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Post Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Chapter one: Interdimensional Floating Island Dilemma (if you know what I mean)
41 days after the final battle.
"We have been on this island for over a month now, Grape, we need to escape, are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." Collin, Peanut, and Grape were stuck on a floating island in 'space', they were stuck there, with nothing to eat but crushed grains. Peanut always tried to look at the bright side of things, though. Collin was sitting at the edge of the island when Peanut exclaimed, "I see a shooting star!" Collin replied with "There can't be shooting stars, we're… I don't know where!" Collin looked over, and, to his surprise, there was a comet-like object (as in it was leaving a glowing trail) falling towards them. The three ran to the far side of the island. There was a booming sound as the object crashed, Collin slowly walked over, there were three shapes in what almost looked like a star wars land speeder with wings.
END OF PART ONE SO I CAN GET THIS OUT AND OVER WITH.

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

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This seems like it will be good! I can't wait for more!

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Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
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SeanWolf Wrote:
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

Actually I was referring to this part in particular - "...are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." - Maybe after the word 'missed' you could've added a ? and had the 'we just' be a separate sentence. Just an idea :)

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Intriguing opening, I can't wait to see what comes next :)

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SeanWolf Wrote:
Hawkfang42 Wrote:
SeanWolf Wrote:
Interesting premise! The dialogue at the beginning was a bit hard to read but overall I like the idea presented here!

This might help, this book is a sequel to my other fanfiction Housepets! Enter the Multiverse.
Or maybe I was just being confusing

Actually I was referring to this part in particular - "...are you sure that there isn't a place you missed, we just need to find the Keychain and boom, home, family, friends, chili fries, and naps." - Maybe after the word 'missed' you could've added a ? and had the 'we just' be a separate sentence. Just an idea :)

Okay, thank you. (I better remember my grammar lessons)

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Hey its OK. I'm pretty sure a good 30% of the time I forget my grammar also. XD

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Okay, any guesses, (Hint: not star wars, and related to the SNES)

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
So I'm gonna put this on hold so I can do Ultimate Housepets! Which is a story that works as a darker take upon the HPU. And a story I think I can write easier.

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
OK then well we all will be waiting on that and hope you can do a good job with it!

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Chapter one; continued.
As the dust settled, one of the people in the crashed object got out, the person was a purple haired* girl, "A place outside of time and space, interesting." She said, looking at the people in the vehicle, looking down, she sees Peanut looking at her with a confused countenance, "Animals that are basically furry humans, well this place is interesting," she said then said to him, "Well hello there, my name is Lucca, what's yours?" "Peanut, I'm Peanut Butter Sandwich, how are you?" He replied. Looking at the crashed vehicle, he realized that the other two were unconscious, guess that's why they didn't get out of the ship Peanut thought. Afterwards, they all met, and failing to wake the other two in the ship multiple times.

*Though her hair is purple, it is usually covered in a green hat, (and I thought her hair was green for the beginning of my first play through.)

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He couldn't believe it, the reason he came back to the mortal world wasgone forever. Breel could barely keep up his courageous facade as the leader of the only survivors of the catastrophe that devoured countless existances, he was truly courageous and fearless before, but he couldn't truly have courage anymore when he learned of Keene's fate, and he knew he would eventually have to tell Simon and Duke. He was at the bridge of his magnificent multiversal traveling shuttle, the L.S.S.* Ray, checking the cameras for any sign of survivors, when he noticed a small island floating, he turned on the communications and said, "I see an island, Rescue team, get in the landing shuttle."

*Light Survivors Ship, it was originally called the Z.R.S. before the original group (Breel, Duke, and Simon) found it after it crashed into the ocean near the private island they were at for vacation.

End chapter one.
*Note: this will be part of an A B C schedule for my other fanfics releasing monthly updates

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Um, Breel's a guy. :|

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Um, Breel's a guy. :|

I did not know that, from what I could guess, I thought Breel was a girl :|

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Others have as well, just thought that was put to bed long ago.

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Long ago? Yeah well, I came here after that.

edit: okay, I fixed that simply, no major deletion or editing required.

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Well now you know so for the future when you have him show up again you don't need to worry about making that mistake. XD

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*Due to summer coming soon, I will have more time to write my stories*
Chapter Two: NOW WITH MORE SCIENCE FANTASY!
"Hey look, a spaceship!" Peanut said, watching what he would find out to be a landing craft. Everyone, conscious that is, ran over in anticipation as it slowly landed. When the door opened, a black and gray cat with a partially ripped off ear walked out, along with a robot that looked like a dog from Galifrax and a human child.
"Hello, I'm Maxwell- Grape, is that you? I thought we were the only people left from our world." Maxwell said.
"Nope, peanut and I are fine, along with this person here, probably from Calderwood Meadows or some place like that. Anyways, what's with that odd robot?" Grape replied
"Oh, you mean Muffit, we got him from one of the many alternate realities we went to."
"What else do you have on there? A kid with mind powers?"
"We actually do have a few, anyways, why don't you all get into the shuttle and see the big spaceship?"
They all go into the shuttle, and the shuttle flew down to the large ship. The ship went to a new destination.
End of chapter two.
Now to revisit a place with flying lemurs.

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Post Re: Project Hawk (HP! ETM 2) (probably PG-13)
Nice chapter that you have! Can't wait to see what else you have!

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