eyes “ Kraken explained, Luna seems to disagree
“ HE IS A PUP!! “ Luna yelled, the others now understand. Luna the mother of all wolves, of course, she’s furious when a pup is been mistreated.
“ he is a dog “ Kraken stated, Luna then glared at him
“ SO WHAT? HE’S STILL A PUP “ Luna growl, Kraken slowly back up then Byakko stand beside him and whispered, “ do not anger the mother...” Kraken gulped and nod his head “ you don’t need to tell me twice “ but it seems Luna heard they're whispered
“EXCUSE ME!!” Luna marched at them, the two of them quickly hide behind Genbu
“ guys...even though my shell is powerful i don’t think it can withstand her anger ” Genbu said as he tried to shake two of them.
“ ENOUGH.... luna please calm down... we need to get back on the main topic “ phoenix yelled luna just huff and went back to the centre followed by Kraken
“ ehem.. so as i said.. that witch reside on a do...” Luna glared at the Kraken “ emm.. i mean a pup.. but we don’t know what she’s looking for “
“ does she hurt the pup ?” Phoenix asked, Kraken wanted to answer but Luna already beat him to it
“ YES... I MEAN I KNOW SHE IS A LUNATIC BUT WHEN SHE ALMOST TRIED TO RIP THE PUP SOUL..” Hanuman tried to stop her “ whoa whoa whoa.... what do you mean? “
Luna sighed “ she touched the pup soul... it deep enough to make the pup suffer.. we stop her before she touches his core “
Everybody went silent until Genbu asked “ why did she reside in the pup in the first place? “
“whatever it is i don’t like it “ Luna said, Seiryu asked “ should we tell Fenrir? “ Luna disapproved
“ and what? So that he can interrogate the pup and make him scared for life? “ Luna looked sharp as he looked at Seiryu
“ well we need someone to watch over the pup i have a feeling the witch is still targeting that pup “ Kraken suggest, Luna then wagged her tail “ I VOLUNTEERED “ she raised her hand
“ okay.. we need another volunteer “ Phoenix said, everyone looked each other until someone raised his voice
“ i will go “ Seiryu said, everybody went shocked when he said that
“ are you sure Seiryu?” Phoenix asked, Seiryu just nod his head. “ well i hope you two have a safe trip “ then Phoenix sent a mindlink at seiryu ‘brother what are you planning’ they looked each other
‘ i have a bad feeling about this brother that’s why i wish to followed luna ‘ Seiryu said, they looked at Luna at the same time making her confused
“ why are you guys looking at me like that ?” Luna asked, Seiryuu approach her “ don’t worry, we need to get going “ luna wagged her tail and run outside leaving Seiryu behind
“ well there goes her mother instinct “ hanuman chuckled. Seiryu started to followed luna while the others discuss another topic whether they tell Fenrir or they face the wrath of Luna. When they think about it maybe facing Fenrir is much safer than her.
Garden of Eden~~
Eden the place where the first man and woman, Adam and Eve, were created by God and lived until they fell and were expelled, a paradise with a tree that full of delicious fruits also the tree that produces the forbidden fruits, The tree of Knowledge of Good and Evil. Under that tree stood a lone wolf that reminisces the past, the place where they first met. Fenrir stood there watching the scenery, “ where are you... mate “.
He heard a footstep, many footsteps. “ so this is where you are father “ he looked behind him as he saw something that moves his heart, his son and daughter “Sköll ...Hati “ they started to approach him
“ father... “Sköll started to say something
“ we... “ Hati continued
“ Miss you... “ they said together as they leap and hug him, he laughed as he embraced them
Until he heard someone else “ this.... is not what i expected when i saw the GOD OF DESTRUCTION “ kitsune started to approach them followed by Bahamut
well... what you look at that... my pups finally making a friend Fenrir joke, his children started to get irritated
“ they are not our friends “ they said together, Fenrir just laughed
“ well what do i owe a pleasure meeting you King of Judgement? “ Fenrir asked as he approached the two of them
“ we did not seek a fight... we just wanted to talked “ Kitsune said, Fenrir become confused “ well that’s a first “ they knew what he meant, in the past everyone that meeting him always asking for a fights
“ we recently just confirm that maybe we ... no, I misjudge you “ Bahamut said as he looked straight at Fenrir, “ so even though you still have grudge against us i understand but i am indeed felt regret for that i apologize, “ Bahamut said as he lowers his head at Fenrir.
Fenrir just looked at him with a bored face “ i accept... but.... i still have some grudge against some of youFenrir release a terrifying aura, Kitsune tremble as he felt his leg couldn’t support his body
Fenrir supressed his aura Bahamut and Kitsune sighed in relieved but for his children, they felt longing.
Kitsune took a long breath “ sir... uhm... “ Kitsune fidgeted, Bahamut knew that feeling even the cunning fox can’t handle that wolf.
Fenrir scratched his head “ just call my name and be done with it “ as he looked annoyed
Kitsune jumped a little “ we just wanted to ask if you could come with us? ” he felt that Fenrir glared at him
“Father. “Sköll began to talk
“ we made a deal.. “ Hati continued
Sköll “ that they shall not Bring you as Prisoner “
Hati “ but as a guest, if they broke the deal “
Sköll and Hati said together “we will have their HEAD “
Fenrir looked at his Children, they looked or maybe beg at him that he should just follow them, it looked like he has a different mind
even though that’s tempting.. i can’t his children looked surprised “ I’m looking for someone...
Kitsune and Bahamut looked at each other “ is it your sister? “ his children looked shocked both of them said “ aunt Hel?”
Fenrir just shooked his head “ no..... “ his children felt his sadness until they realised who’s he talking about
Sköll “ oh... it’s him “ he glared bellow him, his sister looked at him but she knew how he felt even though they haven’t met for a long time
Hati “Sköll ..... “ she looked at him with a pity, Fenrir face become grim he couldn't blame his son the last time he saw his children was the time when he went mad because Sköll knew what really happened.
I’m sorry Sköll ...Fenrir apologize, Sköll face become hardened as he tears away from his father
“ why?... after all these years “ Sköll gritted his teeth, Fenrir fells sad.
“ after what he has done to you... “Sköll face become furious
after he saved me?Fenrir said
“ WHAT KIND OF MATE SAVE HIS BELOVED AND MAKE THEM SEE HOW HE DIED ON FRONT OF THEM “ Sköll face become red as wrath clouded his mind.
Sköll... he’s not dead,Fenrir said
“ what? You think just because he’s been banished he’s not perished? “Sköll argued
Fenrir eyes become wide “ what are you talking about Sköll his body trembled
Bahamut interrupted them “ wait.... did you guys talked about... “
Sköll huffed “ who else... ‘Lucifer’ “, Kitsune and Bahamut face become shocked they didn't knew that Fenrir the God of Destruction mate is the fallen angel itself.
Fenrir shouted “ WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT Sköll... “ his face couldn't handle what his son said
Sköll face become looked guilty as he said “ the day that he banished i saw him falling down from the heaven..” all of them become silent as they hear his story
“ the next thing i know his body consumed by fire and split into two “ Fenrir couldn’t handle the truth as he knee gave up and he falls down to the ground crying his heart out.
Hati just stood there shocked at what she heard, Kitsune and Bahamut gaped as they couldn’t handle the information. Sköll looked at his father, the only one that saw after Lucifer was banished was only him while the other tried to subdued his father until they heard a flapping sound
Impudent child..... how dare you to assume our father killed our brother ” before they stood a buck and a lynx as their white wings spread out behind them.
you shall share your knowledge of what you have seen “ the buck said
After they see this Bahamut only said one name “ Michael....”

8 chapters... and i still haven’t improved my grammar -_- ... well, what do you guys think? Could you give me an opinion or maybe which one is my mistake?... thank you..

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Well other than the grammar, I think that this chapter and the previous ones you wrote came out really awesome!


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why thank you Dayzee.... but i never though that i would make this story more complex than the one that i wanted it to happend (-_-")

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Is it alright for you to do what?


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well.... if i stick on my original plot the story become weirder than this... :? :?

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If you stick around to know me long enough, you will know that I'm weird.


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Chapter 9

Garden of Eden~~
“Well? What are you waiting?” Michael asked as he glared down at Sköll. All of them surprised as the sons of the god came, except Fenrir, he cried on his knee as he couldn’t accept what his son trying to tell him. Gabriel tried to looked at the situation and surprised at what he saw.
“ brother.... is that Fenrir? “ Michael looked at what his brother looked at and suddenly he realised that the one who held the title of ‘Destruction’ cried in sorrow, who wouldn’t? As someone told you the one who you loved perished without a traced.
“ Bahamut what are they doing in here? “ whispered Kitsune as Bahamut shooked his head
“ i don’t know... but it looks like things are becoming more complicated “ as Bahamut Explained
“ oh look at that... the goody goody angel come to visit us” mocked Sköll as he snarled at them, Gabriel hissed back
“ you don’t have to worry little ‘pup’ me and my brother just wanted to meet your father “ Gabriel and Sköll stared at each other and ready to bite each other throat. But Bahamut interfered
“ Michael what are you doing in here? “ as Bahamut asked Michael
“ At first we wanted to ask our fallen brother beloved one if he does know where our brother is, but it looked like he doesn’t know “ Michael looked down at Fenrir as he couldn’t believe what he saw “even though he has ‘that’ title he can still feel sadness” as the buck looked at him with pity
“ but now it looks like this ‘pup’ knew what happened to our beloved brother “ as the Lynx tried to provoke Sköll and it worked
“ OH I SHOW YOU WHO ‘PUP’ OLD MAN “ as Sköll lunged toward Gabriel, but someone intercepts him
“ stay down you lug don’t get provoked are you becoming more stupid after we went to our hunt?” as Hati growled at him
“ i’m sorry little one my head is limited “ the lynx grinned, Bahamut tried to help Hati to blocked the canine and feline, Kitsune tried to help too. Until they heard a snapped
“ ENOUGH “ as Michael and Fenrir shout at them, Michael looked dissaproved at his brother while Fenrir still on his knee as his paws dug out the ground below him, he looked angry.. no, the right word is furious. Both of them released an intimidating aura as the other freeze on the spot.
“brother, stop provoking him “ the buck couldn’t believe what his brother doing as he shook his head ” Sköll i’m sorry for my brother but we may need your help “Sköll looked run a marathon.
“ and why should i? “ as he asked the buck
” Sköll !! “ Fenrir shout, Sköll eyes become wide as he saw his father
“ i have enough of this childish game you will tell ‘ME’ what happened to Lucifer... “ as Fenrir furiously looked at Sköll.
Sköll and Hati whimpered as they saw their father, Fenrir looked hurt at what he saw but this is not the time.
Hati tried to talk “ fa.. father.. please...”, Bahamut and Kitsune face become pure white, even Gabriel looked uncomfortable, Fenrir sighed and he looked at Michael as he raised a brow
Then the intimidating aura from both of them disappeared. Sköll still whimpering and it hurts Fenrir more.
Fenrir talk slowly “Sköll please.... tell me what happened to him... “ as he couldn’t help feeling more sorrow, Sköll looked at his father as his ear fell down on his head then he looked at both of the angels.
“so.... what do you want to know?”
Grocery store~~
While Grape and the others bickering in the hospital two humans went to find a meal for their children, while the woman felt anxious, the man keeping composed,
“ jill... calm down.. “ earl tried to calm his wife while he’s taking some of the pet food
“ calm down??? CALM DOWN!!?? “ Jill started to freak out, “ HOW CAN YOU SAY THAT AFTER SEEING OUR BOY!!??? “ she yelled at her husband gaining attention the other shopper
“ ‘sigh’ jill..... “ earl shook his head, he wanted to calm her but she interrupted
“ JILL!! “ earl shouted, she becomes shocked when her husband yelled at her, of all her life when she married her husband never has he ever shouted at her. She looked at his face, the face that hides the pain. Now she knew that this incident affects her husband more than she knew.
“ i...i...i’m....” tears gathered around her eyes as he looked at her husband, the pain when she looked at her child, her son, struggled for unknown pain, it feels like her heart has been stab by a knife. Earl face finally break as he looked at her with the eyes full of pain, he gently brought her to his chest and there she finally cried in his chest. The others shoppers looked at them with a pity and started to walked away one by one to leave them alone
“ i know it pains you as much as it pains me to see him like this... but we need to calm ourself... he needs us... no.... peanut and grape need us.. “ earl tried to reassure his wife, “ he’s fine... the doctor said that he’s going to be alright and that's good right? “ he asked her
She nods her head and started to wipe her tears, “ i know that... but, i can’t help it.. it’s.... it’s... “ she scrambled her words
Her husband raised an eye, “ IT”S MOTHER INSTINCT OKAY....” she explained, well... tried to.
His husband grinned “ really? Mother instinct? “ she started to blush as she slapped his shoulder
“ you know what i meant.. “ she glared at him as he rubs his shoulder where jill hit him
“ you spoiled him too much “ he chuckled
“ ‘humpf’... who grant their wish went we went to the zoo? “ she looked away from him, he started grinning at her wife and he pulls her to him, jills surprised at this
“ what are you doing... no... don’t hahaha “ she started to laugh as tickle sensation she felt when her husband kissed her neck as she struggled to get free, the others shoppers looked at them again as they smiled at the married couple.
He let her go as she turns around and snakes her hand around her husband neck “ now i take it you felt happy again? “ Earl asked her, she giggled and kissed her husband
“ don’t you ever do that again... “ she smiled lovingly at her husband, she let her arms go “ c’mon dear, peanut and the others might be starving when he wakes up “ Jill started to drag her husband as the other giggled at the silly couple
Babylon Hospital~~
A knocking sound making grape and the other looked at the door, Erick came inside followed by Ralph, as they enter Tarot glared at Ralph
“ what are you doing here again? “ as tarot growled at Ralph
sabrina slap her nose “ BAD GIRL! “ Tarot became shocked as she rubs her nose
“ but...but.... “ tarot whine at her, and Sabrina just glared at her
“ we talked about this ... “ she said, Ralph and Erick looked at each other not knowing what to do
Grape just shooked her head as she asked the doctor “ doc what happened? Is he alright? Does something happened? “ grape just wished that this day could just end.
Erick just shooked his head “ no no no... i’m just looking at his condition nothing to worry princess “
Grape shocked at the doctor said and she becomes annoyed “ where did you hear that name? “ as she glared at the doctor
Erick put his hand up “ wow... what do you mean? Did i say something wrong? “ ‘welp this girl is scary’
Grape just looked annoyed “ nothing... just forget what i said “
Erick scratched his head “ seriously though.. i’m sorry if i offended you “ as he grinned at her
Grape just looked at him “ don’t worry you didn’t do anything wrong “
Erick nods his head “ so..... just last question.... is it because i called you ‘princess’?”
Grape sighed “ well not really... it just.. “ suddenly they heard someone groaning
“uuuhhh.... it’s because that’s her first name.. “ peanut groaned as he slowly rises from the bed. Grape quickly hold him and push him to the bed
“ don’t move... you still hurt “ she smile sadly at him, then she slap his shoulder
“ ouch.... what did i do “ peanut felt the sting and rub his shoulder
“ that’s for worrying me and the others... and don’t you dare told them my name “ grape glared at him, peanut answered only rolling his tongue out.
“ well as much that amused me i hope you didn’t hurt my patient again miss “ Erick interrupted, “ how are you holding up there pup? “ erick ask peanut
‘huh he’s very friendly’ grape thought as he looked at erick
“ my shoulder hurt i got a headache my feet sore and my tummy is grumbling “ he put his hand on his stomach while making a puppy face at them
The others awed at him while Ralph tried to hid his crimson red face ‘ that face shouldn’t be legal ‘
Grape giggled at him “ awwed... don’t worry you lug mom and dad just went to the store to grab us a meal “ as she rub his head making his tail beat the bed
“ really!? Oh boy i wish they bring me that doggy cereal “ he smiled showing his toothy-grinned at her, tarot looked at him with a sad smile and Sabrina only looked at tarot with a pity.
“ now now... you mustn't eat anything hard just for today or you are going to upset your stomach, “ Erick said as he writes peanut condition on his board
“ aww.... i wanna eat that cereal “ making peanut whine, Erick just chuckled at his reaction
“ are you really alright peanut? “ Ralph slowly walked towards peanut making tarot uncomfortable
Peanut looked at Ralph the first thing he noticed is the bandage around his shoulder “ yeah...... i’m okay... “ his ears fell down on his head and his eyes slowly looked away.
Ralph noticed this and moved beside him while his hand slowly reaching peanut head “ hey i’m fine it’s not your fault you know “ he smiled at peanut, grape and the others confused for a second until they looked at what peanut saw and they understand.
Peanut whine “ but.... i bit you “ he looked at Ralph as tears slowly gathered around his eyes
Ralph smiled at him “ maybe a hug will make me feel better? “ Ralph open his arms waiting for peanut to come for him
All of them became shocked at what he’s saying especially peanut, he slowly rise form the bed with the help of grape and move his head to Ralph chest as he hugs peanut.
Peanut tail wagged a little as he sniffed something ‘ smells like grass and dirt but... it’s nice “ peanut growled a little as he feels satisfied
While peanut still in his chest ralph slowly sniffed his head ‘cinnamon smelled... it’s smelled nice’ as he tightened his hold making him and peanut comfortable.
While both of them enjoy each other until Erick coughed while tarot growled making them startled and separated quickly “ could you kindly move away from my ‘boyfriend’? “ tarot glared at Ralph
Until she realised what just she said as looked at peanut, the face that she saw in him is sadness “ tarot.... “ tarot didn’t want to see that face as she looked away from him.
Erick looked at both of them as he trying to figure out what to do ‘ and they said only humans have this kind of drama ‘, “ehem... i figured you feel well enough to answer some of my questions? “
Tarot feels gratitude for the doctor for changing the subject, grape and tarot looked at each other as they felt an awkward atmosphere.
“ ehm... yeah i think i can “ peanut said as he recovered from the awkwardness, Erick started to say something but ralph realised what the doctor wanted to ask.
“ you will not ask that question “ as Ralph growled furiously at the doctor while his body tried to hide peanut behind his back
Erick glared at ralph “ i haven’t asked any question “ everyone looked shocked at the both of them, grape tried to raised her hand but ralph cut her off
“ you can ask any question but not ‘that’ question “ everyone confused about what Ralph saying, Erick become annoyed at Ralph
“ i have the right to ask the question ‘k9 officer’ “ Erick and Ralph looked murderously at each other, as the tension grows heavier only one dog brave enough to meddle with this
uhm..... ra...ralph “ peanut called him as ralph whipped his head behind him, surprised that peanut called him, “ uhm... i mean.... officer.. ralph could you stop it? Your making us scared “ peanut use his puppy face at ralph making him whimpered
‘ that face should be illegal’ as Ralph blushed furiously and hide his face with his paw, Erick looked at peanut with gratitude, peanut just smiled back to him.
The way peanut ask Ralph making Erick doubt to even asked him ‘that’ question so he casually changed the question “ so, besides hungry, soreness, and headache does anything out of ordinary? “
Ralph looked surprised when Erick ask the question, Erick just looked at Ralph with knowing looked saying ‘ you better be grateful with this you hot-headed dog ‘ Ralph just nod his head.
Grape looked at the both of them and realised something is not right ‘ i better ask officer Ralph later on what’s going on ‘ as Erick still asking another question at peanut
“ really? Do you have any illness or any allergy that should we know? “ Erick looked at peanut, but peanut just shook his head ‘ that’s odd ‘ Erick started to think of something
Suddenly the door fly open “ hey kids we brought food!! “ Jill said as she kicks the door open making Erick and the other looking at her with a shocked face
Jill suddenly realised that Erick is there making her embarrassed herself, while someone holding his laughter behind her. She looked behind her and saw earl holding his stomach while holding his laughter “ YOU KNEW “ Jill yelled as she accused earl that the doctor already inside
Earl chuckled while recovering his laughter “ he he he... the way you came inside... ha ha ha ha this is why i married you “ Earl continued his laugh while his wife looking at him with death glared
Erick just grinned at the couple “ as impressive as that was i would recommend that you just open the door normally Mrs.sandwich “ making jill become furiously red
Peanut suddenly wagged his tail “ MOM DAD...” he wanted to lunge at them but someone block his way,
“ stay! “ Ralph ordered peanut making him stop his movement and stay in bed, Ralph looked sharply at him “ you better stay in this bed pup, “ Ralph said as peanut just nodded his head making Ralph smiled “ good pup “ Ralph then rub peanut head making his tail wagged even faster
Tarot felt jealous at them and looked away as she couldn’t handle the painful she felt. Sabrina looked pity at tarot and put her paw on tarot shoulder for support, tarot looked at Sabrina with gratitude
After jill recovered the embarrassing moment she looked at two canines, ralph unconsciously rub peanut head with affection while peanut looked happy at the praised he got. Jill smiled knowingly at them but decided to be silent
Earl then came in and asked Erick something “ is there anything wrong with peanut doc.. “ earl looked worried at Erick as Erick just shake his head
“ just call me erick mr sandwich but no this little pup is healthy enough to go home but we need him to stay just one more day to recheck if we could find anything wrong with him “ earl felt glad with that and shook erick hand saying gratitude at him
“ alright then time to eat everyone “ jill said as she give the pets their food but erick interrupted
“ ah! Mrs.sandwich please don’t give peanut a hard food “ stopping jill as peanut whine at them
“ don’t worry erick this is only soup, oh! Called me jill and that stupid husband of mine is earl “ she could here her husband disapproval ‘hey!’
Erick just chuckled at that, the others said their gratitude at jill for bringing them food, Ralph declined at first but peanut ask him with puppy eyes “ you don’t want to eat?” making ralph whimper and take the food as he said his gratitude towards jill.
“do you want some too erick? We have plenty more “ as jill tried to give erick
“ah! Don’t worry jill it’s almost my break time i just... “ suddenly erick got an alert sound from his phone, he checks it and felt satisfied at the message
“well looks like they sent someone to assist peanut for a while “ making them looked confused at him
“ what do you mean doc? “ grape asked the erick
“ ah i just ask someone to keep an eye on peanut “ erick explained, peanut just whine at that making all of them laugh at his antics
“ don’t worry you’ll like her pup” Erick said to peanut
“ what kind of person is this Erick? “ jill asked
“ well.... it’s not a person actually... “ Erick answered as he scratched his head
“ what do you mean ?” Earl asked
“ you’ll see..” as Erick answered there was a knocked on the door “ ah! Right in time “ as the door open all of them become shocked
A pure white wolf came inside the room as he smiled at everyone especially At peanut “ hello everyone nice too meet you my name is ‘Luna’ “

Selûne ---
Phoenix shuddered as he felt something doesn’t fell right, “ are you okay phoenix you looked unwell? “ Genbu asked
“ i felt that my brother get more than he bargain for when he wanted to follow luna “ Phoenix explained as the other suddenly felt pity towards seiyuu
‘ welp that’s what he got for following luna ‘ hanuman thought at that
‘ i’m glad is not me ‘ Kraken felt relieved at that
‘ that woman is frightening anyway ‘ byakko tremble
‘ good luck brother seiyuu ‘ genbu pray for his brother
‘ one thing for sure, i know my brother regret following her “ Phoenix thought
Then everyone sighed and hoped for the best at seiyuu...

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Chapter 10
Babylon Hospital~~
Hello everyone my name is ‘luna’ “ everyone jaw slacked open as the white wolf introduces herself as erick just hide his face and silently laughing at their face, luna become confused it’s like they never seen a white wolf. “ uhm... am i interrupting something? “ Luna worriedly asked
Earl the first one to recover “ uhm... no no ... i meant... we are very sorry if we make you uncomfortable it’s just that we have never seen a wolf working for a hospital so... “ as the others followed him to regain control.
Luna just smiled “ ah.. i see it is alright sir there is no harm done “ as she giggled knowingly what to do now, erick slowly composing himself as he tried not to laugh
“ snerk....pfft.... ehm... yeah this is luna.. she will accompany peanut for a couple days, and don’t worry it’s just a protocol after the accident “ erick grinning widely as he satisfied at the result jill looking sharply at erick as erick just raised his hand to surrender
“ so does this mean she going to follow us until peanut recovery? “ grape asked, luna looked at the cat as she nods her head
yes until peanut is recover i will follow him for the time being... speaking of him where is the pup ?” luna asked, grape eyes turned to peanut as luna follow her gazed and find the pup still stuck in the bed, luna taill waged as she felt excitement seeing the pup, until she got a mid linked from someone ‘ you better remember what we need to do luna ‘ she just nod her head ‘ you don’t need to remind me seiryuu
“ wow.... you are pretty “ peanut spoke, ralph face whiplash at peanut as he looked shocked at what peanut said, erick smiled smugly at ralph as he saw ralph reaction. Luna blushed at the compliment as she giggled, she stepped forward standing beside peanut bed
tibi gratias ago pro delenimentum paulo cub “ luna looked closely at peanut, as she saw excitement in his eyes
“ wow what language is that? Is it greek ? can you say another word? Can you teach me went we get home? Maybe.. “ peanut asked repeatedly until grape cover his mouth to prevent him to ask again
“ peanut how can you expect her to answered all of that? “ grape scolded peanut, peanut ears fell down as he looked at Luna and asked forgiveness at her, Luna tremble as couldn’t hold her excitement as she lunged at peanut and hugged him
awww..... you are so cute don’t worry pup i will follow you and we can play all the time and maybe i can teach you how to speak that language “ luna wagged her tail as peanut face become crimson red, suddenly Ralph pulled peanut away from luna, peanut back against ralph chest as ralph arm snake around peanut stomach and growled above peanut head.
“ would you kindly step back? he’s still hurt miss “ Ralph glared at Luna as luna step back slowly, she looked closely at the male german shepherd and she smelled something lingering at this dog as she realised that the smelled has been mixed with the Canadian pointer pup.
are you this little one mate? “ luna asked, ralph and peanut face become furiously red suddenly seiryuu asked in her head ‘ the little pup already had a mate? ‘ luna just shooked her head ‘i didn’t see their ‘string’ ‘ what luna meant is the mate string, everyone is destined to be with their other half it just a matter of time, if you haven’t found one that means your other half already passed away or maybe haven’t been born, every time someone met the other half, a string will latch at each other forming a straight line between each other heart. The one who can see this was the luna herself as not only the mother of all wolves she is the one who helped them to find their other half.
Ralph released peanut slowly and put him to bed “ ahem... no miss we are not mates it’s just that peanut is not feeling that well i’m just worried “ as peanut just cover his face at being embarrassed
“ you did not need to do that right ‘officer’? “ as tarot glared at Ralph, grape just shooked her head and rub peanut head
“ tarot is right but, tarot, you didn’t need to be rude you know “ grape said as she still rubs peanut head making his tail wagged but he still covering his crimson red face
this is interesting ‘ luna thought
‘ what is it luna ?‘ seiryuu interrupted
it’s not that i can see his string it’s because the string didn’t form yet
‘ what do you mean? ‘
the pup didn’t have one string he has three strings ‘ as luna explained
Seiryuu become shocked ‘ wait what? How? Never have i heard 3 soul mate ‘
Luna just nod her head ‘ it’s possible but the thing is.. two of them it almost went snap while the last one still holding strongly his other half
Seiryuu become confused ‘ can you tell who his other halves? ‘
Luna looked at the string destination and found where it leads to ‘ the lavender cat, the pomerian dog and the jealous police dog
‘that pup is going trough a lot of hardship in the future ‘ seiryuu said in a pity
Luna on deep thinking and she didn’t realise someone is calling her “luna... luna? Hello... earth to the wolfy? “ erick wave his hand in front of luna as she finally noticed him
ah.. i’m sorry erick i just thought of something what did you say? “ luna smile innocently at him while erick give her a disapprove face
“ i just said that i need to tend the other patient you can start watching the pup now.. oh and make him drink the medicine please “ peanut face went
as erick said medicine, erick said farewell at the others and went out the door
well now that he’s gone it’s time to drink your medicine pup “ luna said, but peanut gave her a puppy face and his ear fell down
“ but i don’t wanna drink it.. “ peanut looked at her as she couldn’t handle the pressure ‘ gah! i can’t looked at that face ‘ but ralph interfere as he walked and grabbed the medicine near the table
“ c’mon pup drink it “ ralph said as peanut glared at the medicine hoping it catches fire, then he makes a puppy face at ralph
“ i dunno wanna “ peanut said as ralph chalenge him face to face, peanut tried his harder but ralph just stood there giving a stoic face
“ not gonna work the third times pup c’mon drink it” as ralph paw give a pills and the other one a glass of water, peanut frowned as he whispered ‘ i hate you ‘ but ralph whispered back ‘ no your not’ peanut blushed at that and with a sigh he took the pills and gulped it down then quickly drink the water making a bitter face
“ ewww... i hate the taste, “ peanut said as his tounge rolled out and making ralph grinned, ralph rub his head making tarot felt jealous again as she glared down at them, while grape and sabrina shooked their head, luna just wagged her tail as she wanted to hug peanut again for making cute face
Suddenly ralph radio make a static voice “ [*]oi.. lover boy we need you back here “ it sounds like officer bill linberg is on the radio
“ sir with due respect this is an exclusive channel please talk professionally “ making ralph irritated and blushed as bill called him a ‘lover boy’, peanut gigled while covering his mouth making ralph glared at him
“[*] don’t worry this is private chat only me and the k9’s could here this hahaha “ ralph facepalm at that comment
“ sir i will meet you and the other at the station “ peanut barked ‘hi’ making bill heard from the radio “[*] is that peanut? Tell him and his family i said hi “ ralph just sighed
“ they can hear you sir “ suddenly many voices can be heard at the radio
“ [*]hey ralph is peanut already wake up ? “ the voice belongs to kevin as ralph begun feeling more stressful
“ i’m going to cut the voice “ before ralph begin to cut kevin suddenly yelled out
“ [*]tell him that we have a party at Friday maybe we can celebrate his recovery “ peanut and grape grinned at each other feeling excited as they wanted to go to the party
“ he’s still underage kevin and we are not going to you girlfriend bar, “ ralph said, peanut mumbled ‘but i’m not a pup anymore’ as he pouts
“ [*]aww c’mon ralph relax a little maybe if we bring the little guy he can ease up your stress if you know what i mean “ the radio went loud as they laugh at ralph, ralph and peanut blushed as ralph can see from the radio that kevin making a smug grinned face and he really wanted to slap that face
“ no he’s not going “ making peanut felt disappointed suddenly grape yanked the radio out of ralph paw
“ yo... big dog me and peanut totally going there “ grape said as ralph glared at her, earl and jill just sighed at their daughter behaviour
“ they are not going “ ralph said in stern, grape just rolled her eyes
“ tell fido we are going to bring sabrina and tarot too “ suddenly they can hear a loud yelp from the other line
“[*] REALLY!? “ fido asked as they could feel his excitement, sabrina giggled and sighed at her boyfriend, ralph yanked back the radio from grape
“ i’m going to cut the voice “ fido yelled ‘[*]wait...’ but the radio then went off, ralph looked at both grape and peanut “ you guys are not going to the party and i bet your parents won’t allow it “
Earl suddenly raised his hand “ uhm... actually i going to give them a permission “
Ralph face become shocked and jill is not making it better “ well they can go if they behave themselves “ ralph couldn’t believe this what kind of parent let underage kids to a party?
Luna then interfered “ oohh.. a party i can take care of them in there “ luna wagged her tail as she felt excitement at the party, making ralph more stressful
“ ugghhh.... i’m going to have a headache “ ralph said as he slowly rub his head
“ please... can we go officer ralph we promise not making trouble “ peanut said and making a puppy face, ralph challenge him again but this is different, his lip pouted his eyes starting to tears and he’s making a whimpering noise making ralph hard to say no, after 10 second he can’t take it anymore
“ GAH! FINE YOU CAN GO “ grape and peanut yelled victory and their parent just giggled, “ but you have to stay beside me all the time got it! “ ralph said to peanut as peanut grin and nodded his head
“ thank you officer ralph “ he smiled innocently while in ralph vision his smile and face become sparkling it makes his heart beat faster as he blushed at peanut. Luna just grinned at him ‘ aww.. looked at that the string shine brightly ‘
it’s ralph “ ralph whisper making peanut confused
“ i’m sorry what? “ peanut asked curiously
“ called me ralph “ as ralph said rubbing peanut head making him smiled and wagged his tail
“ okay .. “ peanut smiled but there’s a small blushed forming on his cheek, while the two of them in their own world, tarot cannot see this and her heart slowly breaking apart
“ i’m sorry but i need to go “ tarot said quickly and run out of the room, peanut realised what happened before he could get up sabrina put her paw in front of his chest
“ peanut don’t.. it’s not your fault.. she just need time... let me handle it okay “ sabrina said, as peanut just nod his head. Jill and earl looked at each other as they figured something and grape looked at tarot went as she felt pity for the dog, sabrina said farewell and started to follow tarot out.
Peanut mood went down after seeing that, grape and ralph wanted to help him but they don’t know how to, until someone spoke “ what are you thinking of little pup ?” luna asked
Peanut looked sad at her “ it just that i think that i broke up a long relationship with someone “ as peanut said ,
luna looked at the strings and one of the light started to become dim she looked back at the pup “ do you think that it’s the best ?
peanut only nod his head “ i think it’s for the best, i meant at first she just found me and we started to hang out but after i knew what she does i started to feel a burden to her, it’s like she choose me because she was told rather than to her liking i guess..”
luna looked at him “ then it is for the best, that means you choose her happiness, you sacrifice your long relationship so that she can move on and find her own happiness, you knew if this continued it will end up hurting both of you, just as the black cat said it’s not your fault, when the times come you can talk to her and the both of you will find happiness even though not beside each other
peanut looked at luna and his face slowly forming a smiled “ thank you luna “ luna just smiled as she smiled peanut can looked at her face it almost reflect like a mother
“ then i think i need to go before they called me through the radio again “ ralph said he stood up and looked at peanut “ see you at Friday pup “ he said as he waved goodbye and out of the room
oh yeah i forgot to pick your other medicine for later let me get that first “ luna said as she followed ralph out
Inside the room only the sandwich family grape started to asked “ peanut? “ peanut looked at her “ could you tell me what happens when you get kidnapped? “ Peanut face looked uncomfortable “ hey... it’s fine if you don’t want to talk but let me tell you this... i’m always there for you “
Peanut heart become warm, earl finally talk “ you are strong peanut, don’t let this accident become your downfall “ as earl rub peanut head, jill went beside peanut and give him a kiss on the forehead “ we all here for you peanut and we will never abandon you “
Peanut couldn’t take it anymore as the tears finally fell down from his eyes as he cried out in relief “ waaaaaa....... i’m so scared....” he cried out as he hugged grape “ they killed someone *sob* i’m terrified *sob* i’m angry *sob* and then... and then “ grape hug him back as she shushed him jill and earl came to group hug them as the felt their bonds is stronger than ever, even though this children is not their flesh and blood they still are their children, their adorable little children.
you have a good family pup ‘ a sound resonate in his head ‘ your family truly do love you ‘ another sound came ‘ but you no need to fear ‘ ‘we too will protect you’ ‘ even in your sadness ‘ ‘ or in your happiness’ ‘ we will protect you ‘ ‘ we will protect your family ‘ ‘ protect your loved one ‘ ‘ protect everyone that you cherished ‘ ‘ as we are you ‘ ‘ and you are we ‘ the sound become stronger and stronger as peanut slowly realised that he is indeed loved by everyone ‘ thank you ‘ as peanut said his gratitude.
Dark dweller ~~~
“Are you still thinking about that kid ?” a white pure cat enter the throne, this realm showed a fallen castle as it surrounded by a dark fog, the fallen bridge, the tower has been cracked and the throne room has a dark burn spot all over it. In the middle of the room a black wolf sitting while her head looked up as she been pondering about something or some dog.
“you finished with your task virgil? “ as the wolf looked behind her, the cat stand as he looked at her, his sharp horn looked ready to ram you, his teeth ready to tear your throat and his eyes pure black with white slit.
“ i did as you still thinking at the pup “ virgil smirked at her, she only give him a stoic face then she slowly descended inside her shadow and loomed at him face to face
don’t mock me little kitty “ as she showed her full teeth at him, he just smiled back full of teeth at her
“ aww... don’t take it to hard, it just really amused me when you found something that makes you think so hard “ virgil grinned at her, she went back at her stoic face as she slowly went to the middle room “ hel “ virgil called her, “ you know you have to face your brother someday right? “
She only looked at him “ i know “ she went back pondering about the dog that she resides on
“ i think you are going to meet him shortly “ virgil begin walking to her “ do you think the pup could help us ? “ he asked beside her
“ you better hope he can “ she slowly lower her head on the ground she slowly closed her eyes as she started to slumber, virgil stay beside her as he hope that the ‘pup’ could save them
Sköll (flashback)~~
“ that worthless angel “ i started to sprint as i tried to find away to get to that ‘place’ again “ how could he.... he said that he loved father but... “ my eyes started to water, my breath started to become ragged “ please.... please father.. stop “ my legs become weak as i slowly fall to my knee ‘ why ? ‘ he wondered ‘ i know he wanted to save father ‘ he wiped his tears and feel frustrated ‘ he already save him from execution but what else does he want? ‘ i looked right and left ‘how do you get to that place? The place that they called “the sacred heaven”?’ i started to stress out ‘ if only father didn’t go rampage... if only i’m strong enough to hold my position’ i begun to rest as my back pressed against a tree ‘ what a joke...the son of fenrir fall from the sacred place because of his father loud scream ‘ i cover my face with my paws and take a deep breath ‘ okay Sköll this is not the time to feel sorry for yourself, father need you and you will find a way to get back ‘ i started to sit up until i saw something that makes me pale as the coloured drained from my face, someone is falling, that ‘angel’ is falling “ wha....” my body couldn’t move as my face only revealed one reaction ‘despair’ does this mean the one who replaced my father execution is... “ LUCIFER” i scream as i run with all my might so that i could catch him, if someone could make father sane is lucifer himself, i jump high enough to reach him “ WAKE UP LUCIFER GRAB MY HAND “ as i tried to reach him suddenly he looked at me, he already woke up, he only smiled and whisper at me. Time stopped as i tried to understand what he’s saying then he becomes bright and split into two, my body become shocked at what happened , i tried to reach one of him but i didn’t make it, then his soul move fast enough from my sight as my body slowly fallen from the sky and i couldn't keep my eyes open “ idiot if you wanted to say that, say it to my father you coward “ as the last thing i thought is his last whisper ‘ forgive me my beloved ‘alpha’ ‘.
Babylon hospital ~~
‘ i never imagine that you working in this hospital ‘ seiryuu said in luna mind, luna smile as she skipping to peanut room after grabbing his medicine, seiryuu just sighed as he becomes stressed out with luna behaviour.
After they arrive in this mortal plane the first thing they do is to find peanut, luna walked with her four leg and tried to find peanut using her sense of smelled, while seiryuu fly above her making sure that he goes unnoticed. After they find his location in babylon hospital luna just wagged her tail and walked in with ease, until seiryuu suddenly pulled her scarf as he fly her to the nearest tree as he hid her behind the tree. Luna becomes annoyed and told seiryuu to not hold a female like that while seiryuu scolded luna for walking in that place with ease as she should have been more careful. Luna stared at him like an idiot then she just drop down the tree and continued to walk in,seiryuu wanted nothing but to strangle the stubborn wolf as he put an invisibility spell as she followed luna but something shocked him the most is that almost all the human in the hospital greet luna like an old friend making his eyes go bulge as he couldn’t believe what he sees. Luna just grin and make a face that mocked seiryuu as he wanted to asked what happend, at first he thought mind manipulation but the one who has that skill is from the dark attribute such as the fenrir it self but luna is lught attribute so it is weird, luna just simply said that she worked in this place for 3 years, 3 years without them noticed that she has been going from one plane to another plane dimension. So the next thing in his mind to put a collar tracker in this wolf so that maybe he could prevent something like this.
you should thank me we got in easy and we can secure the pup more direct approach “ luna grin as she couldn’t wait to play with that sweet and cute pup, seiryuu just sighed as he couldn’t do anything, after they arrive on peanut door luna open it and find that only peanut was inside the room, “ where are your family pup? “ luna asked
“ oh they went home to change clothes but grape just went to the toilet miss “ peanut said politely
oh don’t call me miss just called me luna it makes me old went you said that “ luna smile as he walked to peanut
“ oh okay luna “ peanut said, luna smiled and sit next to peanut bed “ luna ‘the moon goddess’ “ peanut said in stoic face making luna and seiryuu face become bulge as they couldn’t believe this little pup just said.

MERRY CHRISTMAS! MAY YOUR HOLIDAY BE MERRY AND BRIGHT !! (i hope my words is right heheheh)

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I like how this chapter has come out! Wonderful job!


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Chapter 11
Garden of Eden~~
Everyone face become pure white paled as Sköll told what he saw, especially Fenrir his face it almost like his life has been drained as he heard that his loved ones vanish without a trace, Hati cover her snout as she couldn’t believe what she was hearing she knew she and her brother tried to stop their father but she lucky enough to hold her stand, Bahamut and kitsune couldn’t believe an angel could disappear like that. Then someone shouted in raged
DON’T YOU DARE LIED TO US YOU MUTT “ Gabriel face become pure rage as his tears streaming down his face, he gritted his teeth while his arm ready to strangled Sköll
“ SAY WHAT YOU WANT CAT BUT I’M THE ONLY ONE WHO SAW WHAT HAPPENED “ Sköll growled at Gabriel as he too ready to fight the angel
They started to argue but the others didn’t stop them, Fenrir just stayed where he was as he just wanted to lied down on the ground and just hope that maybe this is all just a nightmare and he would wake up right now, Michael face become unreadable as his hooves clench until blood started to flow out a little
Bahamut and Kitsune become shocked what Gabriel just said.. an Angel would torture?
Then as a small light shine trough Michael face his eyes widen as he realised something, “ BROTHER LET ME GIVE THIS MUTT A PIECE OF MY MIND MAYBE WE...” Michael whispered to him “ shut up brother “ but Gabriel didn’t hear him “ BUT BROTHER HE... “ finally Michael have enough “ SHUT YOUR MOUTH BROTHER
Gabriel became shocked, Michael slowly walked near Sköll and grab his shoulder “Sköll what colour did you just said? “Sköll become confused as he struggled to get freed then Michael as him again “Sköll..... what...colour......when he becomes the orbs ? “ everyone started to become confused as they hear a panic voiced in Michael voiced especially Fenrir
Sköll becomes irritated as he yelled “ WHITE OKAY WHITE LET ME GO YOU... “ before he mocks Michael he let Sköll go, he surprised to see that Michael face change, from unreadable face to pure relived as he mouth slowly changed into a wide smiled.
Gabriel confused at first but then he realised what his brother means he tried to speak as his voice started to waver “ wait..... brother.... are......you “ Michael looked at Gabriel with a pure happiness as he said one words “ redemption “ Gabriel just smiled as he lunged at Sköll and hug him with a bear grip
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU...YOU...YOU... HANDSOME WOLF “Sköll face become panic as he thought that these Angels finally lost their mind, Gabriel finally released Sköll as he jumps in joy in what he’s hearing,
Fenrir looked at the Angels and he just realised that maybe there is hope “ is Lucifer okay? “ he asked Michael
Michael started to explain “ do you remember the story of the first humans that fallen from heaven? Before father sent them to earth for their punishment he... Fenrir become irritated “ just tell me Lucifer is okay or not “ Michael face become annoyed “ fine... he as you can say that maybe is alrightFenrir rub his face “ i can’t understand what you meant “ Michael then slowly explained to him “ everyone has a soul correct? Every soul that has been judged will be turned into a colour that represents what their life has been, black as a corrupted soul, red as a revenged soul, yellow as a regretted soul and so on..” Fenrir slowly saw a light in his eyes “ and the white one? “ Michael smiled “ a redemption soul... a pure soul that wanted nothing but to redeem his or her sin “ Michael walked to Fenrir pulled him to his feet “ as much that i hate to say this.... his sin is your sin Fenrir his beloved one... he only wanted to redeem his loved one that is you “ Micahel point his finger to Fenrir heart “ he didn’t disappeared Fenrir he just wanted to redeem your love
Fenrir eyes started to water as his tears stream down into his face when he realised something “ wait... all of you angels gathered at lucifer judgement if you knew this information why did you look for him just now?
Michael looked away “ do you really think we can bear to see what is about to happen with one of our brothers? “ he remembered that all of his brother crying in despaired as one of their brothers is about to get punishment now he started to regret that maybe he should have seen what is happening to Lucifer
Fenrir nod in understanding “ then Lucifer is still out there somewhere? “ Michael nod with happiness “ yes with our help maybe we can find him faster than you alone “ Michael open his hooves to Fenrir and he gladly open his paw to accept Michael help
Then Kitsune started to ask “ so is that mean we should split up? “ making everyone looked at his direction “ what do you mean? “ Hati asked, “Sköll said two orbs right?” kitsune explained
Michael and Gabriel looked at each other as they looked at Sköll for explanation “ oh don’t you dare ask me this question again i already give you the whole story “ Sköll grumbled in distaste, Fenrir started to asked the Angels “ does both of you know what this means? “ both of the Angels just shake their heads
Michael started to talk “ if what Sköll said is true maybe we need to make a group so it will be faster to find one of them
“ then what are we waiting for? Another backstory? Let’s just make this muffins and cookies group “ Sköll said as he walked to his sister while the others started to join them, everyone already gathered making a small circled leaving Michael and Fenrir the last one
Before Michael walked to the group Fenrir hold Michael arms “ Tell me Michael.. could those orbs can change their colour? “ Micahel answered “ yes they could.. all the colours will change if they have what they wanted leaving the last colour and that is the white one and be glad that is not the black one because it’s the last thing you wanted to haveFenrir wanted to ask again but Sköll already shout at them “ COME ON SLOWPOKE “ Michael slowly walked to the group leaving Fenrir behind
Fenrir slowly move his paw to his heart, he felt relieved that all his effort to search Lucifer is not in faint but he knew something if he has one of the orbs he knew what coloured that would be, like the coloured of his past, a dark room with no lights in it.

Babylon Garden~~
The Pomeranian dog just runs until her legs couldn’t keep up with her breath, her tears stream down to her face as she finally walked home with a sob. In the middle of her walk, someone called her from behind “ TAROT WAIT “ a black car finally catch up to her as she slows down and catch her breath.
“ ‘huff’.. how can dogs better at running than cats “ Sabrina smiled at her own joked but as soon as she saw Tarot face her smile disappear as a concerned face slowly built up, Tarot quickly erased her tears as she walked near Sabrina
“ hey shabby..” as her eyes swollen from crying so much, Sabrina gently open her arms to hug her. She couldn’t handle her broken heart as she continued to cried in her beloved friend chest, Sabrina only could hear her friend whimper as she stroke Tarot back slowly and secretly told her that everything will be alright.
After a while tarot regain her composured, tarot looked up and meet her friend in the eyes as sabrina just smiled sadly at her “ tarot would you like to talk now? “ tarot just nod her head as she turns back and slowly walked to her destination leaving sabrina close behind
“ you know sabrina.. sometimes i wonder what would happend if Dragon didn’t choose me as her avatar “ tarot begun to talk as sabrina just nod her head. “ could you imagine ? “ tarot excalimed as she throw her paws in the air “ i will be normal.... playing ball with other dogs, cuddles with my ‘normal’ owners, eat, sleep and laying on the couch doing nothing.. lazying around.. “ tarot said as she skip next to sabrina and stop to looked at her “ it almost like a perfect life isn’t it? “ sabrina saw tarot face and only found nothing but a stoic expression “ perfect but that doesn’t mean i will be happy “ Tarot looked up at the sky “ i won’t meet peanut, a sweet dog, dragon would not give me this ‘gift’ and more importanly..” Tarot looked at Sabrina and smiled at her “ i wouldn’t have met you “ Sabrina eyes become wide then her mouth slowly form of a grinned cat, tarot sighed as they continued they walked “ peanut make me choose between him and as he called it ‘the world’ “ Sabrina and tarot just giggled at that “ if i was a normal dog i would have choose him but of course i’m not a normal one am i? “ Tarot smile sadly
Sabrina stop her movement making tarot stop and looked at her, she held a determined face “ you are right tarot.... you are not normal but a unique one “ tarot turn her body to looked at Sabrina “ i will ask you this, what would happen if you choose peanut? “ tarot become silent at that, after a few seconds Sabrina answered “ you won’t be happy and he knows that “ Sabrina smiled sadly at Tarot, tarot looked away as if she is guilty of something “ you know that but you blame yourself because you think that this whole break up is your doing... please stop blaming yourself tarot because it will make both of you suffer “
Tarot looked questioningly at her “ what do you mean Sabrina ? “
Sabrina eyes become hard “ your not the only one who blaming yourself.. didn’t you see peanut is blaming himself too? After you left peanut tried to get up and followed you “ tarot ears dropped as her tears started to water “ i’m not blaming you tarot but if you keep this up both of you will suffer and don’t you ever think that peanut never cared for you because if he didn’t care he would just leave before any of this would happen “
tarot looked Sabrina in the eyes and with a determined face she wipes her eyes “ you are right Sabrina i should have thought this thoroughly “
sabrina just grinned at her “ your lucky to have isn’t ‘master’? “ making tarot uncomfortable “please don’t call me that “ Sabrina just giggled as she walked to tarot and hug her “ you know everything will be alright right? “
tarot hug her back then she looked upset “ i hope peanut will forgive me for being unreasonable “ Sabrina giggled “ i told you Tarot, Peanut care about you and he still wanted to play with you “ tarot smile widely showing her teeth at Sabrina making her do the same as she thought that maybe the future looked very brightly

?? Shelter~~~
‘Have you ever felt that maybe... something inside you is missing? Like a missing puzzle that needs to be filled? I know some of you have felt that way, it’s.... so strange. it’s not a nice feeling it’s the opposite, i felt miserable i’m just like an empty vessel that everyone can use, i wanted to have something... anything that can fill my emptiness, i wanted to be happy... i wanted to be loved... i need to be..... ‘
“ oi.... you stupid cat wake up “ a human rattle my cage as he give me a bowl of food, this... this is where i am now the place of many cries of an animals, this place is not bad but the human who in charge taking care of us the one making this place like hell. I glared at the man in front of me as he looked at me with disgust “ what are you looking at? Huh? “ he kick my cage making me stumble back, the food now spilt on the floor of the cage. The man just laughs at me and spit on my food “ you animals should just go to where you belong, but money is money and you guys are going to make me a ton of money ha ha ha “ he walk away as laughter can be heard from a distance.
This place is not how it used to be, the owner is the nicest lady you can meet, her sound is sweet like a lullaby and as the first time you see her you can see a warm summer passing through you, that is my first impression when i first saw her, a middle age woman on her 40 helping everyone and i meant everyone that she sees, even though their human or animals, female or male, different skin, she will help them with the kindest smiles as you can think. When the first time she saw me she told me that i passed out in the middle of the snow when she just got home from a grocery then she just pick me up didn’t question her decision and just help me, after i woke up i didn’t remember anything at all.. my family... my home... my.... mate.. huh?.... mate?.... do i have one?... i forgotten about everything.. that’s why i felt so empty but one by one it has been filled the day she told me that she would be happy if i could stay here... i agreed as she told me her name is Diana... as the day passed she and the others woker and animals laugh and smiled as they enjoyed their caretaker... a cook name leon a 50 years old man that cooked us all the food as he likes to called it ‘fatting us up for the next meal’ and many of the children cried at his joked making Diana slap behind his head to say sorry at them, a cashier name lisa a highschool girl who needs a part time job that likes to interact with everyone and smiled as a red dimple can be seen beside her cheeck.. she didn’t tell us why she needs this job but maybe she really need it, and a twin name Logan and Lily a college student that need the money for continuing their college they are the one that has to clean our cage for use to sleep but every time they do it they end up arguing one another the other just sighed as we help them cleaning our cage but sometimes they just sleep outside their cage, every day it’s always peacefull the sound of laughter, the man who laughs at his own joke, the twin argument... it’s a happiness in everywhere i'm enjoying it yes... but that doesn’t mean i’m always happy... everytime Diana need to stock something she called me for help but the real reason is that she hoped that if i saw someplace my memory will come back but i don’t remember anything making Diana sad as i just smiled and give her a hug to show my gratitude.
until someone scam Diana, making her sign an ownership of this place, as she cried asking forgiveness at us we just told her that it’s fine nothing is harm... oh how wrong we are... then that ‘man’ the one who appointed as the one who in charge of this place came and just kick our caretaker out as he fired every worker and Diana herself. Now this place is the place of making money... not making everyone happy but making us like a thing, not a living being... many months have been passed and that man giving us a harder life...i need a couple of days... i have to make my timing perfect, i looked at the food that has been spilt, i grab it and eat it greedily making sure i won’t die of a hunger, this man think that they should have given us food two times a week,... i must be patience i will help everyone in here, i will get this place back like it used to be, and for that i need.... to be free.

Babylon Police Station~~
“ so... what’s the deal with chief and the pup? “ the English Setter dog ask the other as they sit in circles making circles form with their chairs,
“ the pup has name Terrance his name is Peanut, “ Fido said
“ sorry... so let me ask again what is the deal with Peanut and the chief? “ Terrance still interested on what happens, it’s rare for someone like Ralph to have affection besides his owner and this pup manage to cuddle (well in their eyes they are cuddling) with him. when the team came back with this story it manages to make Terrance dumbfounded.
“ well we can hear the rest of the story from the chief himself “ Fido answered
“ but besides that don’t you even curious about peanut condition Fido? You and I are the one who knows him longer than anyone else “ Fox started to ask Fido
Fido sighed as he scratched his head “ as i told you to let the chief confirm on what happened we can’t claim something without evidence Fox “ as they tried to discuss again bill came into the meeting
“ so lover boy haven’t come back has he? “ making everyone snickering at his joke, “ well then please return your seat on their original states “ everyone grab their chair and begun sitting on their original position, “ before we discuss your next assignment, congratulation Fox,Fido and Mungo on saving peanut before they taken him far away “ everyone clap to congratulate them making fox embarrassed, mungo wagged his tail in happiness for the praise while Fido held his head high as he proud to succeeding. “ of course we can’t forget the Loverboy who now still seeing the pup “ everyone then laugh at his joke then the canine that everyone talking about came inside “ well look like he’s already coming.... “ before bill continued he sees Ralph bandage making him look worried at him
“ Hello sir i hope you give these boys a good laugh because they will need it “ Ralph joke, everyone become surprised after Ralph stand on his podium wearing a bandage on his shoulder this give Fido and Fox an alarmed on who did it
Fox stand up “ Chief is Peanut the one ... “ before Fox continued Ralph give him a silent glared that said ‘ don’t you dare say a word ‘ making fox trembled and sit back to his seat.
“ before anyone jump in conclusion the one who did this is indeed the victim of the last assignment and don’t you dare blame him because i’m the one who volunteered and i’m the only one who can hold him “ everyone become more confused on why their chief would adamant to protect this pup
“ so let me get this straight something is happening with the pup and you volunteered on helping him then in the middle of the process you got bitten by him and making him leaving his love mark on you ? “ bill exclaimed
Everyone become dead silent, is not better on Ralph his face become red hot as he slaps his faced to cover his face. Then in a few second everyone erupted in laughter as they couldn’t handle bill joke, “ hahaha you should have seen your face boy it’s redder than a tomato “ Ralph groaned as he rolled his eyes at him.
“ wow... thanks sir for humiliating me in front of my subordinate, “ Ralph said in sarcastically
“ your welcome boy “ making bill grinned in return
After everyone regain their composure Ralph continued to discuss their next event “ well i hope you guys happy because i’m going to lock myself in my office for the whole day “ making them laugh again then Kevin interject “ isn’t better if you went to the hospital and lock yourself with him?” everyone now is holding their stomach as they couldn’t take it anymore.
After they regain another composure ralph started again “ as much as i like that the hospital wouldn’t let me met him in this hour “ making everyone giggled for the last time. Then Ralph change his face into more seriousness making everyone pay attention at him now leaving their laughter “ thank you for your hard work, but now we have some information about a huge scam on the east side of the Babylon garden, we need to investigate this matter but for this assignment we need a senior on this team.. sorry for the junior you won’t be joining this team” they nod in understanding “ the team will be Fido, Kevin, And Terrance while i’m the one who commanded them” Fido, Kevin and Terrance held their head high as they giving the signal as they ready taking the assignment “ while the rest of you will be continued to patrol around Babylon Garden understood? “ all of them yelling ‘YES SIR’ making Ralph nod his head.
The bill interrupted them “ this might be a dangerous mission so we got a reinforcement from the Russian investigator to give us a hand “ making Ralph looked interest at bill just said “ one of the Russian investigator found out that the man who begin this scammed is one of the Russian mafia called Roman Tsepov in hope for capturing him and interrogate him to where their leader are “ Fox sweating in his seat because this is the first time he heard this kind of case “ soi hope you guys give a warm welcome for our guest and be ready to welcome them on Monday at 8 O’sharp “ everyone yell ‘Yes Sir’ as Bill nodded his head
“ that’s all for today i hope you guys have a nice evening “ Ralph said as he disband the meeting, while everyone is leaving the only one who stayed is none other the senior k-9 unit plus Fox and mungo with Bill inside
“ Chief how on earth peanut give you this bite mark? “ Kevin said as he looked at Ralph bandage
“ the pup went to full panic in the middle of his treatment and you guys remembered that i’m the only one who can calm him down right? “ everyone nod their head except Kevin and Terrance as they didn’t come to the crime scene
“ what could make peanut do such a thing? “ Mungo started to feel pity at peanut
“ arghh.. please don’t remind him about this wounds, he already started to cry went he saw this bandage “ ralph begun to scratched his head.
“ no worry chief your secret is saved from your lover, “ Kevin said making all of them giggled while Ralph is embarrassed, Ralph mumbled ‘he’s not my lover’
“ well let’s change the topic i heard Kevin wanted to you guys to join him in his girlfriend bar? “ Bill said as he looked at them
“ yeah.. i remembered that “ making Fox blushed as Kevin wrap his arms around Fox shoulder
“oh c’mon Fox you know you enjoyed it “ well at first he didn’t enjoy it but after a while, he started to relax and enjoy his drink
“ looked i don’t care if you guys are going but peanut is still underage and i don’t want him getting in an accident again “ ralph rub his face as he said that
“ don’t worry we just going to take a meal and have a drink then enjoyed my girlfriend song what do you guys say? “ everyone looked at Ralph hoping he would agreed
“ Sabrina is coming too right chief? “ Fido face is almost like begging for his girlfriend to be there
Ralph sigh “ fine... but i already told peanut to stick with me all the time and don’t you dare give him a weird drink, you have to ask your lover yourself Fido “ Ralph glared at Kevin, while Fido taking out his phone started to text Sabrina
Kevin just laugh “ don’t worry chief we are going to have some fun trust me “ making ralph doubt at him “ and by the way, peanut is not underage “
Ralph glared at him “ he’s looked underage to me “
“ whatever you said.... ‘lover boy’ “ Ralph lunged at him, Kevin barely dodged as he runs away from the meeting room followed by an angry growled from Ralph while everyone laughed at their behaviour.

Babylon Hospital ~~~
Surprised…. No.. the right words is astonished as luna and Seiryuu become speechless as the pup could recognize the goddess itself, Luna couldn’t say anything until peanut looked at behind Luna “ is the dragon your friend too luna? “ now Seiryuu face become paled, he is the oldest forgotten god in Selûne and no one especially his brother noticed if he used this kind of spell, but this pup can detect him without an effort
“ I’m surprised you even can see me little one “ he debating if he should keep his spell in case a mortal came or just be done with it and show himself.
“ I thought you were a ghost so I just kept my mouth shut, “ Peanut said, then Luna felt something is wrong as she looked at his eyes and found out his round blue eyes changes into a slit almost looks like a feline “ is something wrong Luna ? “ Luna surprised when he called her name as she focused on his face rather than his eyes.
Then Luna glared at peanut or maybe.. “ who are you? “, Seiryuu become shocked as what he heard. peanut or this someone keeps looking at her without answering her question making her irritated “ you better leave this pup alone or i will...
“ i am peanut “ he interrupted Luna before Luna can even retort he keep talking “ we are one but different personality but believe me that i will not hurt him but the opposite “
Luna keeps glaring at him “ how can i keep your words?
“ because i rather disappear than hurt peanut “ he glared at Luna, both of them staring heatedly at each other until Seiryuu interrupted them
“ Luna how did you even know he is different? “ Seiryuu asked,
Luna growled angrily at this someone “ easy.... his mating string showed nothing “ making Seiryuu confused at what she meant “ peanut has 3 string while this person doesn’t have anything at all “ Seiryuu become speechless again
“ it’s because i already found my other half “ he replied making luna shocked as she looked around searching for his string and still found nothing until she realised something, Luna then become furious “ THE TWO OF YOU BETTER GET AWAY FROM THE PUP RIGHT NOW ! “ Luna yelled making Seiryuu more confused than ever until he realised what she meant, “ i told you from the start we are peanut as peanut are us you can’t separate us just because you see us as a threat “ he now angrily looked at her.
Luna grab his collar or peanut collar growling while showing her full jaws “ DO I NEED TO REPEAT MYSELF “ he looked bored at her threat
Before she raised her hand Seiryuu grab it “ Luna the child is still in there “ Seiryuu remind her making her whimper at him, how could she forgot even though this two in this pup the body belongs to peanut
“ could you please release me? You hurting peanut “ he said making luna startled as she quickly grabs him with bridal style and put him to bed “ thank you...” he said in gratitude
His said sincerely to Luna making her deep breath and rethink what to do next “ I’m sorry i should have thought this first than jump at you “ Luna looked at him with a sad face
He looked at her as his ears dropped into his head “ i am sorry too.. i should have explained it more clearly “ he sighed, Luna and Seiryuu waited for him to explained “ we already inside peanut the day he was born “ making Luna and Seiryuu become alarmed at what he said “ it just that we didn’t wake up until that wolf forcefully wake us up “ Luna and Seiryuu looked at each others they knew who he talked about ‘Hel’. “ we are peanut yet we are different... as i told you i already have found my other half “ he exclaimed making Luna nod her head “ the thing is there are three souls in this body.. but what makes it special is that me and my other half is a half soul “ making the gods looked confused “ and the one who completely us is none other is peanut soul “. The two gods looked at each other until they heard he sighed “ just think three balls as the two of them is in half and one of them is full round “ making the gods startled as what he said “ we don’t know how this happened but me and my other half recollect some of our memories and the thing is even though we are a half souls me and my other half feels comfortable resting near peanut soul “ Luna started to argue
no... even though you have a good reason for us to disappear but we already inside peanut the day he was walked on this earth and if you force us to move our souls peanut souls already linked with us making him fells like a part of him has been torn “ luna became alarmed at this as she really needed to think before jumping to conclusion “ we will protect peanut as we too loved him until the day he accepted us too “
Seiryuu become confused “ what do you mean by that ? “ than luna understood what he meant “ to become one.... “ Luna just answered in what she was thinking making him nod in return
“ yes... as peanut souls will fuse with ours... but do not fret as peanut will be the one who takes in charge of what we are doing “ Luna and Seiryuu looked trouble as he said that
“ i know that this is hard to accept but can we make a deal so that you can trust us ? “ he said making them stared at him
“ there’s this thing where you signed.. “ before Seiryuu could explained he interrupted him
“ we’ll take it “ as he raised his hand for a shake, Seiryuu looked trouble as he confused on what to do
“ don’t you need your other half approval? “ Seiryuu said,
“ i told you we will do anything as long it benefits for peanut because i knew Luna already have affection towards peanut and she sure will protect him too “ he looked towards Luna as she nods her head making sure she will keep her words to protect this pup
“ as long as you know what you doing, “ Seiryuu said, then he steps back long enough for luna can reach him as he used one of his ancient tongue to recite his spell
‘Qui percusserit a paciscor
Qui sciens consequentias
qui custodiat et hunc plurimum
ut huius rei testis est
et per hoc’

(he who strikes a deal
he who knew the consequences
he who shall keep this deal
as i the witness of one of this event
shall see this through)

as he finished a light shine bellow him making a circle as the words he chanted flew from bellow and stop right in front of him, he swipes it with his claws and it turns into a paper in the mid of air, he then grabs it and opens it too show it to ‘peanut’

“ the contract said that you will not controlled of this body until the owner granted his permission even though of the things will get dangerous. You can keep talking to him but you shall not possess without his permission this contract is signed for he who need to make this deal “ Seiryuu explained

Then one of peanut eyes changes as a pure white change into pure black and a blue slit on his eye as they stand up “ we accept this agreement

Luna becomes shocked as peanut eyes change again meaning the other one is posses him too but the strange thing is, her mind keeps telling her that she knew this soul.
“ then you both shall draw your blood and put your hands in this contract “ Seiryuu said. ‘Peanut’ bite two of his thumps drawing small blood on his thumps then put the two of then in the paper, as the paper recognised the blood of the contractor a chain appears inside the paper as it slowly moved from ‘peanut’ hand to peanut body as he just looked normally at this chained
“ the contract has been signed the deal has been made and both pf you shall keep this deal, “ Seiryuu said, before the other's peanut reside back inside of him they slowly told the gods “ please protect him “ making both of the gods nod reasurely
The chain moves to his back as it slowly went inside of it making a tattoo behind his back then it slowly fading making it looked unnoticeable, his body went to limp as he lost conciuos as Luna quickly cached him and slowly put him to bed, as she released him he looked at Seiryuu “ this is more complicated than before now huh?
Seiryuu just laugh “ i don't know about you but this pup is getting more unique and it intrigued me “
Luna glared at him “ you better not doing something harmful to this pup or i will strangle your neck and you will hope that you are not born from this day
Seiryuu wanted to retort but someone furiously shouted “ AND I WILL CASTRATED YOUR WHOLE BODY IF YOU EVEN THINK TOUCHING PEANUT “ making both of them startled as they turn around to saw who shouted
as grape stand in front of the door showing her claws as she hiss showing hostility at them “ AND YOU BETTER TELL ME WHAT HAPPENED TO MY BEST FRIEND”

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I like how this is coming along! Keep it up!


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Thank you dayzee... you encouragement always making me lift my spirit to write this fic..

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I hope that you will write the next chapter soon!


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Chapter 12

The ?? Realm
After Michael and Gabriel left to search their fallen brother the others angels mind become in peace as they left to do their duty except for one angel, he took a form of a young man with oval face some could describe it as a handsome man but handsome is not a word you looking for but ‘beauty’, as he wore a white robe covering his full body, his red wings spread fully. His red eyes looked at his ‘father’ as it shines like a bright fire, he wanted to ask his father but he felt something in his throat like something is holding his neck from making him speak. “ oh.. Uriel are you still here? “ as he father asked
Uriel surprised as his ‘father’ ask a question “ ah... yes father I'm still here “ making his ‘father’ laugh at him
hahaha... i am sorry my son for making you surprised “ Uriel just shrugged his shoulder as he scratches his red curly hair, then he felt nervous this is not the first time he felt like this but he remember the first time that he felt this feeling is when his brother face his judgement, ‘ is it really judgement?’ Uriel asked himself because he felt unsure of this.
come closer my son “ his ‘father’ called him, Uriel slowly walked near his ‘father’, after he finally stop in front of his ‘father’ he saw the light entity change and took form of an elder human, his white short hair, stubble white beard, and his black eyes giving warmness to everyone looking at him
“ do you need anything father? “ Uriel asked as he slowly confused why his ‘father’ change his appearance
oh no... it looks like you wanted to talk with me so I change my appearance so you could easily talk “ as he walked away signalling Uriel with his hand to come with him. They walked side to side as the realm scenery suddenly change into a beautiful forest
“ i forgotten that this realm is also you father “ what he meant is that this realm is part of their ‘father’ he can change the realm whatever it suits him, they stopped in the middle of the forest and Uriel saw two chairs and a table surrounded by many wildflowers
oh Uriel be careful and not to stop them “ as his ‘father’ levitate and went to the tables as Uriel Followed him by flapping his wings and they sit opposite each other. “ this is beautiful isn’t my son
Uriel nod his head “ everything you made always beautiful father “ they smiled at each other as they felt content while looking around them, his ‘father’ raised his hand and suddenly appears a set of teacups on the table
would you like some my son? “ his ‘father’ raised the teapot, Uriel smiled and nod his head as his ‘father’ pour the content to Uriel cup, Uriel pick the cup and sip the tea as his body felt content. then his whole demeanour change as he looked at his father with serious face
are you alright my son? “ his ‘father’ asked him as he felt that his ‘father’ worried at him, he wanted to speak, he wanted to ask his ‘father’, he wanted to know the ‘truth’ but... some say that ‘ignorance is a bliss’ well for him is a torture.
“ father... I still remembered lucifer judgement “Uriel eyes met his ‘father’, “
‘when everyone looked away.... my mind keeps telling me that I should see what is going to happen with Lucifer’
“, he closed his eyes as he remembered that day, everyone wailed in sadness as they looked away. He remembered Michael face become grim as tears stream in his eyes as he tightened his fist, and of course, he remembered what he saw “ why did Lucifer smile? “ he opens his eyes and see the stoic face of his ‘father’, “I saw it... with my own eyes... I wanted to look away like everyone... but I can’t.... “ he remembered he saw Lucifer kneeled in front of his ‘father’ it’s like someone making him watched until the end, he remembered feeling desperate, his tears keep streaming down his face, his mind wanted to look away but his body doesn’t even budge, he even keep praying that his ‘father’ would forgive his brother.
He cover his face with his hand as he started sobbing, “why.....*sob*... why father...”
it pains to see one of his children cry in front of him, he stands up and walked beside Uriel as he gives him a hugged. Uriel keep sobbing in his chest “ I’m sorry for making you feel like this, my son
Uriel keep sobbing “ why did Lucifer..*sob*... smiled father? ..... *sob* why did he felt so happy.... *sob*..... I’m confused father... *sob* “ his ‘father’ rub his back as he keeps hugging Uriel tightly, they in that state until Uriel calms himself.
After a while, Uriel started to feel calm as his father released him “ if you wanted to ask then asked my son “ his father encourage him
“ father.... do you feel sad when you cast away Lucifer ?“ as he asked his ‘father’
I always feel sad whenever my children or my creation feels sad but it hurts my heart when I have to let go one of my children “ he said making Uriel looked at him with wide eyes
“ does that mean... “ Uriel finally saw the ‘truth’ as his father smiled sadly at him
what is it that you thinking my son? “ his ‘father’ looked at him
“ it’s not Lucifer judgement is it father? “ Uriel mumbled as he felt something pat his head
if it’s not judgement then what is it ? “ his ‘father' caress his hair lovingly
“ you let Lucifer go not because you cast him away, you let him go because it is what he wished for, is it not father? “ Uriel stated making his ‘father’ smiled at him
the day I created all of you is the day I felt happiness in my heart... even i felt happy when i created the devil too “ Uriel face become sour when his ‘father’ mentioned that devil, his father laughed at his face “ hahaha..... you know he is my son too as he is your brother too Uriel “ Uriel just grumbled at that “ hehe.... do you remembered when all of you met ‘satan’ Uriel?
Uriel Groaned “ oh father how did you even think about creating him “ making him and his ‘father’ chuckled at that statement
i never stop loving all my creation my son as I still loved Lucifer like you and your brothers “ making Uriel smiled happily “I never restricted any of you, I’m only giving you an order if I wanted it “ Uriel started to become confused at what this talk leading to “ and I never stop any of you even if you interested in someone
“ FATHER “ Uriel exclaimed as he felt his face become hotter and change colour into red as a tomato, his ‘father’ laughed loudly as he walked away, the wildflower making a path for his ‘father’
well then my son I think your brothers are looking for you and you have a duty is it not? “ his father walked away as he waves his hand at him
Uriel groaned as he bang his head at the table ‘ i know father can be scary when he's mad but I forgot that sometimes he can be playful too ‘

Babylon Hospital ~~
“ is this a joke? “ Grape said as her eyes become hardened, the two of them just told her what happened and she still doesn’t believe any of them
“I wish it was a joke child, but this is real “ Luna answered as she looked sadly at Peanut unconscious body
Grape covers her face with her paws as she let out frustration sound “ GAAAAHHHH..... THIS IS STUPID “ she wished something interesting not dangerous
“ now... calm down little one.. “ Seiryuu tried to calm down Grape, but he met an angry face of her as she wanted to claw his face making him retreat a step
“ oh I’m calm alright... CALM ENOUGH TO CLAW YOUR EYES OUT “ as she lunged at him but Luna held her in mid-air and tried to pull her away from Seiryuu as Grape struggled and lash her claw to him
‘ does every female i found always this scary ‘ Seiryuu thought as his face become grim
“ LET ME GO YOU...YOU.... “ Grape still Struggling to get free as she wanted nothing but to maul Seiryuu face
“ CALM DOWN CHILD PLEASE.... You're NOT THINKING CLEARLY “ Luna shouted as she still held back Grape
“ I AM THINKING CLEARLY “ Grape retort back, then they heard a whining sound from the bed as the saw Peanut started to wake up
“ *whine* GRAAAAAPPPPPEEEEEEE I'M STILL SLEEEEPY~~ “ Peanut wake up as he rubs his eyes, Grape suddenly break free from luna grib as she runs to peanut
“ PEANUT WHAT HAPPENED? WHAT DID THEY DO? DID THEY PUT SOMETHING ON YOU? “ Grape started to speak furiously at him but Peanut still couldn’t process what just she said until she slaps his shoulder
“ *YIP* why grape..? “ he rubs his shoulder as she glared at him
“ YOU SHOULD HAVE TOLD ME ABOUT THE OTHER TWO “ Grape exclaimed but peanut puff his cheeks as he looked away
“I realised it just now you know “ Peanut explained as he grumbled at her
“ ehm... i think i’m going to bring some tea for us to calm down, “ Luna said as she walked out from the room leaving the others with Seiryuu ‘ did you just run away from the problem? ‘ Seiryuu mind linked at her but she just ignored him
Seiryuu sighed as he looked the two pets as Grape still glared at Peanut “ i want explanation now peanut! “
Peanut scratched his head “ i wish i could but i don’t know anything only Ares and Eriene the one who can explained “
Grape and Seiryuu become confused “ Ares? Eriene? “ Grape said in confusion
Peanut then smiled as he wagged his tail “ yeah... i thought a cool name for them so that they have name and be friends with us oh oh oh i got the name when i read about greek empire and the name just came up when i *uhmmmm* *uhmmm* “ Peanut started to rambled as Grape put her paw on his snout to silent him
“ i get it peanut “ Grape said as she slowly released his snout “ then could you called them ? “ Grape asked Peanut
“ i don’t know but i can try “ peanut then concetred as he tried to called them ‘ ares... ariene are you there? ‘
‘........’ only silence that greet him until he heard someone
did you just name us from the god of war and peace? ‘ the deep voiced said
‘ hey you guys answered me... this is so cool ‘ as peanut grinned and excitement came trough him, Grape saw this and she realised that maybe peanut actually could called them
well it is a beautifull name ‘ the soft voiced started to speak
‘ awesome!!! So wich one do you guys like ? ‘ peanut asked them
i’ll take Ares eventhough his a hot headed sometimes... nice name peanut ‘ the deep voiced said
you are a hot headed too but uhmm.... ‘ the soft voiced looks like dipleased
‘ what is it ? ‘ peanut asked
Eriene is a girl name and i’m a boy ‘ the soft voiced said
what’s the problem? ‘ Ares said making the soft voiced grumbled
i am not a girl ‘ the soft voiced started to grumbled
with that voiced? Are you sure you are not a girl mate? ‘ Ares said jokingly making the soft voiced grumbled again
i hate you ‘ stated the soft voiced
no you are not~~~ ‘ interject by Ares
Peanut the think for a second then come up with another name ‘ what about Eriel? ‘, the soft voiced seems to be thinking but Ares already asnwered for him
he’ll take it ‘ Ares said making the soft voiced suprised
but i didn’t say yes ‘ the soft voiced started to argued
just take it mate it just a name ‘ Ares said, the soft voiced just huffed
okay i’ll take it ‘ said Eriel
it is still beautifull name if it belongs to you ‘ Ares said lovingly making Eriel choked a little
‘ okay then... so could you guys explained to Grape? ‘ Peanut said
we could but..’ Eriel started to explained but Ares beat him to it
we need your permission peanut ‘ Ares said as they still restricted because of the contract
‘ so... i give you permission ? ‘ peanut said as he still confused
you need to be more spesific peanut and you need to speak it ‘ eriel said
“ uhm... “ peanut started to speak
“ what is it Peanut? “ Grape asked
“ how do i give them permission Mr.Seiryuu ? “ Peanut asked Seiryuu as Seiryuu realised what he meant
“ well you are the one who named them so just said ‘ i give permission to ‘ and said their name “ Seiryuu explained,
Peanut Noded his head “ i give permission to Eriel “
Suddenly they hear a clinked sound, a chain tattoo started to appear at Peanut Back then a light shine trough peanut eyes as the colour change from blue to white
so peanut wanted me to explained on what happend? “ the voiced started to change as Eriel came before them
Grape became shock as the body belongs to peanut something tell her everything about peanut is change like he never exist, After a second Grape regain her composure as she glared at this…. Thing!.
She spoke sweetly at him “ why yes, could you explained what happened to peanut and who are you? “
Eriel surprised as he looked at Grape and began to question himself of why she didn’t get angry “ ah yes…. I can explain what is happening and peanut gave me the name of..
Before Eriel could finish Grape interrupted him “ on second thought….. I DON”T GIVE A muffins and cookies WHO YOU ARE “ as she bares her teeth and spoke venomously
scratch that she beyond furious ‘ Eriel thought as Grape grab his collar and meet him face to face, she spoke fiercely “ now….. I don’t care who you are what you are or what you want but you better tell me the truth about what happened and if I catch you lied a single word I will find a way to pull you out of peanut and break your bone one by one.. “ Grape threaten Eriel and it works
I know she is different to peanut but how in the father’s name can she be like a devil itself ‘ Eriel breaking a sweat as he looked at Grape, “ well? Do you understand? “ Eriel just nod his head slowly making Grape to loosen her grip.
Eriel sigh in relief as he rub his neck “ as I was saying peanut name me after the god of peace Eriene but as it because I’m a male I asked of him to change my name and become Eriel and for the record I never agreed at this name “ Grape become irritated as she started to unsheathed her claws, “ and you don’t have to worry of you wanted us to go away because after peanut accepted us we will disappear as we become one with him
Grape takes a huge breath as she let it out slowly “ I get the gist that you are part of peanut but you are far different from peanut, the peanut I knew likes to make troubles as he always calling me in the middle of my nap… playing pretend… and maybe you don’t know this but the one I have the best memory is …. “ “ making the living room wet as we pretend to be a wizard “ Eriel spoke the same times with Grape making her eyes bulge in surprised.
Eriel steadily stand up as he walked to Grape and he put both paws on her shoulder “ and that is our best memory too Grape.. “ he smiled at her as she saw a glimpse of peanut silly grinned.
“ I guessed you are Peanut too huh “ Grape stated as Eriel released her shoulder and clasped his paw, his tail begun to wagged as happiness radiated on him
believe us when we tell Seiryuu and Luna that we will not harm peanut…. We loved him as we are him and he is us “ Eriel said warmly making Grape smiled a little
Eriel began to sit back on the bed as Grape sits on the chair near the bed as Seiryuu just watched in amazed as the feline just threaten someone on the behalf of her dear one.
“ so you guys are peanut but He said (as she pointed her thumb to Seiryuu) that you guys have some recollection of your past.. care to explain? “ Grape asked as he looked at Eriel while Seiryuu Grumble on why the youth become more impolite these days.
as the same how new life is born, but while the newborn always born by the flesh and blood from their parents as a new soul will reside, in Peanut case he’s more unique “ Eriel begun to explained
“ and by that you mean? “ Grape asked
Peanut born from the flesh and blood from his true parent but his soul is not new but a part of one of his other parents soul “ Eriel stated making Seiryuu and Grape mouth gaped
“ whoa whoa whoa…. I still can’t grasp this thing “ Grape said as she rubs her face making a groan voices
let’s say it like this… someone wanted to create a new life by taking a part of his and his beloved souls and fused that souls making it a new life, but without a flesh and blood the souls can not live as that person need a female to deliver a child as a medium for these souls, but while the souls can reside on the newborn, that newborn needs to learns to accept that fused souls are part of him too “ Eriel said making a sad smile as he told the explanation like that person is him himself
while the fused souls is the new life from their parents the souls need that newborn to accept them as one to complete them “ Luna said as she came inside bringing four glasses of tea as she gave them one by one.
Seiryuu and Luna sipped their tea as they enjoyed the warmed and tasted from it, while Eriel and Grape looked at their tea as they become awkward at this situation after a while Grape sipped the tea as she looked at Eriel “ so who are you? “
Eriel immediately wanted to answer that but Grape raised her hand to stop him “ what I meant is before you become Peanut “
Eriel become silent for a sec as he looked at the untouched tea in his hand, then he begun to sipped his tea and looked determinant at all of them “ my name is Eriel the name that our beloved Peanut gave me as he name me after the god of peace, this is my new life, the life that I shared with my two beloved, I don’t care about my parents think as I only see the bright future that hold us as peanut someday will accepted us as one
Luna and Seiryuu smiled on how this person is very determinant to make him and his beloved lived happily, Grape grumbled “ *huff* you better treat Peanut like an important pup then “
Making Eriel smiled “ we already think of him as an important person in our life
Then Luna interrupted them “ so….. since when Fenrir take part of his soul to make you?
Making Seiryuu Shocked and sprayed his drink on the other side as he now thinks that these days couldn’t get any worse, while Grape is confused about what Luna is saying, Eriel just looked grim at her “ i knew the moment I saw the other peanut I felt something similar to someone I knew
Grape became more confused as sipped her tea “ who is Fenrir? “
Luna just looked uncaringly “ my ex-mate
Grape then chocked and spray the water on her mouth to Eriel as he just stands there, “ euhhhh…… it’s so dirty… peanut is not going to be happy about this Grape “ while he wipes his face with his paw
“ forget about that how did you even get her ex-mate souls!!?? “ Grape said as she still shocked on what Luna said
Ares will answered that, as I told you ‘just recollection memory’ I’m not familiar on how my parent even got his souls “ as he didn’t feel comfortable to be ask that question
don’t worry I’m not interested on how did you do it I’m just concern on peanut “ Luna stated, as Eriel sighed in relief, while Seiryuu is only praying that everything is going to be fine and luna will keep her mouth shut
so….. how did Lucifer fuse his and Fenrir souls as one? “ Luna asked innocently, making everyone chocked again while Eriel just sprayed his drink on the floor
‘ Luna always making my days become worse isn’t she ‘ that was Seiryuu taught as he now just wished that he didn’t take this job

Dark Dweller~~
“ can I visit the pup? “ Virgil asked as he suddenly felt bored as he got nothing to do
“ why did you want to visit him anyway? “ Hel asked as she lay in the middle of the throne room
“ we know our objective is in motion but you never told me why you need this pup and I wanted to check what makes you so interested with this pup, “ Virgil said as he walked to Hel
“ ….. “ Hel can’t answer that of course, they need a better communication if they wanted to succeed but she didn’t like to talk about the pup at all
Virgil looked annoyingly at Hel, then he throws his arm in the air “ GAH.. why do I even need to ask your permission I can go take a look myself “ Virgil then proceed to exit the room until Hel called him
“ VIRGIL “ he stopped then looked behind him as he waited what Hel got to say, “ please….. don’t do anything at the pup “ Virgil surprised as he saw Hel as she making a sad face
“ what is going on hel? Who is that pup? “ Virgil turn around as he started to get angry, Hel only looked away and it makes Virgil became infuriated, “ GAH….. JUST TELL ME HEL “
Hel finally saw Virgil face as he gritted his teeth showing his full fangs “ he supposed to be the key…. “
Virgil become confused at what she said “ what key? “
Hel looked down as she thinking is it better to share what her taught to Virgil “ you know before we enter that ‘realm’ we need the key right? “
Virgil just nod his head “ of course.. one redemption soul and one corrupted soul, we already secured the corrupted soul and that’s you “ vigil pointer his finger at Hel making her glared at him “ and we haven’t had a redemption soul and if I correctly remember most of the soul only have revenge and regretted souls except for those sons of God “ Virgil started to think where this conversation leads to
“ you are correct but with that pup we didn’t even need me to open the door “ Hel explained and it makes Virgil became more confused
“ what the? I knew when you start thinking about that pup you lost your thought but I didn’t know it gets worse “ Virgil stated
Hel looked uninterested at him “ well I just realized that I hope I lost my mind rather seeing with my own eyes “
Virgil clearly started to become more and more confused until he realized something as he smiled “ BLOODY HELL…. WE GOT A UNIQUE SOULS A TWO SOULS IN ONE BODY WOULD YOU LOOK AT THAT “
Hel wanted to correct Virgil but he interrupted her “ I MUST SEE IT WITH MY OWN EYES…. THIS IS REALLY…. “ before Virgil run out of the room he felt something in his leg as he looked down as a tentacle shadow grab his legs as he can’t move an inch as he looked at Hel he met with furious stares
you better not touch a single fur at that pup….. “ Hel shadow slowly move from her legs to her body as it changes her black fur to more darker as she walked to Virgil
Virgil didn’t look alarm but looked weird at Hel as she was never gotten angry at something like this other than her family ‘ something is not right ‘ then he realized again “ don’t tell me you wanted to change our target!? “ as Virgil stated making Hel growled at him. “ YOU SAID IT YOURSELF WE NEED THAT PUP IF THAT PUP HAVE TWO OF THOSE SOULS THEN WE NEED TO.. “ Hel started to get angrier as she grows bigger and she grabbed Virgil with one hand and slowly crushed him
Virgil struggled to breathe as he felt one of his ribs might be broken then Hel loosens her grib a little as Virgil gasp taking a big breath of air in his lungs, “ DO NOT MAKE ME REPEAT MYSELF ‘SON OF THE DEMON KING’ OR I WILL FORCE YOU TO BACK WHERE YOU BELONG!” Hel yelled at him
Virgil still gasping air as he felt pain beside on his waist ‘ yup my rib is broken ‘ but Virgil unfazed with Hel threat as he asked her again “ whose souls inside that pups belong to? “ Virgil asked as he makes a stoic face at Hel making her face looked conflicted.
Hel started to calm down as her body seems to return to her original form as she slowly put Virgil down, Virgil slowly sit on the floor and grab his waist as he felt pain. Hel looked at him as she walked in the middle of the throne room, she looked down as she saw a hole. She put her paw inside and pull something out, like a drawer a box came out from below as she takes it out . She opens the box and searches for something then she found what she’s searching for as she walked back to where Virgil sat.
Virgil still grab his waist in pain as he heard someone walking closer to him he looked up and met a bottle in front of his face “ drink it “ Hel said as virgil looked at her and slowly take the bottle from Her
As he drinks the bottled the pain subsided “ thank you hel “ he thanked Hel as she just huffed at him, after a while, he stands up as he started to walked out from the throne room making Hell looked at him with alarm “ don’t worry I only wanted to observe this pup…. Maybe I will have my answers “ he looked back at her, then he before he could close the door Hel called him “ Virgil “ as Virgil looked at her again “ that pup has three souls “ making him shocked as he hurriedly closed the door and run to where peanut might be, as Hel looked at the closing door she only wished Virgil understand as why she wanted to change their target.

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Chapter 13
Sandwich’s house~~
Two days later~~~
“ I’M HOMEEEEEE ? “ Peanut bark excitedly as he runs inside after earl opens the door widely, earning his parent chuckled as they went inside followed by Grape.
“ PEANUT, ERICK TOLD YOU NOT TO RUN “ Grape yelled at him until they heard the heavy thump as they heard whimper Grape rush to where the sound is
“ mmm~~~~ soooo……soft “ grape found peanut lay on his stomach as he lazying on the coach, Grape sigh irritated at Peanut.
“ move a little “ Grape said, peanut groaned a little as he wanted nothing but slept on the couch, “ well then.. “ Grape grinning evilly as she jumped on top of him, peanut yelp as Grape rest on top of him.
“ hnn…. Grape you're heavy.. “ Peanut said until he felt a claw on his shoulder “ *yelp*….. GRAAAAPEEEE “ Peanut yowled
“ never called a girl fat peanut… “ Grape said “ now stay still and be a good bed “ Grape purred as he laid her head on top peanut head, Peanut huffed as they heard their parents laughter
“ I’m going to make a snack for us to enjoy, “ Jill said as she looked back at the door “ Luna you can come in and please make yourself comfortable “
Luna peeks her head “ ah… it’s very impolite of me if I just went in but thank you Mrs.sandwich “ Luna went inside, Jill walked away as she yelled “ just call me Jill “ earning chuckled from Luna, she looked around the house until she watched the two pets as she smiled at them“ is this what you guys always do?
Grape ignored her as she kept purring, she felt comfortable on top of peanut “ *huff* you’ll never get your answer when she’s like this “
Luna only laughed at their antics “ well at least we still need to solve your mystery Peanut
Peanut face became grimed, he thinks for a moment “ isn’t it better if we just let it slide? “
Luna face became pure confused “ why? Do you not want to know yourself? “ as she looked at Peanut she saw a sadness in his face
“ Eriel….. is in pain when he remembers that and Ares started to scream furiously “ Peanut whimper, Grape licked his head to calm him. “ it scared me “
Luna sighed “ I’m sorry Peanut “ she walked to them and sit on the floor as she kneeled and rub peanut head
“ I’m not the one who you should apologize to… “ Peanut muffled, Luna hummed as she agreed at him
yeah…. I know… “ Luna whispered at him
Flashback 2 days ago~~
Eriel began to cough loudly but Grape mouth opens widely as she looked at Luna shocked at what Luna just said while Seiryuu just facepalming and shake his head “ did you just said Lucifer? “ Grape mewed a little as Luna just nod casually
“ I’m older than you and I never saw Lucifer and now you’re telling me that Eriel is part of Lucifer soul? “ once again Luna just nod casually while sipping her tea, Seiryuu take a long breath “ I can’t believe you “ while rubbing his face with his hands
Eriel started to regain composure “ * cough * could you be less blunt Luna? “ Eriel glared at her but she just shrugged her shoulder until he felt a pair of paws dragging his collar toward someone
He looked up at the person who almost choked him and met with a sharp fangs as it hisses at him face to face “ when you gonna tell me that peanut have both Fenrir and Lucifer souls? “ now Grape started to become irritated as this piece of information was left behind by Eriel
Eriel started to choke as her paw grip begun harder “ *gurk* grape… *gurk* can’t …. Breath “ Grape started to growl but she remembers that peanut is still in there, she let go of him and he started to fell relieved “ *huff*…. Okay…. Okay…. “ Grape waited for him to answer, but only silence that she can hear
“ well? “ Grape started to get irritated waiting for his answered until she looked at his face, his face looked like someone in pain and Grape didn’t like it one bit, “ hey…. Are you alright? “ with a soft-voiced she asked him
it’s just that…. “ Eriel slowly rubs his head “ I couldn’t recall anything when Lucifer… fused me with peanut “ he tried to remember but every time he forces to remember his head felt like it stabs with a needle
oh come on ‘Lucifer’.. “ Luna started to talk, everyone surprised at the toned that Luna used “ seriously? Just because Peanut called you with a different name that doesn’t change anything.. you are still Lucifer, heck, your aura felt almost like him “ Luna started to get hostile while Eriel looked shocked at what Luna just said
wha…. Wait hold on… i.. “ Eriel wanted to talk but Luna interrupted him
just tell us, I know there are some memories in you ‘Lucifer’ believe me, you start telling us now the faster we can fuse you two with peanut “ everytime Luna talked her sound felt distasteful and even Seiryuu surprised at what he hearing
yes,… I know but I am telling the truth I couldn’t .. “ and yet every time Eriel started to talk Luna have something in her mind
what? There is no way you couldn’t remember, how could we trust you? You didn’t even tell us that you are the part soul of Lucifer and Fenrir? “ everyone in the room started to felt uncomfortable
Inside Eriel mind Peanut and Ares could hear everything that Luna just said and it makes them restless
I’m starting to dislike everything about her “ Ares started to growl in anger
“ Ares…. Something is wrong… “ Peanut stated as he felt something bad could happen
it’s Eriel, he’s starting to lose control “ Peanut almost couldn’t understand what he just said because the way he talks, it consisted of growling and bark
“ I don’t like it…. “ Peanut whimper, “ ERIEL PLEASE….. CALM DOWN “ Peanut called him but he got no answered as he hears Ares started to growled furiously
MAKE HER SHUT UP “ Ares started to felt furious as he couldn’t control himself
Eriel felt a massive pain in his head as he grabs his head “ please…. I don’t.. “ he started to plead but Luna didn't give him a chance
what? Did you do something to Fenrir? “ Luna said, Eriel started to remember something as a flash of memory came to him
wait.. please “ Eriel pleaded as he started to cry
Grape started to get angry as she yelled at Luna “ HEY JUST STOP… “ but Luna just ignored her
did you take part of his soul by force? “ Luna continued her talk, every time she talked Eriel remember piece by piece and it’s not In a good way. Eriel head felt like it could explode as a flash of memories came one by one, forcing him to remember what happened. Both Peanut and Ares started to lose their mind
“ please…. Stop…. Just stop…. “ Peanut became terrified, both of them can see the image of the memories of Eriel when he still in Lucifer
YOU muffins and cookies MONGREL… HOW DARE YOU HURT MY MATE.. “ Ares anger rise until it reaches the top of his limit, he couldn’t bear this feeling as he yelled at Peanut “ PEANUT CHANGE BACK
“ but how… “ peanut still feeling terrified as he whimpers every time a flash of memories came
JUST FORCE HIM IN “ Aries couldn’t this much longer
Eriel tears fall like a waterfall as the pain became intense, “ Luna isn’t this enough? “ Seiryuu tried to stop Luna
Luna looked at Eriel but she doesn’t feel pity at him “ you are lucky I didn’t call Fenrir or it will get worse
Then something snapped inside Eriel head, he screamed in pains as he grabs his head with both of his paws. Grape and Seiryuu face became paled as they rushed to Eriel when he started to trash around, “ PLEASE… NO NO NO… I’M SORRY.. I’M SORRY FENRIR.. PLEASE…. I BEG YOU… PLEASE I STILL LOVE HIM… PLEASE “ he screams, no one couldn’t understand what he just said. Luna came to her senses as she stands there and looked at what she had done, she started to regret at what she just did.
Ares couldn’t take it anymore as he just screams in anger, Peanut trembled in fear. he wanted to end this, he didn’t like it one bit when Eriel in pain. Peanut remembered that he needs to force Eriel inside “eriel…. “ he tried to talk but it came out like a whimper.
Eriel started to Scream again as he shouted gibberish, Grape tried to hold his hand fearing that he hurt himself while Seiryuu holding his body, Luna started to feel despaired as she still couldn’t believe at what she had done
Ares still scream in anger, Peanut almost at his limit as his last strength he called him “ ERIEEEELLLLLLL “ as he felt something pushing him to walk where Eriel is.
Then the room fell into silence as the sound that they could hear is someone breathing hard, Grape looked at Eriel as she slowly releases her hold, Seiryuu started to look confused as of why the cat releases her hold then he looked at what she saw and he understands as he releases his hold too.
They met with a blue sky coloured eyes and they knew that Peanut has taken over his body, Luna looked at his eyes as she started to walked to him “ Are you okay child… “ before she could grab him, Peanut slap her paw away leaving a horrified face from the goddess
Peanut glared at her, as they felt his anger towards Luna “ get…out” Peanut speak slowly as he out of breath.
Luna became become more confused as she whether stay near him or leave him for a moment, “ Peanut… please.. i’m “ but peanut already have enough
“ GET OUT “ Peanut screamed at her making her jump in surprise,
She looked at him as she felt pain in her heart “…. Okay….. I’ll see you tomorrow then… “ Luna slowly walked outside of the room, as she closed the door Peanut cover her face with a blanket
“ you know she didn’t mean it right, “ Seiryuu told him but he didn’t even care. Seiryuu sighed as he walked out of the room as he followed where Luna might be.
Grape looked where both of them just left, then she looked at Peanut as she started to feel concerned at him “ are you really okay peanut? “ but she got no answered from him, she sighed and ready to leave the room too until something held her paw as she saw Peanut paw grab her as it giving her a message that said ‘ please don’t leave me ’ as she felt his paw started to tremble, she started to sit down again as she held his paw with both of her paws telling him that everything going to be alright
Back to present~~
Eriel never showed up again after that, even the next day Peanut still held a grudge against Luna, “ I hope you can forgive me Eriel
Peanut open one of his eyes as he glanced at Luna “ he can’t hear you… “ as he proceeds to take a little nap with Grape on top of him
I know… “ Luna whispered as she rubs Peanut head and then proceeds to rub Grape head too
Babylon Hospital ~~
“ muffins and cookies…. I should get a little more sample from that pup “ Erick is checking a blood sample that he took from Peanut, using the hospital lab he quickly analyses the blood but nothing change. The blood that he got doesn’t contain any drugs or any strange chemical, it always like that for 2 days. The first sample he got is when he heard someone yelling in peanut room, he asked the others but none of them giving their answered. Peanut looked gloomy while Grape just sat beside him and holding his hand, he tried to look for Luna but he couldn’t find her. The next day he found an awkward situation, usually Luna is excited looking at the pup, now she only looked at him in the distant their parents looked at each other trying to figure out what happened, Erick asked another blood sample hoping that something will change but he got nothing again, the last day before Peanut when home Erick asked another sample and making the pup pout at him, their parents asked why he always wanted another blood sample and he quickly dodge it by telling Luna to come with them, and now he already check them 5 times and he found nothing at all, ‘ so much for my hard work.. ‘ he grumbled
Then his phone ringing as he quickly answered the phone “ hello, doctor Erick speaking? “ the next replied he got shocked him greatly
good day mister Erick “ a thick accent from the sound making Erick surprised as he never gotten a called from him and yet he still remember those thick accent
“ IGOR…. I haven’t heard anything about you after I went back to my country, how’s your life boy? “ Erick seems to be excited as he never gotten any news from this person
my life has been perfect doctor, my mate is having another pup “ the person or a dog happily replied
“ muffins and cookies…. How long is it, 5 or 7? I forgotten and did you just said Anya is having another baby? muffins and cookies IT… I should have gotten a ticket if knew this sooner “ Erick rambled on as he heard laughter from the phone
hahaha…. You didn’t even know when my mate first pregnant let alone she’s given another pup to me “ the answered he got
Erick then realized something odd “ wait… how did you know this number? “
let just say I have some connection, doctor
“ huh.. I hope you didn’t do shady works boy “ Erick giving a warning In his voiced
quite the opposite doctor, I captured them. “ he answered
Erick started to get confused until he realized “ you? Joining law enforcement? Hahahah…. Boy I’m proud of you “ Erick started to grinned as he felt happy for this dog
I know right? Given with my situation I never thought I join them “ Igor said
“ yeah, I know what you mean.. “ they become silent for a few minutes as they remembered what happened
i still haven’t forgotten that women “ Igor said in sadness
“ the one at faults is us boy…. We should have listened to Anya but we just ignored her “ Erick said
my only wish that she can forgive me for my action “ Erick could hear a sigh from Igor over the phone
“ given how her attitude… I know she will “ Erick smiled a little as he tried reassuring Igor
thank you doctor, and thank you for saving me that day“ as Igor fell Gratitude towards Erick
“ no problem…. But I got one question… why are you calling me after all these years? “ Erick tried to understand why Igor called him just now, ‘if he already got some ‘connection’ he should have called me a few years back’
oh! That… I’m going to Babylon Garden next Monday… “ as Igor explain
Erick heart jump a bit after hearing what, ‘ what a great timing huh? ‘ Erick started to think hard whether he asked Igor or not.
After a few minutes, Igor started calling his name “ Doctor? Mister Erick? Sir? “ Erick started as he heard Igor
“ ah… sorry boy, i got something in my mind.. “ Erick explain
ah… sorry for disturbing your work… I should end this call
“ ah.. no… it’s not about work but….. “ Erick seriously wanted to ask but it’s hard to ask ‘THAT’ question
you don’t have to tell me doctor” Igor tried to calm him down
Eric thought ‘ rather than asked ‘THAT’ question I should have just let him see ‘him’ ‘ Erick began to asked “ do you have times after you landed in Babylon? “
Igor began to confused “ rather than meeting with some officers and finding where to stay? I guess I got time before the start of my worked
Erick voiced started to get serious “ good…. I need a favour”
Igor ears perk at that “ asked anything doctor…. I haven’t even repaid yours
Erick voice began deep as he whispered to the phone “ I need you to meet some dog and don’t worry about favours.. let me meet your pups and we all settled “
Igor began to chuckled deeply “ he he he …. Don’t worry doctor not only you can meet my pups you can cuddled with them for as long as you wanted
Erick started to grinned “ I’ll take your words for it “
Babylon Police Station~~
“ oh man I’m can’t wait for tonight “ Kevin grinned as he enters Ralph office, Ralph glance at him as he becomes irritated
“ and why are you here? “ Ralph sighed as he continued looking at the report stacking on his desk
“ so you won’t forget our event for tonight... “ Kevin still grinning ear to ear as he came beside Ralph and nudge his shoulder
“ I wished I was… “ as Ralph started correcting the paper
“ and make the pup sad? “ as Kevin makes the puppy face to Ralph
Ralph facepalming as he breathe deeply “ that pup just got release from the hospital, Kevin “
Kevin then proceeded to wrap his hand around Ralph shoulder “ that’s why we celebrate“
Ralph looked at Kevin as he saw his grinning face, he knew he couldn’t win this argument “ *sigh*… just…. Keep an eye on the pup and his friends “
Kevin face become stoic “ no way chief… he’s yours “ Ralph face burned red as Kevin chuckled at him
“ it will make my job easier if… we keep an eye on them “ as Ralph make an excuse
Ralph becomes surprised as Kevin suddenly pulled Ralph and looked each other face to face “ are you saying you care about Peanut because that is your JOB? “ Kevin face become hardened as Ralph slowly realized what he was saying
“ NO… I mean NO… he is not a job but…. muffins and cookies IT “ as Ralph become stressed, he didn’t mean to say what he was saying
“ you’re overthinking it chief… you know you have a soft spot on Peanut “ Kevin slowly released his hold on Ralph
Ralph cover his face as he taking nice deep breath “ I don’t know what to say “
“ if I were you I say the same thing, this is the first time you care deeply about someone rather than K-9’s and your owner “ Kevin explained
Ralph glared at Kevin “ since when you can talk seriously? “
Kevin just rolled his eyes “ since I met Sasha… “ Ralph really need to put a tape on his maw as he saw sadness in Kevin eyes
“ I’m sorry Kevin “ as he put his paw on Kevin shoulder
Kevin just smiled at him “ don’t worry chief I can handle it… it’s just… I hope you didn’t say that in front of Peanut face “
Ralph face turned horror as he seriously needs to think what he’s about to say “ muffins and cookies it…. You’re right Kevin but I’m so nervous I mean… I met him once but I never saw something that can make me care about him until that accident “
Kevin grinned showing his fully teeth “ so you admit that you care about him? “
Ralph blushed as he becomes irritated “ OKAY… fine… I kinda care about him “
Kevin looked at Ralph shoulder as he saw the bandage “ ‘kinda’? really? “
Ralph gritted his teeth “ OKAY…. I CARE ABOUT HIM “ as he held himself before he could try to strangle Kevin
Kevin smiled “ good… just be honest with yourself chief and everything will be alright… and you better check your shoulder chief if you don’t want to make him cry again... “
Ralph unconsciously caressed his wound “ no need to remind me…. I just hope I can minimize the bandage “
Then Ralph proceed to check every report while Kevin pull a seat and place it in front of Ralph desk, Ralph looked questioningly at Kevin then without care as he looked the report one by one, 30 minute passed and Ralph surprised to see Kevin sit still in front of him without bothering him ‘ maybe the day he started going out with Sasha he became more mature ‘ then Kevin stand up quickly ‘ I spoke too soon ‘
“ I GOT IT “ as he jumped from the seat, taking out his phoned and proceed to call someone, Ralph rubbed his head as he continued what he’s doing.
Then he heard some of Kevin words “ hello doc? Yup, it’s me, Kevin….. no no it’s not about the diet…. Yes… my owner changes my daily routine… no... wait a sec let me talk…. So do you remembered when we talked about…. You know… ‘that one’…. Yes with Sasha…. Yup…. Yup “ as Ralph looked at Kevin he saw a burned red face on Kevin face and he wondered what he’s talking about with his doctor “ yes… that alpha thing…. Yeah… well, I wonder can someone begun their affection because of that phase? “ Ralph ears began to perk up as he had a feeling that Kevin is talking about him “ ah… now I get it… thanks, doc you just save some dog love life “
Ralph face burned bright as he yelled “ I DO NOT LOVE HIM “ Kevin looked dumbfounded at him
“ I didn’t say you love him.. “ Ralph looked embarrassed as he quickly turned his head to looked at the report in his paw “ yet….. “ as Kevin Grinned widely making Ralph turn his face sharply at him
“ Kevin if you just wanted to bother me you can see yourself out now “ Ralph glared at Kevin as he laughed at him
“ aww… c’mon now chief I’m just messing with you…. “ Kevin smiled at him “ but I might know something that causes you to have affection towards peanut... “
Ralph looked at Kevin as he now slowly put the report down “ go on…” Ralph said as he interested what Kevin found
Kevin began to look serious “ do you know when mating season an alpha wolf showing his dominance toward a wolf that he or she interested correct? “
Ralph face burned red “ what’s that supposed to mean between me and Peanut? “
“ not that… but by showing dominance some of the pup and submissive wolf seeking protection towards the Alpha and they will do anything to obey the Alpha “ Kevin continued to explain
Ralph became confused “ are you saying I have affection towards Peanut because I showed my dominance? “
Kevin nodded his head “ that’s my theory that I got from my doctor… by showing my dominance towards Sasha, she seeks protection from me and will always trust me “
Ralph scratched his head “ but I never showed any dominance towards him “
Kevin face frowned “ if I correctly remember didn’t you just said that the only one who can stop Peanut that time is you right? “
Ralph still didn’t believe what he just heard “ that doesn’t mean anything “
Kevin face become hardened “ you want to bet? “
Ralph didn’t like this one bit “ I’m going to regret this but what the catch? “
Kevin smiled evilly “ if I’m right I’m not going to write any report for one month “ Ralph sighed “ and if I’m wrong I will do my reports…. With full detail on what happened “ Kevin raised his paw as he waits for Ralph to shake it “ do we have a deal? “
Ralph looked at his paw and slowly grab it firmly “ deal “
Kevin grinned “ good… now, this is what you gotta do for tonight and remember… now backing out from this chief “
Ralph sighed as he counts the time before the event started and hope he was right.


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Chapter 14~~
I think this is far enough…Fenrir looked behind him as he confirmed that no one tracking him through where he stands now, he kneels on his leg as he sighs in relief. ‘ all of his trackers are gone for now... I can rest for a bit ‘. He looked around him as he saw a beautiful landscape ‘ so beautiful.. ‘ he gets up and walked as he saw many flowers bloomed, ‘ I never seen these beautiful place even before I got… ‘ his face turns dark as he remembered the torture, the humiliation and of course his betrayal, he gritted his teeth in anger as he growled a little ‘ I will have my revenged you traitor, ‘ he stopped walking until he realised a beautiful tree in front of him ‘ wait a sec…. isn’t that tree… ‘ then on a cue, he hears a flap of wings “ may I asked what are you doing here?
He looked up as he saw a beautifull orange hair and green eyes of a man with his white wings looking at him from above the brances, he became starteld as he saw an angel he quickly take a huge leep back and prepared himself for a fight but after a minute the angel didn’t do anything, ‘ why didn’t he attack me? Well then… ‘ he lunged towards him as he unsheathed his claws, he tried to aim his head but the angel only craned his neck to the right as Fenrir missed just a centimetre, he changed his attack in mid air and tried to kick him but the angel fly away before it gets him, Fenrir use this opportunity and step on one of the branches as he jumped again, as he almost near the angel he clenched his fist and ready to punch him ‘ you can fly but that doesn’t mean you fast enough to dodge it ‘ before his fist almost got him suddenly a flash of light blinded his eyes as he felt his fist hit something he quickly took a backflip as he tried to regain his vision.
He looked up at the angel as he saw what his holding on, an umbrella “ really !? you are using that to fight me ? “ the only answered he got only a stoic face and silence, he started to get irritated “ you are the first one that could make me feel irritated even by looking at your face “ and the angel still didn’t answer him, “ FINE…. “ he shouted as a shadow looming at him from below, as he reached for something the shadow come to his paw as it changes shape into a weapon, a claymore “ let see if that ‘weapon’ of yours can match mine “ with his two paws he lifts his weapon as he jumps to charge at the angel, he thrust his sword forward as he waits for their weapon to clash but the angel only open his umbrella and when it clashed Fenrir blown away but he immediately regain composure as he landed he looked up in surprise “ WHAT KIND OF WEAPON IS THAT!? “ he clearly outmatched In this situation
Suddenly something surprised him even more “ do you always love to fight? “ the angel just spoken to him “ is it fun ?Fenrir only looked at him with dumbfounded face, the angel face suddenly become confused “ are you there? “ it seems Fenrir couldn’t believed that the Angel is talking to him right now, but most of the people hear smooth sound from the angel but for Fenrir that sound mesmerised him it sound like a beautifull melodic in his ears “ you are weird… you talked a lot when I didn’t said anything but when I do you became silent
Fenrir suddenly regain his composure “ a…ah .. well… you surprised me !Fenrir said while it seems like he chocked on soometing
The angel became more confused “ how? I only talked just now “ but fenrir only grunted in stressed
well… I mean…. You could just talk back you knowFenrir face flushed in red whenever he hears the angel voice
well you shouldn’t attack someone when they asked you something “ the angel retort back
When he said that making Fenrir surprised “ wait… you didn’t want to fight me?
The angel only shakes his head “ I’m just asking you… does asking means a fight in your world?
Fenrir only blinked as he becomes more dumbfounded “ okay… I’m sorry that one is my fault, I’m just looking out for myself
The angel flew down on the branches as he sits there “ it seems you got a lot on your plate
Fenrir sighed a little as he sits down on the ground as his weapon vanished like a smoke “ you have no idea
They looked at the landscape feeling comfortable with each other as the wind blew, then Fenrir suddenly asked “ why didn’t you fight back when I tried to attack you
They looked at each other “ is not my job to fight “ making Fenrir confused
what is your job?Fenrir looked at his eyes as it reminded him something like a gem
a guardian, I’m only protecting this place “ the angel touch the tree as Fenrir finnaly understand
the tree that grew a frobbiden fruit… ‘the tree of knowledge’ Fenrir said, making the Angel grew curious at him
you are educated it seems “ the Angel said making Fenrir angry
OI…. WHAT’S THAT SUPPOSED TO MEANFenrir growled, but the growling suddenly ceased when he heard something… a giggled… the Angel laughed at him making him blushed as he surprised to hear that his laughter making his heart beat faster
he he he… I’m sorry it just… it so much fun teasing you “ the Angel smiled and it makes Fenrir eye grew wide
could you pleased stop that! “ Fenrir grumbled as he felt a little shy, ‘ I am the so-called ‘ GOD OF DESTRUCTION ‘ felt shy just because an angel teased me, I’m clearly losing my touch ‘ he then heard a flap of wings, the angel fell down slowly as his wings covering him, as the wings open the Angel is no longer a man but a feline, an orange wild cat, as he landed gracefully on the ground, he proceeded to approach Fenrir.
Forgive me, I didn’t have much conversation rather than my own family “ he then sit in front of Fenrir, as Fenrir looked closely at their height it’s clearly far different as he is taller than the Angel ‘ and I still lose to him Fenrir grumbled a little as he know felt a little insulted that he lost to a guy shorter than him “ you grumbled a lot “ the Angel looked interested at him
*humph* I felt insulted that I clearly lost to a guy that shorter than me,Fenrir said making the Angel gasped
*gasp* I AM NOT SHORT “ it seems that he felt offended that Fenrir just called him short
we can see clearly even when we sit down “ as Fenrir face looked straight at the Angel face
I just change my form to a feline that clearly more smaller than canine and when I’m still in a man form we have an even height “ the Angel retorted
“ still shorter than me… and why are you changing your form anyway? “ Fenrir retorted back
what? You don’t like it? “ the angel asked
no.. it’s not like that I mean you are still beautifull even when you still in your other form “ Fenrir said and it makes the Angel whole face became red tomato and it makes Fenrir confused until he said
beautifull? “ the Angel said in a low voiced, Fenrir heard that and his face now burn red too as he became panic
WHA…. I MEAN…. WAIT… IT’S NOT THAT…. IT’S NOT THAT YOU ARE NOT BEAUTIFULL…. Wait that’s wrong…. I MEAN YOU HAVE BEAUTIFULL VOICED… I MEAN GREAT VOICE YEAH THAT’S WHAT I MEANT A GREAT VOICE “ clearly Fenrir became more and more panic as he finnaly only smiled worriedly at the Angel making the Angel face became redder “ I’m going to shut my mouth now “ as the Angel put his paw on his face hiding the blushed that form on his face ‘ really!? Does my title mean nothing to me?Fenrir finnaly took a large breath “ looked we clearly misunderstood each other… uhm… so maybe we should introduce ourselved? “ the Angel Looked beetwen his fingers as Fenrir knew that he still felt embarrassed, he noded his head to Fenrir as Fenrir sighed in relieved
my name is Fenrir what’s yours? “ the Angel finnaly realeased his hand and looked straight lon Fenrir as he could clearly can see a slight blush still form on the angel face. That day Fenrir didn’t know that when he heard the name of that Angel his whole life will change upside down
The Angel took a deep breath and said it “ my name is ‘Lucifer’ “.
?? Shelter~~~
that dream again… ‘ a cat figured in a cage move slightly as it awakens from a dream, ‘ why do I keep having these dreams? ‘ he looked around him for a minute figuring out where he is, ‘ cage….. of course…. That dreams always messing with my head ‘ he slowly rubs his face making sure that this is real, ‘ this is ridiculous… why on earth I’m dreaming about a wolf and an angel this is weird…. And that name… Lucifer…. Why that name making me feel so weird… like I must remembered it no matter what ‘ he stretched his body and walked slowly on a bars that kept him from outside world making sure not waking anyone on the process he grabs the bars with both of his paws, as he looked outside and only darkness that he could see, he looked up and saw a glimpse of light on the window, “ Fenrir…. “ he slowly said his name, it’s giving him goosebump as almost like he chanted that name like a spell, he slowly touch his lip as a slight blush started forming on his face ‘ why did that name felt so….. important to me… ‘ suddenly he heard something moving in the shadow as he suprissed a hushed sound can be heard
“ who is that? “ he looked to his right and found a middle-aged man suddenly sitting beside him on an empty cage, “ sorry for startling you but I hoped you can keep your voice down, I’m scared that you’ll wake up the others “ his deep accent caught his attention as he knew that this is not the one that in charge of this place.
when did you come here ? “ he asked that man
“ I just arrived from the other room, I’m staying here for today “ the man brought something to his mouth like a small glass a he heard the man sip something “ ahhhh….. that hit the spot “ he eyes couldn’t tell the man appereance because the room still dark, he heard another movement as the man looked up to the window “ the moon is beautifull no ? “
He wanted to see too but with cage placement, he could only see the window “ I can’t see anything from here “ his ears started to fall down on his head as he felt sadness
“ ahh… I see.. forgive me for that.. “ then the man suddenly does something that makes him yelp in surprised “ please don’t yell “ the man take his cage and slowly walked to the near-empty cage beside the window ‘ you suddenly take my cage… how am I not supposed to yell in surprised
“ there we go… now both of us can see the moon “ the man put his cage on top of the empty cage as the cage now faces to face with the window “ see...it’s beautiful… da? “
He looked at the window as he saw a beautiful full moon from his cage, his eyes started to sparkled and his ears perked up from what he saw, the light from the moon slowly brighten his cage
“ you have beautiful eyes and fur “ the man said,
The light from the moon finnaly shine his body and he saw the man, a broad body, a short hair and blue eyes as the man wearing an expensive looking suit, when he looked closely on the man eyes he saw something that surprised him even more, the reflection of himself an orange fur and of course a green eyes ‘ is that me?
“ you are not very talkactive no? “ the man voice brought him from his tought
I don’t really know what to say, “ he said
“ hmm…. I would give you my drinks but I think it will be harm for you “ the man chuckled as he put his drink on top of his cage
i’m more curious on how did you get inside this building “ he asked the man
“ let’s just say I’m visiting someone “ the man voiced suddenly grow cold as he heard it
He didn’t say anything after that as they enjoy the view of the moon as the man enjoy his drinks, after a while the man suddenly take his glass “ it is nice of you to accompany me in this lovely night but I must bid my farewell “ the man slowly walked away but then he turn for back “ ah yes… what’s your name? “
The feline looked at the man “ I didn’t know who I am, even I can’t remember my own past
The man grabbed his chin “ ahh… it is very sad that something like that could happen “
what’s yours? “ he asked in curiosity, the man grinned at him as he slowly telling him his name
“ Dmitri Reznikov “
Sandwich house~~
“ and remembered you mustn’t cause trouble for officer Ralph okay? “, jill begun to lecture them as today is the day the sandwich’s kit and of course Luna join the k-9 forces to a bar.
“ don’t worry mom you know I’ll aways watch peanut “ Grape said as she grinning ear to ear as she couldn’t help feeling excited to go there.
“ hey…. I’m not that bad “ peanut said feeling a little upset
not to worry jill I’m going to watch both of them, “ Luna said as she rubs both of the sandwich’s kit, making Grape grumbled and peanut felt awkward
“ thank you so much, Luna, at least it makes my heart calm a little “ Jill said as she smiled in amusement
Before both of them tried to argue back a knock can be heard on the front door.
“ I’LL GET IT “ as Peanut rushed towards the door leaving Luna in shock
how can he run that fast? “ Luna amazed at how Peanut quickly run towards the front door
“ you haven’t seen him when he woke me up from my nap “ Grape said in the stoic face
As Peanut open the door he faces showed a surprised expression “ Ralph? “
The others quickly looked in front of the door as they all surprised liked peanut. Ralph standing there in the front door but that’s not the reason why they all surprised, his fur looked clean and tidy, his wearing a blue vest but not his k-9’s vest but a well made one as his tag shine brightly it almost like he’s ready for a date.
“ are you ready Peanut? “ his deep voiced making peanut trembled, Peanut face blushed as this is the first time that he felt like this. He suddenly took a sniff and found a wonderful smell as he took another he knew where the smell comes from and it makes his face became more brighten.
Peanut stand there tried to absorb this new kind of feeling, “ are you okay peanut? “ Ralph said as he worriedly asked him
“ a…ah… yeaaahh…. I’m okay “ his words tumbled around as he tried smiled with his full teeth hoping it can hide his embarassement.
“ oh my… you look astonishing, “ Jill said as he looked at Ralph appearance
“ thank you mrs.sandwich I’m very flattered “ Ralph said as he looked back to Peanut checking wether he’s alright or not, and this got Luna attention as she grinned a little.
“ who is the lucky lady sir Ralph? “ as Luna teasingly asked him knowing why he dressed like that
Ralph became confused when she asked that question, “ what? “
Grape surprised to hear the confusion in ralph voiced “ what do you mean ‘what’ ? you dressed like you ready to pick up your princess, I meant every female dogs will drool when they saw you “
Ralph eyes became wide in surprised when he heard this “ wha…. That… tha’s not what it’s looked like “
Luna smile becomes wider “ oh~~ then please explain yourself?
Ralph clearing his troath as he ready to explained “ my friend told me that it’s not very.. how do I say this in his term… ‘cool’.. if I pick you guys in my uniform and he giving me tips to dressing on this occasion “
Luna pout a little when she heard his explaination ‘ does this dog always serious
Grape looked weirdly at him “ you know you can wait for us at the meeting place right? “
Ralph looked straightforward at her “ do you even know the place? “
Grape tried to answer but then realised that he is correct “ touché. “ as she pointed her fingers towards Ralph
“ thought so… and i looked normal in the eyes of any female dogs “ Ralph said
“ THAT’S NOT TRUE “ Peanut yelled making everyone looked surprised at him, “ I meant you looked very cool tonight and amazing too “ as Ralph looked eyes to eyes with his blue eyes.
Ralph then smiled as he leaning to his ears as he whispers to him “ well…. You looked amazing too peanut “ making Peanut blushed again.
Luna smile grinning ear to ear as Grape surprised to hear what Peanut just said, then Earl came from the kitchen “ why is peanut yelling? “
Jill rolled her eyes as she grab her husband arm “ well then I hope you guys have a wonderful night “ as she dragged her husband towards their room as earl tried to protest something, they looked at them as they disappeared on the other room until they heard Jill scream “ DON’T FORGET TO LOCK THE DOOR ON THE WAY OUT “ and the last thing they heard is a closed door
They looked at each other until Ralph asked them “ well…. Shall we go now? “ the others nod their head as they walked out the door.
They walked together towards their destination well not for Peanut as he eagerly tried to make them hurried their pace “ C’mon guys hurry up I wanna take a look at the place already “ as he wagged his tail feeling excited
Grape sighed “ Peanut we need to go to max place first did you forget that we invited him? “
Peanut looked at her accusingly “ you mean ‘you’ invited him “
Grape rolled her eyes “ he is my ‘boyfriend’ so there nyeh… “ as she sticking her tounge out
Then Peanut put his paw toward his heart “ you pick your boyfriends towards your bestfriend how could you?! “ as he pretend to be betrayed
Grape could see this as she plays along “ my heart belongs to him, I can’t live without him, forgive me peanut “ she dramatically put her both paws to her heart
Peanut put his paw to his head as he dramatically looked away “ I felt sorrow and heartbroken, how could you do this to me “
Then for a few seconds, they fell into silent until Grape couldn’t hold her giggled “ pfft…. Hahahaha oh dog this is so akwards “ as she wiped her tears from laughing
Ralph and Luna looked at their antics as they smiled warmly at them, Peanut then stick his tongue out at grape “ I always looked good when we played pretend thank you very much so there.. nyeh “ then Peanut walked ahead of them towards Max house
“ does peanut love acting? “ Ralph curiously asked Grape as they continued to walk
“ we only play pretend when we get bored but it becomes our ritual with or without our friends “ Grape explained
“ it makes me remembered when I was a pup “ Ralph said as he reminiscing his past
They finally arrived at Max house and they saw Peanut talking with a black cat, both of them looked at the group “ see her fur is really white “, max looked surprised as he saw Luna
“ don’t you dare looked at her like that I am your girlfriend “ Grape smile dangeriously at him, making him sweat a little
“ ah… I meant don’t worry darling my love for you always comes first then the other “ max said “ I mean who’s not going to surprised when they see a bright white wolf “ as max pointed
well I can not deny that little one “ Luna chuckled
“ the name max at your service “ as he playfully bow to Luna
why good sir, it’s an honour… my name is Luna “ as she played along
Then Max smile grin ear to ear “ then what are we waiting for for.. let’s go to the party ! “ as he pulls a fist towards the air
Peanut joined him in excitement but before he could run ahead of them Ralph yelled at him “ PEANUT! “ Peanut ears went down as he looked at Ralph, as he saw that Ralph glared at him Max and Grape also looked surprised but Luna realised what is going to happened
“ come here “ as Ralph looked sternly at him, Peanut walked slowly with his tail between his leg and his ears down on top of his head as he stops in front of the male canine.
“ do you remember our promised back in the hospital? “ Ralph asked, Peanut looked down at the floor suddenly looked interesting, “ well? “
Peanut looked at him “ no sir I’m sorry “ he said in a low voiced as he shakes his head
Ralph glared at him “ always stay by my side Peanut….that’s the promised “ Peanut eyes went wide as he remembered it too. Then Ralph sighed a little “ it’s not like I didn’t trust you to behave but I just didn’t want anything happened to you peanut “ as Ralph pat his head
Peanut tail began to wag as a little smiled form on his face, Ralph then held out his paw “ now… hold my paw and let’s go together “ almost as he commands him. Peanut looked at his paw for a sec and slowly he moved his paw to take Ralph paw. As soon Peanut holds his paw he firmly held her paw but not too tight and it makes Peanut felt comfortable too as they walked hand to hand forgetting the others that still behind them.
“ what just happened? “ as max looked questioningly at the others, Grape and Luna just looked at each other
“ you’ll find out sooner or later, “ Grape said as she dragged max followed by Luna.
They finnaly catcthed up to Ralph and Peanut as they looked at the both of them still holding hand to hand, “ am I missing something or are you guys just messing with me? “ max still couldn’t comprehensive this situation
Luna chuckled “ let’s just say their relationship is a unique one.. “ as Luna smiled as she looked the both of them
“ does something happened beetwen Tarot and Peanut? “ as Max looked at Grape
Grape just sighed a little “ it’s complicated… and let’s just say I don't understand most of this at all “ Max nod in understanding as he looked at a sad face on Grape
“ so Peanut… Grape said you always play pretend with her, does that mean you like acting? “ Ralph asked out of the blue as he enjoyed walking together with him
“ nah… it’s just that… it’s so much fun when I’m playing with her whether playing games, hide and seek or maybe play tag “ Peanut said as he looked above him as he saw a beautiful full moon,
the moon is beautiful ‘ Eriel suddenly speak making Peanut raised his ears in alarm
“ ERIEL “ Peanut suddenly yelled making Ralph and the others looked at him in surprised
Oi... don’t make a fuss Peanut ‘ Ares reprimanded him, Peanut quickly cover his mouth with his other paw as his other paw still held Ralph paw
“ what happened?! “ Ralph place his both of his paws to Peanut shoulder and turn him so he can see him clearly
Peanut face turn pale as he started to get panic, ‘ you better think of an excuse Peanut and don’t worry we’ll talk about this later ‘ Ares said. Peanut agreed silently as he looked Ralph face, a pure fear struck down on his face
“ maybe we should get back, I knew this is a bad decision to bring you out “ Ralph said
“ whoa whoa whoa… we already half of the destination you couldn’t expect us to go back “ Max disagree
“ he just got out of the hospital we should let him rest more “ Ralph started to argue
“ yeah Grape told me over the phone but she said he wanted to go there too and maybe that’s a good thing “ Max argue more
“ how?! Do you know what really happen ? “ as Ralph suddenly growled towards Max
“ no I don’t know, but I do know this.. Peanut wanted to go there and wanted to distract himself from something, and he’s rarely to go out in this kind of event “ Max argued again
“ THERE’S A BETTER WAY! DO YOU EVEN CARE WHAT HAPPENED IF… “ before Ralph could argue more Peanut did unthinkable way as he launched himself into his chest as he hugged him
“ please…. I just wanted to forget something “ peanut planted himself on his chest as he mumbled
Ralph anger subside as it replaced by sadness as he looked bellow him, then he proceeds to rub Peanut head. Luna suddenly came forward as she placed her paw to Ralph “ believe me.. he needed something to take his mind off “ ‘because it is my fault ‘ Luna smiled sadly at him Ralph only nod his head a little
Ralph held Peanut cheek so he could see his eyes “ just promised me when you feel sick tell me fast okay? “ Peanut smile a little as he nods his head, he let go of Ralph and looked at the others
Grape face showing concern as she walked towards him “ are you really okay Peanut? “ he only nodded his head, Grape lean to his ear as she whispers “ is Eriel okay now? “ Peanut shook his head as he didn’t know what to say.
“ let’s go shall we “ Luna seems wanted to change the subject as she softly pushed Ralph and Peanut back.
“ don’t worry it’s just around the corner and you can see the sign “ Ralph pointed the way as he started grabing Peanut paw and start walking.
After the group walked a couple of blocks they see a light coming on from the other road, an illuminating light shine as it tries to invite any living being to enter the building
“ whoa….. I heard about this place but I never see inside of it “ Max look astonished,
but it seems Grape have another opinion “ it looked kinda small “
Max started to grin “ don’t judge the book by the cover my love “
They started to walk to the building as they saw some familiar mammal, a male brown dog with a spot on his right eye as he wearing a green diamond tag, a female black cat with Ankh tag as she hugged the arm of the brown dog, a purbreed husky wearing yellow Bandana and feeling a little uncomfortable at the couple pairs beside him, a Great dane with lightning bolt tag his tail wagged faster as he feeling excited, an English Setter as he mind in somewhere else and the last is a Dobberman wearing a well made black vest as he search around looking for someone.
As the Group getting closer the Doberman finally saw them as he waves his paw towards them, “ Guys you made it “ as they stopped in front of the other group
“ yeah… and I still think this is not a good idea “ Ralph glared at him
“ aww… c’mon maybe you could enjoy yourself “ Kevin grinned at him as he looked the paw that Ralph is holding on, and this not goes unnoticed by the others “ hello there Peanut how you holding up? “ as Kevin looked at Peanut
“ oh boy I feel excited when you invited us and thanks for the invitation Kevin “ Peanut smile grinning ear to ear as Kevin grinned back
“ your welcome pup “ Kevin started to reach Peanut head to pat him but he surprised when Ralph suddenly take his paw
“ he’s still feeling unwell “ Ralph said as he pull Peanut behind him as everyone seems to be surprised by his behaviour except for Luna and Kevin
“ whoa… sorry, Peanut I didn’t know “ Kevin said as he pulls his paw back ‘ well there is another reason ‘ as he smiling on his mind
Peanut peek from Ralph back “ uhm… It’s okay but I’m really fine Ralph “ Peanut looked at Ralph but Ralph pretend not to hear it and making Peanut pout as he grumbled a little
“ so…. Should we go inside or do we still waiting for someone else? “ Fox began to asked
“ Nope… let’s go right away “ Kevin turn around as he walked to the entrance
Ralph looked down at Peanut as he still pouting, he sighed a little as he grips his paw a little firm and it got Peanut attention “ I’m sorry Peanut but please bear with me for a while “
Peanut looked at him “ what is it? “ Peanut asked in confussion
Ralph smiled sadly at him “ I’ll tell you when we get inside okay? “ Peanut only nod back
As everyone finally followed Kevin he turned around as he lifts his arms “ WELCOME TO THE ‘ EYE LOVERS ‘ “

How long since I updated this story? Is it really that long (TwT)… i hope you guys enjoy my story even though it’s a weird one * laughs in awkwardness* …… is it bad?
P.s. I don’t know the name of the bar when the K-9’s unit watching Sasha singing

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This part of the story is very nice! It was definitely worth the wait!


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Chapter 15
“ WHOA..” Grape said her eyes went wide went they got inside “ this is…. AWESOME “ as she grinned ear to ear as she looked around her, a stage, a bar, but mostly a dancing floor.
“ HAHAHA.. “ a booming laughed surprised all of them as they looked the source “ awesome is it not? “ Kevin grinned
“ is it just me or did they do a major renovation? “ Fox said as he didn’t recognize most of the place
“ how long when the last time we go here? “ mungo asked
“too long brother, “ said Kevin, suddenly something fast pass through them and launch to Kevin as they heard a giggled
“ KEVIN! “ a female dog hug Kevin, he twirls her as they laughed heartily
“ my love hahaha “ Kevin put her down slowly
“ Fox you here too ! “ as she when to hug him, leaving the husky blushed and feeling awkward
“ yeaaahhhhh…… hey Sasha” as he confused whether to hug her back in front of her boyfriend
“ and even Grape and the others.. “ as Sasha looked at the others, but her eyes went wide when she saw a pure white beautiful canine “ whoaaa… who is this? “
my name is Luna little flower “ Luna introduced herself as giggled at Sasha behaviour
“ you are very beautiful “ Sasha said as she amazed with her beautiful fur, and suddenly someone came to them
“ and welcome to EYE LOVER guys, Sasha supposed to say that “ a female black fur german Shepard grinned welcoming them as she approaches them
“ oh molly ! look at her… her fur is really beautiful“ Sasha exclaimed as she feeling excited as someone new come to the bar
“ I can see that Sasha “ she giggled at her “ hello everyone…. And hello Ralph~~ “ she openly flirted at him
“ hello molly “ he said back feeling uncomfortable, while still holding peanut paw as he hid Peanut behind him
“ aww… I miss you, you never came back “ she said
“ I have a lot of work to do “ Ralph said he grip peanut paw a little harder making Peanut worried.
“ are you okay ralph? “ Peanut said as he looked at Ralph
“ yeah I’m fine peanut, “ Ralph said as he smiled sadly at him
Molly looked behind Ralph as she suddenly realised someone behind him “ hey who’s the cute guy? “ Molly started to teased
Peanut looked at Molly as he smiled at her “ hey I’m peanut “ he waves with his other paw, she looked confused on why he waves with his other paw until she saw something that answers her question, his paw is holding with Ralph and that is not the way friend hold each other.
“ hey peanut I’m molly “ she smiled back but she felt something is missing “ so…. Let’s get you guys a seat follow me “
They started to follow her, this got the attention of the other customer as they looked at their group but mostly at Luna. She takes them to a table that fit for 5 people the others become confused “ ehm… you know we have more than five pet right? “ Mungo started to asked
“hold your horses handsome” Molly said as she approaches the other empty table as she started to dragged it “ umm…. Hello? Ladies in need here… “ she jokingly said.
Before Mungo came to help Fox stopped him on his track “ maybe you need to sit this out Mungo... let me and Terrance handle this ” as the other thinking ‘ nice job fox ‘ making Max, Grape and Peanut confused on why Fox stopping Mungo. They started to help Molly as she instructs them to put the table near each other making the table to fit 10 people.
Molly and Sasha started to pick up the other chair and they started to sit on their comfortable place until they noticed one chair is missing and Peanut still stand awkwardly “ oh wait a sec let me get you a chair “ before molly left Ralph suddenly talked
“ peanut come here “ he said as he pointed towards his lap, everyone eyes went wide as they surprised at what he said while Luna and Kevin covering their mouth as they holding their laughter at him
“ uhm….. “ peanut blushed as he awkwardly looking left and right “ maybe I should find a chair “ Ralph take a sigh.
“ Peanut… get…. Over…. Here “ as Ralph slowly command him making Peanut whine as his tail moved between his leg, he slowly walked towards Ralph and slowly lower himself as he sits on his lap, Ralph smiled widely “ good boy “ he rub peanut head making him whine while he cover his face feeling embarrassed
“ aww….. they looked so cute “ Sasha said as the other girls blushed feeling a little jealousy when they looked at them while Grape glared at Ralph
“ okaaay….. so I’ll bring the menu please enjoy yourself and Sasha you still working come with me “ Molly said as she walked away
“ wait for me…oh and goodbye Kevipoo” as Sasha kissed Kevin cheeked and she catching up to Molly
While waiting for their menu the atmosphere on their table change into awkwardness as they couldn’t help but see the Canadian pointer mix not realising that he maybe sit very comfortably on the german shepherd lap.
“ okay! You know what I’m done with this… can someone tell me what happened between them? “ as max suddenly exclaimed, all of them become surprised while Kevin and Luna smile indirectly towards the two canines
“ well….Peanut just had an accident and.. “ Fido slowly explained but max interrupted him
“ yes.. I know that Grape told me.. but why are they acting like a couple? “ max said as he pointed his words making Peanut feel embarrassed while Ralph glared at Max as he grabbed Peanut to his chest making Peanut whine at his chest “ see… “
we can clearly see that little one but we must respect their privacy until they feel comfortable to tell us “ Luna begun to talk “ and all of you probably already knew what happened to Peanut correct ? ” she glanced around the table as she saw the others slowly nod their head “ well… all of you might guess why they close to each other and we should just forget that horrible event and enjoy this night is that correct mr.kevin? “ as she smiled at Kevin
Kevin grinned at her “ just called me Kevin and she’s right guys we should just enjoy this night “
The atmosphere change into comfortable Suddenly Sabrina talked “ WAIT.. “ all of them looked at her “ so on the matter of Peanut and Ralph.. “ she looked at Fido as she glared at him making him feeling uncomfortable “ I wanted to do what they did “ making Fido full-on panic mode
“ ehm… you know I would love to but… “ the only response he got is Sabrina glared “ you know I love you even… “ the glared begun deeper “ I wanted you to know that i... “ much to his surprised Sabrina begun to stand up slowly as she whispered something to his ears making his face red as tomato “please… fido “ she looked at him with her kitty face making Fido break his composure as he slowly melting and nod his head slowly
Sabrina began to grin widely as she slowly moves to Fido ralph as she begun to purr in his chest, Max eyes begun to shine “ maybe this is not so bad isn’t that right love? “ he looked beside him hoping Grape felt a little jealousy
“ if you were hoping that I join the others you really have a death wish my handsome cat “ she grinned evilly as she slowly unsheathed her claw making Max smiled nervously
“ well….. this day couldn’t get any weirder “ Molly came again bringing their menu while looking at Sabrina that now sit on Fido lap “ here you are and call me or Sasha if you guys are ready to order okay “
After Molly began to share the menu and glanced at Peanut before she walked away, she stops by in the kitchen and finds Sasha as she almost ready to serve another customer “ hey Sasha could we have a chat for a moment? “
Sasha looked at her “ sure, what’s up girl? “ she looked at Molly as her face show a little discomfort she felt worried for her new friend “ are you okay molly? “ she put her paw on her check
Molly whine feeling hurt at what she just saw “ ehm…. Do you know the relationship between Ralph and Peanut? “
Then Sasha realised something “ aww… you poor girl “ as she began to hug Molly while she keeps whining on Sasha chest, Sasha knew that Molly has a crush on Ralph but she didn’t know that it was this bad.
“ that’s why he never came.. “ Molly said as she started to sobbing on Sasha chest “ maybe he hates me too “ .
“ hey don’t say that maybe he really has a lot of work and maybe he has a brotherly bond with Peanut “ Sasha said to calm her down
Molly released her hug as she faced Sasha “ what kind of brotherly bond that let him sit on Ralph lap? “ Sasha saw her face and tears still keep spilling from her eyes,
she wipe her tears with both of her paws as she smile sadly at her. “ well… maybe you’ll find another amazing dog more than Ralph right? “ Molly shakes her head as she wiped her own tears, Sasha sighed “ molly…. Just because your crush is taken that doesn’t mean it’s the end of the world, you just have to find another dog that more amazing than Ralph… you deserve more you know? “ Sasha grinned at her, “ and let me tell you this…. “ she slowly whispered at Molly ears “ you are more beautiful than Peanut “.
After Molly heard that she couldn’t help but giggled “ hehehe.. how dare you compared me with another male “ as she playfully slap Sasha shoulder making them laughed together. After a few second their laughter died and Molly takes a huge sighed “ are you sure some dog more amazing will come? “ Molly smiled sadly as she looked on the floor
Sasha grab her shoulders “ of course! You deserve more Molly… Believe me “ Molly smiled at that.
Molly then grinned at Sasha “ well? What are you waiting for? There’s a lot of customers we need to serve chop chop “ Sasha only giggled at her, before Sasha left to serve another customer Molly called her “ Sasha? “ Sasha stop on her track as she looked back “ thank you “ she genuinely smiled at her making Sasha Grinned back at her.
after that discussion Molly came back to the group table before she stop at their table she looked at Ralph as she looked closely at him she realised that Sasha was right maybe she will find more Amazing dog than Ralph. She silently smiled as she slowly approaches them “ so, did you guys ready to order something? “
while the other happily ordering their meals and drinks Peanut still hasn’t decided what he wants as he glaring at the menu making Ralph looked at him with a worried look “ hey are you alright? “ he didn’t even respond to Ralph question and making the other become more worried
Grape saw this as she weirdly thinking why Peanut is glaring at the menu “ Peanut? “ he didn’t respond “ hey lug ? “ still didn’t respond, Grape finally getting more impatient, she take a huge breath but before she could yelled his name Grape finally realised what’s bothering Peanut as she facepalming her face. She then got up of her chair and walking closer to Peanut that still sitting on Ralph lap “ peanut.. “ she calmly called his name and finally getting respond from him when one of his ears move directly where her sound is, then she put her paw on his shoulder as she making deadpan face “ there is no rootbeer “
Peanut begun to speak “ there is no rootbeer “ he copy her statement
“ not every place we visit has rootbeer peanut “ she exclaimed as she raised both of her paws
“ why?! “ Peanut finally looked at her as he seems to be angry, this got the attention of every customer in the place
“ what do you mean ‘why?!’ just because they didn’t serve your favourite drink that doesn’t mean you have to be angry about it “ Grape retort back
“ this is a bar! How can we enjoy and relax if we didn’t have our favourite drinks!? “ Peanut exclaimed, some of the customers that hear their banter started to laughed
until they heard someone yelled “ I AGREE WITH THAT PUP ! “ one of the customers raised his drink as it seems that agreeing with Peanut
“ See…. “ Peanut exclaimed making the other laugh at them, Grape only sighed as she ruffled his head making him pout.
“ HEY PUP… I CHEER YOU FOR THAT HAHAHA ! “ the other customer raised his drink too as the other followed him cheering the idea from Peanut, suddenly Peanut felt his body trembled as he looked from the sourced and remembered that he still sit on Ralph lap
Suddenly their group became silent as they saw Ralph body is shaking, Fido begun to worry at his leader while still hugging Sabrina on his lap “ Chief are you… “ something stop him talking as he couldn’t believe what he saw, their leader is holding his laughter then the k9 unit became more amazed as their leader let out a booming laughter.
They couldn’t believe the strict k9 leader is having fun as he kept laughing until the laughter slowly died, Ralph take a huge sigh as his arms surrounded Peanut body drawing him closer to Ralph putting his head on Peanut shoulder “ you never cease to amaze me “ making Peanut face became red as a tomato
Molly looked at them both as the feeling pain on her chest replaced with something new ‘ huh… now I know what Sasha meant when she saw them ‘ she shook her head at their cuteness as she smiled “ hey peanut I know we don’t have your favourite drink but maybe I can recommend something that suit with your taste? “
Peanut face still red as he looked at her “ I guess.. “ he agreed with her idea
she grinned as she writes the last of their order “ don’t worry cutie you are not going to regret coming to this place “ she left their table.
Kevin grinned at Ralph “ well, looks like our chief starting to have fun in this bar “ Ralph only smiled genuinely at him while he still hugging Peanut “ you better release him… or he’s going to start to freak out “ as he pointed at Peanut
Ralph eyes became wide as he quickly released his hold “ I’m sorry peanut “ he quickly said
Peanut only shakes his head “ uhm… it’s okay.. I kinda like it “ he said in low voiced, Ralph blushed a little making the other became surprised more while Grape sighed as she walked in her seat.
While Kevin tried to teased Ralph max looked at his surroundings and he realized all of the customers are mostly canines and none of the felines seems caught his eyes “ hey Kev… is it really fine for us cats went to this bar? “ Max questioned him
Kevin at first seems to be confused as he looked around him and understand what he meant “ pfft… of course! Sasha told me the first opening of this bar are mostly Canines so it’s no wonder that you felines haven’t heard this place “ Kevin just grinned at Max
Grape finally sit back on her seat “ well let just hope there is no Bino 2.0 in here “ making Max laughed hard at her retort
One of fido eyebrow went up as he smiled in amused “ you really don’t like my brother huh? “
Sabrina pulls his jaw with her finger as she make a statement “ hon…. All the felines on Babylon garden are not fan of your brothers “ making all the group snicker at that statement-making Luna confused
“ is this Bino really that bad? “ she asked
“ let just say every cat in the neighboured wanted to kick his butt even the one who lived with him “ she said as she pointed to max
Max only smiled at her “ well I don’t hate him that much…. Sometimes it cross my mind “ he smiled widely as he said that
Ralph think for a moment “ is Bino the one who joined the academy? “ he looked at Fido as the answered he got only nod from him “ ah…. The vest biter “ he said making everyone dumbfounded at his statement
A second of silent until everyone laughed hard as they couldn’t believed what Ralph just called Bino “ hahahah Vest biter? Hahaha I should remember to called him that went I get home “ Max said between his laughter
Peanut giggled a bit as he looked at Ralph “ hehehe vest biter? Why did you called him that? “
Ralph just shrugged his shoulders “ let me quote what he said ‘ it smells like a mailman ‘ “ making the other laugh again.
In the middle of their talk, Molly came back with the help of Sasha bringing the group meals and drinks, as she put on their tabled Peanut looked in front of him as Molly put her recommended drink “ what is that Molly? “ he asked
Molly just smiled at him “ just try it you’ll like it “ she urge him.
at first Peanut begin to doubt her but there’s nothing to lose so ‘ bottoms up I guess ‘ he take a sip of the drink as soon the liquid touch his tongue as it slides his throat the bliss of heavenly sweet and coldness his eyes went wide as he looked at the drink that he hold, he looked at Molly as she smirked at him he took another sip.
he drinks a little faster making Ralph begun to worry what’s in it “ whoa there Peanut drink slower “ as he held Peanut paw to stop him from drinking to fast, Peanut lick his mouth as the taste still lingers at his mouth.
Ralph take the drink as he took a quick sniff at it making Molly glared at him “ it’s not poison ralph “ she stated
Ralph only looked confused as Peanut tail begun wiggled at his lap showing that his happy with his drink “ that was delicious Molly… can I have more? “ he grinned at her
Molly giggled “ sure cutey just wait for a minute okay? “
Ralph then began to asked “ what’s in it? “
Molly just sighed “ it’s mostly honey and lemon but a bit with soda and mint “ Ralph only nodded at her as he looked apologetic, she smiled back at him “ well I’m going to get Peanut another drink but in the meantime enjoy your meals and drinks “
Sasha began to followed Molly, the group begun to dig in their meals while Sabrina finally moved to her sit, unfortunately, Peanut still sit on Ralph lap as he relieved that Molly only give him a snack rather than full meal, Ralph tried to eat his meal but it becomes difficult when you have someone on your lap, Peanut noticed this as he tried to asked “ you seem to be in trouble should I moved? “
Ralph looked at Peanut then his face turned into serious “ no… I felt comfortable like this and don’t you dare even move “ Peanut only nod his head
Suddenly Ares begun to talk ‘ this brat is very stubborn huh? ‘, Peanut eyes went wide he tried to shout his name but remembered it will give him weird looked so he just sit still and pretend not to hear him
Suddenly he hears a snort as he figured it must be Eriel ‘ pfft.. look who’s talking ‘ he retorts
Ares only chuckled ‘ he he he I’m not that bad mate ‘ Peanut could picture Eriel rolling his eyes
‘ I really wanted to talk with you guys ’ Peanut said in his mind
we will Peanut but later okay? Just enjoy and relax for now ‘ Eriel said
‘ but….. are you okay now eriel? ‘ Eriel could hear a deep concern from Peanut voiced and it makes him happy
he’s fine pup no need to worry ‘ Ares said in smugness
he’s asking me Ares ‘ Eriel glared at Ares
oh? You still haven’t felt better? I could help you with that ‘ Ares smiled suggestively at him
Eriel started to mumbling incomprehensibly while Ares grinning ear to ear at him, ‘ I don’t know why but I can I picture them doing something like that? ‘ Peanut asked himself.
Molly came back with Peanut second order as she put the drink in front of him as he looked at Ralph “ you looked troubled there Ralph “ as she teased him
Ralph only glared at her “ I’m fine “ as he grumbled
Molly then smiled devilishly as she looked innocently at Peanut “ Peanut how could you? “ as she dramatically hold her heart, Peanut looked confused as she continue to speak “ your lover having some troubled and you didn’t even offer him your help ! “ she pointed at him
Ralph and Peanut blushed harder as the other laughed at them for their misery, making Peanut whined in displeased “ please stop teasing me molly “ he whined loudly
Ralph glared at her as if asking her to stop teasing Peanut only for her to sighed harder “ okay okay I’ll stop… sorry peanut but you so darn cute when I began to tease you “ she pinched his cheek as she finally went to another customer
When all of them finally finish their meal Fox looked around as he found some dog that he knew “ guys I’m going to say hi to some of my friends there okay? “
“ hey can I come with you? “ Mungo asked him
“ heh, sure why not “ they go to the bar as they looked at Fox calling some of his friends there
“ now.. I need to find my lovely girlfriend” Kevin winked at Ralph and Peanut as he slowly got up to find Sasha, “ do you want to come with me Terrance? “
Terrance only glared at him “ what do I get for coming with you except looking at you being lovey dovy with your girl? “
Kevin grinned at him “ I can make Sasha hooked one of her friends with you? “
Terrance change his face into grinning one as he happily said “ you got a deal “ as they went to find Sasha
“ I need to hit the litter box for a sec “ Sabrina said as she started to get up as well
Peanut saw this as he quickly said “ now that you mention it I need to go too”
before he gets up from Ralph lap, he felt something holding him by his arms as he looked behind him Ralph stared deep at him “ please don’t go anywhere else alright peanut “ as his face slowly change into a worried look
Peanut nod his head as Sabrina went ahead of him, the only group left on the table are Grape, Max, Fido, and Luna. After Grape saw Peanut started to walked away she take a huge sigh “ well then lets get to the main topic shall we? “ she said making the other looked confused, she quickly get up and walked to Ralph Chair then suddenly she pulled his collar as she went face to face with the k9 leader making the other surprised at what she did “ I don’t like what you just did… who do you think you are ordering him around? are you his family? Brother? No! so tell me what you want with my brother or I swear even the police wouldn’t find your Dead. Cold. Body!
Fido couldn’t believed what he was hearing, Grape threaten an officer not just some officer but the leader of the k9 unit now he must think something before Grape did something that she regrets, before he could do something Luna already pick Grape by her scruff as she yelped in surprised “ please stop this! We have attract unwanted attention “ as Luna said that Grape realised this is not the best place for arguments but she need answered she will get it one way or another.
She angrily swapped Luna paw but before she could walked away Ralph grab her hand, she glared at him then the glared turn into surprised as she saw worried in his eyes “ please… forgive me, Grape, I know you wanted to know what really happened, I too wanted to know… I can’t give you the answered you wanted but believe me this I care about Peanut, my mind won’t let me rest for 2 days and it always make me kept thinking about him after I went to your house my instinct suddenly went wild as it wanted to at least hug him, I kept myself in control for so long “
Grape couldn’t believed what she was hearing “ but you don’t have to order him around “
Ralph closed his eyes as he take a huge breath “ you’re right I shouldn’t order him around…. But tell me this why didn’t he just moved away or at least push me when i tell him what to do? “
Grape finally realised something, even though he order Peanut to sit on his lap Peanut never declined it he even looked comfortable in his lap, Luna saw the conflicted eyes on Grape she take a huge sighed as he finally asked Ralph “ do you like him?
Ralph take a sharp breath as he didn’t ready for that question, his eyes full of doubt when she asked this question “ i…. i... I don’t know “ he couldn’t answer the question
Luna just glared at him “ the correct answered should have been yes or no, if you doubt yourself how can you tell yourself that you care about him? “ the only thing she saw the sadness in his eyes as his ears fallen to his head, Luna grab his shoulder “ you better find the answered before you regret it for the rest of your life “ she then take Grape paw as she proceeds to walk away thinking it’s better to separate this two while Max followed them from behind
Ralph cover his face with both of his hand as he became frustrated, Fido saw this as he move his chair so he can go near Ralph “ you know chief… if you didn’t focus on your work for 24 hours, you already found the answered you’ve been looking for “ as he smiled at Ralph making him glared at Fido
“ my mind is not always thinking about worked Fido “ Ralph retort
Fido only snorted at that “ *huff* then tell me… when was the last time you didn’t bring your note and pen? “ Ralph wanted to answered that but it seems he couldn’t find the answered “ see? This is the first time you haven’t mention about worked and it because your mind kept thinking about a certain canine “ he argued at Ralph
Ralph clearly can’t argue with that “ you know I could hear some advice right now “
Fido only chuckled “ just enjoy the night chief maybe you might find tonight “ he said as he returned to his seat enjoying the drink that he had
Sabrina almost went inside the ladies room before Peanut grab her by the arm as she looked surprised at Peanut, she looked at his face and found a guilty expression found on his face, She only sighed because she know what he wanted to asked “ what is it Peanut? “ she asked him
Peanut felt uncomfortable asking this but at least it will put his heart in ease for a moment “ ehm… how.. is.. Tarot? “ he avoided looking at her eyes as his heart feeling pain mentioning his ex-girlfriend
Sabrina sighed as a genuine smile spread from her lips “ she is fine Peanut “ making Peanut sighed in relief “ you really a good friend asking how she doing “ Sabrina grab his shoulder in comfort
Peanut only sighed as he shook his head “ what kind of friend who hurt their heart “ his ears went down as his tail curled between his leg
Sabrina take a deep breath as her eyes turn sharp, she grab Peanut jaw making him looked at her in the eyes “ let me tell you one thing Peanut… YOU…ARE…A….GREAT…FRIEND
Peanut looked at her with wide eyes as his face turned into surprised “ but..” before he can speak Sabrina beat him to it
“ no but…. You are the greatest friend anyone would wanted and yeah maybe you hurt her heart but you didn’t turn your back, you even asked how she’s doing.. I know the moment she needed help you will ready to help her that’s who you are, don’t let your break up change what you have with her even though she is your ex that doesn’t mean you can’t enjoy being friend with her “
Peanut began to smiled as he looked at Sabrina making her return the smiled as well “ thank you Sabrina “
She released her hold “ good… now I really need to go “ as she quickly enter the room and locked the door making Peanut giggled at her until he felt that he too needed the washroom
After doing their business Peanut and Sabrina went back to their table, Peanut looking confused on where is Grape right now “ where’s grape? “ she asked the only canines on the table
“ she just went that way peanut should we followed them? “ Ralph asked him while pointing where Grape went
Peanut nod his head as he ready to sprint before Ralph could yell at him, Peanut hold himself as he looked at Ralph waiting for him to make a movement. Ralph seems to be surprised as he slowly stood up and give his paw to Peanut, Peanut looked at his paw as he slowly hold his paw. He looked at Fido “ are you and your girlfriend coming? “ he asked him
Fido smiled at him as if he is giving support to his chief “ go ahead chief I wanted to have a moment with Sabrina “
Fido nod his head and begun to guide Peanut to where Grape was, when they finally move farther away Fido asked “ do you think they’ll become an item ? “ as he looked eye to eye with Sabrina
Sabrina looked at the two canines and looked back at Fido “ I don’t know but I hope that hard headed chief of yours quickly realised what his feeling for him “ only got a laughed from Fido as he pull her to him as he leaned closer to her face “ I love you Sabrina D’angelo “
She smiled affectionately at him as she draws closer to him “ and I love you too Fido Byron “ as she finally kissed him lovingly.
Grape take a huge breath after Luna take her away, Max still looked worried at her but kept silent as he followed the other two. Luna couldn’t help but felt pity for the feline even tough Grape knew what happened to Peanut she didn’t knew the relationship between him and Ralph, she wanted to tell her about mating string but a god must not interfere with mortal destiny and it will become problematic if she tell her that Peanut has 3 strings as one of them is her “ if you worried about Peanut you could asked him what he really feels don’t you? You are the one who the most closer to him “ Luna tell her
Grape only shaked her head “ it’s not like that…. ” as she refused to tell her
Luna sighed as she didn’t know what to do then suddenly Max put his arm around her waist as he hugged her from behind “ don’t worry my love when it’s him I know he will looking for you when he’s in trouble “
Grape turn her head as she looked at him “ sorry maxie I’m worried about something that may be over my head when we should have just enjoyed the night “
Max put his head on her shoulder as he purred “ don’t worry Grape he is someone that you are treasure and i believed he feels the same way “
Grape giggled as his whiskers tickled her neck she turned around as her arms slowly tangled behind his head “ you really do have a sweet word when I’m down “
Max grinned at her “ you are my girlfriend and yet you just knew this? “ he teased her while he moved her slowly side to side as if he lead her for a dance
Grape begun to purred “ shut up you jerk “ as they laughed together, Luna began to move away a little as she saw both of them. The way Max hold Grape as he reassured her making her sighed at how sweet this couple is, she knew even though the mating string form between Grape and Peanut that doesn’t mean they can not love another mamals
Grape suddenly chuckled “ you know… this is not the dance floor if you wanted to dance you know? “
Max smiled charmingly “ then should I take this dance to the floor my lady? “ he released his hold as he bow in front of her
Grape smiled sweetly at him “ maybe later maxie let have some fun with the other okay? “
At her cue she saw Peanut and Ralph walking paw to paw to them, she saw how the way Ralph looked Peanut as he begun to drag Ralph to where they are if her eyes didn’t mistaken that eyes is the eyes of someone who have affection towards a person, like the way max looked at her when he thought she didn’t see the way he looked at her ‘ until he saw the prideland author tough ‘ she laughed at what she thought but if he did have some affection towards Peanut then he better treat Peanut right
As the canines finally approach them “ you should have wait for me if you wanted to have some fun you know “ Peanut said as he began to pout cutely
Grape only giggled as she began to stroke Peanut head “ sorry Peanut we haven’t started anything I just need some air “ she explained as her eyes looked at Ralph
Their eyes met each other as Ralph only nod in understanding, Peanut tail began to wag as he couldn’t contain his excitement “ well what should we do now? “
Max then begun to grinned “ what else do we do when there’s a dance floor? WE DANCE !! “ he begun to drag Grape at the dance floor as she began to laugh at his silliness, Peanut tried to catch up but his body told him to wait as he looked at Ralph and found he smiled affection towards him
Ralph slowly stroke his head lovingly “ go ahead Peanut “ Peanut began to grinned widely as he released Ralph hold.
Ralph looked at him as he began to followed the felines Suddenly Luna stood behind him “ have you figured out what feeling you have for him? “ Ralph looked behind him as she asked the question and the answered she got only a smile from him ‘ huh? He already found the answered… I thought it will take longer than that ‘ they began to watched Peanut and the others danced as they didn’t care around them, while Grape and Max danced in synchronisation Peanut just danced whatever he likes making them laughed at his antics
While Peanut enjoy the moment someone inside him couldn’t contain his excitement ‘ Peanut, Can I have your moment? “ Eriel began to speak
Peanut noticed him calling ‘ yeah, eriel? ‘ as he still moved his body
Eriel laughed ‘ do you mind if I share some of my knowledge?
Peanut then frowned as he realised what he meant ‘ I’m not that bad ‘ he complained
Ares began to laugh as well ‘ oh come on Peanut he only wanted to improve your movement ‘ he said
Peanut stop for a moment then began to smiled ‘ sure why not? ‘
Then suddenly he had a vision as Eriel began to share some of his memory, he looked troughed it as he saw Eriel past as he dancing in the middle of the garden surrounded with many trees and flowers. Peanut couldn’t help but become amazed at how gracefully the way he moved, the vision he saw almost like hours but the reality it just only for a second, he then proceeds to slowly moved his body as he tried to mimic Eriel movement in his vision. At first, his body couldn’t get used to following Eriel movement then he danced very slow remembering his vision then he move a little faster then he finally begun to move almost like the way Eriel did in his memory making him danced in more enjoyable than before as he twirled a little then laughed in joy.
Ralph and Luna became surprised as Peanut danced gracefully in the center of the dance floor, but Ralph heart pounded harder as he couldn’t look away at him, the way he moved is very hypnotizing as Ralph couldn’t help that he move to where Peanut is. Step by step he moved closer to Peanut while he dogging every mamals on the dance floor, he couldn’t stop his step as he wonder what has this pup done to him making him feeling this way towards the canine. Peanut still danced without cared as he closed his eyes enjoying every movement that he make making Eriel and Ares following him through inside his head until he felt a presence near him. He stop his movement as he open his eyes and he met eye to eye with Ralph as the k9 leader panting as if he out of breath, they looked at each other they couldn’t move their eyes at one another.
After a few minutes of silenced after Ralph finally catch his breath and the only question remain in his head as he looked at Peanut “ what have you done to me? “ he huskily asked him, the sound of his voice making Peanut trembled not on fear but something else and suddenly Peanut gasp in surprise, he looked below him and saw an arm suddenly wrap around his waist as he heard a low chuckled in front of him “ done be mistaken Peanut… it’s not that I dissatisfied for what have you done to me but the opposite actually “ Ralph draw him closer as his another paw took Peanut paw “ I belive I owe you an explanation correct? “ he told him
Peanut couldn’t think anything as his mind became scrambled he tried to say anything but only scrambled word that flew out of his mouth, he wanted to say something anything but something held him back. Suddenly they heard someone yelled as their head looked at the source and found Grape stumbled on the floor while Max helped her get up “ Hey ?! what’s the big idea ? “ she yelled at a canines
A black bulldog stand in front of them “ pfft… this place belongs to me so you felines can move your butt out of here “ it looked like that dog tried to provoke Grape
Grape only growled on anger “ your place? As far as I know the other didn’t care anything about felines coming here “ what Grape said is true it seems the other only saw a conflict between Grape and the dog as no one seems to step beside the bulldog
Ralph knew this is going to end badly as he tried to stop this meaningless fight, but suddenly he saw a blur movement as Peanut blink in front of Grape making Ralph amazed on how fast Peanut reaction was ‘ muffins and cookies it why am I still stood here I need to stop this ! ‘ he run towards the fight as he tried to move from the sea of crowd
Max surprised as he saw Peanut stand in front of them ‘ muffins and cookies it peanut we didn’t need a ruckus here ‘ he knew from his experience as a stray cat is to never enter a conflict if you wanted to survived.... lay low.
The bulldog seems surprised when Peanut stood in front of him then he sneered at him “ what’s this? You wanted to protect that kitty? HAH! You make us canines looked bad “ as he mocked at Peanut
The only reaction he got was silent as Peanut glared towards the bulldog, Max run in front of Peanut as he softly push his body “ don’t listen to any word from that dog we didn’t want any troubled peanut “ as he whispered at him while his body keep pushing Peanut
The bulldog saw this as he grinned evilly at them “ hah! Cowards! That’s right! Move along kitty bring that pup and damsel in distress away from this place and believe me that filthy mutt is better with the rest of you “
Grape heard the insult towards Peanut… her best friend… her family… mocked by a mutt who only think from his muscle, not his brain, she couldn’t stand this as she move and tried to reach the bulldog but only to be stopped by a paw. She furiously looked who stop her as she ready to yelled but she stop as the one who stops her none other than Peanut.
I wanted to tear that piece of… ‘ Ares started to growled but to be stop mid-sentence by Eriel
be patient Ares you are not the only one who wanted to clobbered that dumb dog ‘ he said
grrr… Peanut give me permission NOW! ‘ Ares yelled at Peanut but only to be answered by his silenced making him frowned at him ‘ OI… pup change with me so that I can clobber this mutt
Eriel became confused on why Peanut didn’t answer the question until he remembered the memories he shared with Peanut as a mischievous smiled spread from his lips ‘ please make him kneel Peanut at least until he begs for forgiveness ‘ Ares became confused on why Eriel start acting differently he couldn’t help but watch Peanut next moved.
Grape confused on why Peanut stop her she thought he be scared enough that he couldn’t stop her and yet here he is standing confidently as his paw move and grab her hands as the next line he said surprised all of them “ pathetic “ he said
The bulldog stood there as his jaw drop widely then he growled in anger “ WHAT DID YOU SAY!?
As peanut calmly glared at him “ what is your issue? Is it because a cat came to this place or is it that you wanted to show everyone that you own this place? “
The bulldog spit bellow him “ you got guts talking back at me why don’t you and that damsel came here and say it to my face “ he provokes
Peanut only shook his head “ you could have just enjoyed the night without making troubled toward yourself but from the looked of it you are just a bully who tried to ruin everyone times “
Everyone who heard Peanut seems to be agreeing as one by one nod their head approves of his speech then he continued “ you make me remembered of someone who hates cat but at least he has some decency to stop and became a good leader toward his fellow canines but you… the only think you good enough is thinking with your muscled instead with your head “ as he retorted making everyone gasp and laughed at his retort
Ralph finally push the last row of the crowd and saw the pitbull face turned red in anger, he saw that the pitbull wanted to shout at his group but Peanut suddenly speak again “ did you know what your first mistake? “ Ares suddenly smiled as he knew why Eriel have so much confidence towards Peanut “ you tried to provoke an innocent mammals and everyone in this bar saw who started this fight “ the pitbull face change “ not only that some of them are the k9 officer of Babylon Garden “ the face that first anger now became crestfallen as he heard what just Peanut said, he then looked around him and found some of the dogs who witness the fight is indeed a k9 officer and his body drenched in sweat. Eriel couldn’t help but followed the next line as if he knew what Peanut going to say “ the second mistake? “ a small spark suddenly light between his paw and Grape as she surprised on what did Peanut do to her. Ares then said the next line “ You didn’t know Grape as well as we do “ making the pitbull question on why Peanut said ‘we’, Peanut then smiled devilishly towards the pitbull “ she is not a damsel in distress “. Suddenly Grape felt a surge of strength like it almost that Peanut lend him this power as she looked at Peanut and saw that Peanut already smiling innocently at her “ Grape? “ as everyone wonders what Peanut is going to do, the next voiced Grape heard from Peanut is almost from 3 different person “ PUNCH THE LIGHT OUT OF HIM “ he yelled at her
The next thing they saw was the bulldog who picked a fight with the felines flew across the floor as the purple cat punched the canine, the bulldog then fall face first making him face-planted towards the floor as they hear a huge ‘thump’ across the floor.
All of the jaw that witnessed this scene went wide as they couldn’t believe what they saw, Grape then hold her paw as she looked in pained “ muffins and cookies… his head is almost hard like a brick “ after a few seconds of silence everyone yelled as they cheered towards the group.
Everyone became happy as Grape became the center of the attention, Max the smiled widely on what he saw as he then shake Grape shoulder “ how did you do that!? “ as he smiled in amazed towards his girlfriend
Grape became annoyed at him “ please stop shaking me before I did the same thing with your face “ making Max smiled nervously as he slowly released his hold, then Grape looked around him as the mammals that saw what happened still cheering at her then she looked at Peanut as he still smiled innocently at her “ what did you do? “ she asked him
He rolled his tongue out “ a gift from Eriel “ as he playfully answered her question making her glared at him
“ we need to talk after this Peanut “ Grape sighed in defeat as Peanut only smiled at her
Peanut then hear someone caught as he turned around and found Ralph as his face showed that he displeased with something making him tuck his tail between his leg “ like I said before… you never cease to amaze me Peanut “ Ralph take a big sighed as he proceeds to lift his face “ are you alright Peanut? “ he smiled at him
Peanut only nod his head then they heard a booming laughter “ HA HA HA YOU DID GOOD GRAPE “ Kevin and the others finally came to them
“ no wonder you always kick Bino butt “ he saw the pitbull that still on the floor if he compared Bino and that Pitbull the one who wins will be the pitbull
Fido walked to Peanut with Sabrina in his arms “ wow… this is the first time a saw you like this Peanut “ as he chuckled at him
Sabrina slap Fido chest as she glared at Peanut “ at least give us a heads up when you tried to do that, you almost ruin my time with my boyfriend “ making Peanut smiled apologetically at her
Luna saw the exchange from across as her eyes couldn’t believe what she saw, while the others amazed how Grape beat the pitbull Luna was more amazed how Peanut could control Eriel aura, she knew the moment Peanut stand up for Grape his aura change as it mixed with another and one of them belongs to Eriel, Luna knew Peanut just an ordinary mortal but when his soul mixed with the fallen angel and the god of destruction she couldn’t say that he is normal again ‘ maybe I should teach him a trick or two ‘ but then she glanced behind them as the pitbull finally started to get up as her eyes wide in fear for their safety as she started to yell for Peanut.
Peanut heard Luna shouting his name but as he saw her something doesn’t fell right as he followed her direction and looked behind him as the pitbull already standing up, his breath getting louder and his eyes focus on one mamals and that was Peanut. He charged towards the group as he tried to lounge Peanut as the others went surprised, almost in slow motion Grape pushed Max aside as she wanted to move in front of Peanut, Fido move Sabrina to his back, Fox Mungo Kevin and Terrance ran towards the pitbull, the last moment before Ralph shield him as he braced himself from the pitbull he saw something that made him surprised.
Peanut saw a glimpse of a feline feature from above as it ready to step on the pitbull head then when Ralph body cover his vision he heard a huge crack. Ralph ready to feel at least pain on his back but when the pain didn’t come he looked in front of him as all of his friends jaws drop as they saw something unbelievable
Then they heard a laughter as Peanut slowly moved away from Ralph hold as he tried to looked whose laughter that is and saw a pure white cat standing above the pitbull head but what more weird for them is that a horn stuck on the cat head as he grinned ear to ear as he looked below him “ now now you mustn't hurt our precious key it will give us a lot of trouble if something horrible happened to him“ the pitbull face planted against the floor as he lost conscious as the cat step on him, the cat slowly step off the pitbull, he stop and saw the pup that make Hel lost in thought as he grinned wickedly towards him making Peanut trembled in fear just by looking at the cat, the feline than begun to bow “ forgive my rudeness but let me introduced myself “ he stand up as he saw eye to eye with Peanut “ nice to meet you… you may call me Virgil "

it's been to long since i update this story and i thought the admin might delete it, i'm finally free from my last assignment yeaaayyy !! ...
it takes me two weeks to make this small updates and now i feel bad for making my favourite fanfic writer to speed up their story... now i know their feeling T_T..
P.S does this chapter a little too mature?

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Glad that we were able to get back to this story! I like this chapter that you put up! Its very awesome! I have been waiting on this so that is good. :D


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Chapter 16
Michael POV~~~
we finally decide to divide our group into two groups to search Lucifer soul, one to the north and one to the south. I fly to the north with my group but I can not help but feeling a little worried about the other team as I looked below me and saw Fenrir running on four legs, I fly down towards him low enough so he can hear what I am about to say “ maybe we should have not put them together as a team “ as I speak what’s trouble on my mind.
He looked confused for a sec but realised what I meant as he smiled mischievously “ just let them be “ as he keeps running keeping pace with me
I sighed loud enough for him to hear “ they are going to tear each other off
He finally slows down his pace as we stop together and begun to look our surrounding “ for an angel you really don’t have any faith for your own family “ as he smirks at me
I keep looking left and right “ because I know my brother very well “
Suddenly we could hear someone running behind “ *wheeze* how *huff* could you guys *huff* still not out of breath? ”
We looked behind us as we saw Kitsune holding his knee “ if you couldn’t keep up with us you should have told us sooner “ I said as I walked to him because I worried he pushing himself
I wouldn’t mind resting for a while, “ Fenrir said as he started to sit under the tree as he looked up to look at it
Kitsune let out a relived sigh “ THANK YOU !! “ as he started to flop himself to the ground
I smiled a little when he does that but my smiled start to vanished as I saw the way Fenrir looked at the tree, a longing feeling that he felt can be seen as he looked at the top of the tree. I knew I never accept their relationship but the more I saw how he really care about Lucifer my mind keep changing little by little, I walked up to him as I place my hoof at his shoulder “ we will find him… I know we will
Fenrir looks at me as a small smile formed on his jaw “ I thought you hated me when I stole your brother
I laughed at him “ I still hate the thought of that “ I told him but I need to tell him how I think about it now “ but after the way you heard when you thought my brother disappeared… I think you cherish him more than I did “ as sadness run trough my face. If I think about it when we separate Lucifer from him all I hear before the trial is his sadness cries and his beloved names.
Suddenly my body went jolt as someone slap me on the back “ don’t bring down yourself like that, it’s going to make Lucifer fell unhappy and i never wanted to see him like that
when did he get behind me? ‘ I’m surprised to see Fenrir as he already went behind me, he saw this as a grin formed on his jaw “ looks like you went easy after my imprisonment huh? “ he said like he tried to mock me
I glared at him “ I kept my guard down because I know you wouldn’t eat me alive “ making him laughed and a smile formed on my face “ but on serious note Fenrir…. Thank you
He stops laughing as his face turns into a shock one “ you know…. It feels kinda nice when someone said their gratitude to you
My smile didn’t disappear as I walked to where the kitsune is but to my surprise he’s not there anymore “ where’s Kitsune?
Fenrir looked around as he started to sniff his surrounding “ his scent is in the deeper of that forest but.. do you know where we are?
I looked around again in realised I never have seen this part of my life “ now that you mention it I didn’t know this place too
Fenrir looked shocked “ I tought you angels know everything about what your father makes?
I looked confused as to why he said that “ who told you that? The only one who knows everything is creator himself or ‘my’ father to be exact but that doesn’t mean I know everything
Fenrir face become dumbfounded “ so…. You are not intelegence and strong enough to fight me?
I glared at him “ don’t push it Fenrir… I can make you sit like Lucifer did when you guys first met
Fenrir glared at me “ hah if Sköll fight Gabriel I bet he can make him yield in 10 minutes
I retort back “ you didn’t know my brother well as I do but thanks ‘Father’ Bahamut and Hati is with them if not my brother would make your son put his tail between his legs
We started retorting back and forth as we walk to where Kitsune scent went, “ you know what how about we have a little sparing after we find Lucifer? I bet he believes me that I could beat you up
‘ oh don’t you dare bring this up ‘ “ I don’t bet and Lucifer strength is almost the same as me but I believe if he chooses who wins the fight he will choose me
Fenrir laugh “ hah.. my mate will choose me
Suddenly we heard Kitsune calling us “ uh sir…” but we ignore it as we still keep bickering at one another, we keep glaring at each other but Kitsune suddenly yelled “ SIR “ as both of us looked at him and yelled “WHAT?
He pointed at something and what I saw made me surprised “ umm…. I don’t know about this forest but I know where that portal lead “
I looked at him as I only need one question “ where?
Kitsune make a concerned face as he told us what it is “ Babylon Garden “
What they saw is beyond their understanding as a white fur cat with horn in his head came from above and step the canine that almost maul Peanut, most of the pets that watched the scene flabbergasted except for the only white wolf in the bar, the only reaction she gets is pure horrified as she knows who the cat is.
Peanut then felt a pure fear like the way the cat saw him, his instinct scream for him to run as far as his feet could take him until something block his vision as the only thing he saw is someone back and that someone is none other than Ralph himself,
Ralph knew this cat save Peanut from getting mauled but he didn’t like one bit everything about this cat and his instinct telling him to prepare for something worse, “ what do you want? “
Virgil tilted his head “ what do you mean? “ he innocently asked
Ralph knew his vision is on Peanut and he seriously wanted to take Peanut away from this cat, on the other hand, it seems Luna thought that Virgil didn’t aware that she is watching them so she slowly moved near them unseen so that if something went horrible she could prevent it
Virgil looked his surrounding as he sure felt someone familiar in this place but it seems he couldn’t find that someone, he eyes looked directly towards Ralph but his real vision is the one behind him and that’s none other than the ‘key’ himself ‘ hmm~~ I wonder.. ‘
he began to move but suddenly Ralph yelled “ STOP ! “ making Vergil stop his movement as he looked questioning at him, Ralph began to glare at him “ don’t you dare come near him! “
everyone stayed silent because of the scene until Fido realised what is happening as he suddenly moves quickly in front of Ralph as to block Virgil then followed by Kevin “ uh.. guys what’s going on “ Mungo asked as he confused on why they suddenly blocking the cat
“ well would you looked at that, it seems some of you realised what’s happening “ Virgil grinned as he showed those sharp teeth
Peanut felt a little comfort when the others started to block the cat until Ares suddenly talked with a low voice ‘ give me permission ‘ making Peanut confused “ huh? “
“ aww~~ I just wanted to see that cute pup behind you “ as Virgil sickly sweet talking to them making Peanut raised in alarm as he started to walked slowly to them
GIVE ME PERMISSION PEANUT! ‘ Ares yelled at him, but Peanut body became numb as Virgil now looking at him with intensity
Grape felt a horrible sensasion she wanted to go to Peanut fast but her body still frozen in place, “ don’t move any closer “ Kevin treathen him but Virgil still kept walking
NOW! ‘ Ares command Peanut making Peanut take a huge leap backwards, Virgil become surprised as he sees the ‘key’ suddenly move backwards but what makes him more surprised is a black mist suddenly covering Peanut “ I GIVE PERMISSION TO… “ before Peanut could finish the sentence suddenly Virgil take a heavy step as he launched quickly towards Peanut “ HMPH!! “ as loud muffled sound can be heard from peanut as Virgil covering his mouth with his paw.
“ Now I know why she didn’t want you to be the key “ he twisted grinning at him making Peanut fear for his life, everyone surprised how fast Virgil can move as they began to rushed at him until they saw a shadow movement
KEEP YOUR HAND TO YOURSELF BRAT! “ Luna already jumped above them as she lifts her legs high enough then bring them down towards Virgil, he relased his hold on Peanut as he easily dodged Luna kick making her kick hit the floor hard enough to make a crack sound
Vergil regains his balanced “ I hate it when you use your stealth “ he pouts his face
and I hate it when I see your face “ Luna snarl towards him
“ ouch… that kinda stings “ he smiled mockingly towards her, Peanut couldn’t hold his foot as he kneeling and breathing so hard that Luna could hear him
are you okay Peanut? “ Luna softly place her paw to his shoulder as Peanut nod his head
“ I didn’t do anything to that pup you know “ he playfully told Luna, making Luna giving him death glared
i am going to… “ before Luna could finish her sentence she became shocked because suddenly Grape and Ralph run towards Vigil as Grape tried to punch him from the left while Ralph slide down tried to tackle him from behind
Virgil only saw a glimpse but he couldn’t react fast enough as his footing losing his balanced making him staggered and a heavy punch land on his face, he flew a little until he rolled his body distancing himself from them, Luna saw this an opportunity as she runs fast enough to where Virgil tried to keep his balanced, Virgil lay on the ground as he opens his eyes to meet Luna as she raised her legs to stomp his head but almost didn’t manage to dodge it as her feet make another crack sound beside his head
He tried to kick Luna leg but she jumps backwards evading his attacked, Virgil took a huge breath as he finally stands up and regains his balanced, he glared at them “ I did not expect that… and really? three against one? I thought you wolf has honour “
Luna growled “ there is no honour defeating the likes of you
Virgil sighed “ no one could never beat that mouth of yours “ he stretched his body inspecting any injury until he felt a little tingle from his cheek, he saw the guys who attacked him rushed towards Peanut what surprised him is a little spark form on Grape paw.
Peanut still breathing hard as he cough and tried to breathe as many airs as he could, until a soft paw covering his cheek as it makes him turn to see who it belongs “ are you really fine Peanut? “ Grape asked him as a worried looked can be seen from her face, Peanut mind is still clouded as he couldn’t think anything at all he didn’t know what to do, until something crossed his mind and that exactly what he needed, he places a paw to one of her paws and then slowly bring it near to his face so that her scent can cover his entire nose as he took a huge breath making Grape a little surprised “ Peanut!? What are you.. “ then she could see his entire body soon became relaxed
“ I’m sorry Grape…. I don’t know why but your scent is soothing me “ he told her, Grape heart beat a little as a smiled form from her face as she lifted his face making him confused, she draws his face near her chest as she hugged him tightly as if her instinct told her to care for him “ it’s okay…. I’m here “ she whispered to him.
He hear her whispered, he heard her heart beating making his mind and body warm. Ralph saw the scene and it makes him feel something unpleasant and he really didn’t like it, until they heard Virgil laugh “ hahaha… now I know where that power came from “ making them looked at him as his face formed a biggest grin making them felt uncomfortable.
Everyone in the room didn’t know what to do as they amazed how strong the white wolf is but the more amazing is that they saw a cat with a horn and they thought that he is a hybrid until someone whispered to one and another then followed by the others, Peanut couldn't comprehensive what they whispering but he didn’t care he finally stood up making both Grape and Ralph surprised “ what are you doing Peanut “ Grape place her paws to his shoulder making him stop his movement
He placed his paw to her one of her paw “ it’s okay Grape.. “ he whispered making Ralph fur raised as he felt enraged
“ WHAT DO YOU MEAN IT’S OKAY “ he yelled towards Peanut making everyone surprised to see him, “ DO YOU KNOW HOW WORRIED I AM WHEN YOU CONFRONT THAT PITBULL “ making Peanut shocked “ AND NOW SOME MANIAC IS TRYING TO HARM YOU HOW IS IT OKAY? “ Peanut could see from his eyes how worried he is, his body breathing hard and Peanut now know how he really cares for him
He stood up and place a paw on Ralph cheek “ I’m fine Ralph “ Ralph tried to argue again but Peanut beat him first “ don’t worry I’m not alone “ he told him, Ralph didn’t know what to do as he turns towards Virgil as he snarls towards him as he hides Peanut behind his back.
He glanced at Peanut “ stay behind me ! “ he ordered him but Peanut none having that as he walked passed him and walked to Luna until Ralph holds his arm “ what are you doing !? “
Peanut looked back at him “ we know how to handle him.. please believe us “ he met eyes to eyes with Ralph.
Ralph felt reluctant but confused “ what do you mean by ‘we’? Peanut only smiled at him making him take a huge sigh he released his arm “ thank you… and you better promised me to explained what’s going on with you okay? “ Ralph only nod his head
Luna surprised to see how quickly Peanut recovered as he finally stands side by side with her “ do you know how to erase their memory? “ Luna understand what he meant as she nods her head to him “ do you think you could distract him ? “ now Luna didn’t understand what he meant but she just nods her head
Virgil became amused on what he heard “ do you really think you could handle me, pup? “ he grinned towards Peanut
Peanut only grinned “ not ‘me’ but us “ making him amused
“ what? You and Luna? “ Virgil questioned him
“ nope…. I mean ‘us’ “ as a different voiced can be heard from Peanut making Virgil shocked ‘ you better give me permission know pup... I want to punch his smug face ‘ Ares told him Peanut take a deep breath.
Virgil saw a black mist covering his body again but now he must take action he dashed towards Peanut again hoping he could stop what he’s doing but before he could reach him Luna suddenly hovering behind Peanut “ ‘ moonlight shadow ‘ “ she whispered then out of nowhere a cloak covering both of them making Virgil lose his footing and stop where he is.
Everyone became surprised that both of them suddenly vanished, Virgil looked around him making sure he kept his guard, a seconds felt like an hours as he kept looking around him sensing where the attack coming from until he felt something near him, he fastly guards his face as he blocked a punch and Luna smugly appeared beside him “ wow… you can still sense me “ then she disappeared again, making Virgil more vigilant, then he felt it again as Luna tried to kick him he dodged again, and the cycle keep repeating.
“ I HAD ENOUGH “ as Luna tried to Punch him Virgil managed to catch it as he smiled to her “ got you~~ ”
Luna smiled back “ are you sure it wise to keep focusing on me
Virgil surprised what he heard until he sensed something behind him as he looked back and saw Peanut across the floor “ muffins and cookies IT “ he kicks Luna face but she dodged it but his real intention is Peanut as he balancing himself and dashed towards Peanut
Luna tried to catch up to him “ as if I let you! “ but he is faster than her as he near Peanut he pulls his hand and launched a punch towards him making Luna yelled “ NO! “ then they heard something hard.
Virgil could feel that his punched landed but when he finally focused on Peanut he surprised to see Peanut catch his punch, “ I give permission to Ares “ a clinking sound can be heard from him as a tattoo of chain appeared from his back, Virgil felt something wrong as his instinct told him to back away, he tried to dash away but he couldn’t get away from Peanut grip as he tried to pull away until he Peanut eyes as it changes colour from blue to black “ I REALLY wanted to punch your smug face “ Virgil shocked to hear how different his voice is then he couldn’t react fast as a fist launched towards his stomach until he could feel an impact from his stomach.
Virgil gasped as he lost his air and flew across the floor, he held his stomach in pain as he cough loud enough so that he can take as many airs as he could “ ah~~ that felt good “, Virgil looked shocked as he saw what in front of him Peanut voiced and personality changed drastically and the aura around him full of shadowy mist and he didn’t like it one bit but something nagging him that somehow he knew this dog is, he looked around him and his situation is out of control before he could stand “ going somewhere? “ Peanut dashed to him and kick him in the stomach again almost making Virgil puke but after the first impact somehow Virgil can lessen the pain and able to control his momentum and roll away and stand to his ground “ nice control “ Peanut grinned at him.
Virgil now realised what he’s dealing it but he didn’t want to believe “Fenrir? “
Now the smug Peanut only sneered at him “ Ares! “ Virgil looked confused and now the one who gained control is Ares looked furious at him “ MY NAME IS ARES “ he shouted at him, then he walked slowly to Virgil “ and how dare you… making our beloved Peanut scared like that “ the death whispered glared he sent to Virgil enough to make him tremble “ don’t think about leaving this place without broken bones
Ralph looked confused on why Peanut telling him another name, he looked towards Grape and saw that she didn’t look quite surprised and he knew that she knows something about this
Virgil is now in deep trouble and even he could run without a doubt this Ares will catch up to him until a shadow tentacle came from bellow him “ when I said don’t touch him I meant it, Virgil,, “ a dark figure came with the shadow as Hel came from bellow “ if I didn’t save your sorry hide I’m sure he would beat you to death
Hel looked at Ares as she felt something reminiscence “ hello there Fenrir “ Ares tried to snarl in anger but Hel only raised her arms “ forgive us we did not mean to harm that pup…. Ares
Ares now could calm down “ and the first time you met Peanut? “ his rage slowly coming back
Hel only looked towards Luna “ that pup can not handle that power if you didn’t make him change back it will tear that pup body
Luna looked confused “ what do you mean?
Hel move her hands up and the tentacle slowly wrap her and Virgil
Ares looked shocked as he tried to dash towards them “ DON’T YOU DARE “ he yelled but suddenly he felt a lot of pain coming from his body as he kneels holding on that pain “ what the.. “ his body trembled as the pain coming around his body ‘ARES! ‘ Peanut yelled worriedly at him ‘ you causing a lot of stress on Peanut body, you need to give me permission Peanut so that I can change with him, I could at least lessen the pain ‘ Eriel told him, “ I can’t “ Ares looked vulnerable
Luna became shocked as she now dashed towards Ares leaving Hel behind after she got to him Hel yelled at her “ LUNA “ she looked towards Hel “ we will not pursue him again you have my words “ as she slowly descending with the shadow then the tentacle wrap and swallow them and vanished
Luna didn’t get what’s happening until he could hear Ares in a lot of pain “ are you alright Ares?
Ares wanted to say something but Peanut body keep screaming in pain, he knew their compatibility is different but he didn’t realise it was this big “ I need to change with my mate “, she knew what he meant but if this keeps up it will literally tear him apart
Everyone looked shocked when Hel suddenly disappeared after the cat with a horn now another wolf came with a shadow tentacle, Ralph didn’t like it one bit as he now rum towards Ares as he picked him up bridal style “ we need to get him to the hospital “ Luna looked shaken because she is useless now “ LUNA “
Luna finally awake as she looked around her “ we need to find a room for him
“ We got a room on the break room, we can use that “ Molly suddenly said, Luna looked behind them as their group finally came together “ what are you waiting for? “ Molly run ahead as she tried to prepare the room followed by Ralph and the others, Luna tried to catch up but remembered their surrounding and People is still watching she raised her hand and a light star shape came and blind everyone as the crack on floor is no more and the people questioning each other on what they just did, Luna uses this opportunity to catch with the Group
Molly open the break room as she rushed in and prepared the couch followed by Ralph holding Ares, as he put Ares in the couch. “ what now? “ Kevin asked, Ares, keep clenching his body and it kept getting worse ‘ can we forced him to change with you ‘ Peanut in panicking now, Eriel tried to calm him down ‘ calm down Peanut the key for him to change is you but because the pain is blocking our linked we pretty much useless here, once there is an opening give me permission “ Peanut tried to calm down and focusing when he needs to give permission to Eriel
we need someone to make him focus “ Luna gasped as she came from the door and tried to explained, as she runs inside “ his..’huff’ mate can heal him, he is inside Peanut too
Everyone looked confused “ well why didn't he change with Eriel? “ Grape asked Luna as everyone shocked on how Grape knew it
the pains making him lose his focus, I think he couldn’t hear Peanut or Eriel “ Luna tried to hold Ares so that he wouldn’t harm Peanut body
Sabrina knew what to do as she steps forward and places a paw on his head “ does that mean we need to link him and the others inside him “ she asked
Luna looked surprised “ yes, but what are you.. “ before she could finish her sentence Sabrina eyes suddenly glow green as a warm aura can be seen flow trough Ares head
Eriel felt the linked and yelled ‘ NOW PEANUT ‘ Peanut then yelled ‘ I GIVE PERMISSION TO ERIEL ‘ as another clinking sound can be heard as the tattoo move on it’s own as the colour from Ares eyes turn to White “ dear dog it hurts “ the voice change as now Grape understand that Eriel is now possessed it
could you heal Peanut body Eriel “ Luna asked him
yeah give me a minutes “ Eriel aura flow trough Peanut body making the pain less and less, the body that tense now change into relaxing state as Eriel took a huge breath “ whew…. There.. I lessen the pain but Peanut will still felt sore after this
Everyone takes a huge relieved as Ralph holding Eriel paw “ thank god “ he whispered to himself as he places his paw to his face
Eriel looked how relieved Ralph is until he heard Ares, ‘ I’m sorry Peanut ‘ Ares told Peanut ‘ it’s okay, I’m glad you are fine ‘ Peanut reassured him ‘ I think I need to rest now that pains giving a toll on me call me if you need me alright? ‘ Eriel then chuckled “ just go to sleep my love “ making everyone confused who is he talking too and the fur on ralph back standing, Eriel became confused why everyone is looking at him until he realised what just he said “ ah… it’s for my mate Ares, he is resting now “ Ralph didn’t know but he felt unsettled, Eriel saw this “ I’m not your Peanut you know? “ Eriel told him
Ralph heard him and his face flushed red “ HE’S NOT MINE “ he yelled at Eriel, Eriel only raised his brow towards him making Ralph cover his face and mumbling incomprehensibly
Eriel smiled “ then you will be alright if he has a lover? someone to hold his hands… cuddled with him.. maybe kiss him?
Ralph imagined that scene, Peanut holding someone else, laughing lovingly, and then they slowly to nearing face to face, that scene making his blood boiled as he slowly growled unconsciously making Kevin and the others grinned towards him as he slowly realised what he’s doing “ you really fall deeper haven’t you? “ Kevin grinned at him as he put his paw on his shoulder making Ralph growled playfully at him
Eriel just giggled “ if it’s making you better he could hear you.. and he is very shy about that “ as he heard whimper from Peanut ‘ please stop that Eriel ‘ while Ralph is no better as his face very likely turn red tomato “ I’m going to give Peanut control again and you better give him your best explanation after he rest of course “
he takes a deep breath as he closed his eyes but Luna suddenly grabs him by his shoulder “ Eriel before you go I need to apologize what I did before
Eriel looked at her eyes as the looked that gives him is pure sincerity, he only shook his head and smiled to her “ don’t worry it’s all forgotten “ as he grabs luna paw that on his shoulder making her smiled happily to him.
Eriel closed his eyes as the breaking chain can be heard and the tattoo disappeared After he opens his eyes the colour change to blue again as Grape knew that Peanut is in control again “ owwie… “ Peanut clenched his stomach as he felt his sore body
Grape smiled as he caresses his head “ he’s back “ she laughed the way he held his body as he whimpering in pain
“ are you sure you’re alright Peanut? “ Ralph couldn’t help but felt worried for him
“ yeah I’m okay I just need to rest…. On this really… comfy… pillow “ as he whimpering in relieved as the pillow giving him a soft place to rest
Grape giggled as she started to caress his head, then she looked at everyone “ I’m sorry guys that the night have been ruined “ she apologized to them
Mungo just smiled “ I’m actually having a blast here… minus the fight… but your punch was AWESOME “ he yelled as he getting excited
Fox started to calm him down “ whoa there… calm down Mungo “
Peanut started to whimpering “ loud…. Noise…. “ as he covering his ears with pillow
Kevin just laughed “ I think everyone felt that tonight went well don’t you think guys? “ as everyone nods their head except Max
“ speak for yourself… I can’t even impress Grape “ max speak as he looked upset
Grape looked at him as she started to walk up to him and nuzzle his cheek “ don’t worry maxie~~ you already make me enjoy the night “ as they started to cuddle a little and purring
“ cute… but can you tell us what exactly happened to Peanut? “ Molly asked as she looked directly at Grape
Grape looked at her and sighed “ I guess you realised that I’m the only one and Luna of course what exactly happened to him “
Before she could explain Ralph begin to interrupt her “ could you explained outside the room? “ Everyone begins to look at him, “ I just need a moment with Peanut…. Please ? “ he begs
Peanut uncover his pillow and started to look at him while everyone nods their head as one by one started to go outside but only Grape, Luna and Kevin stayed for a while “ good luck chief “ Kevin grinned at him as he started to walked outside
I wish for the best “ Luna put her paw to his shoulder as she started to walkout
Only Grape stayed in the room, the tension becomes heavy as both Ralph and Grape looked at each other “ Grape… “ Peanut wanted to call her but she makes a sign stop with her paw
“ I don’t care what happened next but I will tell you like just last time…. You hurt him….. i.. will…. End…. You “ she threatened him
Ralph looked at her unfazed of her action but with serious looked he only said “ I promise on my life… I will never make him hurt “
She looked at him, the sincerity on his voiced it’s enough to make Grape satisfied, she walked to Peanut as he tried to get up but she suddenly hugs him “ don’t worry lug… I’m not mad…. You know I really care about you right? “
Peanut didn’t make any movement because of the shock, she released him as she smiled one last time before went out of the door.
Now only Ralph and Peanut in the room, they begun to feel awkward with one another as Peanut suddenly remember what Eriel has done as his face blushed, Ralph noticed this as he began to cough getting attention of Peanut, he tried to open his mouth then he hesitated Peanut looked at him as he patiently wait for what he’s about to say.
so he took a deep breath as he moved and grab Peanut paw, Peanut started to blushed again, he looked at Ralph and saw his eyes as they are telling him that this is going to be a serious conversation, his blushed vanished as Ralph begun to speak “ I think I’m deeply fallen for you..“
Petrov’s Residents~~~
In this house you can hear a barking from a pups as they run around the house, then you can hear someone started to yelled at them “ давай мой маленький солдатик время спать ( come on my little soldier time to sleep ) “ a black female bulldog yelled at her 3 pups that playing around the house making them let out a whimpering sounds, she giggled at them “ твой младший брат уже спит, не хочешь ли ты составить ему компанию? ( your little brother already asleep would you like to keep him company? ) making the pup bark excitingly then they heard a click sound from the door as another black bulldog came in.
The pups looked at him as they started to yelled and run towards him “ папа домой ~~ папа домой ~~ ( papa home~~ papa home~~ ) “ as they jumped at him making him laughed at them as he hugged them tightly “ привет мой маленький солдат ( hello there my little soldier ) “ they started to lick him until another person came in
“ эй, где мое объятие? (hey, where's my hug?) “ a red hair and white skin woman came in as she making a hug gestured and pout face, the pups looked at her as they wagged their tailed and run to her as she started to lift them and hug them “ ааааh ~~~ чувство после того как ты вернулся домой с работы и этот маленький ангел приветствовал тебя (ааааh ~~~ the feeling after you went home from worked and this little angel greeted you) “ as she felt like in heaven
The female started to yelled at them “ давай иди к своему младшему брату и иди спать (come on go to your little brother and go to sleep) “ she put them down as they started to run to where their brother is sleeping, she looked towards the male dog as she looked affectionately towards him “ welcome home Igor my love “ she walked to him and give him a kiss on the cheek
“ I’m home my beautiful Anya “ he hugs him tightly
She released her hug as she looked towards the female human “ welcome home Ash… how is your day? “
Ash only smiled as she rubbed her head “ you are getting better using that language I’m glad for that “ she glared at Igor “ your husband becoming more and more annoying “
Anya then started to glare at him “ really? “
Igor raised his hand “ hey, I just wanted to see my pups and my beautiful mate faster “ then he glared towards Ash “ you know you wanted to meet them too… even after their first day in this house you always went home earlier than most of your workers “ as he accused her
Ash just smiled as she grabs her bag and walked to the living room “ please, if I can take them to work we will be getting home more latter than most of our shift “
Anya only grumbled to that “ I will bite both of your butts if you ever get that idea “ making them laughed at her comment after they sit on the sofa Ash and Igor let a huge sigh making Anya looking worried at them “ it’s tomorrow, isn’t it? “
Igor only grumbled “ don’t remind me, I can’t even stand it without looking at my pups more than one day “
Ash then make a suggestion “ maybe we should take them with us “
Making Anya throwing pillow at them as they laughed “ you know what maybe I should let you sleep on the sofa for the night “
Making Igor alert as he kneeling in front of her “ please she’s just joking my love “ making Ash laughed harder at the pathetic male
“ wow …. Now I certain who got the pants in this house “ Ash commented
Igor growled playfully at her “ not helping ‘mistress’ “ making Ashe throw a pillow towards him
“ I hate it went you said that “ as Ash grumbled at him
“ You started it “ Igor defended
Anya just take a huge sighed “ come on children let’s take this serious and maybe I will rethink making you sleep on the sofa “ Igor started to stand up and sit beside her
Ash sighed “ yes…tomorrow we take the plane and landed at the airport and after that, we take the rental car and visit the place we stayed at “
“ Are you sure it’s them? “ Igor started to growled angrily, Anya knew what he meant as he took his paw making him calm down as he looked at her “ I’m sorry my love… I know I can control it but when I remembered what they did… “ Anya let a whimpering sound
Ash becomes furious “ I will wring their neck when I found them “ she clasped her both hand as hard as she could
The tension on the room become heavy then Anya clap her hand and both Igor and Ash suddenly surprised at what they did “ come on.. let’s go to bed maybe we can cool our head after we take some rest “ she got up from the sofa “ and you really spoiled us even the pups get their own room Ash “ she spoke to her
Ash only grinned “ don’t you mean ‘Thank you’? “
Anya only shook her head in amusement “ come one love let’s go to bed “ as she walked towards their rooms
Igor wagged his tailed “ coming my love~~ “ Ash saw Igor as he almost looked lovestruck at her mate making her laughed again
After she heard a closing door she takes another sighed and went to her kitchen, she search the content in the fridge and found what she needs, she takes a crate of beers and went to the cupboard to take some chips and a bottle opener, she went to the backyards where a seat and a table set up like it meant for her to sit there, she put the crate down as she sits on the chair then put the chips on the table as she opens them and took one chip as she bit it “ I really should stop snacking in the middle of the night or my weight will go up again “ she sighed, she grabs a bottle of beer and open it with the bottle opener then she took a huge chug, she sighed in content then looked at the sky as her face shows determination “ you better ready because I’m coming for you “

annnndddddd~~~ DONE..... nad it takes only........ okay maybe more than 1 months but at least i make another chapter hah! and thank you so much for reading my fanfic... eventhough my fanfic didn't make a lot of sense... but i'm happy to make it so yeah!
Ps.... did i break any rule when i make this fanfic?... please be honest.. i don't want to destroy this forum because of me....

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I don't think that you broke and rules and even if you did it would have been by accident and not enough to destroy the forum. But I really did love this and I hope I can read more from you soon!


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