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Well this is my first fanfic on this website so be easy on me. I will update this every couple of days.

Chapter 1

It was just a normal day for Trent but for anyone else it was hell. Today was
just like any day, his mom and dad were arguing about money and other stupid
stuff. Almost every day they fought, it was getting tiresome. So he decided to
retreat to his room to be with his best friend in the whole world. He knew that
no matter what was going on he could always fell happy with her. He opened the
door of his room finding her on his computer playing some games. "Hey there, so
what are you playing?" he asked while jumping onto his bed.

"Just some baking game, I was interested by the title and it isn't as exciting
as it sounded." Spark answered in a bored tone. Her ears perked up when she
heard a crash downstairs, than some loud yelling. "Your parents are fighting
again aren't they?"

"Yep, and I can only hope that it won't end like it did last time." A
troublesome flashback went through his mind then he turned his attention back to
Spark who had a worried look on her face. "I'm fine Spark I was just remembering
last time," he reassured her.

"Well you know that I'm always here for you..." Spark was cut off when she
started to hear someone coming up the stairs.

"Well this is how I didn't want it to end," he said. Trent was already grabbing
Spark and putting her in the closet, then shutting the door. "Now don't come out
until it's over ok? I don't you to also get it." He told her with a stern voice.

All she could do was nod before the handle started to turn. In came Trent's dad,
she could tell he was very mad and dangerous. They started to argue about
something she didn't understand, but she continued to listen. What came next was
unexpected but nothing new. Trent's dad just slapped him hard across the face,
she had to flinch and look away for the next couple of slaps. Right when she
thought it was over she opened her eyes only to see Trent on his hands and knees
crying and holding his stomach. His dad was about to leave when Trent said that
he was sorry for what he did. His dad turned around and yelled a few more things
at him then delivered the final blow a punch to the back. She was scared and
hurting for her dad who was now on the floor unconscious. As soon as the door
shut she burst out of the closet headed to her dad in a second. He was still
passed out but at least he was still breathing. The rest of the night Spark was
caring for her dad until he was better.

The next couple of weeks went by with nothing new but with fighting every other
night and about once or twice a week Trent was beaten by his father. Also every
time he was beaten his father would warn him that if he even tried to tell the
police that he would brutally injure Spark. Trent's birthday was in a couple of
days and he was hoping that there would be no fighting on his special day. But
his dreams were ruined when he was beat especially hard for asking for a party
and presents. On that night it was when Spark got an idea that would change both
of their lives forever. She was now fully grown and knew that this plan was for
the best.

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So, first question: Is Spark (nice name, by the way) a cat or a dog. Details, we need details!


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sad fic is sad :cry:

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Interesting start. Can't wait to see where it goes.

Spark is planning something. Hope it turns out well for them.

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well first i should say sorry about not saying that Spark is a cat and second yes it is sad but it will get happier in the up coming chapters

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I really like that name, Spark...

The part of arguing at least every other day reminds me of my parents. Too bad I don't have a talking animal to comfort me! :/

But anyway, no matter how depressing this currently is, I can't wait to see where it leads!

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Chapter 2

The next day Spark was able to convince Trent to go outside so she could tell
him her plan. They went for a walk to the woods so it would be silent. Once they
got there she started to explain her idea. "Alright so before I begin, I need
you to promise to not interrupt me no matter what I say." Spark told him with
intensity.

He answered with his hand on his heart, "I swear I will not interrupt you cross
my heart and hope to die."

"Alright so now let's start, ok so right now our lives are miserable but I know
of a way to make them better. Ok so I know of a place that we can go and live.
There is food, shelter, and some other animals to keep us company. Now this
means that you and me will leave your parents and go live on our own." Spark
explained. "We will be happier there then we are here."

As she finished her explanation the only thing Trent did was stare at her
without saying anything. Then he spoke, "Your crazy, yes live may be miserable
here but I'm not leaving my family. It does sound better there than it does here
but it would just be too tough for me to do."

"I know this would be very tough for you but I think it would be the best for
both of us. This life is terrible and sad. We need a better life and a safer
home." Spark pleaded.

"Well I don't know, let me think about it for a day or two." Trent said. With
that they left the woods and went back to the house. Where Trent proceeded to
think over what Spark had suggested in the woods. He thought about it all night
and part of the next day.

It was about 5o'clock when the fighting started that night. Trent was still in
his room considering the plan laid out by his cat. When he heard an especially
loud yell from downstairs "well I think that its better to get a divorce from
your fat-bubblegum than live this poor with a son that isn't useful for anything."
This statement struck his heart so deep that he thought that it stopped beating
for a few seconds.

On this comment he made up his mind to run away with Spark to go live in a
better place. That night when he knew his parents were asleep he told Spark,
"Hey I've decided to trust your plan on running away."

"Well that's great, so when should we leave?" Spark asked.

"Well I think the best time would be on Monday when they are both at work. That
way we can leave without them noticing and we can take whatever we need before
we go." Trent answered. So the date was set and all they had to do before Monday
was to pack and get everything they needed put together. On Sunday they had
their clothes and a few toys packed up and waiting in the closet.

It was Monday and the parents had just left the house. Spark and Trent were
already downstairs packing whatever food they could into their bags. After about
another hour they were finished packing and said their goodbyes to the house.

So they were off, going to a barn about 10 miles to the southwest of Trent's
house. It took them a long time to get there even though they took every
shortcut there was. Once they got there a couple of barn animals from inside
greeted them and helped them settle down. That night was one of the toughest
nights of Trent's life. The homesickness just hid him wave after wave but Spark
was there to comfort him the whole time making him feel a little bit better. He
just knew that the first week off by himself would be the toughest and most
lonely of his entire life.

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This is getting interesting. CAn't wait to see where it goes.

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Press on, press on!

Good to see that he finally got away from that abusive situation...

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that's a brillint story. Sometimes fanfics go a bit soft and mushy like over cooked carrots, but yours is tough. like snickers (Get some nuts Hrrr!).

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Hey guys, i'm sorry but the next update wont be up for a couple more days. I've been busy all weekend so i haven't been able to write the next chapter. I should be able have it up by tuesday.

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No problem, take your time. We can wait for good stories like yours.

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Chapter 3 is here and it has a surprise!!

Trent was opening his eyes early in the morning seeing a cow chewing it's
morning meal. Right away he started to freak out because he forgot where he was.
Until Spark showed up with some bacon and eggs from the farm house nearby. He
than realized where he was and why he was here. So he greeted her, "Hey what's
that you've got there?"

"Oh so I see you finally woke up, and this is breakfast for us." Spark answered
with a piece of bacon hanging out of her mouth.

"Well it definitely looks good, but how did you get it?" Trent questioned her.

"It wasn't easy, first I had to distract the farmer and his wife with some help
from the chickens. Then I had to sneak into the kitchen and grab the food off
the table. I almost burnt my paws when I grabbed the bacon, so I grabbed a plate
and put it on there." Spark explained.

They spent the morning eating and talking about the farm. The farm had a barn,
two sheds, a house, and a chicken coupe. At the moment it didn't have the pool
set up but you could tell it had one in the summer. Everyday around 1:30 the
farmer came around feeding all of the animals, so they had to hide then and
again at 6:45 when he came to milk the cows.

The first week was tough for both of them, but all of the farm animals helped
them out. The daily schedule was almost the same everyday. First they ate
breakfast then talked to all of the different animals until they heard the
farmer coming. After he left they would play some sort of game with a few
animals then do other stuff to pass the time until the farmer came back again.
While the farmer was milking Spark was in the kitchen stealing or "borrowing"
food for dinner. They went to bed a few hours later always happy and full.

***************Two Weeks Later****************

This week started off normal but about half way through the week one of the
chickens heard some troubling news. Of course almost all of the animals came to
hear the news. Spark and Trent were there very nervous for the news. So the
chicken said that the farmer and his wife are going on vacation and would be
gone for about 4 days. This wasn't new for the animals but that meant no free
food for Spark and Trent. The first thing that crossed both of their minds was,
where are we going to get food?!? The first idea came from Spark.

"OK so I know that food is going to be a problem the next couple of days but I
have an idea." She told Trent. "There is a house a few blocks away that has an
older couple living there, we could get food from them."

"Alright that sounds like a plan." Trent answered with a slightly nervous tone.

The first two days went by without any trouble getting the food from the house.
On the third day Spark went alone to the house in the morning because Trent was
still sleeping. The job was going as it usually did, Spark was on her way back
when a truck came out of a turn ahead of her. She didn't even have to look at
the truck for more than 5 seconds and she knew it was the animal catcher. Spark
took off dropping the food, she ran into the neighborhood farther and the truck
chased her. Spark cut thru yards and then into the woods, she kept on running
than decided to look back. That was the worst choice she could have made,
because when she looked back she didn't see the huge stump in front of her. So
she tripped and fell over into a hole nearby that helped the catchers, catch
Spark. She was hauled away to the animal shelter.

***********Back At The Farm**************

Trent wakes up, the first thing he noticed was Spark was no where to be found.
He spend the first minute just calling her name. Then he got up and started
looking around, none of the animals knew where she was. He knew she was out
getting food but she was usually back by now so Trent went looking for her. When
he was almost to the house Trent saw some cans and bags at the side of the road
he went and investigated. He knew Spark had these because Trent could see her
paw print on the side of one of the cans. When he looked up he also saw a print
on the road facing into the neighborhood. So he started to walk, he noticed
several people and their pets outside while he was walking. He followed what
looked like a path through lawns and across the street several times. He then
followed it into the woods. Finally when Trent thought he had found the end of
the line there was a stump with a rather large hole nearby. There was a print of
Spark in the muddy hole. He stood there for what seemed like hours trying to
figure out where she was now. He decided to go back to the farm to see if Spark
came back by now. But he couldn't find his way back now because he had a
terrible headache from not eating for almost 16 hours. Trent made it about 20
feet before he passed out from pain and hunger mixed.

Trent woke up later from a loud crack of thunder later that night. He was still
suffering from severe hunger when a mysterious force told him to go farther into
the woods, so he listened to the mysterious force. Once he got farther into the
woods a voice came out of nowhere and told him....

Please comment and tell me anything you think i need to improve on, THANKS.

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Good stuff! Can't really find much to criticize... maybe you rushed through some of it? Not really, but you wanted criticism... :lol:


So he will soon encounter a mythical beast... Cool!

Poor Spark. Hope she makes it out okay.

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I have been gone all weekend and have a slight writers block so it will be a few days until I have the next chapter up. Well ok then I'll make it a good one

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No problems! We can wait for a great update to a wonderful fanfic.

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Here is the next chapter in this story and I made it a good one hope you enjoy. ;)

Chapter 4

Trent was in the middle of the woods being pulled by a mysterious force until he
came to a clearing with a downed tree in the middle. The force told him to sit
down on the tree, and relax. Finally when Trent was about to speak back to the
force it spoke, "Hello Trent how has your life been so far? Is it working out
with no parents?"

"First who are you and where are you? And I think it was going fine till Spark
went missing." Trent said.

"Well I can't tell you who I am but I can tell you that I know that your jealous
of Spark. She can do so much more than you can and now she's in the pound. The
only way you'll get a family and also get to be with Spark is if you make a
deal." The mysterious voice told him.

"I'm not that jealous of Spark but what up with this deal. I just know that
there is a twist or a bad thing in it." Trent said.

"Well you certainly are a smart one but there isn't a catch. It's just an
opportunity to a better life with new people." The voice told him the offer.

"Well how would I get this new and improved life? If I accepted?" Trent
questioned.

"Well I'll do better than tell you if you say yes to my deal." The voice
insisted.

"Well OK, but only if it will fix all of the problems I'm having right now."
Trent finally answered after he caved.

That was all the voice had to hear then 'poof' both Trent and the voice were
gone. Trent was no longer in the clearing but what he thought of as a void. He
was flying through it for what he thought was several hours. When he finally
landed he noticed that the sun didn't even move while he was in there. He
started to look around and noticed that a fence was a little higher than it was
before the deal. Than he decided to go on a walk back to the farm and try to
find some food there. Trent walked out of the woods and started to walk down the
sidewalk back towards the farm. On his way he started to smell and hear new
things he hadn't before. But he just kept on walking, even with his new senses
Trent didn't notice the white van coming up behind him. Trent had stopped
walking to smell some roses at the edge of a yard, so the van caught up to him.
A man stepped out with some pole like thing, a nice tall, skinny man who looks
like he didn't really belong in that line of work. He walked up to Trent and
tapped him on the shoulder. Trent turned around and saw a tall man with a
strange object in his hand. So he asked, "Oh hello there, what are you doing
here?"

Of course the animal control officer decided to play along, "Hey there little
buddy where you off to? And where's your collar, huh?"

"Wait what are you talking about? I don't need a collar, I'm a teenage boy for
crying out loud! Now stop bothering me and go away!" Trent yelled at the man.

Oh boy was the officer confused now, "What are you talking about you crazy dog!
Your just a little dog and I'm a big man. Now stop telling your stupid lies and
don't make this harder than it has to be!"

Now Trent was confused, he was wondering what the man was talking about so he
looked down. Trent nearly fainted at what he saw, he noticed that instead of
shoes he had some paws. He picked up his left arm and saw fur and another paw,
then his right arm, the same thing. Trent looked over his whole body and saw fur
all over. He than brought his hands up to his face and started from his ears all
the way down to nose. His face felt so weird and strange that as soon as his
hands left his face Trent fell over. He was on the ground twitching and
unconscious.

The officer just looked at him than picked him up and threw him in the van. They
took off for the pound with the little dog in the back. They drove for about 30
minutes and then they showed up at the pound, Trent was the first to be brought
in. He was taken in first because he was still unconscious, and needed to be
checked out first. The staff took care of him and set him up in a nice cage
until he came to. Trent started to wake up about 2 hours later with a bad
headache and now he didn't know where he was. An assistant came in a few minutes
later to check up on him, she noticed that he was up. She walked over to him and
greeted him, "Oh so I see that your finally up, how you felling? And don't worry
your in the animal shelter, your safe."

"I'm feeling alright but what happened? The last thing I remember is smelling
some roses." Trent said to the woman.

"Well one of our officers saw you a few blocks away and came to investigate.
When he got closer he noticed that you had no collar, so he walked up to you.
Then he said it got weird because you started talking crazy and a little angry
to our officer. Then you looked yourself over and 'bam' you hit the ground. So
he picked you up and decided to take you over here for a check up. And now your
here, so do you have a name we can call you by?" She told him.

"Wow that is a weird story, and I don't remember any of it. And my name is.." At
this time Trent thought about his name, knew that he couldn't say Trent because
it sounded to human. But he didn't know what to say so he decided to tell the
'truth.' "Actually I don't remember my name after that incident." Trent told the
woman.

"Well than no-name let's get you settled into your new home." The woman told him
while taking him out of his cage.

Well it's the end of chapter 4 and the rest of the chapters are going to be
first person from Trent's view. Mostly because now every one knows him as a
no-name animal. And it would be hard to write dialogue with everyone knowing him
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Great update! Good setup for the story ahead.

At least he got away from his family. Hopefully he will meet Spark soon and they find a home together.


Hmm, a dog.Wonder what breed?

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well I have the next chapter already planned out, but I don't like how only copper has been commenting on my story so I'm not going to post the next chapter until I get more people interested and commenting. I would like at least 3 or 4 new people commenting before I post the next chapter.

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challenge accepted. I like your fic and want to read more. I'd comment more, but it's been about 4 days since I read the last update. I'll be more specific next time.

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RandomGeekNamedBrent wrote:
challenge accepted. I like your fic and want to read more. I'd comment more, but it's been about 4 days since I read the last update. I'll be more specific next time.


I'll join with Brent xD

Sometimes it's hard to read everything and comment when you have some stuff on your head. But I'll try to comment and give you some tips.

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Well at least i got a few more people so ill start writing the chapter and you guys can keep commenting. Hopefully ill have it up by tuesday but it will probalty be wednesday. Also i just felt like explaining why i rated it as a pg-13 fic, it all has to do with a scene or two that will be coming in future chapters. Alright thanks guys!

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musclecar326 wrote:
I don't like how only copper has been commenting on my story.




HEY!!!! I'm not good enough a reader to continue? :lol:

Just kidding, I like your story! Don't stop because You don't get posters. We have a LOT of lurkers in this forum.You need to look at view count, not post count. That gives you a better idea of how many people are reading it.

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Epic Update. If I was turned into a dog, I'd quite like it, especially if I could be friends with Fox, King, Sabrina, Sasha, Peanut and the rest.

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Just read through the whole story so far, and I have to say, how come I missed this one?

I just hope the now no-name dog will get to see Spark somehow....

I can't really offer any criticisms, I don't know how to give them, but I'll keep an eye for anything that's out of place.

And yet another fanfic to add to my reading list. I don't know how you can keep up with all of them, copper. X3
Anyway, all the best, musclecar, I'll be waiting for the next update =3

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Well I've had several things going on the past couple of days that has allowed me almost no time for typing. We got new carpet yesterday, I've been painting my room for the past 2 days and I also had to take care of the neighbor kids so.. I don't have very much of the next chapter typed yet so I'll try really hard to type it and get it up by Friday or saturday. Also thanks for all the new comments! Alright wish me luck and if you want to... You should post a comment guessing what will happen in the next chapter! Ok bye.

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A Challenge! nice. Mmmm... Trent meets Spark again, but spark doesn't reconise him...? Maybe Trent meets King, and Fox... if it's the Babylon gardens they're in...? I dunno. :?

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Chapter 5

I was sitting in the cage when the woman came towards me and unlocked the cage.
A hand came towards me as the door opened, first it rubbed my head then it
grabbed by right around my shoulders. I was pulled out of the cage and up into
her arms as she started to give me a tour of the shelter. After we exited the
medical room as she called it we went to the entrance of the cat room. I looked
in and saw almost 20 cats lining the walls I carefully looked at each one trying
to find that orange tabby. After looking through them all, I never saw Spark in
any of those cages. The woman, I think her name was Mary, anyways she noticed
the way I was searching the cages and decided to ask. "So are you looking for
someone or just looking at the enemy?" Mary asked.

"Huh, oh no I was just looking around, the cats are the best looking." I said.

"Sure whatever you say, now let's continue the tour." Mary answered.

She then took me to the rabbit room, next the bird room, then the lobby, and
back to the hallways. The next room kinda creeped me out, the reptile room...
enough to be said about that room. And finally we made our way to the dog room
where Mary put me down and let me to my new cage. I just had to have a corner
cage so that I only had 2 neighbors. Before Mary lifted me to put me in my new
cage she asked me a few questions.

"So do you have any characteristics that people should know about you before
they take you home?" Mary asked me.

I thought this question over a bit and decided that I would say the skills I had
as a human. "Yeah I can use the toilet, cook, read and write, and one more
thing, I'm a great listener." I told her.

"Wow thats some good things about you, and I'm pretty sure that last skill will
come in handy with the lady dogs." Mary told me. Than she lifted me and put me
in the cage, closed and locked the door and walked out of the room.

I looked at my cage and saw a small water dish, a little pad to sleep on, and an
empty dish I presumed was for food. From what I could smell with my new senses
was a dirty almost dead smell. I could hear all of the dogs around me eating,
drinking, and making other dog noises. I decided to talk to my neighbors now.
"Hey I'm new here, so what's your name?" I asked my neighbor to the cage left of
mine.

"Well hey there new neighbor, I'm Scruffy and who are you?" Scruffy answered me.

"I don't have one at this moment, and nice to meet you." I told him.

"How can you not have a name! Even I have a name and I was a stray!" Stuffy
yelled at me.

I really didn't like his tone, but answered him. "Well I just never called
myself anything and no one ever gave me a name. But if your so mad about me not
having a name than just call me by my breed, a Coon hound." I said to Scruffy
still irritated by him.

"OK well I guess I can call you Coon until you get out of here. Anyway I would
advise you to not talk to the dog below you." Scruffy whispered to me.

"Why not? Is he a bad dog?" I whispered back.

"Well maybe but he's just really annoying and is kinda mean." Scruffy told me.

"Than I guess it's just you and me." I said to him.

The next couple of weeks went by with a boring routine, every day making me a
little sadder. I was just feeling sad about probability never seeing my family
or Spark again. On about the 29th day of my schedule of being here a young
couple came in and looked at several different dogs. Including Scruffy, and me,
but they seemed more interested in him. They came back the next day and took
Scruffy home with them. Now I was left all alone with no one to talk to, I felt
so alone...


It's the end of his first month in the animal shelter and he isn't doing to
good. He is trying to make it but it isn't going to well.
Also this may sound bad of me but I don't know what state the Housepets live in.
So if you could help me out with that, it would be great.


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good update. I feel sorry for him. hope he gets back with Spark.

no one knows what state they live in. Rick keeps it ambiguous.

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Post Re: fan fic: Tough memories Rated PG-13
An update! :D
Though I feel kinda bad for him, it's bad enough having to spend so long a time being cooped there; and now he's without someone to talk to. My wish is the same with Brent for him.

You could also let the state be ambiguous, musclecar. Just a suggestion.

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Great update!! He is really having a hard time finding a family. A whole month, huh?

So he's a coon hound, huh? Nice.

Yeah, the state is whatever you want it to be. Other than Florida. It doesn't snow in Florida...

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ok well i remember from the homepage archive that it was saying that rick griffon lives in virginia, so i think thats the state they live in. Anyway I've been reading fan fictions from the past for the last couple of weeks so i haven't been reading my comments. i thank you all for the comments. my top fan fictions that i read from the past would have to be:
1. Status Quo!!!
2. A lost hope!
3. things just got complicated
and then most of the fan fics that has king as the main character.
I'm telling you this because i might use similar scenes in my story as those in these stories
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Rick lives in Alabama, not Virginia.

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actually he lives in north carolina, and there is no preset location, its a fictional one, cause as quoted from the about page, "They used to have a fishpond because their house was somewhat based on the where I lived North Carolina. Then I realized that I barely had any neighbors there. Nice huge yard, in the middle of nowhere, not actually conducive to the setting I wanted."

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yeah. he used to live there. he has since moved to Alabama.

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I didn't know he lived in Alabama.

Is Babylon gardens a real place? I doubt it.

Also: Does Rick have a dog, or a cat, or a rabbit e.c.t.?

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I didn't know he moved either, and I'm not sure about the pet question. Any how I'm writing the next chapter right now, so get up and cheer until it's posted. *Turns on APPLAUSE sign*

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Chapter 6

I was so alone and as the the doctor told me I'm depressed. So I was given a
special treatment until I got better. The treatment wasn't so bad, I got to go
for a walk outside for 30 minutes on a leash of course. When I got back I got
what they called 'special' food but really it was just regular kibble with a
couple of treats mixed in. I still hadn't met Spark and no one looked in on my
cage at all for the next 2 weeks. So they put me on a better treatment or so
they say. My life was miserable, I had just woken up from a nap when I heard
footsteps. People came in everyday looking for pets, but they never came by my
cage. I wasn't listening but my ears could still pick up them talking about the
dogs by them. I crawled over to my pad still not paying any attention to the man
and Mary. They were walking closer and closer to my corner, but I was lost in my
imagination thinking about Spark and my parents. The man had stopped at the cage
next to mine and was talking to Mary asking her questions. Then he started to
walk farther down the isle as he walked past my cage he asked Mary. "So I notice
you have an empty cage, yet your ad says that you can't take anymore animals
in."

"Oh that cage isn't empty, there is a dog in the back corner. But he might not
be very friendly at the moment." Mary told him.

"Why?" The guy asked.

"Well you see, he's depressed and not very friendly at the moment." Mary
answered.

The man walked back to my cage and looked in, I was still lost in thought and
didn't notice him come back. He looked back in the corner and noticed me lying
down. He looked at the tag and saw that I had no name but some good quality
skills. So he called out to me, "Hey, how are you doing back there?"

I was so lost in thought that he had to repeat his question twice before I heard
him and rolled over to look at him. He watched me roll over and just watched me
waiting for an answer. I knew what he was waiting for but I wasn't sure what to
tell him. So I just told him the first thing that came to mind. "I've seen
better days and just want to go home." I told him in a sad voice.

"Well would you like a new home? With me possibly?" The man asked.

"I just want to get out of here and find my best friend." I told him in a hushed
voice.

"So is that a yes?" He asked.

"Yes it is as long as I get out of here and never come back." I whispered to
him.

The man turned around and talked to Mary for a couple of minutes then she came
to unlock my cage. She reached to the back, picked me up, and pulled me out. She
then handed me to the man as she led him to the front to fill out some
paperwork. I sat down on a chair in the front as I waited for him to get done. A
few signatures and a check later he was done and came towards me with a new
collar. He put it around my neck and put a leash on it. He led me outside to his
car and I couldn't wait to get in it. It was freezing out and I just couldn't
wait to get out of this jail. We got in his car and took off for his home in a
nearby neighborhood. We were in the car for not even 5 minutes before he broke
the silence.

"So this friend of yours, what's his name?" The man asked.

"I don't really want to answer that it's personal. And I have a question for
you, what's your name?" I asked him.

"Oh ok well my name's Trevor, but you can call me Trev if you want." Trevor told
me.

"Well hi Trevor my name's... Actual I don't have a name yet. You get to give me
whatever name you want." I told him.

"I'm not sure what to call you yet because I haven't thought of any thing.
Anyway we will arrive at my house in about 5 minutes so maybe I'll think of a
name then." Trevor said.

It went back to silence as we rode in the car to his house. As we pulled up in
the driveway the first thing I noticed was all of the pets. They were walking
all over the place without any humans in sight. I was amazed because in my old
neighborhood all pets had to be on leashes at all times. Trevor got out of the
car and led he inside. His house was pretty spacious with a nice LCD tv and a
leather couch. The kitchen had a nice large fridge, a nice wood table with 4
chairs. I was then given a tour around the home then we came back to the kitchen
to have lunch. As we were just about to sit down he remembered that he still
needed to buy me some kibble so he went to the store. Trevor said he'd be back
in 20 minutes, and so I was free to explore. I walked around for a little bit,
looking at the pictures then wandered into the backyard. I started to make a
snowman while I was waiting for Trevor to come back. I heard the door shut just
as I was finishing, so I walked back into the house. When I walked back in I saw
Trevor making my favorite drink in the world. HOT COCOA! How did he know it was
my favorite? I think he saw that gleam in my eye as I walked in.

"So is this your favorite? I could tell by the look in your eye." Trevor said.

"Yes it's my favorite and I hope you got the marshmallows. If you didn't your
going to be sorry." I told him shaking my fist.

"Oh no I didn't forget." As he pulled the marshmallows out.

As he watched me scarf that cocoa down in less than 30 seconds, he thought of
what he should name me. "I think I've finally figured out a name for you."
Trevor said while watching me lick my lips. "I'll call you..."

Another cliff hanger, how do you like that? What do you think Trevor is going to
name me? Well thanks for the comments and I'll keep writing as long as I have
fans.

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Hmmmm... it would be ironic if he called him spark. better if he called him Trent.

I KNOW!! Marshmellow. or Coco.

Hope I don't annoy you if I got it write. For general use, http://www.dog-names.us/ (it isn't a link, but paste it into your adress book ^ and vuala.

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Yay! Over 500 views! Yay! Oh and Luna it doesn't annoy me and one of the names is actually right.

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