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I really hope you don't drag it out by having him get sick from the chocolate he just drank... :roll:

Nice cliffhanger. So they arrive in Babylon Gardens. Nice. Wonder who he will meet first.

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I'm just glad he got out of there, it's starting to eat into him...

Oh God, the cliffhanger! What will his new name be, I wonder? Though you mentioned it could be one of the two Luna listed...

Huh, finally gotten round to reading fanfics again, and I'll be waiting for more! :D

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Luna said four names. my vote is on Marshmallow. (actually, It's probably Trent)

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I think he meant Marshmellow or Coco.

My vote's Coco.

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Well your vote would be correct, and I'm working on the next chapter right now so I should have this next chapter up by tomorrow night. And it has a surprise appearance by someone! Also a house pets character makes a cameo. Guess both of the characters? If you guess them both I give you a spoiler to either my next story or the next chapter. It's your choice.

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I'd say the first one will be Spark, the second one is either King or Pete, I think.

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Yay, challange!
Urrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.....
Either: Peanut and Grape or Max or Fox(? is that how you spell it?)

Is that too many guesses? If it is, PM me and I'll choose two.

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well heres the new chapter, and well none of your guesses were correct. But to late now because here it is.

Chapter 7

Trevor was looking at me intensely then he spoke, "I'll call you Cocoa."

I was surprised but liked the name, "Ok, I like it. So where am I sleeping, I'm
beat?"

"Thats great! Oh, up the stairs, 2nd door on the right. You get the guest
bedroom." Trevor said.

"Thanks, on multiple levels. Goodnight." I told him in a sleepy voice. I walked
up the stairs, into my new room, and then I fell into my new bed. I fell asleep
within 5 minutes.

I woke up the next morning, I was surprised that I was in a bed right away.
Then after a little bit of thinking, I remembered that I had been adopted by
Trevor. I laid in bed for a few minutes, then got up on the account of being
hungry. I crawled out of bed and walked down the hall, I was still sleepy so I
had my eyes barely open. I closed my eyes for a few seconds and kept walking. I
opened them back up and all I saw was the stairs. And tumble I went all the way
down the stairs and hit the floor with a 'Thack'. I was hurt all over, and
Trevor hadn't come to help me yet so I guessed that he's at work. I leaned up
slowly, it hurt just to move. As I looked down I noticed that my leg was bend at
a weird angle. The only thing I did was scream very loud, then passed out from
pain.

Fox's POV.

I had just finished breakfast and was walking to King's house. I was passing in
front of Trevor's house, I had heard that he got a new dog. I was passing the
driveway when I heard a scream from inside the house. I turned around and ran
towards the front door, knocked a few times, and no one answered. I decided to
let myself in, I looked first to my left than my right. I saw a dog laying at
the bottom of the stairs, I ran over to him. I shook him a couple of times, he
didn't respond. I looked around and saw a phone on the counter in the kitchen. I
ran towards it, picked it up and dialed 9-1-1, a women answered. I told her that
there was a dog with a broken leg at the bottom of some stairs. She patched me
through to the local pet hospital, then I told them the same thing. The new
woman asked where the dog lived, I didn't know so I looked around and luckily
the address was written next the the phone dock. I read her the address on the
paper, and she said that an ambulance was on it's way. I hung up the phone and
went back over to the hurt dog and made him comfortable with some pillows. About
10 minutes later they arrived, came into the house and lifted the dog onto the
stretcher. They took off for the hospital and I went and grabbed the phone. I
was looking for Trevor's number so I could tell him of his dog's status, I found
his number on a note near the fridge. I called him it rang a few times then went
to his voice mail. I left him a message telling him what happened, hung up the
phone, and walked out the front door closing it behind me. I sat on the step for
a few minutes thinking over what just happened. I then continued on my original
mission, I thought while walking that this is going to be a great story to tell
King.

Back to Cocoa's POV.

I was walking through a field of grass just enjoying the small breeze, and the
softness of the grass beneath my paws. I saw a figure in the distance, it kinda
looked like a cat. I started to walk towards it, as I got closer I noticed that
it was an orange tabby and that it was a female. I walked closer and saw that it
was Spark, I started to run towards her. I called out her name as I ran toward
her. I got to where Spark was standing and reached out to her. I put my hand on
her shoulder. She turned around to look at me, I was so happy to see her again.
I embraced her in a hug without even looking at Spark's face. I kept hugging her
until I noticed that my arms were getting closer to my body. I looked up at
Spark and started to freak out! Spark was slowly dissolving into thin air. I
panicked and shook her, yelled her name, tried to get Spark's attention. She
wasn't answering, soon enough her whole body was gone. I was left on my knees,
crying in the field of grass. Then there was a flash of white, and I opened my
eyes. Seeing that I was in the hospital, I wondered what happened.

I looked around the room, seeing all of the medical equipment, a few chairs, and
a sink in the corner. There was no one else in the room at the moment. I slowly
sat up, and looked down at my leg. It was in a cast, and it felt weird. I saw a
tv in the corner, so I searched for the remote. I saw it on a table about 5 feet
away, I knew that I couldn't walk over and get it nor could I grab it. I tried
to think of an idea on how to get it. I turned my head around to see if there
was anything behind me, I saw a button. It read 'Push For Help' so I pushed it
because I needed help to get the remote. I turned back around to wait for the
nurse to come help me. I sat there for about 2 minutes, before I heard the door
start to open. A nurse walked in, and saw that I had woken up.

"Oh so your finally up, how are you feeling?" The nurse asked.

"Actually I'm feeling pretty good, except for my leg. And how long was I out?" I
replied.

"Well thats good, and let's see you came in here at noon on Monday. Now it's 6pm
on Wednesday." The nurse told me.

"I was out cold for 2 days, straight!" I yelled.

"No, actually you came in here last week Monday, you've been here for 9 days."
She told me.

I was shocked that I had been out that long, and I also wondered who had visited
me in that time. So I asked, "Wow I've been out that long, so in that time who
visited me?"

"Well occurring to the records, your owner Trevor, Fox, and a dog named King."
She told me.

"That's good, so how long till I can leave here?" I asked.

"Well your fit to leave in 3 days, but your leg won't heal for about 40 days."
She told me.

The 3 days went by pretty slow, Trevor visited every day and Fox and his friend
King even stopped by to see me. When I was finally released from the hospital I
got drove home on a soft pillow. Once there I was given the special treatment,
where everything I wanted was given to me. It was great at first, but it got
annoying after 2 weeks. I could barely walk and I had to get helped to do most
things, you know how that feels? No you don't, it sucked I couldn't wait to get
rid of that stupid cast. Most days I didn't even leave the house.

***************One and a half months later***************

I was going back to the hospital to get my cast removed. I was so excited to be
able to do stuff for myself again. We went in and came back out an hour later. I
felt like a new dog, once we were back outside. I sprinted to the car, to test
my leg out. I did circles around the car while I waited for Trevor to come
unlock it. We drove home with my head out the window the whole time. As soon as
he stopped I bolted out of the car and took off down the street, I called back
to him that I'd be back later. I ran, and ran until I found the local park. I
looked around, and noticed a path that went into the woods. I took it, jogging
the whole path until I got back to where I started. I decided to head home now
because my stomach grumbled. I took off at a fast pace towards home. I was
running and looking around at the same time, it wasn't my best idea because I
wasn't watching where I was going. I was looking at a pet outside playing
frisbee, than looked forward quick to see a dog in my path but it was to late.
'SLAM' I ran into the dog knocking us both to the ground. The other dog stood up
first and he definitely looked mad at me.

"Watch where you're going idiot!" He yelled at me.

"I'm sorry, I was looking at something." I told him.

"Who do you think you are?! I own this neighborhood, how dare you run into me!"
He was angry at me I could tell.

After that last sentence I didn't want him to ruin my good day so I took off
running. He didn't notice right away because he had his eyes closed and was
shaking his fist. But after he realized that I had left, he took off after me. I
was running from him and I wanted to lose him quick so once I went around the
corner I hopped in a bush. He went running past not even knowing that I had
hopped in the bush. I crawled out of the bush slowly, making sure that he wasn't
still around. What I didn't notice was the cat on the window sill above the
bush. When it spoke I nearly jumped out of my skin.

"So is Bino giving you trouble?" The cat asked, amused at the scene.

I turned around seeing the cat, "Oh that's what his name is. No, actually I ran
into him and he got really mad at me." I said.

"That's funny, well don't mind him, he's a wimp. The coast is clear so you can
go." The cat told me.

"OK well thanks and bye." I said then took off. When I was almost home something
about that cat clicked in my mind but I didn't know why.

I got lazy during some of it so i skipped the dialogue. It still came out great anyway so have fun and keep commenting.

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Nice little update. I liked it!

So now he has a name. Cocoa. Apparently he is accident prone! He really needs to watch where he is going... :lol:

Bino really fell for the hide in the bush trick? Man is he dense. :roll:

Can't wait for the next update.

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great update.

and both of my guesses were sorta there, Spark in a dream and King while Cocoa was out cold. I'll count that as a half-win.

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Woohoo, finally gotten around to reading this update!
Oh God, I kinda pity Cocoa now, just his second day at home and he already had a broken leg. And he lost like so many days due to his conditions.
And when he was just about to have a great day, Bino just had to 'welcome' him his way @w@. Like in a lot of stories out there .
And yeah, Fox and King to the rescue! I love these two characters, and seeing them around always make me happy!

I'm really curious to know who that cat is, and why did Cocoa remember him....

Great update, musclecar! I'll be waiting for the next one! =3

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Okay. Since I promised, I will tell you what I think about your fan fic :)

There are some things that in my opinion you should work on.

First of all, I've noticed you tend to make repetetive errors. Here are some examples:

Quote:
I almost burnt my paws when I grabbed the bacon, so I grabbed a plate
and put it on there.


Quote:
They spent the morning eating and talking about the farm. The farm had a barn,
two sheds, a house, and a chicken coupe.


Quote:
Trent didn't notice the white van coming up behind him. Trent had stopped
walking to smell some roses at the edge of a yard, so the van caught up to him.


There can't be two same words like grabbed, catched, placed etc. in the same sentence. If you used one and you want to describe similar action in same sentence, you should use a substitute. Something similar is in second example. You cannot use same words before and after placing the dot. At the tird example, you must evade beginning the sentence with a word that also began the previous one.
So when you're re-reading your update, check for repetetive errors.

The other thing what I find kinda disturbing is action. There are some moments in your story that narration looks more like some report. He went there and there. He did this and that. This one appeared and then happened this.

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It went back to silence as we rode in the car to his house. As we pulled up in
the driveway the first thing I noticed was all of the pets. They were walking
all over the place without any humans in sight. I was amazed because in my old
neighborhood all pets had to be on leashes at all times. Trevor got out of the
car and led he inside. His house was pretty spacious with a nice LCD tv and a
leather couch. The kitchen had a nice large fridge, a nice wood table with 4
chairs. I was then given a tour around the home then we came back to the kitchen
to have lunch. As we were just about to sit down he remembered that he still
needed to buy me some kibble so he went to the store. Trevor said he'd be back
in 20 minutes, and so I was free to explore. I walked around for a little bit,
looking at the pictures then wandered into the backyard. I started to make a
snowman while I was waiting for Trevor to come back. I heard the door shut just
as I was finishing, so I walked back into the house. When I walked back in I saw
Trevor making my favorite drink in the world. HOT COCOA! How did he know it was
my favorite? I think he saw that gleam in my eye as I walked in.


My advice: You should add a bit more details and try to extend actions, because what was happening there was quite too fast.

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I got lazy during some of it so i skipped the dialogue.


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Well this is my first fanfic on this website so be easy on me.


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Don't worry :) Beginnings are never easy. Like they say: People haven't built Rome in one day.

I hope my advices will be helpful for you. Work on yourself, keep improving your skills and update :)

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I'm sorry that i haven't posted anything on this board for almost a week now but I've been busy. School starts in less than 10 days for me so i've been busy getting ready for that. i haven't been able to work to much on the new chapter the past week but ill try and find some time and hopefully have it done by tuesday. So thank you for the patience and understanding.

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awesome :D

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I am almost finished with the chapter, but I'll be gone all weekend. I'll be typing the rest over the weekend but won't be able to post it until Monday. Cocoa is going to run into some great luck in the next installment! :D

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Cocoa getting lucky!? That's new... :lol:

Well, I will be waiting for it, that I am sure of.

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Alright i have the chapter done but cannot post it. I type the chapters on my mom's ipad then email them to my computer. And right now she brought it to school so i cant email it. I will get it and post it by tonight. Thank you for the patience you've given to me and my story.

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I'm sorry for all of the delays and time since the last one but here it is.

Chapter 8

I walked into my house, smelling dinner instantly. It smelled of potatoes, fresh
juicy steak, and buttered corn. The dinner reminded me of my previous life, my
eyes had gotten misty. Trevor noticed me standing there, he asked "Hey there
champ how was your run?"

He didn't look up from cooking, so he didn't see my eyes water. I quickly wiped
my eyes before he noticed, then answered "It was nice to be able to stretch my
leg out after all this time."

"Yeah it must of been great being able to do that. In celebration of your cast
removal I grilled your favorite meat." He told me with a nice smile.

We sat down to eat our meal of T-Bone steaks, mashed potatoes with chives, and
corn on the cob. For most pets the amount of food on my plate would have been
enough for two pets. But somehow when I was changed over to a dog my stomach
stayed the same size, so I ate much more than other pets. I downed it all in
record time, finishing with a loud burp. Trevor was still working on his Steak,
and corn when I got up from the table finished with my meal. I walked out to the
backyard and laid down on the grass just enjoying the gentle autumn breeze. I
fell asleep outside due to the quietness around me. Trevor didn't move me when
it got dark, I just looked to comfortable laying there. He placed a blanket on
me and walked back inside. I awoke the next morning to the sounds of other pets
outside already playing. I got up slowly, my back hurt a little for sleeping on
the hard dirt all night. I walked into the kitchen expecting Trevor making
breakfast, but he wasn't there. I went over to the fridge, opened it and found
my breakfast on a plate. It had a note attached to it. It read 'Cocoa here is
your breakfast, sorry for not waking you when I made it but I had to leave in a
hurry. I'll be back around 4, oh and someone called for you and I told them
you'd call them back. I left the number on a sticky note, stuck to the phone.
Have a fun day, love dad.' I wondered who called but decided to eat before I
called back. I stuck the plate in the microwave to warm it up. I took it out,
ate it and cleaned it dog style then put it back with the others. I went over to
the phone and dialed the number attached to the phone. It rang a few times then
a familiar voice said "Hello."

"Hey there Fox, you called earlier, what did you want?" I asked him.

"Oh its you, Cocoa, yeah do you remember that promise that you made? The one
about what we'd do once your cast came off?" Fox questioned me.

I had to think about it for a moment then remembered. "Yes I do, I promised that
I'd go with you on a tour of the Gardens. Also how did you know my cast came
off?" I said.

"Well I heard about and saw you yesterday. First I saw you running in the park,
then heard about you from Bino. You two hit pretty hard, he even has a bruise on
his cheek from where you hit heads." Fox said snickering.

"I never saw you when I went out, and Bino is mean. I ran into him and he
started to yell at me then proceeded to chase me when I ran away. I got away
from him easily." I said.

"Well you'll get used to him sooner or later, now how about that tour? I'll be
over in a few minutes than you can meet the other dogs." Fox told me then hung
up.

I put the phone back on the base, walked to the door passing by a mirror. I
looked into it and my fur was a mess. I couldn't go outside looking like this, I
went into the bathroom. I found my brush and started to brush vigorously, I just
got all of my fur flat when a knock came at the door. I yelled from down the
hall, "Come in Fox!" I put my brush away and walked down the hall to greet him.
"Hello, let's go shall we?" I said opening the door. We walked out and down to
the sidewalk.

"So where should we begin? Oh I know we'll start over on the east end and work
our way back." Fox said thinking out loud. "Alright come on, let's run to get
started sooner. Can you keep up?" He asked.

"Of course I can!" I told him as I took off in the direction he had indicated. I
had a head start, but he caught up quick. He passed me and got there first,
arriving a few seconds before me. I had to take a breather before we started.

The tour was longer then I had expected, we went from east end to west end.
North to south and anything in between. I meet more dogs then I could count, Fox
avoided talking about the houses that owned cats. I didn't know why, but I felt
like he had a bad encounter with one before. We were near the end of the tour,
at the moment we were across the street from the park. My stomach grumbled, and
Fox offered me lunch at his home. I accepted, and we started walking I glanced
over to the other side quick. I noticed a few dogs standing in a group talking,
behind them by a car length or two was a purple furred cat and...

I couldn't believe my eyes, there was a cat standing next to her chatting. I
recognized her but couldn't remember the cat. I thought about it for a few
moments then it hit me like a ton of bricks. It was the same cat from the
windowsill yesterday, the colors of the cat were clicking in my mind. I nearly
fainted when I remembered that familiar body in a dream I had when I was in the
hospital. It was Spark! I lost all connections to the outside world and didn't
hear Fox yelling my name. I was staring at Spark who was just across the street,
being reminded of all the memories from my tough past. I was still staring when
Fox grabbed me and pulled me out of the way of the pole I almost hit. I was
knocked out of the trace when my foot ran into it. I yelped in pain, holding my
paw in my hand.

Fox looked across the street seeing what I had been staring at and started, "You
better not to be thinking what I think you are about those cats!" He yelled at
me.

"What do you mean? Ohhh, well to tell you the truth, maybe I am. I know that cat
from my past." I said thinking about her.

"That is not good, around here you do not want to be a cat-lover! You won't find
many friends around here if they find that out!" Fox told me.

"Alright, fine I just want to talk to her again. I haven't seen her in 5 months,
I wonder how she's doing." I said.

I took off across the street, leaving Fox standing there about to say something.
I fast walked across the street, looking for her. Just searching all over with
my eyes but, I just couldn't find her. The entrance of the park was nearby,
hopefully Spark went in there. Once inside the park, I broke out at a jog when I
noticed that same purple cat from before on the other side of the park. The
weird colored cat was crossing the street as I started to run. I kept thinking
as a was running about all of the old days with Spark. I was so lost in thought
I wasn't watching where I was going. The next thing I knew, I was next to the
road. Now where did that purple cat go? Maybe she went left, or possibly right.
I can't remember. I smacked myself in the forehead, I had forgotten that I was a
dog now with an excellent nose. I raised my head up and took a big whiff. It
smelled of several different animals but the most recent one had gone left. I
started to cross the street, forgetting to look both ways first. I look down and
notice that I have a shadow thats getting bigger by the second. There are pair
of headlights shining on me from a car coming towards me. I froze instantly, it
was as if I was stunned from the light. The car kept getting closer and wasn't
slowing down but, I still couldn't move. Time slowed down in the last few
seconds before it hit me. I closed my eyes waiting for it to come. I could feel
and rush of air on my body then everything went black...


Oh No a CLIFFHANGER!

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Ok i understand if people have read it but are to busy to comment but come on i need some feedback. I need to know if you really care about what happens next. So please if your reading this, comment to it!

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okay then. I figured that when you said "Cocoa is going to run into some great luck in the next installment!" that he would see Spark. I still liked the update though. ^_^

I usually wait for others to comment first. usually that's Copper, but he's been busy recently.

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Awesome story, cocoa appears to be very accident prone. He needs a rabits foot... Or maybe just a four leafed clover.

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or maybe he should have thought over his approach more, cause it was definitly one of the cats, so either grape or a different one

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Ok yeah he isnt the safest but who knows maybe his luck will change. Also you have to realise that when he got the tour that Fox didnt tell him any of the cat's names or where they lived. So he didnt know who it was or where it lived.

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Great update, Muscle! I liked it.
Cocoa just cannot catch a break! How many times is he going to almost get himself killed here!? :lol:

So Spark is now in the picture. Wonder how she will react to having her former master being a dog...

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I wonder how he will get spark convinced that it's him? really good update by the way

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YES, I FINALLY GOT 1000 VIEWS!!! YAY!!

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OK so i have some good news and some bad news. Ill tell you the good news first, I have started the next chapter. Ok now for the bad news, I wont be able to get it up for at least 2 weeks. Because i have school all week and only have time to type on weekends. So the next chapter wont be up for a while. But if you fans out there want something to fill that long time with than ive got something for you. I have written a background story on a character that will have its own story after im done with this one. I could post that background story if you want. So vote and tell me if you want that side story.

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Ok seriously i havent been able to work on the story at all this week. So it will most likely not be up till next weekend. NOW COMMENT AND VOTE IF YOU WANT THAT SIDE STORY TO BE POSTED OR NOT!! Pretty please with sugar on top?

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I vote for side story. And take your time with the main story there is no rush.

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I suppose I agree too.

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Either way is fine for me.

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Alright so ive received enough votes. So ill go ahead and put up my story on sunday afternoon about my character Shock.

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Hey here it is, my background on one of my characters that will be part of tough memories and also her own story once i'm done with this one. I hope you enjoy it!

Hey there my name is Shock. I'm a cat with an interesting background before I
moved to Babylon Gardens. Let's start with my grandparents, on my mom's side of
the family. My grandpa on her side was a snow wolf, yet grandma was a normal
cat. So my mom was half wolf, half cat and now my dad's side. It was close to
the same thing on mom's side, but this time my grandmother was a wolf. So it was
kinda cool because both my mom and dad were half wolf. So when they mated their
genes mixed in a fantastic way! They produced me, it was awesome because the
genes mixed in a great way. It was great because I came out looking exactly like
a normal household cat, but I had the senses and muscles of a wolf. So pretty
much I was a wolf on the inside and a cat on the outside. I was born into the
streets and, I only and lived with my mom for my first year. I spent my next two
years on the streets as the leader of a group of cats. I helped them find food
and shelter before the rest of them were caught by the pound. The guys that
caught the rest of my group couldn't even catch up to me when I was jogging
away. They wouldn't stop chasing me, so I had to hitch a ride. I was running
when I saw a big green truck with the back open. The back was too high for any
normal cat but not me. I jumped right up in the truck and went towards the
front. I sat down on some small boxes, and heard the guys outside arguing on
where I went. They left and a few minutes later the truck started up and took
off. I must of fell asleep in the back because I awoke to bright lights. Luckily
I was up front so the men didn't see me yet. I moved myself to the corner, out
of sight until the men left. I hopped out of my hiding spot and the truck in one
jump. But I was probably better off in the truck because once I was out I
noticed that not only was I inside but there were at least 30 men in that room.
I thought for sure my life was going to be over at that moment because several
of the men started to run towards me. I was wrong because I only had to try and
dodge them. I jumped up nearly 7 feet up onto a box so I could look for an exit.
I saw a door that looked like it went outside in the far corner so I started
toward it. I tried to stay on top of the boxes so the humans couldn't grab me
but when I was with 20 feet of the door I ran out of boxes. I had to jump down
and run for it. I readied my legs for a long distance jump, and sprang I landed
doing a roll. I stood up and sprinted to the door, somehow all of the men were
behind me as I started running. I slammed into the door pushing it open and now
there was good and bad news as soon as I got outside. The good news was that I
was outside and there was a clear exit a few hundred yards to the left. The bad
news was that there were more men outside plus there were many vehicles. Also
the men on the inside were almost at the door, so I put my best ability to work.
My running, when I sprinted no one could keep up, even dogs. I took off running
to the exit, passing all the men trying to get me outside. I thought I was home
free, the exit was less than 50 feet away, but I was wrong. I was so close that
I was only watching the guy standing by the gate. I didn't notice the rock right
in front of me, and I tripped and slid nearly 20 feet on my side. As I started
to get up someone tackled me to the ground, pinning me down. I looked up and saw
a guy in camo holding me down. Soon some more men came over and lifted me from
the ground that was their mistake. As soon as the man that had me pinned lifted
me up only holding onto my arms I pushed off of the ground with my feet doing a
flip over the man, and freeing my arms. When I landed I took off once more to
the exit nearly getting there, I was able to touch the big metal arm above the
path. I touched it then got grabbed by a foot and dragged back to the ground
again. This time the men were smarter, and didn't let me get up. Soon a shorter
man put some weird metal things around my wrists. And then they lifted me up,
this time two men holding onto me. I was looking at the people around me
noticing that all of them were sweaty and out of breath. As I was scanning a
more well dressed guy was walking towards me. When he got closer the men stood
up straight and tried to stop panting, I figured he was the leader. He walked up
to me then looked me over, I visually saw his face get red with anger. He turned
to his men and yelled at them for not being able to catch me until the last 10
feet before I would have gotten away. Then he turned to me I thought he was
going to yell at me too, but no he was laughing I think. He looked me in the
eyes and told me that if I was able to avoid and tire out most of his men then I
deserved a home at this base. And so it happened they gave me some food and a
nice soft bed. I was now used in training where me and five other guys were
brought to the woods and their mission was to catch me. As for my mission it was
simple, to disarm and disable them. In 15 different training missions I only
lost 4 times. Out of all the soldiers that I worked with only one cared for me
as more than a teammate. I nice young man named Tony, he talked to me more,
asking about my past explaining his past. Then he asked me a question I was not
expecting in the least. Tony asked me if I wanted to come live with him when he
left the base next month. I wasn't sure how to answer at that time or even sure
if the general would let me leave. He told me not to worry about the general but
just answer the question. I knew my answer from the beginning because I was
tired of all the training missions and discipline that I got as an animal
soldier. I almost yelled yes as I jumped onto him laughing. The next month was
the worst, because the general just worked both me and Tony to death. The
general worked us both very hard because he knew that we were leaving. I counted
down the days until we left, when the day came I was enthusiastic. We said our
goodbyes and then took off in an old truck, we drove for almost 2 hours before
arriving at our new home. A nice pet friendly apartment in a big city. Tony had
already found a job as a local SWAT member. I wanted to join him but his boss
wasn't approving it. After a few months the boss finally put me up to a test against his best K-9s,
the test included intelligence, strength, and speed. The test was coming up in a
few days and I knew that these dogs didn't stand a chance against me, but they
didn't know that. I was prepared for the test when the day came. When they got
their first look at me, two of them couldn't hold back their laughter. The dogs
took it as a joke because I was only a little kitty to them. I had to prove them
wrong so I walked up to the one that wasn't laughing. He looked at me then said
jokingly to the other two that he'd be able to take me down with a paw tied
behind his back. Tony just looked at me, in that look I knew he was telling me
to prove myself. So as the dog reached out to grab me, I quickly grabbed his arm
spun it around his back and then forced him to the ground. The laughing dogs
stopped instantly and just stared at me in surprise. Tony's boss snickered and
then ordered me to let him up, he than started the test. I passed all of the test with
flying colors and with little effort. And so I became the first cat on the police force
ever. Of course they had to put me through training first, but the boss hated me so
he put me in the human cops training. He thought for sure that I wouldn't make it
through, but I did. Tony just sat back and laughed at the others when I beat
them at almost everything. The boss let me join on most missions but not all of
them. I was fine with that because I was just happy to be with Tony. We stayed
with SWAT for two years, then we left for a quieter life. We were moving into a
nice pet friendly neighborhood, daddy was still going to be a cop. I'm hoping
that I get to be his partner again. Oh boy I'm going to love showing these new
K-9s how much better I am than them. I heard there has been quite the commotion
in this neighborhood. I just hope there will be some great new friends and fun
there.

So shock is free to put in your own fan fic but you have to ask me first. Also what do you think of that story huh?

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Nice background story. Like the idea of her telling her own story. rare, but good. And an interesting idea as well with the mixing.

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HEY! i can't believe that i have not read this fic yet. Fantastic job on the story so far dude, keep up the amazing work. :D

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Alright so i know its been a long time since my last tough memories update that actually belongs with the story. Here it is the next chapter! I'm sorry it took so long but with school it was hard finding time to just sit down and write. hope you enjoy this chapter! :mrgreen:

Chapter 9

I opened my eyes to see that I was back in my room at my parents house. I sat up
and looked and around the room, the same as I left it those months ago. It
almost looked like my parents never even knew I had left. My hands went up to my
face instantly as tears started to flow. What was weird was that I didn't feel
fur touching my face at all. It had all been a dream, but it seemed so long and
real. Now my tears were streaming down my face, as I realized that I'd never see
Fox, King, Dad, or Spark ever again. I must have been crying for several hours
and didn't realize it. When I finally stopped crying my hands and bed were
sopping wet and I was really thirsty. As I got up, a thought popped into my
head. Spark! She's still here if I'm back at home! I quickly called her name,
"Spark!" I heard no answer so I tried again this time louder, "SPARK!!!" I heard
a little thump then an answer.

"Ya, what do you want dad?" Spark said as she started to walk up the stairs.

"Oh I'm so relived that your here! I missed you so much!" I told her as she
walked into my room. I ran up to Spark and embraced her in a huge hug. I never
wanted to let go.

Spark broke the hug after a few minutes, "Why did you miss me so much? I was
only downstairs taking a nap."

"I just had a bad dream where you were no where to be found. Then when I finally
did find you, I got hit by a car. I was just so scared that I'd never see you
again." I told her as tears started to form again.

"That does sound terrible, but trust me you'll see me again." Spark said as she
started to back away.

"What do you mean by that? Where are you going?" I asked, confused.

"Trust me you'll see me again, but first you'll have to do something for me."
Spark told me still backing up.

"I'll do anything to see you again, anything just tell me." I said frantically.

"Just WAKE UP." Spark said and snapped her fingers.

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My eyes snapped open as air rushed into my body. I was coughing to help breath
again. I looked up to see who was casting a shadow over me, I froze for a few
brief seconds. It was Spark! She was kneeling over me looking relived.

"Thank goodness, your alive I thought you were dead for a moment there. What's
your name? I haven't seen you around here lately." Spark asked me as she helped
me stand up.

"It's trrr.... I mean it's cocoa. What just happened? My head hurts!" I
exclaimed as I got up.

"Oh well I saw you freeze in front of that car, so I sprinted over to push you
out of the way. I got you out of there just in time, but when we landed you hit
your head on the curb. I hope your alright." Spark explained.

"Well thank you very much for getting me out of the way of that car. And yeah I
feel alright except for feeling a little dizzy." I said.

"I have to go now but I hope to see you again, you seem like a very nice dog.
Are you going to be OK walking home by your self?" She asked.

"Yeah I think so. Goodbye." I said as I started to walk away. I think a made it
about 5 steps then tripped on nothing falling flat onto my face.

"I don't think your fit to walk by yourself back home. I'll help you out." Spark
told me as she picked me up.

"Yeah I think that'd be a good idea too." I replied.

So we started off for my house with me almost tripping about every 20 feet,
luckily Spark was there to stop me from falling over. The trip would have
normally only taken like 5 minutes but with how slow we were going, it was for
sure going to take us more than 15 minutes. It was slow but not boring, along
the way Spark was asking me about how I liked it here and about the other pets.
We chatted back and forth the whole time, she basically just trying to keep me
awake and moving. The whole time I felt this warmness in my heart. It felt just
wonderful being able to talk to Spark again just like we would back at my old
room. It pained me when I noticed that we were standing in front of my house.
This was goodbye for who knows how long this time.

"Well's heres your house, so this is goodbye but I'll make sure to come back
tomorrow to see how your doing. I promise." Spark said as she held out her hand.

I'm not sure what came over me at that moment but instead of shaking her hand I
embraced her in a hug. "Thank you for everything you've done for me. Goodnight."
I said as I let go and went inside. My first step after closing the door landed
on one of dad's socks, making me slip and land on the floor, THUMP! As I lay
there I heard a giggle from outside then the creak of the porch steps as Spark
left. I laid there for a few minutes just storing that precious first memory
into my mind forever. I got up as I heard dad's feet hitting the stairs as he
went down. The thing I was so grateful now was the carpet, as I fell yet again.

"Are you alright? I heard a smack from upstairs." Trevor asked me.

"Somewhat, I just hit my head so I'm a little dizzy." I replied

"You better lay down. What happened?" Dad asked me.

"Well don't freak out but I was almost hit by a car." I started to explain what
happened after seeing his freaked out face. "Ok so I was walking with Fox when I
thought I saw an old friend on the other side of the road. I ran across but
didn't see her anywhere. But I did see a cat she was walking with before. I
chased after the cat hoping to find out if it was who I thought it was. The cat
had gone across another street, I followed but didn't know which way it went
after making it across. I had stopped in the middle of the road not even knowing
that I had. A car came flying toward me, and I froze in it's headlights. I
couldn't move but luckily for me another cat came and pushed me out of the way
just in time. But when we landed I hit my head on the curb. When I woke up the
cat that saved me named Spark was kneeling above me. She helped me up and then
helped me walk home on the account of me not being able to walk straight for
very long. She brought me home and now here we are. Me on the couch holding an
icepack to my head and you sitting there listening." I finished my story thirsty
and out of breath.

"Wow, I really should thank Spark's owner for her help. I'd better take you to
the hospital now to get that head of yours checked out." Dad said as he went to
get his car keys and his shoes on.

We went to the hospital, and the doctor said it was just a cut on the back of my
head. I got 4 stitches put in then they checked my eyesight, hearing, and
smelling ability before I left. I had a minor concussion and a little nausea
from the medicine they gave me. We went home with instructions for me to just
rest and relax for the next day or two.

I didn't even remember going to bed the night before but I woke up to the
strong smell of bacon and eggs. Dad had made me breakfast before he left for
work. It sat on a small tray laying on the floor in front of me. I devoured
everything on the tray in seconds, I tried to get up but failed a few times.
Once I finally got up I was able to make it out of my room and down the stairs
without tripping once. I went and laid down on the couch feeling slightly dizzy
again. I remembered that Spark was coming over sometime today, I was so excited
but somehow I fell asleep again....

Yay! cocoas meet and spoke with spark now! please comment to tell me what you think. 8-)

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Great update! Can't wait to see them meet up again!

So cocoa and spark are beginning to form quite a friendship now. Saving one's life is something that speeds that sort of thing out.

Can't wait for the next part. Cocoa is so accident prone...

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Hey i have some great news! First ive recently found more time to write so more updates, yay! :D also this weekend i only have one thing going on so i should be able to get a new chapter up by sunday or monday. Thank you all for you support and comments on my story so far. Oh before i forget i have a fantastic new thought for a new story buti dont have the time to write it so i was wondering if any of you might want to?

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OK well first id like to inform you fans that i injured a couple of my fingers about 2 weeks ago. But their ok now so i'll be able to work on the next chapter or two and get them posted by the end of the week. Thank you all for your patience.

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