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So here's how this is going to play out. This is mainly different stories about the residents of Babylon Gardens, but the two things they all have in common is that they take place on the same night during as the title suggested a thunder storm and some even have a similar pattern. With that, let's begin.
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The Hartford residence

*BOOM*

Mark awoke from the loud thunder. He looked around for awhile and notice he was still in his bedroom.

"Whew! It's just some stupid thunder" He said to himself in relief.

But before Mark could go back to sleep, he heard a screeching sound his door was making. He looked at the door as it started to open reveling his dog Sasha.

"Daddy?" Said Sasha.

"What is it Sasha" Said Mark

"C-can I sleep with you until the storm passes" said Sasha as she started to shake.

Mark groaned "Sasha it's two in the morning and you know you're not allowed to sleep in my bed."

*BOOM*

Another thunder hit, startling the two. Mark started to hear a whimper from Sasha, making him feel a little guilty.

Mark Sighed "But I guess just for tonight, you can..."

Before Mark could finish, Sasha was already in his bed.

"Thank you daddy" Said Sasha as she snuggled up to him. "Good night!"

Mark couldn't help but chuckle. It still amazes him that even though he treats Sasha badly sometimes, she still loves him. And even though he doesn't say it, she knew he felt the same as well.

"Good night, Sasha." Said Mark as he wrapped an arm around her and drifted off to sleep.

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Oooh... a point of view kind of story? I love these stuff. :D

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Seems good though the title makes me think of the power rangers ninja storm/Dino thunder team up.

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Adorable scene! : P

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Seems good though the title makes me think of the power rangers ninja storm/Dino thunder team up.

Back in elementary school, I made a joke about calling a spoof series as "Power Ranger Dino Ninja of the Wild Time."

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A nice little scene indeed! A very sweet take on the relationship between Sasha and her owner.

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It's kinda funny how it's only been a month and there's only one of this... but it was certainly a well-done scene and idea. I can really feel the sentimental appeals driven between Sasha and her owner; it actually felt like I was right there when it happened despite it being such a short scene. You've done a great job with this, Saturn. =3

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The Sandwich residence

*BOOM*

Grape tossed back and forth in annoyance. Every attempt of going back to sleep would fail because of the thunder and lighting.

“Come on, why can’t it stop?!” shouted Grape.

*BOOM*

Grape sighed as she got up and left her room. She thought a drink would make things better. As she headed towards the kitchen, she noticed the TV in the living room was on. Curious, she entered the living room and saw her friend Peanut on the couch.

“Peanut?” said Grape.

Peanut turned his head around and saw Grape.

“Oh hey Grape.” said Peanut.

“Why are you watching TV at one A.M?” said Grape.

“I couldn’t sleep.” said Peanut.

“How come?” said Grape.

“I…had a bad day today.” said Peanut.

“Well I’m getting a drink right now. You want to talk about it in the kitchen?” said Grape.

“Sure.” said Peanut as he got up and followed Grape to the kitchen.

Peanut got out two cups while Grape got out a carton of milk.

“So what happen” said Grape as she poured milk into the two cups.

“Bino said something that got me upset.” said Peanut.

“What did he say?” said Grape as she took a sip of her milk.

“That you and Tarot don’t care about me.” said Peanut as he lowered his head.

They sat there in silence for a full minute until Grape started to talk.

“Don’t listen what Bino said Peanut. That’s stuff is not true.” said Grape.

“But…” said Peanut before he got interrupted by Grape.

“Tell me this Peanut. How long have you’ve been dating Tarot?” said Grape.

“Five years.” said Peanut.

“And has she forgiven you every time you mess up?” said Grape.

“Yes.” said Peanut.

“So with all those factors in, I don’t think Tarot will ever stop loving you.” said Grape

“But what about you?” said Peanut.

“Peanut, you’re my best friend. No words can describe how much you mean to me.” said Grape.

“Really?” said Peanut.

“Of course.” said Grape.

Peanut smiled as his tail began to wag.

“Well it’s getting pretty late. I think we should go back to bed” said Grape as she drank up her milk.

Peanut nodded as he did the same. The two putted their cups in the sink as they headed back to their rooms.

“Hey Grape?” said Peanut.

“Yes Peanut?” said Grape.

As she turned around, Peanut wrapped his arms around the cat’s neck, hugging her tight.

“Thank you.” said Peanut.

“Hehe, you’re welcome” said Grape as she gratefully returned the hug.
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Man, six months without an update. Sorry it took so long guys. :oops:

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Not bad. Looking forward to some more.

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Ooh! This is back! :D
I like little scenes like this. They give me the warm fuzzies :D
Hope to see more!

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This is bad...






APRIL FOOLS! :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

I LOVE EM! VERY nice job Saturn! I can see very well in my mind's eye what is happening, which means you've written them well!

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These are really good. I wish I could write well.

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hypernovatic wrote:
These are really good. I wish I could write well.

Same here, everytinm I try and write, i get different points of view, unfinished parts, bad message delivery, etc. ugggh

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Ah, so now we see The sandwich household! Cute scene there. Glad Peanut has someone who can help alleviate him of his doubts.

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